Reviewer: Bryton4ever71 (Signed) · Date: June 09, 2012 06:27 AM · On: Chapter 16: Quiet Happiness
OMG, this thing is just a jewel waiting to be dug up! I love it so much. Love how Gus reads about NY...Love how he sells the painting by telling the lady it will match her dress and pearls... where Justin goes over to talk to a man with a bald spot...and esp how his dad's want an evening of "quiet time" ....cue porno music>>AKA Brrian neweds to F**K Justin into the mattress! YAHOO!!!
Reviewer: Bryton4ever71 (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2012 05:39 PM · On: Chapter 11: We are Our Parents Children
Draining to write! That's an understatement! That was an amazing bit or writing. So exciting and scary and sweet when he was rescued. And when he slipped in puke and dropped the phone my heart was in my mouth.
Ok, I'm a little confused as to the events that are leading to Linday's degradation here. OK from what I gathered from "Gus" she couldn't find a job...she really looked and swilled wine...she "got this job" for Jonathan Green...she didn't get it (lost it???)...went to her parents so "her daddy could fix the mess" (her running out of money??) ((and yet she has all that booze?))...I'm fuzzy as to what they were telling her while Gus was looking at pale things and the turtle diamond pin...why she lost that job, perhaps? And drinking was part of the cause? If that's so why did they let her drink so much that they needed a taxi to bring her home??....ok so they get home, she has a freak out,(because....she's a lushy lesbo with no job??)... slaps Gus...refuses to go to Justin's homecoming, drinks her breakfast, lunch and dinner while everyone has a party and collapses from alcohol poisoning. OK...do I have that right?
I took a peek at the next chapter and I'm glad you will be doing a series. This one will be my favorite though. You do kidspeak marvelously. It 3:30 AM here. ?I'll check in the morning if there 's any response.
Author's Response: Okay let me see if I can outline Lindsay's motivations. I am the first to say that this writing was not the clearest partly because I was not sure how to write it and partly because I don't think Gus would know this, but the final straw for Mel/ Lindsay is that Mel catches Lindsay having an affair with a man again. I try to mention this in the divorce conversation chapter but again I know it is not clear.
So early on Lindsay has lost her wife and daughter, is probably questioning her sexuality again, and she is heading back to Pittsburgh with no job and Gus, so she drinks on the plane On the other hand, Lindsay thinks that it may be rocky to start but subconsciously maybe consciously she thinks that she, Gus, and Brian can play house and live happily ever after. After all Brian does buy the house with the white picket fence, Brian is supporting her and Gus until she gets on her feet, and at this point Lindsay thinks Justin is in New York and out of the picture for good.
Lindsay comes from privilege that privilege comes with a high brow education and a sense of entitlement. She thinks that the people at her old job will welcome her back with open arms, they don't. Lindsay goes to a bar near the house for a pick me up, her sense of entitlement is shaken. She tries to get another job at another gallery and she gets rejected again, and again, and again. Soon the drink pick me ups becomes Lindsay's crutch. Brian's help money becomes boos money. Then Lindsay turns to high class connections. Her father gets Lindsay an interview with a guy she hopes will nettle Brian and get her the kind of job she wants. Instead of what Lindsay wants Brian says that Justin is coming back and then she gets nervous about the interview. Gus sees her put alcohol in her purse.
At the country club Lindsay's parents are mad because SHE SHOWED UP TO THE INTERVIEW DRUNK. I had Lindsay drinking at the country club because I wanted her to be drunk when she hit rock bottom. Lindsay thinks she has hit bottom when her parents and her world of privilege turn from her. That is when Gus calls Justin Papa!!!!!!!! THAT leads to the slap and THAT IS HER ROCK BOTTOM. It is no secret that I do not like Lindsay but I do not think she would strike her child in less she was at crises.
When everything has crumbled around her Lindsay turns to her crutch, hence alcohol poisoning I hope some of all that comes across.
THANK YOU FOR READING, FOR CARING, AND FOR ENCOURAGING!!
Sorry it took so long to get this to you. Usually I dictate but today I had to type myself.
Reviewer: Bryton4ever71 (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2012 03:28 PM · On: Chapter 8: The Tortoise and the Hare
Well, some chapters fly by and I don't really have anything to say and the one just has to be commented on...I think the idea of Brian/Justin bears is too adorable for words...loved the whole...if letters get to the North Pole so we should be able to write to Pittsburgh and back LOL...oh and Good luck, little agent! LOL This story is so unbelievably cute it hurts! Sorry I waited so long!
Author's Response:
Hi I'm sorry I have not been responding to reviews, my RL is crazy right now. Thank you for your many reviews!! I'm so glad that you are enjoying the chapters so much. I really appreciate hearing what you like about different parts of the story. Please keep reading and reviewing!! Thank you again for your comments!!!
Reviewer: Bryton4ever71 (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2012 02:35 PM · On: Chapter 5: Happy Snow
Hey there! Just a quick not there is a slight repitition in the first paragraph of the chapter.
The content is great, love the weekend and can feel the joy of Brian coming as a surprise
Reviewer: Bryton4ever71 (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2012 09:23 AM · On: Chapter 1: Rainbow Reading Time
Wow, you really have the child's POV down pat...way to go
Reviewer: no sleep (Anonymous) · Date: June 05, 2012 09:12 PM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
I guess being a grown-up makes you so big and tall that you need help getting clean, because Daddy and Papa always seem really happy when they get to shower together - and they're always in there for a very long time.
Daddy has taken over Papa's old seat at the end of the couch. Now, he's the one petting Oreo. It's the first time he's ever done it.
I loved the bit about the shower.
The birthday party had me frightened. I didn't think about the pinata and the stick being the problem initially. It was beautiful how Brian, Gus, and Oreo pulled through for Justin.
Reviewer: no sleep (Anonymous) · Date: June 05, 2012 08:56 PM · On: Chapter 23: Trying To Be Champions
Gus' sensitivity about Ben and Hunter not coming around when he is sick was heartbreaking. I wonder if he is more sensitive because of his situation with his mothers.
I volunteered at my son's Field day a few weeks ago, and it was nothing like what was described here. That sounded like so much fun. Gus and his Papa had another beautiful day of bonding.
Wonderful chapter!
Reviewer: no sleep (Anonymous) · Date: June 05, 2012 08:50 PM · On: Chapter 24: A Trip From Family to Family
She certainly is much happier here, than she ever was with Mommy in Pittsburgh. I hope eventually Mommy can find her happy place too.
It's good to see that Melanie is more relaxed and happier around Gus, being the mother he wanted her to be. It is just sad she had to be happy to be able to treat him better. Angry and frustration should not be taken out on a child.
Love the pictures and books.
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: June 05, 2012 09:38 AM · On: Chapter 25 - Pool Boys
Still here and still enjoying your story. All seems to be going well – that is except for Lindsey. We don’t hear from her, yet she is still very much part of the scene. I thought this line says so much about how Gus sees her:
“I hope eventually Mommy can find her happy place too.
I thought the explanation of HIV and why Ben and Hunter didn’t come to visit Gus was handled beautifully.
I also got a real chuckle from this line:
“ Personally, I think Grandma Debbie would be better
at the tie-dye station cuz she wears a lot of tie-dye
rainbow stuff ……”
Thanks for these new chapters; they were really terrific.
DavidR
Reviewer: Cheburashka2 (Signed) · Date: June 05, 2012 06:36 AM · On: Chapter 25 - Pool Boys
This story is too adorable for words. I just love it!
Cheers,
Vin
Reviewer: valell50 (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2012 11:08 AM · On: Chapter 25 - Pool Boys
Wonderful! Looking forward to more. Val
Reviewer: valell50 (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2012 10:47 AM · On: Chapter 24: A Trip From Family to Family
Love the loonies!
Reviewer: Anno53 (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2012 04:51 AM · On: Chapter 25 - Pool Boys
I loved your descriptions of the "High Homo Days" and I'm glad Gus keeps reading his books. Your pictures are a hoot!
Reviewer: valell50 (Signed) · Date: June 03, 2012 11:55 PM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
That was intense. great chapter.
Reviewer: no sleep (Anonymous) · Date: June 03, 2012 10:55 PM · On: Chapter 25 - Pool Boys
“Not even your drink can get lucky Theodore?”
