Reviewer: gotb30 (Signed) · Date: March 01, 2015 04:37 AM · On: Chapter 5
Wow, this chapter was a bit hard to read. Please don't torture Brian too much longer, okay? :) That said, Ted's reactions were very in character. :)
Author's Response: Brian is going to be pretty pissed and baffled throughout this whole fic lol. I'm glad you think Ted is in character as well. :)
Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: puanani (Anonymous) · Date: March 01, 2015 03:54 AM · On: Chapter 1
Man how . creative you are. I do love suffering Brian. I like this story and I would love to see where it goes. Don't hurt Ted he is still the good guy. Maybe Michael.
Author's Response: Lol, thank you! I like to make Brian suffer just a little bit as well. I must have a sadist/masochist thing going on. I won't hurt Ted TOO much. Aw, I can't hurt Michael either. He did come running to Brian's side when he needed him in Chapters 3 & 4, despite their fight. He's a good guy in this fic. :)
Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: Severus_divides_into_H (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2015 11:40 AM · On: Chapter 4
I can’t describe how happy I am to have found this fantastic story! This is my most favorite one of yours right now. The idea is very funny, it could be a hilarious, humorous story, but no, you made it dramatic, emotional and painful. Wow! Honestly, it just grabbed my heart and didn’t let go of it until I could no longer breathe. I feel a little jealous because I could never describe feelings in the way you do it. The chapter where Justin leaves Brian was completely heartbreaking, raw and bindingly painful, I felt so sorry for him, I could cry. This is Brian’s worst nightmare – Justin leaves him not because he can’t stand his behavior any longer, but because he just doesn’t love him. I believed every word! I was just going to have dinner when I started reading your story, and I forgot about it at all – you got me captured and fascinated! I’m happy Michael chose to push his anger at Brian away a little and came to him when he needed him. This is a real friendship. Brian was in a desperate state, he was obviously quickly falling apart – he called Michael for help, he called him to keep his sanity. Perfect, mind-blowing, piercing moment. I got goose bumps. It felt very real, I believed every word.
And you showed Justin’s infatuation with Ted very well. It’s embarrassing and funny at times – I can’t imagine what will happen next! Most of all I can’t wait to find out how Brian will react when he learns his rival is in fact Ted. Ted, who Brian considers a loser at being attractive and who works for him.
Marilyn is really interesting! I loved her. She is helpful, observant, curious, funny – and intimidating. How will she sort this mess out?? What will happen to Brian and Justin – and Ted? Will they forget it? Justin is going to feel awful, I’m afraid.
Thank you for incredible story! I look forward to the next chapter – you can’t imagine how much. To make Brian break down like that and still make him in-canon is astonishing. You're very talented.
Your cat is amazing, by the way!:)
Author's Response: Oh wow! This review made my day! This is a really fun story to write and will mostly stay comedic. However, the break up scene needed to be honored as heartbreaking and cruel so it did end up taking an angsty route. We saw how he reacted when he pushed Justin away and Justin left him for Ethan. We saw tears in his eyes when Justin left him mid-season five and we could tell how affected he was when Justin left for New York. But Brian knew that Justin still loved him. It was only time. He never expected Justin to be so nonchalant about leaving him and stating that he was no longer in love with him. For Brian, a man who has trouble accepting and expressing love, this is a huge blow to him. Justin is the only man he has ever been in love with so I figured Justin breaking up with him like this would hit him like a sledgehammer. I really do believe that Michael would put his anger aside if Brian called him in this state and go be there for him. I was glad to display their friendship in this light.
I am having a lot of fun writing Justin's altered state when it comes to Ted. Poor Teddy is so confused about it all. He really has come to respect and like Brian a lot and considers him a good friend so the upcoming chapters will be very stressful for him.
I really like Marilyn and would have liked to see more of her. Her moments made the show so quirky and randomly added a supernatural aspect, which was odd but in the greatest way possible. She is going to have her hands full in this story, that's for sure. She does love some good drama though and felt like Brian needed to be put in his place so she will keep an eye on him and step in when it's time to spice things up and again if she decides to fix things.
My cat is pretty wonderful, isn't she? She is usually quite beautiful (she's all white with a few black hairs on her head and has one blue eye and one green eye which usually stand out in pictures but you can barely tell here) but I caught a sour expression. An expression that sort of mirrors her cranky old lady-like meow, to be honest. :)
Thank you for your incredibly kind words. By the way, I clicked on your name and your story looks very interesting so I plan on reading it today. Thank you for this awesome and detailed review!!
