Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: August 18, 2015 10:39 PM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
I'm wondering whose side Mikey is on. He claims to want to help slaves, yet he's insistant that slaves can never be free. That slaves are slaves as long as they live. Yet Justin was free until he was betrayed by his father. If it happened to Mikey, would he want to be treated badly as he seems to be wanting Brian to be? I'm with Brian on this, treating his slave nicely.
Author's Response: Yes, I'm thinking they may butt head a bit. lol. Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: Carol (Anonymous) · Date: August 18, 2015 01:54 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
This is good .. though a happy ending might be difficult as every possible good outcome for a slave seems to be illegal.
Author's Response: Different options may come up for the duo... although maybe not the ones they hope for at first. ;-) Thanks fo the reivew!
Reviewer: addicted-to-romione-bedward (Signed) · Date: August 17, 2015 01:22 PM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
Wow. Michael is such an ass!! Brian's right. You sure Michael isn't more into this than he seems to be?
I'm sure Brian's behavior confuses Justin, but I know Brian will keep him...and he'll always be gentle and kind with him.
Can't wait to see Brian helping Justin with his little problem...and where that will lead...
I can only imagine Debbie will rip Brian a new one for what he'd done...but I hope she's going to be a lot gentler than her son. She'll be taken with Sunshine in an instant, I bet.
Author's Response: Brian thinks he's such a macho man... just wait until Justin digs his hooks in. He won't know what hit him. Debbie will be playing a definite role in the story... and who can help falling in love with Sunshine?
Reviewer: nickknack (Signed) · Date: August 17, 2015 11:45 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
Can't wait for the next instalment, I think I'm hooked. Excellent descriptive drama.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying it!
Reviewer: tiger062 (Signed) · Date: August 17, 2015 07:26 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
As soon as I saw the banner I thought it was Marny's. She does beautiful work - I'm quite jealous....not really.... well just a little bit.....LOL
I'm not sure how I feel about Michael and Deb and how they protest against slavery which seems more like taking down a lot of information but not much else - I'll wait until I know more background but at the moment I can see Michael's POV and at the same time I want to smack him on the back of his head. I really feel for Justin and the fear he must be feeling but I trust Brian to be Brian and find a way to work all this out. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: I know, it's the banner fantastic? Marny did a wonderful job. :-)
Luckily, we as readers know we can trust Brian, but Justin may have to learn that over time. And don't worry about wanting to smack Michael. I pretty much wanted to smack Michael during each and every episode of QAF... so I think it's natural. lol. Thank you for the review!
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: August 17, 2015 05:38 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
Thank you for the story. It is kind of intense, but there is no
reason not to write it as intense if that is where the story is
going. Right now, there is a gorgeous naked young man in
need of sexual release in Brian’s shower.
You made it very clear that Justin is not a power trip to
Brian. It will be interesting to see where we go from here.
Thanks again.
DavidR
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I know it's a little intense, but there will be lots of lulls to let everyone breathe. :-) Right now it's just setting up a base for the plot! Thanks again!
Reviewer: rainbow83 (Anonymous) · Date: August 17, 2015 05:19 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
I've just found this story and I love it so far. Really interesting plot. I'm waiting eagerly for the next
Author's Response: Thank you! :-) I'm glad you're enjoying it!
Reviewer: Lorie (Signed) · Date: August 17, 2015 04:55 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
Michael has a lot of nerve, how Brian treats his 'slave' is his business, not Michael's. I understand Michael trying to explain what could happen if Brian sells him but the way he does it makes it sound like Michael owns Brian and needs to tell him how to behave.
I hope things will work out okay once Brian realizes that the reason he saved Justin was because they are soul mates and belong together.
Great story.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! :-) Michael is definitely walking a fine line between pushing Brian over the edge and telling him how it is. They may butt heads a bit in the futre. ;-)
Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: August 17, 2015 04:00 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
I have been intrigued by this story since chapter 1, although this is the first time I've commented.