I may be Gus Peterson-Marcus, but I’m still Daddy’s Sonnyboy.
I don't think you have any idea just how enjoyable this story is. I was almost late to work the other day because I could not but it down. It is just as delightful as another fic with a son of Justin's, named Max, as the POV. You have able to maintain that wonderful innocence of a child of Gus's age with realistic behavior and emotions for someone so young throughout the several (but not enough... lol) chapters.
I was afraid to read this, thinking it was going going to be too dark, but I was pleasantly surprised. The abuse wasn't overdone or extreme, physically, although disturbing as any abuse would be.
I was so excited to see an update. I'm also surprised the reviews have not reached at least 300 by now. Oh, you included one of my favorite books -- 'Dont Let the Pigeon Drive the Bus". Children have some of the best literature.
Going back later to review more. It deserves it!
Reviewer: valell50 (Signed) · Date: June 03, 2012 07:56 PM · On: Chapter 20 - Doggy Time
Oreo is adorable and I love Brian's thank you when Gus cleans off the dog hair! Oreo will win Brian's heart, he's stalking him like Justin did!! Val
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!!! Gus makes me LOL too, even on the subway sometimes when I think of something good, my fellow passengers must think I'm nuts!! Oh well Gus and readers like you makes me happy, thanks!! Please keep reading and reviewing!!
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: June 03, 2012 05:33 PM · On: Chapter 25 - Pool Boys
Lol I laughed through this chapter so many times with Gus expereincing so many new things. It is such a interesting POV thank you
Author's Response: Thank you for your review!!! Gus makes me LOL too, even on the subway sometimes when I think of something good, my fellow passengers must think I'm nuts!! Oh well Gus and readers like you makes me happy, thanks!! Please keep reading and reviewing!!
Reviewer: vlsope2@yahoo.com (Anonymous) · Date: June 03, 2012 04:51 PM · On: Chapter 25 - Pool Boys
I read the last 2 chapters this morning, I loved them. I really enjoyed the pictures they were great with the story. Your story has truly been fun and entertaining Ialways enjoy a daddy and gus story.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! I'm really happy to hear that you liked the last two chapters and that you are enjoying this story. The GREAT pictures were thanks to my WONDERFUL beta, amythesw!! I completely agree with you that Brian, Justin, and Gus is a winning combination!!! :-) Please keep reading and reviewing, thank you!!
Reviewer: valell50 (Signed) · Date: June 03, 2012 01:33 PM · On: Chapter 11: We are Our Parents Children
I just found this story and am reading it straight thru. I had to tell you how powerful this chapter is! Thank you for sharing your Gus with us!
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing this story!!!
Yah, that chapter was draining to write. I have become so close to the character of Gus that it is vary difficult to imagine him hurt in any way.
Please keep reading and reviewing, I would love to know what you think as the story moves forward, thank you!!!!!
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: June 03, 2012 08:24 AM · On: Chapter 25 - Pool Boys
I grew up very across the street from a large river and a short walk from a lake. I can't remember a time I didn't know how to swim. My mom hated the water and never went with us. Her idea was if the worse was to happen she would rather someone came to tell her the children drowned then to actually watch it happen. I think I did have swimming lesson when I was very young but I really think I was born with webbed feet.
I am very glad Gus is home with his extended family, I think he's so lucky to have Ben to count on for extra support. He knows he can trust Ben and it's good to have another adult he can turn to. I am so glad you are doing such a great job with this story, Gus is growing up and the whole family is adjusting to life with Gus.
Lori
Author's Response:
Thank you as always for your review!!! I'm afraid that I'm like your mom, I really don't like swimming at all. I was swimming for years because it was good exorcize, but my coach kept having to jump in to save me. Although the pool could be fun to and that is what I wanted Gus to experience. Please keep reading and reviewing, I really like hearing from you!!!
Reviewer: debv3 (Signed) · Date: June 03, 2012 07:22 AM · On: Chapter 25 - Pool Boys
So sweet!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!!! I'm happy you liked the chapter. :-D Please keep reading and reviewing, thanks!!!
Reviewer: Ceci (Anonymous) · Date: June 03, 2012 06:53 AM · On: Chapter 25 - Pool Boys
I love this story. Thank you!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!!! I'm really glad you are enjoying the story. :-) Please keep reading and reviewing, thanks!!!
Reviewer: Jane (Anonymous) · Date: June 01, 2012 01:29 AM · On: Chapter 24: A Trip From Family to Family
Favorite parts: " Ten whole books!That's as many books as I have fingers." and "You want me, right Daddy? Haven't I been a good boy?" (heartbreaking) and "chanting Daddy's phone number in his head"
One of my favorite chapter. I have already been checking for the next one
Reviewer: debv3 (Signed) · Date: May 31, 2012 04:08 AM · On: Chapter 24: A Trip From Family to Family
Nice chapter I like how you did the money lesson. So glad Mel is happy.
Reviewer: no sleep (Anonymous) · Date: May 30, 2012 11:23 PM · On: Chapter 2: Daddy's Call
I just started reading this on a whim. It is amazing so far. I wished I had started this one earlier. It is nothing like I expected.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Anonymous) · Date: May 30, 2012 04:20 PM · On: Chapter 24: A Trip From Family to Family
Another wonderful chapter Gus certainly went through the emotional mill again, but he did feel secure in the end
Reviewer: Rickeshay (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2012 06:46 AM · On: Chapter 24: A Trip From Family to Family
Another enjoyable chapter.
The only way the dollar coin will ever be used like it should be is if we do like the Canadians did and simply stop making dollar bills. Since that would upset some people it isn't going to happen any time soon.(vbg)
I liked Gus thinking 82 cents made him rich since I can remember when I was in grade school having to do extra chores to earn the huge sum of two dollars to send off for some Revolutionary War army men advertised on the last page of a comic book.(lol)
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2012 04:57 AM · On: Chapter 24: A Trip From Family to Family
What a great way to teach money skills. It looks like Gus will have no trouble reading 10 books by the end of summer. He needs a T-shirt like that. I was worried about the trip, Gus sure didn't seem ready to leave Brian but sounds like he did ok, good thing Ms.Roberts was there to provide him with the support he needed. Mel sure wasn't around much.
Lori
Reviewer: BritinGuslover (Anonymous) · Date: May 30, 2012 01:02 AM · On: Chapter 23: Trying To Be Champions
I totally love this fic. I always did believe Linds/Mel wouldn't have lasted post 5:13. Though I am more of a Lindsay fan. I never took to Mel because of the way she always treated Brian concerning parental rights over Gus, then the way she treated Michael over custody of Jenny Rebecca. I think you should have a custody battle over J.R and have Ben/Mikey gain custody. Hunter can finally look over his cousin and baby sister. Hunter was and still is one of my favorite characters. So, the fact that you're putting a whole lot Hunter/Gus bonding in there is a big plus for me. I would like to see a lot more of it. Update soon :)
Reviewer: Jane (Anonymous) · Date: May 21, 2012 09:49 AM · On: Chapter 23: Trying To Be Champions
Explaining to Gus why Ben and Hunter didn't and couldn't visit was so sad. I'm glad that Gus spoke up, before he would have just worried about it. This time he asked and they honestly answered him.
Field Day - how great was that. Gus appeared so much more confident - little boy leaving kindergarden for 1st grade. That is if he's being promoted !
Waiting for the next chapter...
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!!! I would guess that the HIV conversation is not easy for anyone. Sometimes the hard talks are vary important. Field Day can be a lot of fun :-)
Don't forget that summer is a fun time too.
Please keep reading and reviewing, thanks!!!!!
Reviewer: Cheryl (Anonymous) · Date: May 21, 2012 08:12 AM · On: Chapter 23: Trying To Be Champions
Another charming chapter. Brings back memories of Girl Scout camping trips with my daughter - I was the leader and had to plan of all the actvities. The kids just loved those times. The pictures of the tie-dyed shirts and socks was a wonderful addition. I felt Gus' excitement during the activities with his classmates.
Author's Response: Thank you vary much for reading and reviewing!!! It sounds like your Girl Scout troop was much more advencherus than mine :-)
I'm glad to hear that the happy excitement came through. The pictures are thanks to my AMAZING beta amythesw, she is GREAT!!!!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts I really appreciate it!!!!! Please keep reading and reviewing, thank you!!!!