Reviewer: jax (Anonymous) · Date: February 19, 2015 11:24 PM · On: Chapter 4
Can't wait for the next chapter! How long is this story by the way?
Author's Response: Next chapter should be up soon :)
This story will be pretty short. 10-12 chapters at most. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: Alois (Anonymous) · Date: February 13, 2015 11:16 AM · On: Chapter 4
Your cat is beautiful 😊 Love this, I can't wait for your next chapter :)
Author's Response: She is a darling! And I can't wait to get back to reading your story (this is Consequences' Alois, right? If not, ignore me lol.) I've been distracting myself with writing and working and I can't read more than one-shots (for some reason) when I'm on a roll with my fic. But I can wait to see what the future holds in your story. :) Thank you for your kind words about my cat and about your love for this story! It means a lot :)
Reviewer: Alois (Anonymous) · Date: February 13, 2015 11:07 AM · On: Chapter 3
I'm still laughing 😊 Love it
Author's Response: It is funny when you think of the reason Justin's leaving him, isn't it? ;) Thanks for reading and reviewing, Alois!
Reviewer: Alois (Anonymous) · Date: February 13, 2015 11:00 AM · On: Chapter 2
LOL
Author's Response: It was a funny chapter to write. Thanks for confirming that with your reaction haha! :)
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: February 12, 2015 03:17 PM · On: Chapter 4
I am really enjoying this one. Very different.
Author's Response: Thank you! It's a fun to write and think of what I can do with this scenario. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: gotb30 (Signed) · Date: February 11, 2015 06:54 PM · On: Chapter 4
Oh no! LOL Ted figured it out and is panicking. This would be so sad if I wasn't smiling so much! Can't wait for the next chapter! Love your kitty too (have 2 of my own). :)
Author's Response: Haha, yep! Ted is freaking out to say the least. My cat is very sweet but also a bit odd. I was delighted that I took this picture of her to properly display her personality. She is usually quite photogenic but what would be the fun in using one of those pictures? ;) Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: gotb30 (Signed) · Date: February 11, 2015 06:29 PM · On: Chapter 3
Awww, poor Brian, he is devastated. Can't wait to find out who Justin is enraptured over. I really liked the phone conversation with Michael, and that he's on his way over to help his best friend.
Author's Response: That he is. This is different than the time when Justin left him for Ethan since Justin still loved Brian and the same goes for the canon ways Justin left him in season five due to monogamy and New York. Brian still knew they loved each other, even though it broke his heart. This time Justin just took his heart and threw it on the ground. For a guy who has issues with having love in his life, it is going to hit him hard. And yay Michael! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: gotb30 (Signed) · Date: February 11, 2015 06:17 PM · On: Chapter 2
Omg, I giggled throughout this chapter. Poor Ted doesn't know what hit him, and he's desperately trying to be a good friend to Brian. Eeek! LOL
Author's Response: This was a fun chapter to write. He really doesn't know what hit him He owes a lot to Brian, not just with the job at Kinnetik, but with getting him the other job in season 2 and helping him out with the sentencing enforced by Stockwell. He wants to stay on good terms with the man lool.
Reviewer: gotb30 (Signed) · Date: February 11, 2015 06:09 PM · On: Chapter 1
LOLOL!! Brian will be beside himself. Ted?? Hahahhaha Oh, naughty Marilyn, *giggle*
Author's Response: Marilyn is definitely naughty! hahaha Thanks for reading and reviewing (on all the chapters too!)
Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: February 11, 2015 04:18 AM · On: Chapter 4
Ha! I am liking this bizarro QAF world, LOL! I always liked Ted... I thought he was a subtle sort of funny, and endearing. I think his reaction to the realization that HE is Justin's new love is just pitch perfect.
Too bad Mysterious Marilyn didn't have more to do in the original series. Perhaps we could call her Mischievious Marilyn here!
BTW... who's Lupe? Am I missing something?
Author's Response: I always liked Ted too. He had the worst luck and I sort of can identify with that frequently lolol. I would have loved to see more of Marilyn. Lupe is Ted's cat. He has a scene with Emmett in 4.13 where Emmett comes in and Ted is calling for her but she hid in the closet. She's never mentioned again. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2015 08:01 PM · On: Chapter 4
Burst out laughing with the cat picture- and I am on my tablet so I have to keep scrolling down. Very amusing. I could picture Ted's panicked expression in the elevator. The best parts were exploring Ted's relationship with Brian; I think their friendship really made some of these episodes for me. Poor Brian! Wonder what happens next.