The dynamic that you've created between Brian and Justin as Master & slave is complex and quite intense. Your attention to detail, such as Justin's reaction to the towel, are extremely effective in creating the dark atmosphere of the Fic.
But I especially like your treatment of Mikey... he's not the bad guy here. He is truly trying to be a friend to Brian, yet he still has the intrinsic "Momma's boy," attitude, intact... since, he was only at the auction at Debbie's bidding. But he really is just trying to help!
Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really hope you continue liking the story. And I'm glad you appreciate Michael's character. Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: LegendaryBritinKinlor (Signed) · Date: August 17, 2015 03:02 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
Well I have to tell you that I am usually well truthfully I am simply not a Michael fan. Like at all and especially in fan fiction. That said you are writing him rather well he's more adult in this and I like that very much! Please keep it up and this may be the only story with Michael in that that I ever truly appreciate.
I also like that Brian doesn't want to do anything to or with Justin. Can't say as I honestly blame him. Since they have some time together I hope they can get to know each other and if it goes on from there I do hope it is mutual.I really do like your Brian he's so well written very much like canon yet different.
Looking forward to more. Can't wait to see what happens with Deb. Also concerned we haven't seen the last of The Sap!
Well done!
:)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the kind words! I hope you continue to appreciate Michael's character. I'm not a huge Michael fan myself, and I am trying to keep him canon... but I'm also attempting to not make him sound whiny. Whiny Michael is so damn annoying. I'm glad you find Brian canon too. It'll be a bit of a struggle with emotional scenes since Brian is emotionally constipated, but I'll try to keep the balance. And Deb and the Sap both have definite roles to play.
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: August 17, 2015 02:03 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
I really don't know what to think about Michael's explanation. The more he talked, the more jealous he was making himself sound. I know he is only trying to look out for Brian, but telling him to just fuck Justin and hand him over in the next three months to someone who is not going to show the same kind of concern Brian does is pretty fucked up.
Author's Response: Michael is a jealous man, that's been proven. The question here is if he's speaking out of jealousy, out of ignorance, or if he actually has Justin's best interests in mind. Time will tell, I guess. ;-) Thank you so much for the review!
Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 17, 2015 01:01 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
I really wonder if Michael understands his friend's capabilities. It seems not. How hard Brian will fight, and in time, especially for this one.
Author's Response: Brian fights for things he wants, that's for sure... But you're right. I don't think Michael realizes how hard he'll fight for Justin. There aren't many things he won't do.
Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 17, 2015 12:12 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
This a different kind of story. It gets confused with other stories I have read before in Midnight Whispers with regards to prospective directions. I shall endeavour to keep present from past and read chapter to the end before reviewing.
Reviewer: femmegirl49 (Signed) · Date: August 17, 2015 12:03 AM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
This is shaping up to be a great story. I wish I had the imagination to come up with such clever ideas. The thought of slavery is so disgusting, and the thought of little Justin being a part of it is hearbreaking. But, Brian being Brian, I know he will somehow fix things.
It's so crazy reading the way people think about slavery that participate in it. Like there are people, and then there are slaves. How one gets themselves to that place is a scary thing. It is just so inherently evil and yet it goes on still to this day.
Now onto happier things, I hope. Watching Brian and Justin get to know each other has al lsorts of potential for hotness. I love B/J hotness. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words. I'm glad you're enjoying it. Brian will always be Brian, and Brian can't help loving Justin in any universe... so we'll just let the pieces fall into place, right? Chapter four is a little happier. And hotness is appreciated all around! lol.
Reviewer: steff (Anonymous) · Date: August 16, 2015 11:38 PM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
Yay, a new chapter!
I do not think Michael is right. He is supposed to fight against slavery, isent he? How do you fight against something? Surely step by step. You cant change the hole world at once, but you can change what is right in front of you. He might not be able to change the hole slavery thing in the US (AND he is not even convinced that he will succed in this fight in a livetime, what kind of attitude is that if you fight for or against someshing?!) but this CAST group could (in addition to all their politics) buy a few slaves and treat them like humans. That might not change the hole world, but for these few it would change everything. Cant understand that he does not see that. He is just being cruel and heartless.