Reviewer: Rickeshay (Signed) · Date: May 21, 2012 04:34 AM · On: Chapter 23: Trying To Be Champions
Another fine chapter. Another good catch with Ben and Hunter staying away from an ill Gus.
Regarding my fics, its' amazing how much faster I was able to write the Gus Chronicles than I can now. My muse just isn't with me most of the time.(vbg) The big thing about the Chronicles is that they weren't written as chapters but that is simply the easiest way to get them into chronological order. I didn't write them in chronological order like you are doing but as I thought of them. So some of the latest chronologically were among the first written.(It's not the best way to write such stories.) I also didn't have enough sense to date the fics when I wrote them either.(g)
Looking forward to Gus' summer vacation and then onto to the First Grade.
Rick
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing!!! I have experienced writers block that has lasted for YEARS. I completely sympathize with your writing troubles. I hope your writing juices start flowing soon. :-)
I also hope the next chapters do not disappoint. Please keep reading and reviewing, thank you!!!!
Reviewer: neetaskita (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2012 03:40 PM · On: Chapter 23: Trying To Be Champions
Great chapter for this time of year. Our school year just ended and all the grade school classes had different fun outdoor activities. What a way to end the year. Looking forward to your next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing!!! Welcome to summer, I hope you have a fun and relaxing break. Yeah I remember having fun on field day. I had a voice activated squirt gun because I could not manipulate a traditional water gun fast enough. My water gun was activated by the sound of me screaming. It would also squirt when other people screamed as well so I got hit by water from my own gun. By the end of many field days I was horse,wet and happily tired. :-) Please keep reading and reviewing, thanks!!!
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2012 04:28 AM · On: Chapter 23: Trying To Be Champions
Nice way to try and introduce Gus to the idea of HIV. Sounds like he's made a strong beginning with his kindergarten skills and is ready for a summer of fun. I know it won't be all playtime for Gus, he can't stop all his work just because the weather is getting nice. Learning will be a four season job for him. Great Chapter, I can't wait to see what happens next.
Lori
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and reviewing!!! You are absolutely right that Gus will to have keep working so his reading and math skills don't backslide. ( if that make sense) I know people don't like hearing that but it is true. I'm thinking of ways that he can keep learning without feeling like he is in school all the time. I hope you like what I come up with. I have wonderful inspiration in my AMAZING parents who always made learning fun and a priority, I owe them SO much. I am VARY, VARY LUCKY!!! Please keep reading and reviewing thank you, take care!!!!!
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2012 03:31 AM · On: Chapter 23: Trying To Be Champions
As always, this is a very cute chapter. I love the simple, day-to-day moments between Gus, his 'daddy' and his 'papa.' And I am very impressed by how you have Gus, as well as the adults, explain events that happen. The photos, too, really help to make the story come alive, and I personally know how much additional time it takes to do that, so I thank you for the extra effort you've given it.:)
I believe I remember a sequel coming at some point? I'm curious as to how many more chapters you have planned for this one. Thanks again for the unique perspective you have given this story. *Hugs* ~Kimberly
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to read and review!!! The photos are all thanks to my AMAZING beta amythesw, for which she does deserve MAJOR thanks!!! Yes, I am planning on doing a few Gus stories. The problem is that I have not found a good way to make time pass faster in the story. I think at least for me just writing something like *4 months later* sucks the detail and believability out of the story. I think you have used time jumps in your stories (this is NOT a criticism) your writing is so good but that technique does not work for me. So the short answer is that I don't know how many chapters are left in this story. I'm feeling relieved about finally writing out of kindergarten.
Any suggestions on how to move time forward would be BEYOND appreciated!!!
Thank you for the hug and encouragement. Please keep reading and reviewing, thanks!!!!* HUGS AND :-) BACK*
Reviewer: Taire (Anonymous) · Date: May 12, 2012 06:58 AM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
I so enjoyed this chapter. Gus and Oreo playing fetch was so freaking cute. I love Oreo talk bubbles. The interaction between Gus and his dads was so precious. I love where this is going. Please keep up the great job. I can't wait for the next installment.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! I'm SO glad to hear that you like this story!!! Growing up I had a dog that loved fetch even more than Oreo does :-) The next chapter should be posted sometime this weekend. I hope you enjoy it as well.
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2012 10:55 AM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
Those were a nice couple of chapters. I am now back up to
date. I do enjoy reading situations from a kid’s point of view.
Sometimes it is so simple, and other times it gets very
complicated. That was a good explanation of Justin’s ‘flash
back’. I think Gus got it, or a much as he is currently capable
of understanding.
Nice ending with Brian petting the dog. We all knew that was
going to happen, as it was only a question of when.
Thanks again,
DavidR
Author's Response: Thank you for your review!!! I’m glad you think the flashback explanation worked. To be honest, I was waffling about how to do the Brian dog thing, so I was relieved that it fit in the last chapter.
Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2012 08:14 PM · On: Chapter 1: Rainbow Reading Time
Wonderful chapter I loved the interaction with Justin and Gus and how Gus cared for Justin after the meltdown. I must admit I did not see that coming I am always watching for Gus to beconfused or hurt. Great twist thanks Chris
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!!! The QAF family is one in which everyone has their ups and downs and everyone leans on each other, even the kids. Most of the time, like with this chapter, that group dependence is good and healthy, but sometimes it's not. For me following the family's ups and downs is one of the ways QAF is such a great drama. Please keep reading and reviewing,thanks!!!!!
Reviewer: Jane (Anonymous) · Date: May 08, 2012 05:46 AM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
What a wonderful chapter, all the others that I finally got caught up with were also great, but this was special.
Favorite parts I hope he doesn't splatter to the floor like a bug". So like a 5 year old. I really liked that Gus had a good memory about Lindsey. Her kissing his finger. The flashback scene caught me by surprise. Even as I read it I didn't see it coming. As always Brian was there to take care of his Justin.
Wonderful just wonderful
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!!! I'm really glad you liked the little details. I wasn't planning on the flashback, it just kind of happened. As I was writing, I thought of how there is nothing like a parents comfort. Those mommy and daddy hugs and kisses are really magic. Please keep reading and reviewing, thanks!!!!!
Reviewer: vlsope2@yahoo.com (Anonymous) · Date: May 07, 2012 06:49 AM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
I really loved this chapter and the cute pictures from all previous chapters, that dog is so sweet and cute his likeness and the reading the chapter you can invision oreo doing all the things you write about, you just know Brian is all bark and no bite .
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!!! I grew up with dogs and I'm a dog person. The adorable pictures are thanks to my wonderful beta, Amythesw. I do think that
Brian does have bite but he works hard to make sure that Gus will not see it and he will NOT feel it. Also in a way Oreo earned that ear scratching. Please keep reading and reviewing, thanks!!!!!
Reviewer: Rickeshay (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2012 05:07 AM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
Another enjoyable chapter. Very good catch with the swinging of the bat getting to Justin.(g)
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!!! Yeah, bats, birthdays, and
Justin just do not mix, poor guy. Please keep reading and reviewing, thank you!!!!!
Reviewer: Marny (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2012 12:04 AM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
Thanks for this beautiful chapter. Love Brian, Justin & Gus together.
* hugs *
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!!! I really appreciate your support!!!!!!! The guys really do make a great little family. :-) Please keep reading and reviewing, thank you!!!!!
*BIG hug back*
Reviewer: Cheburashka2 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2012 09:04 PM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
I just love this story. Gus is just adorable and his character is incredibly well written.
I love the way you describe Brian and Justin through Gus's eyes - very loving, sweet, realistic and totally in-character.
Cheers,
Vin
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing!!!!! I'm SO, SO glad that you like this story!!! I appreciate you saying that my Brian and Justin are in-character. I'm still nervous when I try to write Justin in particular. Please continue to read and tell me what you think, thanks!!!!!
Reviewer: neetaskita (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2012 08:50 PM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
Once more another sweet chapter. Thank you.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review!!!!! I appreciate you letting me know that you enjoyed the chapter. Please keep reading and reviewing!!!!!
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2012 06:13 PM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
Hi, my friend - very sweet chapter.:) Love the interplay between Gus and his two fathers and I laughed at Brian's instruction to Justin to clean up the shower or 'no more fun.'