Author's Response: It really is one of the most lovely pictures I have ever taken of my cat lolol. I really liked Ted and Brian's friendship as well. He is the first person Brian told about his cancer and chose him to be his CFO so you know that he likes Ted more than he lets on. Poor Brian indeed. Although I do think he is feeling a little grateful at this point that it was Michael and Ted who saw him like this rather than other people. I think he trusts them enough to not spread the word on how hard he took the break up and Justin's harsh words. But when he finds out who Justin has set his sights on...oh boy.
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2015 05:55 PM · On: Chapter 4
Love your cat. I think Ted's getting a clue that something is wrong. Dying to find out where you lead us next.
Author's Response: Aw, Seraphina says thank you and I thank you as well! She is a very nice cat. I got her from a shelter in Harlem about a year ago. She never scratches or bites, although I don't think she likes the other pets because she hangs out in the bathroom all day. I think Ted is at least getting concerned on where this is coming from. He's very confused and a little freaked out now. Thanks for reading and commenting!
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2015 01:01 PM · On: Chapter 4
Hi, Anne - well, the angst continues amidst the more humorous parts. Poor Ted AND Brian. Ted, because I'm sure he knows that Brian will kill him (at least figuratively and maybe literally!) when he finds out who Justin's new love interest is, and Brian because he is hurting so badly. Although I'm not sure he would quite fall apart as much as he did here (even when Justin left for NYC, he still got up that morning and went back to work at his computer), I know he would be hurting inside over what Justin had said to him.
I will be curious how you get them all out of this mess; I'll be looking forward to the rest.
BTW, I miss updates to your other stories. I hope you will be updating those soon as well. Personally I can only sanely deal with writing about two at a time (with a few one-shots mixed in), because I find that otherwise I go crazy trying to keep up, and readers understandably get a little anxious waiting for updates).;) I have enough of a challenge updating the few I have as it is with a full-time job and admin/beta duties, so I respect anyone who can update theirs faster. I once had 8? I think, and I almost went crazy!;) I can be on the slow side, but I eventually get them completed. Just wish I could update as fast as you on this story.;)
Oh, and I fixed your 'giant mutant cat' - ha! I'm sure Ted thought it would be some 'other' type of photo when he opened it - maybe that's next?;) *Hugs* ~Kim
Author's Response: Yes, Ted is definitely on edge. I don't think Brian would wallow all day either in canon. It was more added for humor rather than this is what he would actually do. He will be up on his feet next chapter though (which is the next day) and outwardly be back to himself. I knew when I was typing it that Brian would probably not get to this state but then I remembered how they didn't see him when Justin left him for Ethan so maybe he would have a day to decompress and I thought, "Eh, what the hell. Make the man lick his wounds and go into depressed pouting mode." Of course, Ted will feel even more guilty about it since witness the tail end of it. I made Michael a little baffled about it though, so hopefully that helps a little.
This will have a little break. Intersect will be getting an update soon. I have part of chapter 17 already finished so that will be next. After that, I'll probably write the second and final chapter of In Sicknesss to get that out of the way. And then I will probably write Feed & Extract because I am missing that. I also have to update Saint Joan. What did I get myself into? ;) Despite the angst in this, it's a lot of humorous angst and pretty easy to write so this has sort of been my downtime fic. Work was VERY slow this weekend. No murders to cover since Friday or even car accidents (I work in a news room.) That's a good thing but it also allows the people stuck in the office to have free time on their hands and go internet surfing or, in my case, open up google docs and write this.
Thank you so much! Although it would be funny if Justin managed to somehow make a picture message that large (it would make a statement,) I thought it was a little too jarring. We'll see what else he'll send Ted lolol. Thank you for reading and reviewing! Hugs back! - Anne
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: February 10, 2015 11:51 AM · On: Chapter 4
Oh girl, this is terrific! I feel sorry for Brian, even though I know there must be some kind of a happy ending planned. But it is so funny, so absurd at the same time. Can't wait to see Brian when he finds out about Ted.
Astrid
Author's Response: Thank you! I feel sorry for Brian too. I enjoy writing absurd. Cat messages, Brian wallowing, Ted accidentally stealing Brian's boyfriend. It's all so much fun to write lol. He will find out next chapter :) Thanks for reading and reviewing! - Anne
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2015 05:35 PM · On: Chapter 3
That last sentence was excellent. "For the third time in his life, he is feeling the physical sensation that gives heartbreak its accurate name." Not only do you express Brian's pain, but also an eternal truth about heartbreak. Very good. You also did well describing Brian's pain; he doesn't cry immediately, but simply stands there as though what just happened wasn't real. Only when he finally figures it out, he yields to emotion. That is how Brian should be portrayed, that is how he processes his hurt feelings. I can't wait to see his reaction when he finds out Justin's new love is Ted. Nice update.
