Reviewer: Bob (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2016 09:32 PM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
:)
Reviewer: Alana (Anonymous) · Date: April 27, 2016 04:26 PM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
Hello, I always loved your stories, you're a good writer. Normally i don't put reviews but this particular story got to me. Though i'm not sur i will get to the end of this one (too heartbreaking). I have also read the campanion story and i have to say it scareded the hell out of me. I really didn't recognize Brian in there but that's not a critic againts you, they're your caracters you write them as you like. I don't like the fact that Brian keeps Evan with him and i don't understand it, if he trully wants justin back, but i suppose we'll understand it later. It really feels like his relationship with his ex boyfriend is more important than Justin.
Otherwise it's a really intersting story and you're really good at ANGST!
I have some question hoping you can answer them. I just want to know (for a little peace of my mind) if Brian gonna express feeling for Evan (i know you said nothing more physical gonna happened between them but seeing them together i have some douts) and if Justin gonna meet somone else during the time he spend away from Brian. When you said they gonna spend some time apart what does that represent: weeks? months? years?
Reviewer: A (Anonymous) · Date: April 26, 2016 07:50 PM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
i loved this chapter!
I know you said that you had a schedule but is it really impossible to post more often?! If not i totally understand! I really like your story that's why i asked.
Reviewer: WhiteSnowFox (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2016 05:56 AM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
I like the introduction of Ethan, I always felt Justin really needed to get some closure where that is concerned. I think it will doubly help considering what just happened. :) As for your comments, I'm still trusting you on this ride - it's been amazing so far so why would I stop now? I'm hooked!
Reviewer: neetaskita (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2016 05:23 PM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
End notes #3: Your story write it your way. I for one will still read it.
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: April 25, 2016 03:50 AM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
Your number 3 chapter end note , even though Brian was mean and cruel at times he didn't do it to be intentionally cruel. He thought he was doing the right thing for Justin by throwing him off a cliff ect. But he matured later on in the show. And he was a better man after the bombing. Wasn't mean or cruel anymore.
Brian would never in the show keep Evan around. But this is fan fiction.
You told another reviewer that Brian didn't know that Justin was being hurt by Evan hanging with Brian. But in the Thanksgiving chapter when Brian is in the bathroom Justin tells him that he is hurting him. So he does know. So how could he keep doing that to Justin. Is his NY office more important then Justin? I'm confused. You don't have Brian being mean in the beginning of the story and when they were close as can be after the bombing he couldn't do that to him. He can you be that cruel if Justin is his love of his life.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2016 02:03 AM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
As I have told you before I am happy where the story takes me I am the reader not the writer! I am glad you put the disclaimer in about Ethan I did go "oh no really" lol but it makes sense to me that they would eventually be friends once the hurt had healed. I am not sure Brian will see it that way though lol
Reviewer: The SNO (Signed) · Date: April 24, 2016 11:32 PM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
You got me worried when I read Ethan was there, then I saw your comment (1).
Regarding your comment (3), I agree Brian was sometimes/often mean and cruel in the show, but after the bombing of Babylon, it was very rare and maybe no more towards Justin.
But, this is your story and you have every right to write it the way you want.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: April 24, 2016 10:19 PM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
Well, well, well. It's beginning to look like Simon might be a worse threat than Evan, though not in the same way. Ethan was a surprise. An interesting surprise. I hope I have not been one of the ones telling you how you should write your story! You're doing fine just the way you are.
Reviewer: anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: April 24, 2016 09:53 PM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
I really love your story even if i had some hearthache during my reading. But I have some questio i hope you can answer you write at the end of your last chapter that Brian and Justin are going to spend some time away from each other. That kind of scarded me! But isn't Brian going to do everthing to get him back? shouldn't he stalk him?
And I have to say that it's a smart idea to use Ethan as a friend; to maybe help Justin grew up even more and maybe forgive Brian, rather than to use him as a way for Justin to revenge on Brian.
Reviewer: jax (Anonymous) · Date: April 24, 2016 09:18 PM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
I didn't like ethan in the show but I think in this story I would be okay with he and justin getting back together for a short period of time. It would make brian jealous and maybe get him to work even harder, but whatever you choose to do will be great. Although I like how justin is trying to mature about the whole thing, it would be only natural for him to want to hurt brian the way he was hurt. I don't want to tell you how to write your story, but i hope this evan friendship doesnt last much longer if brian is serious about getting justin back.
Reviewer: dchewey (Signed) · Date: April 24, 2016 09:12 PM · On: Chapter 17: Bright Future
Meh, I almost want Ethan to be a problem. heehehe
So in other words...Justin is the better man? He resists but Brian falls at the first chance he gets....
GET YOUR HEAD OUT OF YOUR FUCKING ASS BRIAN!!
Thx for posting.
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