I really like the way that you present everyday life through Gus's eyes; very unique. Children always see events in such a pure light, so much more than adults do. Thank you for sharing this creative story with us.:) *Hugs* ~Kim
Author's Response: Hi Kim,
Thank you for taking the time to review my story and for sharing your own creative stories with us. I am amazed by the quantity and quality of your writing!!!!
The fan part of the chapter popped into my head when I was writing the chapter before this, the image that it created in my mind made me laugh out loud. I'm glad you liked that part too. :-) Please keep reading and reviewing when you are not working on your great fics.
Reviewer: Dioramanya (Anonymous) · Date: May 06, 2012 04:22 PM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
Oreo is the best! Glad that the dog was able to help and calm Justin.
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2012 02:12 PM · On: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises
You amaze me with the way you can describe events thru a child's eye. If your spelling and punctuation wasn't so good I would be willing to bet you were only 5 years old! The rainy day was wonderful, the sound of the puddles really seems exactly what Gus would experience. Another thing that made me smile was the monkey bars, not many people call them that anymore, but when I was growing up that what I knew it as. Climbing Station just doesn't have the same fun sound. Many school don't even have them, too dangerous. Great chapter, as always.
Lori
Author's Response:
Sorry I'm replying to your review so late. I have been thinking about what you wrote a lot. Your tremendous compliments have kept me smiling all week!! :-) I know some kids have gotten hurt on the jungle bars, but for me they were always the best part of the climbing playground thing at my elementary school. As a little kid I had a lot of upper body strength. My PE teacher would hold me up and I could move on the bars with my arms. The kids today are missing out. Please keep reading and reviewing. I love hearing from you!!!
Reviewer: Taire (Anonymous) · Date: May 06, 2012 05:45 AM · On: Chapter 20 - Doggy Time
I just love Gus and Oreo. Of course Oreo would love Brian. So funny.
Reviewer: Taire (Anonymous) · Date: May 05, 2012 07:08 AM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
I love , love, love this chapter. I can see how Gus can relate to Oreo. I love that man. I google Boglen Terrier and they are so cute. Makes me want one. I can't wait to read about the exploits of Gus and Oreo.
Reviewer: Taire (Anonymous) · Date: May 04, 2012 06:47 AM · On: Chapter 17: Dealing with Emotions
Poor little guy. I feel so sad for Gus. As usual, Linsday is only thinking about herself.
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2012 12:04 PM · On: Chapter 20 - Doggy Time
Another perfect chapter. I must say you did everything right when Oreo joined the family. Not a single thing was missed when a dog is really becoming a member of the family. You covered all the bases. I loved the visit to the vet, I think you did a great job of high lighting things from Gus's point of view, especially the taking of the temperature. Always fascinating for kids to watch.
The pics of Oreo are adorable, but I will stick up for Gus, I say he doesn't drool!! (I am grossed out beyond words by baby drool) Great update.
Lori
Reviewer: shf1210 (Anonymous) · Date: April 30, 2012 10:45 AM · On: Chapter 20 - Doggy Time
Further proof all little boys need a dog ok all boys not just little ones.
Reviewer: Rickeshay (Anonymous) · Date: April 30, 2012 05:03 AM · On: Chapter 20 - Doggy Time
Another enjoyable chapter.
You asked so I will answer.
(g) = grin
(bg) = big grin
(vbg) = very big grin
Can you guess what (eg) stands for?(vbg)
Rick
Author's Response:
Thanks for explaining. The fact that you read and review my story makes me have a
VVBG=
very very big grin
thanks
Reviewer: ls1966 (Anonymous) · Date: April 24, 2012 05:12 PM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
Great chapter ;-) Don't let us wait to long!
Reviewer: neetaskita (Signed) · Date: April 24, 2012 07:24 AM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
Good chapter!
Reviewer: vlsope2@yahoo.com (Anonymous) · Date: April 23, 2012 04:34 AM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
I love this story and can't wait for oreo to be loved by Brian, he's a softie when it comes to Gus and Justin, and any defenseless little animal.
Reviewer: camjake (Anonymous) · Date: April 22, 2012 10:41 PM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
Such a sweet chapter I'm glad Gus gets to have Oreo.
Reviewer: camjake (Anonymous) · Date: April 22, 2012 10:22 PM · On: Chapter 18: Echoes
Poor Gus as soon as he thinks things are going great here comes something else. Leave the kid alone some people are just loners.
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: April 22, 2012 07:02 PM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
Hi, MEG.....I got it right this time! Where I got the "Jane" part is beyond me in my previous comment, so just wanted to say oops! and sorry! That's what happens when I have too much swimming around in my rather small brain - LOL! Sorry about that, Sweetie. I think Tricky's starting to get to me, too.:) Looking forward to the rest of your story. *Hugs* ~Kim
Reviewer: camjake (Anonymous) · Date: April 22, 2012 01:14 PM · On: Chapter 13: The Power of Silence and Play
I just love this story. Gus has a great imagination.
Reviewer: camjake (Anonymous) · Date: April 22, 2012 12:14 PM · On: Chapter 11: We are Our Parents Children
Poor little Gus. i could slap Lindsay right now. I'm so glad he has his dad and papa.
Author's Response:
Yes, that was a vary hard chapter to write, but Gus does have his dads to lean on. Thank you for reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: camjake (Anonymous) · Date: April 22, 2012 10:27 AM · On: Chapter 8: The Tortoise and the Hare
really like this chapter. I enjoy that this story is from Gus' point of view.
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review! !I’m really happy that you like my Gus. Please keep reading and letting me know your thoughts.
Reviewer: camjake (Anonymous) · Date: April 22, 2012 09:21 AM · On: Chapter 7: The Solo Mission
I am really enjoying this story. Brian didn't seem out of character at all to me.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! I am really glad you like the story. I try really hard to write Brian with a strong paternal side to him, I'm happy to hear that it is working. Please keep reading and reviewing!! Thanks again for taking the time to let me know what you think.
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: April 22, 2012 07:47 AM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
Hi, Jane - I'm sorry to be so remiss in not reviewing lately; between readying my students for graduation and preparing to go to the con in June and writing my own updates I have far too little leisure time. But I made a point of getting myself caught up tonight on your unique story.:)
I especially enjoyed this chapter and how both Gus and Justin were able to twist a certain father's arm to allow a pet in the house. Your comment about enjoying describing Brian interactions with the dog reminds me of my own stories with Brian and Tricky that I've been writing. Brian's own natural abhorrence for anything outside the norm when it comes to his much-loved furnishings, as well as his skittishness over being around animals anyway, does make for some definite comedic fodder.:)
This was a very sweet chapter and I envy the creative, original way you get inside Gus's head to write about events from his perspective. It definitely makes this telling of the tale very unique and fresh. I will try and review a little more religiously going forward (if I can - I make no promises, though - ha!)
Perhaps Oreo and Tricky can get together in the future for a 'play date!' LOL! *Hugs* ~Kimberly
Author's Response: Hi,
Thank you for your nice long review. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed your stories for a while. I have been reveling in the "Criminal Minds" fandom. I am flattered that you have invested your time in reading up on my story, especially given your busy schedule. I do like your Tricky stories. I admire the way you get into the doggy blond's head. It is a clever way to explore Gus' relationship with Tricky. While there might be some similarities between Tricky and Oreo, I'm going to try not to be a copycat. The mental picture of Tricky and Oreo on a play date makes me smile. :) *BIG HUGS BACK* Thank you for your support, I hope you feel it being mutually sent your way!!
Take care and happy writing,
Meg
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: April 22, 2012 07:20 AM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
I was almost crying with Gus as his dream was evaporating of owning Oreo. I sense hard times ahead though because unless Oreo is a outside dog only dog hair on white furniture is going to happen lol
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! You aren't the only reviewer to tell me that this chapter almost got them teary, which was not my intention, but I'm flattered that you are so invested in the story. *rubs hands together evilly* I'm looking forward to writing about Oreo settling in. Please keep reading and reviewing!!
Reviewer: Ceci (Anonymous) · Date: April 22, 2012 06:47 AM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
I love your story! It just pulls you in - and I'm smiling and trying not to tear up! I can't wait for what happens next. Thanks!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! I'm glad you liked the chapter. I'm really lucky to have such great and supportive readers like you!!! Please keep reading and reviewing!!