Author's Response: That is very true. I like manpain as well as the next person but, unless Justin is dying, I can't see him giving into his tears until he goes through his process of shock, numbness, drinking, realization, then pain. He's going to have a hard time before and after he finds out about Ted. Before, due to Justin's very harsh words and feeling like he completely lost the love of the one man in his life who understood him. And after because...well, it's Ted.
Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2015 05:17 PM · On: Chapter 2
That was hilarious. You really started to use "show, not tell" from the middle to the end, although at the beginning, you simply told the reader Justin was unhappy, instead of SHOWING why he was unhappy. Always try and demonstrate feelings: "Justin glared at Brian as he entered the room" is better than "Justin was annoyed with Brian.". The first one shows his feelings and lets the reader imagine why Justin is glaring, the second one does all the thinking for the reader. However, you did much better in showing how Justin had "fallen in love" with Ted- one of the best lines was Justin focusing on how Ted licked his lips. You also provided some good insight into WHY Justin would be attracted to Ted, instead of just expecting the reader to buy into that notion. I thought that was great. Your funniest lines were saying that Ted became more interesting after running a porno and getting addicted to crystal meth. I could just picture Justin's Sunshine smile being showered over an accountant, and your indirect characterization of Ted was also very good. I don't think this chapter was as ridiculous as you said.
Author's Response: Ah, I know. I do try to do that in my longer stories and more emotionally complex stories but I'm just writing this one off of the top of my head (despite the general premise being planned for two months.) I was just trying to portray his thoughts since Brian wasn't there. I wanted to keep the chapter focused on Justin and Ted and have Justin already dismissing Brian. Also, I wanted to keep the chapters short and took the quick way out lol. I am a big believer in show not tell unless it is a narrative where another character in question is not present. This was more about trying to find and display his altered mindset without Brian's presence influencing it but still trying to keep it short and to the point. :) Although I do agree I could have set up the scene more before the line and/or altered the line for sure :)
I'm glad you thought that Justin's feelings for Ted were believable. While Ted has his flaws, my mom and I talked about how he was actually pretty handsome and only a television show would see him as a plain average joe. And I just spoke the truth! He did become more interesting when he started running the website and got addicted to meth haha. Thanks for reading, your kind and constructive words, and reviewing!
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: February 09, 2015 04:36 PM · On: Chapter 3
Oh Mysterious Marilyn, Brian is feeling the pain! Methinks he is about to change his ways.
Author's Response: He will be having to plan out how he is going to go about this, that's for sure.
Author's Response: He will be having to plan out how he is going to go about this, that's for sure.
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2015 12:45 PM · On: Chapter 3
Wow, you weren't kidding when you said angsty! I know Brian somewhat deserved this, but I feel sorry for him. He feels a lot more deeply than most people realize once you get beyond that outer shell he uses to protect his heart. I'm going to be curous as to how you resolve all this. Let's hope that Marilyn does some more of her 'make me forget' spells on all of them. Will be looking forward to the next part, Anne. *Hugs* ~Kim
Author's Response: It was! This was initially supposed to be a funny one shot before I wrote two sentences and decided I had more of the story to tell. Most of it still will be funny but the situation does invite angst. I don't blame you for feeling sorry for Brian. How can you not feel sorry for him? While he really needed another wake up call, Justin (and I) were extremely hard on him. I'm sure hearing Justin say he wasn't in love with him anymore really tore him apart. He does feel things very deeply. He wouldn't be so destructive if he didn't. That's why I think Brian keeps that outer shell. He takes things harder than most, even though he tries not to show it. I am curious as to how I'll resolve it too! Just kidding! I pretty much know but it will be messy before we get there. Marilyn will have to work more magic before this story is over, for sure. I will have the next part up soon! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Hugs back!
Reviewer: chaval (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2015 07:24 AM · On: Chapter 3
Marilyn est une vrai sadique pour faire subir ça à Brian. J'adore.
Author's Response: Elle est tout à fait un sadique . Je suis heureux que vous adore! Merci pour la lecture et l'examen ! (Je ne parle pas français . Je utilise Google Translate . Désolé pour les erreurs.)