I do hope Brian will treat Justin according to his conscience, I really do. And of couse that should include to keep him. He is an adult, he do not need Micheal to tell him what to do, and I hope he realises just that.
Looking forward for more!!! Thank you for sharing!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review and I'm glad you're enjoying it. Perhaps a certain couple of people can help Michael and his cause, showing him more affective steps to take? ;-)
Reviewer: Astrid (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2015 11:31 PM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
First things first, the banner is beautiful. Looks like at least on the picture, Brian and Justin are equals.
Now about the chapter. I was waiting all week to read it, and I'm not disappointed. It could be longer, of course, I like long chapters and normally almost 5000 IS a long one, but I like this stoy so much that I obviously feel I could read even 3 times as much. Anyway, seeing Justin so terrified and afraid and begging is really sad. And I didn't like the things that were said in the Michael's and Brian's conversation because Michael obviously has some points, like that Brian cannot release Justin or make his life normal... That's so very sad. But I hope you will make it good somehow, and I'm pretty sure that Brian will keep him... After all, 90 days is enough time for Brian to create a bond with Justin strong enough that he will want him to protect Justin no matter what.
But I hate the way Michael tells Brian all this, as if there wasn't any hope and everyone just had to accept the way things are. And he is supposed to be an anti-slavery activist? Please tell me that Debbie will be better.
And please don't make as wait too long for the next chapter! :)) Thank you for this story, it's one of the most interesting QaF stories I have had a pleasure to read - and believe me I read many.
Xoxo
Author's Response: I love the banner as well. All credit goes to Marny on that one. She captured the emotions of the story perfectly.
Thank you so much for the kind words about the story. I'm sorry the chapters are shorter than you'd like! They're shorter than I'd like too actually, but if I write them longer, it'll take longer between updates... so it's the less of two evils! lol. Michael is... well... Michael. Debbie will get her two cents in soon. ;-)
Reviewer: Marny (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2015 11:19 PM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
OMG I'm so fucking hooked to this story. Why didn't you come sooner to MW?
And you're a tease as well, you can't stop writing at this point!! I find Michael too harsh, but okay maybe a has to. Hope Brian goes slow with Justin. Aggrr I want the next update ASAP. Go sit and start writing!
* hugs *
Author's Response: Yay, I'm so glad you're hooked! I'm not trying to tease anyone... well, maybe a LITTLE bit... ;-) Michael and Brian may butt heads from time to time, but both have their hearts in the right place... hopefully...
Thank you again for the awesome banner! It adds so much to the story. :-)
Reviewer: Miki (Anonymous) · Date: August 16, 2015 10:32 PM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
Chapters are just not long enough- love your story more please
Author's Response: Sorry!! lol!! It's a battle between getting a medium sized chapter up or waiting longer between updates for longer chapters! Thank you for reading!
Reviewer: zsadistwhore (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2015 10:27 PM · On: Chapter 3: An Explanation
I'm really really enjoying this so far. When I first read the summary, I thought it would be like another slave!fic I'd read (Companion by Julesmonster on fanfiction.net) but was pleased to discover it wasn't (not because Companion isn't good, which it is, but because it's always nice to read something different).
I love the your characterisations, especially Michael, and their interactions with each other. And I love how well written it is (it's always nice to read a fic where I'm not correcting grammar and spelling in my head).
And please please please let Brian keep Justin. I would threaten to stop reading if he doesn't, but there's no way I would actually be able to do that, so I shall have to settle with pouting in a corner if Brian gives Justin away.
(And if you've not read Companion, I really suggest you do, as well as her other stories.)
Author's Response: I'll totally look that story up! Thank you! (Although I may wait a while so I don't influence my own writing during this story - lol.) And thank you for your kind words about my writing. And don't worry too much. 90 days is a long time to resist Justin's charms, don't you think? ;-)
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