Reviewer: debv3 (Signed) · Date: April 22, 2012 06:20 AM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
Great update! I think the reading buddy is great idea...it's such a good way to make Gus feel good about reading out loud and practicing his reading. Love Oreo I know he'll win Brian over. Look forward to more.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! Oreo has been in my head for a while and I really like him. I think it's going to be fun writing the interactions between Brian and Oreo.. hehehe Please keep reading and reviewing!!
Reviewer: Rickeshay (Anonymous) · Date: April 22, 2012 05:48 AM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
Another great chapter. Brian doesn't stand a chance dealing with Justin and Gus and now he has to deal with Oreo as well.(vbg)
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! It is true that Brian yields to Justin and Gus but I think Oreo will be a good addition to the family. I feel clueless but the truth is that I don't know what VBG stands for. Please keep reading and reviewing!!
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: April 22, 2012 05:24 AM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
If I wasn't already in love with this story this chapter would have done it for sure. I am still crying over the line about Vic caring for Oreo in heaven...just too sad for words. I'm glad Gus will have a best friend to give him unconditional love and companionship. Trey seems like a fun school pal and I'm sure they can both learn from each other. Thank you so much for giving Gus a dog, I think it's the best thing in life!
Lori
Author's Response: I'm SO glad you liked the chapter, it makes me really happy to know that XD I'm surprised readers seem to like Trey he was originally suppose to be a throgh away character but now I think I will work him into the story.
It's great to hear from you,take care!!
Reviewer: lostanddepressed (Signed) · Date: April 22, 2012 04:55 AM · On: Chapter 19: With New Friends Comes Great Responsibility
Good chapter. I really liked how Gus tried to think like Brian but isn't he a bit too young to be able to think like that? On the other hand some kids are just more advanced than others. Trey is a nice sddition. Hope he has a bigger role in Gus's life since he needs a friend. Oh and if you can get rid of Lindsey, that would be great. :)
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! I understand what you're saying about the thought process being a bit advanced, but I don't think Gus is too young to try to copy his dad. He maybe too young to be thinking that directly, I don't know since I'm nowhere near the age of 5. But this is how I have had the chapter playing out in my head for a while, so if the dog movie is to advanced please chock it up to poetic license.
Please keep reading and reviewing, thank you!!!
Reviewer: lostanddepressed (Signed) · Date: April 16, 2012 03:05 AM · On: Chapter 18: Echoes
I really like it. Gus is facing the sme problems we had as kids, how to talk to grownips. I try to remember what I felt like as a kid when I talk to my babycousins and niece. Great job at reminding us how we were as kids.
Reviewer: Anno53 (Signed) · Date: April 16, 2012 12:57 AM · On: Chapter 18: Echoes
I can't believe I missed so many updates of my favorite story! The bathtub scene with Gus and Brian was so sweet. I little boy has a lot of troubles, even though sometimes grown ups don't see it that way in their own big world. It seems to be a trifle to them. But Brian and Justin seem to be in tune with Gus and know just how to handle things.
It would not have hurt the teacher to introduce Gus to someone at lunch time to get him started. He shouldn't have to carry that burden also ....
Wonderful set of updates! :)
Reviewer: Cheryl (Anonymous) · Date: April 15, 2012 10:31 PM · On: Chapter 18: Echoes
Thanks for another great chapter. Poor little Gus. I really feel for him. I know that teachers and parents want to include the kids in their meetings, but sometimes I feel that puts too much pressure on the child. I know that's what happened when my daughter was little. Kids take too much to heart and don't understand everything that is said to them and about them. I sure do hope that Brian and Justin will be able to help Gus understand what is going on. I especially liked when Auntie Em was able to relate to Gus about how he felt about Uncle Teddy's past. I look forward to reading more very soon. Keep up the good work.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2012 07:11 PM · On: Chapter 18: Echoes
wonderful chapter great perspective from the child's view
Reviewer: Jane (Anonymous) · Date: April 02, 2012 10:01 AM · On: Chapter 17: Dealing with Emotions
Sorry for the long delay in commenting but real life has been getting the better of me.
The last two chapters were great .and I'm very curious as to what the surprise is. I hope it isn't about Mel or Lindsey. Gus needs his fathers only.
In fact, he needs his fathersto be more attentive to hisfearsand his need.
Keep writing...
..
Author's Response:
I completely understand how real life can get in the way of FanFiction hehe. That is one of my main problems causing my unfortunate and frequent delays in updating this story… Sorry. I've just finished the draft for the next chapter,and I'm afraid I have to delay the surprise a little longer. I think it will still be worth the wait, at least that's what I'm aiming for. Still, I think you will like the next chapter. It is mostly dealing with the complicated family dynamic. I will be very interested in your thoughts if you have time to let me know after it's posted, although I don't want you to feel any pressure. I really appreciate how you have continued to read and review this story. Thank you so much for letting me know what you think!!
Reviewer: lostanddepressed (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2012 03:42 AM · On: Chapter 17: Dealing with Emotions
I love it. Please continue. I can't wait
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I'm sorry for the long delay real life and trouble with the next chapter. I hope you do like it when it's posted. I'm afraid I have to change the storyline a bit so the prize will be delayed but I think I can safely say that it will be worth the very long wait. Please keep reading and reviewing. I hope the next chapter doesn't disappoint.
Reviewer: shf1210 (Anonymous) · Date: March 28, 2012 11:21 PM · On: Chapter 17: Dealing with Emotions
I hope part of your plan for this next chapter is to have Gus actually speak up and not bottle everything he is feeling at the end in. I would love to be a fly on the wall when Gus tells Lindsay how much of a failure she was as a mother, and how well his father's are doing.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review.I am afraid that part of the reason the next chapter hasn't been posted yet is because I keep changing how it's going to work.The surprise deserves it's own chapter so I will not be in the next one.. sorry. All the same, I hope you enjoy the next chapter. I'm sorry it's taking so long. Please keep reading and reviewing, thanks!!
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2012 03:56 PM · On: Chapter 17: Dealing with Emotions
Another great chapter Brian and Justin have a strange way of parenting and passing on life skills to Gus, but he remembers and it works. Hard lesson for Gus to hear about the prom and hate but he manages to use it when he meets his mum again and the anxiety begins again.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. It's weird, I'm not a parent but I'm trying to balance writing parenting situations with Brian and Justin's personalities. I'm really glad you think it works. I'm sorry the next chapters taking so long.please keep reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2012 09:52 AM · On: Chapter 17: Dealing with Emotions
That was another very good chapter. That contrast of the beginning to the ending was very strong.
Brian’s explanation of the buffet was real funny. Yep, there sure are difference between a Kinney body and a Justin body. I wonder if Gus asked if he too ate as much as a Justin, would he too have a bubby butt, what Brian would say.
Lindsey? It just don’t see much improvement. Maybe the letter is just a step in the right direction, though her letter to Gus was lacking much, and her appearance was not what a son should see. He loves his mother and really needed a lot more than she gave him. A lot more! Poor Gus, I think he analyzed her actions correctly.
Thanks for the chapter is was good to read. Also, I am not going anywhere, so if it takes longer than usual, then that is ok with me. As we say – stuff happens. I will be here to read the next chapter whenever it appears.
DavidR
Author's Response:
Thank you for your thoughtful and thorough review. I'm sorry the next chapters takings so long.please keep reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: debv3 (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2012 04:38 AM · On: Chapter 1: Rainbow Reading Time
Another great chapter. I love that Gus has such a good understanding of how Lindsey behaved was more hurtful than just the time she hit him. I hope he gets the chance to tell her how he feels about her letter. It really seems like she is going through the motions rather than working her steps and using them to truly mend her relationships.
