Reviewer: Astrid (Signed) · Date: August 31, 2015 12:34 PM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
One more thing: someone below suggested to make a Sub/dom story out of it. From the categories you used and the emails we exchanged, I suppose it won't be the case, but if you are considering this, I have to say: PLEASE NO! I really believe there are other ways to build trust and closeness between them in this story. I really don't like BDSM stories with BJ, at least those where it is something more than an occasional kink in the bedroom, because it doesn't fit into canon at all. In my opinion at least. I like to see these 2 characters as equals, even if it's sometimes not fully possible. But sub/dom is too much for me.
What I wish this story became, on the other hand, is that it would be great if it were about something more than Brian and Justin, namely about social change in this society. And justice for everyone. You could show a variety of attitutudes towards slavery, the doubts or helplessness the CAST activists may feel (which I think is the reason of Michael's behavior), the backlash in reaction for their first victories etc. You could surely get inspired by reading about history of anti-slavery or feminist movements.
I also want to mention that I read the fic "Companion" someone mentioned below. It's good, but I like this more more. I like that it's slow-paced, giving us more time to enjoy it.
Enough blabbing from me, I wish you a lot of ideas for this painful yet beautiful story. Hugs!
Author's Response: No worries, hun. This in no way will become a dom/sub story. It may borrow ideas from a BDSM relationship at some points, but never anything big.. more just on face value. This is more about how the men can learn to love and grow within the bounds of an unfair society and what they can (and can't) do about it. If it had been a BDSM story, I would have put it in the warnings . :-) I do enjoy BDSM kink from time to time, but it doesn't fit here. ;-)
Reviewer: Ami (Anonymous) · Date: August 29, 2015 11:25 AM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
This adjustment is going to be so tough for both Brian and Justin, just hope it turns out well for them! Feel like this is the calm before the next round of the Novotny storm, can't wait to read the next chapter!
Author's Response: The Novotny storm! Haha! I like that ;-) Thank you for the review!
Reviewer: Lorie (Signed) · Date: August 29, 2015 06:41 AM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
Great chapter. Love Brian being so protective and caring. The blowjob was a great idea, to bad he couldn't make him cum just from his kisses. I really hope Brian can just keep him, fall in love and just be together with him. Maybe they could just move somewhere where no one would know that Justin was a slave.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm so happy you're enjoying the story. :-) I can't tell you what the future holds for the boys, but I will tell you that at times you'll love me and at times you'll hate me. Sorry. lol.
Reviewer: BritianLover88 (Signed) · Date: August 29, 2015 03:42 AM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
No words for how perfect this chapter is, I love it :) Love the dynamic froming between Brian and Justin.
This is one of my favorite new storys, can't wait for the next chapter :)
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, THANK YOU! :-)
Reviewer: rainbow83 (Anonymous) · Date: August 29, 2015 03:12 AM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
I can only think of sweetness, kindness, protection, understanding, patience, hot and love above all, even though either Brian or Justin realised it. Great
Author's Response: Thank you! :-) I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter!
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2015 09:28 PM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
Poor Justin...hopefully over time he will start to realize that Brian truly means him no harm. I'm so very glad that Brian has taken the 'fuck Mikey' approach to getting Justin situated.
Author's Response: If we're completely honest, Brian always takes the "fuck Mikey" approach to life, don't you think?? LOL. Thank you for the review!
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2015 08:52 PM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
Thanks for this wonderful chapter. I know Justin heard Brian
explain why he bought Justin, a slave. So far, Justin doesn’t
understand the significance. Brian is still a slave owner, and
that is what Justin understands. Another important piece of
information that we know but Justin doesn’t is that Brian
would find Justin a lot more attractive if Justin was not a
slave. I thought that line was very insightful into Brian’s
personality.
All in all, this is one terrific story. Like most of the readers,
we hurt for Justin. Nice writing.
DavidR
PS: That is one beautiful banner.
Author's Response: You're right. Right now, all Justin understands is that Brian is his owner and he has to play nice. Hopefully as time goes on, a level of trust will be built. Thank you so much for the review! And I LOVE my banner -- thanks again to Marny! :-)
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2015 05:10 PM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
I think you did a great job describing Brian's conflicting emotions. I like seeing a feisty Justin emerging from time to time. I hope in the privacy of Brian's loft, he might be able to suspend the slave master titles. I am loving this intriguing story! I will be eagerly waiting for your next update. Thank you! *Hugs* ~Kim
Author's Response: Thank you. I struggled at first with how much canon Brian would reveal to Justin, knowing how much Brian LOVES talking about stuff. Note the sarcasm. The slave/master stuff will stick for now until the boys hopefully figure out what the heck they're doing with each other. lol.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2015 04:10 PM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
Maybe if Brian thought about this as Dom/Sub? I like that he cares, but will he be able to get through to Justin?
Author's Response: There may definitely be some dom/sub aspects in the beginning as they're getting to know each other. Justin needs to understand that Brian needs Justin to follow him in order to protect him. They'll never be true dom/subs though, especially since Brian finds Justin's rebellion so gosh darn sexy. lol! At this point, I'm not sure if Brian even knows WHAT he's trying to get through to Justin. They're both walking into this blind. Thank you for the review!
Reviewer: Astrid (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2015 12:32 PM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
YESS, new chapter! You should have seen my happy face when I saw that you updated the story. I love this chapter as much as I loved the previous ones. There is no way Brian will be capable of selling Justin in 3 months, if on Day One he is flinching at a mere thought of J. with another master. You did a very good job by keeping him in character yet showing him as caring and protective, but "in charge." About Justin... It's very saddening to see him like this, afraid, reserved, resigned. But at least he is starting to trust Brian. It's deifnitely good for him to know the reason why Brian bought him. They have a long way to go, before they will get to know the real each other in this fucked-up context, but it will be worth it. Justin doesn't know yet how much luck he has.
If they are going to go out to eat, I suppose Debbie will make an appearance in the next chapter. It would be fun. I suppose she could become someone of a mother figure for Justin, for as long as Jennifer is not in the picture yet. I'm also wondering what role will Ethan play in this story. Will he be another slave, a master, someone else? I guess I need to wait.
I'm really looking forward to where it will go! Xoxo
Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words again. :-) And as for Ethan... that devil (I'll always be anti-Ethan), he does have a role to play but not anytime soon. After a while, he'll show his evil face.
Reviewer: Noitish (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2015 11:26 AM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
I'm very much enjoying this story, even if the subject matter isn't exactly enjoyable! Can't wait to see where you'll take this. I'm sure a lot of shit is about to go down, but as always, I have faith in Brian. Looking forward to updates!
Author's Response: Brian is always Justin's savior, whether willingly or not! ;-) I'm glad you like the story. Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: addicted-to-romione-bedward (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2015 10:29 AM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
Finally! I was starting to worry for Justin. And it seems he's starting to like Brian...a tiny little bit. He trusts him...not sure if thta voluntarily or not, but he does.
They'll learn together.
Author's Response: They definitely have a lot to learn... on both sides. Thanks for the review! :-)
Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: August 28, 2015 07:51 AM · On: Chapter 4: Alone at Last
Very nice chapter. I liked how you had Brian talk his way towards Justin trusting him just enough to take care of his immediate problem. Well done. TAG
Author's Response: Thank you very much! :-) Reviews mean a lot coming from an accomplished writer such as yourself.
PS: Love your stories!
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