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2015 05:59 AM · On: Chapter 3
Aww, poor Brian. It doesn't really help to know that Justin's love for Ted isn't real. Marilyn is going to have her hand full. On the bright side Michael is talking with Brian again.
Author's Response: Poor Brian indeed. He could have handled Justin leaving, sort of. But the spell keeps Justin from feeling guilty about his feelings over Ted and keeps him from accessing his true romantic feelings for Brian. So he was quite harsh to him, wasn't he? The rest of the story will be strange. A combination of baffling, silly, and angsty. Marilyn will have her hands full. And yes, the rest of the gang will be helping Brian through this. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: jax (Anonymous) · Date: February 09, 2015 05:50 AM · On: Chapter 3
I hate when i read really good stories like this because I never know if it will be updated quickly. I hope Michael isn't to Justin-bashing. Can't wait for Brian's reaction to Ted, hope it happens soon!
Author's Response: I should have the next chapter up soon! :) I did get the first three chapters up within 24 hours, after all. However, I do have three other WIPs to work on so I will probably finish writing Chapter 16 of Intersect and then write the next chapter of this since I am planning on short chapters for this one. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: February 09, 2015 12:10 AM · On: Chapter 2
My only concern is for Ted's self esteem once the spell wears off.
Author's Response: We shall see how Ted reacts and handles the situation. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2015 08:27 PM · On: Chapter 2
OMG, Anne, this is hysterical! And also a little sad. I'm beginning to feel sorry for Ted, because you know there is no way he's ever going to end up with Justin. And if Brian catches wind of this...Oh, boy. DO love a jealous Brian! Poor Teddy - so vunerable and trusting. This could get ugly - LOL! And I always loved Mysterious Marilyn's snarkiness. Looking forward to the rest of this. *Hugs* ~Kim
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! It means a lot. Yes, poor Ted. On the one hand, he is probably incredibly flattered by the sudden attention but on the other he is very confused and will not want to get on Brian's bad side lol. Brian is not going to be happy, to say the least. I love Mysterious Marilyn too. I wish we could have seen a little more of her. She was such a quirky extra character. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2015 08:22 PM · On: Chapter 2
Oh this tickled me to no end. Can't wait to see where you take this!
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it! It will definitely be a weird and silly story. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: Alois (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2015 02:52 PM · On: Chapter 1
Hi Anne! It's been way too long since my last review, sorry for that! Oh, this one promises to be interesting and a funny ride! I can't wait :)
Author's Response: No problem, Alois! I need to get back to reading your fic as well! I get into this habit of starting fics I love but I still put off reading them due to writing my own fics, unless I am keeping up with them chapter by chapter. I kind of went on a one-shot craze and posted a few more things in the last week or so. If any of them appeal to you and you read them, let me know what you think! :)
And yes, this will be a funny ride. Probably not for Brian though. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2015 02:21 PM · On: Chapter 1
Brian will die of humiliation once this gets out! You have to update soon...
Author's Response: That he will. He will almost be too confused and embarrassed about it to be heartbroken. I will update very soon. Today, even. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: taurus (Anonymous) · Date: February 08, 2015 12:38 PM · On: Chapter 1
Oh! How naughty. Now this is going to be sooo funny. Let's keep writing.
Author's Response: Will do. Yes, we will all have fun laughing at Brian's expense. ;) Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: reiselust161 (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2015 12:31 PM · On: Chapter 1
hhaahaha, Ted and Justin, oh yeah! Keep on :)
Author's Response: I just think of Ted and Justin and sigh because they are the perfect couple that never was, you know? ;) lolol
Will do! These chapters will be shorter and I already have part of the next chapter written. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2015 07:58 AM · On: Chapter 1
I adore Mysterious Marilyn stories, and the twist you put on this one is amazing. Not Ethan but Ted! This is going to be sooooo much fun.
Author's Response: I do too! There definitely not enough of them (hence why she will play a major role in my other fic, Feed & Extract.) Yes, I tried to figure out the oddest choice for Justin and Ted was the first to come to mind. I briefly thought about Michael but I don't think Marilyn would want to ruin a marriage so Ted it was. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: Andie (Anonymous) · Date: February 08, 2015 07:21 AM · On: Chapter 1
You. Are. Evil.
With that said....have fun!
I will reading this as you post
Author's Response: I am evil. All I need is a villain mustache to twirl. Damn my female status!
It will be a mostly fun and ridiculous fic. Brian will be quite baffled and heartbroken though (obviously.)
Thanks for reading and commenting!
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