Reviewer: neetaskita (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2012 04:07 AM · On: Chapter 17: Dealing with Emotions
Another good chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Reviewer: Rickeshay (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2012 12:25 AM · On: Chapter 17: Dealing with Emotions
Another great chapter. I really like your Gus. I have a feeling that Lindsay is going to say the wrong thing and Justin will show the world that he's Gus' Papa.(vbg) The breakfast scene with Gus, Brian, and Justin reminded me of one of my fics where the amount of food one should eat depends on whether you are a Kinney or a Taylor.(g) Keep up the good work. Rick
Reviewer: Cheryl (Anonymous) · Date: March 27, 2012 11:54 PM · On: Chapter 17: Dealing with Emotions
Gus is getting the positive reinforcement from his Daddy and Papa and others in their little circle, but is so conflicted by his mom. It was cute how Gus ran out of the diner so he wouldn't explode on everyone inside. So many times kids take things so literally and try to make things better for the adults - they feel responsible for outcomes they have no concept of. Hopefully Brian and Justin will see Gus' discomfort around his mother and help him understand things better. Maybe Gus will show his daddy and papa his letter and ask them the questions he has rolling around his in brain and they can answer him so that he can, eventually, have a good relationship with Lindsay. I hope your muse can sort these things out for a very confused Gus.
Reviewer: Jamie (Anonymous) · Date: March 27, 2012 11:44 PM · On: Chapter 17: Dealing with Emotions
PLEAAAAAASE don't stop now!!! I have never done this before, but I have to say how much I truely love this story. Thanks, and please do not let it end any time soon.
Thanks,
Jamie
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: March 15, 2012 10:32 AM · On: Chapter 16: Quiet Happiness
Thanks for the chapter. It is really fun to see things through Gus’s eyes. You do a beautiful job describing things from a child’s point of view. To be that consistently must be difficult.
Gus is turning out to be a really terrific kid, and he seems happier with each passing chapter. Maybe when it gets a little warmer, the next time they come here to NYC they can take Gus in a horse drawn carriage though Central Park. They better hurry as they are trying to do away with that, as some feel that it is cruelty to the horse. Then again, many don’t feel that way. Either way, for now, it is still a very popular tourist thing to do.
Again, thanks for the story.
DavidR
PS: Forget the horse drawn carriage; I think Gus would love a Broadway show. So would Justin and Brian.
Reviewer: vlsope2 (Anonymous) · Date: March 14, 2012 01:43 PM · On: Chapter 16: Quiet Happiness
I'm really enjoying your story, I love any story that plays up Gus and his relationships with his daddy and papa. your story is not only entertaining but the details of the the places they visit you describe them in such detail.
Reviewer: Anno53 (Signed) · Date: March 14, 2012 06:31 AM · On: Chapter 16: Quiet Happiness
I have to say that I have stood in that FAO Schwarz line with my niece and nephew and it is definitely no fun in the cold. Then, when you get inside, it's a mass of people who feel like that they are going to crush you ... especially on the escalator.
I think it's cute that Gus got to go to the library. He seemed very impressed.
Wonderful update ... I've been missing Gus and his story :)
Reviewer: kim136@dodo.com.au (Anonymous) · Date: March 13, 2012 07:07 AM · On: Chapter 1: Rainbow Reading Time
i lost internet last night i could not post it was beautiful the suit 4 gus and the way ur wite the love in it u feel it i lloved it kim
Author's Response:
hank you for your review!!! I lost my internet this week too, it drove me crazy!! I'm glad yours is back too. I really, really appreciate you coming back and leaving me your thoughts!!!!!
Reviewer: Rickeshay (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2012 06:56 AM · On: Chapter 16: Quiet Happiness
I'm always partial to Gus fics(vbg) but yours is becoming one of the best. Your Gus is the child he is instead of an adult in a child's body that my Gus tended to be. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
Thank you for leaving your review and for writing Gus fics. You tackled what I think is the hardest part of childhood to write. I'm nervous about writing about Gus' middle school years. I really liked the names you gave Gus' teachers. I tend to go with boring, generic names. I am SO flattered that a fellow Gus fan likes my story. Please keep reading and reviewing, thanks!!!!
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2012 03:33 PM · On: Chapter 16: Quiet Happiness
Gus is making such good progress and he is starting to feel less stress thanks to Brian and Justin. Many of us can bring a teacher to mind who had a impact on our learning and Gus has one too. Brian is becoming so intuitive to his boys he knows when they need his intervention. Great chapter thanks hugs Chris
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!!! *hugs back :)*thanks also for your encouragement. I do enjoy writing these softer side of Brian. I agree that teachers can have a huge impact on people. If I do what I will intend to Gus as many since teachers just like I am lucky have in my life. please keep reading and reviewing, thanks!!!
Reviewer: Cheryl (Anonymous) · Date: March 12, 2012 02:28 PM · On: Chapter 16: Quiet Happiness
Thanks for another delightful chapter. I love how Gus is describing his encounters in New York. I felt the same way the first time I went there. I look forward to reading more soon.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! I'm glad you liked my Gus in New York. I think everyone who is lucky enough to visit New York remember the first time there. I hope the next chapter will not be disappointed. Thank you for continuing to read and review, I really appreciate it!!!
Reviewer: Jane (Anonymous) · Date: February 29, 2012 04:25 AM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
Some thoughts:
I think Gus's daddies bought the Skype for him. Mel doesn't care enough to keep them connected.
Our boy worked so hard to get 10/10 and gave the test page to hisPapa.
Brian's frame with the special wordsin his very best handwriting.
But I know the kindness must pass through you before it get's to Gus. You are special and we are lucky..
Author's Response:
Thank you for your incredibly kind review!! A lot of the good experiences and put into the story come from my wonderful luck of having fantastic family and friends to encourage my life. This story would not be in existence without the incredible support amazing readers like you. Thank you so much!!!!!!
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Reviewer: Anno53 (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 01:24 AM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
Awww! This all takes me back to my childhood when I used to make presents for Christmas. The serious thought that Gus gave for each present was so precious.
Using Skype is the perfect idea for Gus to stay in touch with his family. I feel sorry for Gus (and any kid for that matter) who has to divide his or her time between parents ... like when they are divorced.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! I used my favorite memories of holiday art and crafts time as an inspiration for the chapter. I'm really glad you liked it. I hope you also enjoy the next chapter.
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: February 25, 2012 11:47 PM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
Simply put, this is one enjoyable story to read.
But – like another reviewer, I am just a little concerned just
how much focus and pressure Gus puts on himself, such as to
get Justin the right Christmas present, and to work that hard
to get a gift for everyone. In one way it says really nice things
about Gus, and what a good kid he is. Then again, he is only a
little boy.
Thanks for the chapter. If other chapters take longer to
produce – so what? I am not going anywhere, and would be
happy with another chapter – whenever…..
DavidR
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review and your willingness stood with the story!! Some red flags about the stress Gus is feeling is justified. On the other hand, some of what Gus was feeling was just the joy of trying to find the best Christmas present. I hope you enjoy the next chapter.
Reviewer: Taire (Anonymous) · Date: February 25, 2012 04:50 AM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
I loved that last couple of chapters. They were wonderful especially Gus trying to make the perfect gift for everyone. So happy Gus finally got 10/10 on his spelling test. What a cute kid. Michael, what a genius. LOL Can't wait for the next chapters.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! Very glad someone does not mean found the Michael Rubiks cube moment funny. That scene poped into my head when I was on public transit and I'm sure people are screaming and I laughed out loud. :-) I hope you enjoy the next chapter.
Reviewer: neetaskita (Signed) · Date: February 25, 2012 02:54 AM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
Again another good chapter. This story is worth waiting for, but looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Thank you for taking the time to review. I'm glad you liked the chapter. The next chapter may not be posted for a while but I am working on it and I think it will be worth the wait too. Please keep reading and reviewing!! :)
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2012 08:06 PM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
Wow my heart was in my mouth so much during this chapter, poor Gus seemed to spend so much time ensuring everyone was ok and wanting to get gifts for everyone. The poor child is going to have a stomach ulcer soon unless he calms down :(. I adore Justin and Brian's gentle caring parenting :) thanks Chris
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! I'm so glad that you are so into this story that it can evoke the heart in mouth reaction. I agree that in general Gus is pretty stressed and he definitely was about getting Justin's present, but I also think that trying to think of gifts that will make the people that you love happy can be part of the fun of the holidays. Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: ls1966 (Anonymous) · Date: February 24, 2012 07:26 PM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
Love this story, great chapter ;-)
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! I'm really glad that you are enjoying this story and this latest chapter!!! Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: debv3 (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2012 03:22 PM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
Yay!! Great chapter. Great job Gus. Glad Mel is including Gus in her new family.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!! I'm really glad that I was able to show the nicer side of Mel. I do think she has some good qualities but I have been so busy wanting to knock the moms' heads together that the good sides of either of them has not been shown in this story until now. Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2012 08:54 AM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
Love, love, love it. I'm so glad that Gus got 10 out of 10 on his spelling test in order to get the crayons for Justin. All the other gifts he made were purrr-fect. Best of all he gets to skype with his Mama, Ms. Roberts, and JR.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I'm SO glad that you enjoyed the chapter!! Please keep reading and reviewing. :)
Reviewer: kim136@dodo.com.au (Anonymous) · Date: February 24, 2012 12:14 AM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
u out did ur self again love it update soon kim
Author's Response:
Thank you for your kind words and for reviewing again!!!
