Midnight Whispers :: QAF Brian and Justin Fanfiction

Reviewer: Acadian Proud (Anonymous) · Date: September 14, 2016 03:30 PM · On: Chapter 1

Nice installment.

A few small typos:

"...and spin sometime with him." should be "...and spend sometime with him."

Before i can one damn thing we were walking to the car as Justin locks the house Billy opens the door for me to get in the car my dads were smiling at this i gave them the glare and just sat down Billy sits down next to me and close the door of the car and we drive off."

Should be:

Before I can say one damn thing we were walking to the car as Justin locks the house. Billy opens the door for me to get in the car. My dads were smiling at this and I gave them the glare and just sat down. Billy sits down next to me and close the door of the car and we drive off.

Author's Response:
thank you for the help

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