Reviewer: kim136@dodo.com.au (Anonymous) · Date: February 23, 2012 02:49 PM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
there is no story cloud u please fix it kim
Author's Response:
Thank you for letting me know. Obviously computers are not being my friends right now, grrr!!! Anyway, it's fixed now. I hope you like the chapter. :)
Reviewer: Ptitprof (Signed) · Date: February 23, 2012 11:50 AM · On: Chapter 15: Christmas Presents
WHERE is the chapter??
Author's Response:
Thank you for letting me know. I honestly thought it was all posted last night before I went to bed. Anyway,the chapter is posted now. I hop you find it worth the wait. :)
Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2012 02:32 AM · On: Chapter 14: Is Family Bonding in the Stars?
5 Stars for that super banner!
Author's Response:
I'm glad that you don't mind that I changed the image. Thanks for letting me know.
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: February 15, 2012 10:50 AM · On: Chapter 14: Is Family Bonding in the Stars?
Nice chapter. As I though, no matter what happened in the
past, Gus misses his mother. I wonder what will happen when
Lindsey is released from Rehab. Hopefully she will want to see her son.
I don’t quite get Melanie, and her lousy attitude. She has a
new girlfriend, she has JR. Life seems to be looking up for her.
Plus we have a confident Gus, who knows he can get just
about whatever he wants. He said it in a “matter of fact” way;
not showing off, really not anything. Melanie’s jealously of
Brian foolishly shows right through.
Anyway – thanks for the story.
DavidR
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. Issues surrounding Lindsay will be slow to resolve. Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: Anno53 (Signed) · Date: February 15, 2012 07:44 AM · On: Chapter 14: Is Family Bonding in the Stars?
Gus is trying so hard to say the right thing ... but he's in a grown up world and he doesn't know the rules yet.
I just love your story!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I think that all kids feel this kind of confusion but I think Gus feels it more strongly because of his family situation and the family tensions.. Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: February 14, 2012 07:43 PM · On: Chapter 14: Is Family Bonding in the Stars?
Oh poor Gus he seems to have one step forward and two steps backwards in confidence and it is usually because of stupid adults not realising the damge their words do.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I think that thoughtless words can hurt anyone at any age. That said, Gus is dealing with a lot but most of the family members are there to help him when he needs it. Please keep reading and reviewing!!
Reviewer: kim136@dodo.com.au (Anonymous) · Date: February 14, 2012 06:28 PM · On: Chapter 14: Is Family Bonding in the Stars?
mikey mel r normal they r suited to each ful of hate great story update soon kim
Author's Response: Hi,
Thank you for your review!! Mel and Michael do drive me crazy but I think they both have some good qualities my muses that stopped me from showing anything but their bad sides with the exception of Michael in the last chapter. Please keep reading and reviewing!!! We will see how these characters develop as inspiration dictates.
Reviewer: debv3 (Signed) · Date: February 14, 2012 06:24 PM · On: Chapter 14: Is Family Bonding in the Stars?
Does Mel ever pull her head out of her ass and think about how her words hurt Gus? She so needs to stop and think about how her anger toward Brian is really hurting everyone else especially Gus and JR. Look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Hi,
Thank you for your perceptive review!! I'm glad you picked up on the fact that Mel is lashing out at Gus because she's angry at Brian. I'm not sure this came across but she was so mean at the end of the chapter because of the stress of seeing her new girlfriend snubbed and by the fact that Brian's money was being unintentionally rubbed in her face.
Please keep reading and reviewing!!
Reviewer: Jane (Anonymous) · Date: February 10, 2012 05:29 AM · On: Chapter 13: The Power of Silence and Play
Great chapter...Gus and Justin screaming - Brian laughing...So cleaver to get the guardor should I say ghost dog.
Looking forward to the next chapter
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond, I've been working on the next chapter. The bedroom seen was a lot of fun to write I was laughing so hard at the picture in my head that it was hard getting it on the page.
I'm glad you liked the stuffed ghost dog. I had one when I was little and I was afraid of what might come through my window. I hope you enjoy the next chapter, it should be posted soon.
Reviewer: LibertySun (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2012 04:53 AM · On: Chapter 13: The Power of Silence and Play
I have spent most of my day reading this Wonderful story. I must start out by saying that you have such a talent for the written word, especially when it comes to portraying this story through the eyes of a child. Gus' thoughts and perception of such heavy topics are very delicatley handled and believably so. I truly have gotten swept up in this fic. Gus sure has an imagination on him, which is endearing and fitting to his sweet little heart. He certainly has some heavy burdens on his small shoulders. Again, I really am enjoying this read. You are doing a great job with this and I thank you for sharing Gus' story with us. *hugs* ~ Mandi
Author's Response: Hi,
Thank you for your review!! I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond. I have been thinking about my response to your review for a while but I also got some ideas for the next chapter at the same time. I figured you'd appreciate a faster update rather than a prompt review response.
I have spent more days devoted to reading fics then I will admit to and I am extremely flattered that you would spend that kind of time on my story!!! I sincerely hope you keep reading and reviewing and liking this fic!!!
Thank you for your review. I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond.
Reviewer: neetaskita (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2012 02:16 AM · On: Chapter 13: The Power of Silence and Play
Thanks for the update. Am enjoying it.
Author's Response: Hi,
Thank you for the review!!!
I'm really glad you enjoyed this chapter it was a lot of fun to write. :-)
Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: Cheryl (Anonymous) · Date: February 07, 2012 12:11 AM · On: Chapter 13: The Power of Silence and Play
What a delightful chapter. You have such a nack of writing from Gus' POV. I'm glad you're continuing this story. As always, I look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review not only because I appreciate you taking the time to tell me what you think of the chapter but also because this is my official 100th review!!! *does very happy dance* It's encouragement from wonderful readers such as yourself that make the story such a joy to write. I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter!!! Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: wordshipper (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2012 10:36 PM · On: Chapter 13: The Power of Silence and Play
Seems like it was a lonely day for Gus while Brian and Justin were pursuing their own agendas.....
Author's Response: Hi,
Thank you for your review!! you bring up a point that I was first apprehensive about and then I became happy that it kind of emerged on its own. I am a diehard Brian and Justin fan but I think it would be a mistake to always think of them as perfect parents. No one is perfect at parenting. Full-time parenting has kind of been thrust upon Brian and Justin, remember in the story Lindsay only went into the hospital a few weeks ago. It would not be interesting or realistic to have Gus always having these meaningful baby-sitting moments with the gang and only heartwarming moments with the dads. Now, after saying that I do realize that this story has a lot of those moments, but boring everyday life does need to rear its ugly head occasionally. Remember Justin is still in the house so Gus has not been left alone or anything criminally negligent like that.There are times in childhood when kids have to be left to entertain themselves. Frankly, this is somewhat a wishful and revisionist version of some of my childhood memories. I was/am the person who when faced with boredom watches TV no matter what's on. I was also the kid who would scream, "You're not doing it right!!" I want Gus to be the proactive kid with a healthy imagination, even if it backfires on him and the dads sometimes. :-)
Thank you again for your honest review.
Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2012 05:48 PM · On: Chapter 13: The Power of Silence and Play
Every chapter has something special in it. This one has so much I want to comment on I don't even know where to begin. I guess I'll go with Growly, dogs are nearest and dearest to my heart so I think it's the right choice for Growly to make Gus feel safe, I think that if a real live tail wagging dog entered the family that would even be more perfect. A dog can be such a source of pure love.
Have you heard about Reading with Rover or other dog therapy programs using dogs as reading partners.
Now lets talk about Puff, have you seen the book done by Peter Yarrow and Lenny Lipton with Paintings by Eric Puybaret? The edition I have came with a 4 song CD , Puff sung by Peter and then 2 other songs sung by Peter and his daughter Bethany and then an instrumental version of Puff. It's amazing. I went to a meeting once where Peter Yarrow spoke and he talked about Puff, he assured us the song is not about "weed" but I do know that has been a popular myth. I am willing to believe that Puff is a dragon.
I don't know how you could have made this story any better, it had everything. Even a little exercise for Brian and Justin!
I am so glad I get a chance to read the fantastic things you write. I am so in love with this story and each chapter brings a new aspect for me to go WOW over.
Lori
Author's Response: Hi,
As always another of your thoughtful reviews has left me smiling and blushing like crazy, thank you!!! First let me talk about Puff before anything else. I grew up listening to a lot of folk music. As a kid I listened to a tape of the song by the group Peter, Paul, and Mary. I only heard about the book and weed interpretation recently. I don't buy into the weed thing but I do think given the circumstances that it is something Brian would bring up.
As for the dog thing, I am also a true dog lover and I have heard of those reading programs. That said, I think it would take a lot for Justin and Gus to convince Brian to cohabitate with a dog, that doesn't mean that I am taking it off the table as an idea for later chapters.
I'm really glad you enjoyed this chapter it was a lot of fun to write. :-)
Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: kim136@dodo.com.au (Anonymous) · Date: February 06, 2012 03:07 PM · On: Chapter 13: The Power of Silence and Play
growly i love it good chapter kim
Author's Response: Hi,
Thank you for your review!!!
When I was little I had a stuffed dog like Growly that guarded my window against ghosts for a long time.
Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: Jean (Anonymous) · Date: February 04, 2012 11:15 PM · On: Chapter 11: We are Our Parents Children
I'm on the edge of my seat.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!!! I'm sorry it took me so long to reply. I'm glad you find the story exciting. H
opefully I will be able to post the next chapter soon.
Please keep reading and reviewing!!!!!
Reviewer: Taire (Anonymous) · Date: February 02, 2012 08:37 AM · On: Chapter 12: Coping
Awesome chapter. I get so mad a Mel for her holier than though attitude. She always blames Brian without knowing the facts. Like it's his fault Lindsay is drinking. My heart goes out to little Gus. I love that this story is from Gus' point of view.
Author's Response:
Hi,
Thank you for your review!!! I'm sorry it took me so long to reply. I'm so glad your enjoying the story. I hear what your saying about Mel. I keep wanting to humanize Gus' moms but my muses keep having different ideas. Please keep reading and reviewing!!!!!
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: February 01, 2012 07:11 AM · On: Chapter 12: Coping
This story is so well written. Its filled with drama I like that. Im glad I waited until today to start reading it bcause there was lots to read. This is a very serious situation but your are handling elegantly. I cant wait for more.
Author's Response:
Hi,
Thank you for your review!!! I'm sorry it took me so long to reply. Welcome to the story!!! Thank you for telling me that you think I'm writing
elegantly. I get these scenes in my head and it's wonderful that others like them when I write them down. I have sent chapter 13 to my beta, so hopefully I will be able to post it soon.
Please keep reading and reviewing!!!!!
Reviewer: jane (Anonymous) · Date: February 01, 2012 05:21 AM · On: Chapter 12: Coping
Another incredible chapter !
I feel so bad for Gus. He doesn't see or know the difference in Deb slapping Michael and his monther slapping him. Someone needs to realize how upset his, how scared, how alone. His fathers need to remember he is only 5 yrs old.
Looking forward to many more chapters
Author's Response:
Hi,
Thank you for your review!!! I'm sorry it took me so long to reply. Your encouragement means a lot!!! I agree with you that Gus is dealing with a great deal. Readers should remember that the guys just found out about Lindsay's drinking problem so they are all scrambling to help Gus. They will not do everything right and Gus will have to work through some painful things but I think that is realistic. The important thing is that Gus is surrounded by love.
Please keep reading and reviewing!!!!!
Reviewer: Cheryl (Anonymous) · Date: January 31, 2012 10:12 PM · On: Chapter 12: Coping
What a great chapter! I loved that each time someone babysat Gus they shared their coping mechanisms. Hopefully Gus will take what the adults have shared and adapt these strategies for himself. I particularly liked how Ben helped Gus meditate. Also, each adult didn't use any condescening tone/words. You used a calm way of showing Gus that everyone has problems and how they deal with them. I love how you're writing from Gus' POV.
Keep up the exellent writing. I look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you for your very kind review!!! I'm glad you liked the meditation part of this chapter. I'm still mapping out later parts of the story but it's possible that meditation might be integral in the later parts of the story and/or the series. Please keep reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: January 31, 2012 11:16 AM · On: Chapter 12: Coping
This story certainly has taken a turn to a much darker tone. It
appears to be much more difficult to tell it from Gus’s point of
view.
Still, no one is really listening to Gus. Blake and Ted did a nice
job in trying to explain addiction, but even they really didn’t
listen to what Gus has to say.
Let’s just hope that things, whatever that is, gets better. Gus
still loves him Mother, and wants her back. From what I read, I
think he needs her too.
Thanks for the chapter.
DavidR
Author's Response: Thank you for your review, it actually pointed out something about this chapter that I didn't notice before, that Gus doesn't actually say much to the grown-ups. I conceptualized the interactions separately and then put them together to make a chapter. I tend to focus more on what he's thinking. Part of the reason I had Ted and Ben talk so much is because this chapter might be the basis for later parts in the series. Thank you for your thoughtful review. Please keep reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2012 05:18 PM · On: Chapter 12: Coping
You really are amazing at writing a story that really pulls you in and keeps you so right in the moment. I loved all the adults adding their own personal spin to help Gus understand what's going on and giving him some coping skills. Poor Gus, he is under so much stress at such a young age. You are doing such a great job with this. I love every word!
Lori
Author's Response: Hi,
Thank you for your kind words of encouragement. To be honest, I pictured each family interaction separately, I'm glad you think they work together to make a whole chapter. Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: shf1210 (Anonymous) · Date: January 30, 2012 02:02 PM · On: Chapter 12: Coping
My sister has dyslexia and I say has because unlike what Tom Cruise will tell you (that Scientology can cure it) it never goes away. Every child (at least those with parents that pay attention) are taught ways to overcome it. This will take years. The one thing I can tell you is my sister loves to read, she can't do math and she can't spell but computers are amazing things.... The reason I am telling you this is there is hope for Gus, at the least, hope that reading will become a more pleasureable experience. I honestly don't care if there is hope for Lindsay I don't like her at all in this story.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review!! I completely agree with you about technology. In fact, I used adaptive technology to read your review and I'm using more adaptive technology to write this reply. I'm not sure Gus' disability is severe enough to warrant using adaptive technology just yet but I'm definitely not taking it off the table for later in the series.
Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: Anno53 (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2012 08:53 AM · On: Chapter 12: Coping
Ted explained addiction very well to Gus. I don't know if they would allow this in the detox program ... but maybe it would help if Gus made her a little card.
I would think that would help Lindsey immensely knowing that Gus hasn't pulled away from her.
Great update!
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review. I need to do a bit more research about detox and the 12 step program before I write/post the next chapter. But regardless of whether Gus can send her anything I'm sure Ted and Blake will tell Lindsay about babysitting Gus as a way to encourage her.
Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
Reviewer: Anno53 (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2012 08:33 AM · On: Chapter 11: We are Our Parents Children
This was such a powerful chapter; I can see why it would be draining to write. And I think the kicker of the whole thing is that there are real children out there that go through this all of the time. My friend's niece and husband are foster parents who have to toddlers now. They were found eating garbage out of the sink while their drugged out mother was out somewhere.
I think the best part of this story is that you give a voice to all children in these chapters. I realize that you're writing a fanfic ... but it is also more than that. You are using these characters to get an important message across.
Great writing!
Reviewer: kim136@dodo.com.au (Anonymous) · Date: January 30, 2012 08:10 AM · On: Chapter 12: Coping
poor kid i like how u wrotr i u feel sad 4 gus kim
Author's Response: Hi,
Thank you for your review. I hope you see a happier Gus soon, we'll see what the muses do and until then Gus has his family to help him out even though sometimes they miss the mark. Please keep reading and reviewing!!!
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