Reviewer: keykoles77 (Signed) · Date: November 14, 2019 05:20 AM · On: Finally Home
I love this story! I'm so glad Ian got dumped!! Haha
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: October 20, 2019 08:53 PM · On: Finally Home
Love it
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: October 20, 2019 08:39 PM · On: Cracking
grow some balls Justin
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: October 20, 2019 07:55 PM · On: Sleeping with the Enemy
drop Ethan, never liked that greaseball
Reviewer: bellawu (Signed) · Date: January 27, 2018 01:13 PM · On: Finally Home
Sweet story :)
Reviewer: chandrika (Anonymous) · Date: February 23, 2015 11:19 PM · On: Bad Timing
thank you for sharing this story
Reviewer: Saskya (Signed) · Date: December 07, 2014 08:35 PM · On: Finally Home
beautiful story :)
Reviewer: pat (Anonymous) · Date: November 30, 2012 12:15 AM · On: Finally Home
I did not leave a comment after each chapter Had to read all I liked the story
Reviewer: yvonnereid (Signed) · Date: October 09, 2012 01:55 AM · On: Finally Home
I never saw this movie,but I really loved this story alot. I have read it a few times now ~ Vonnie xx
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: October 07, 2012 03:59 AM · On: Finally Home
I finally found the time to read this chapter. I have been reading it all along, but always a few chapters behind. I really enjoyed the entire story. It did have some great moments. I liked the way it ended:
"I’ll be there."
A wonderful way to end the story.
Thanks again for the story. I had fun reading it.
DavidR
Reviewer: vlsope2@yahoo.com (Anonymous) · Date: October 04, 2012 12:58 PM · On: Finally Home
I loved your story, I had seen the movie this was taken from and enjoyed your version much more.
Reviewer: kim136 (Anonymous) · Date: October 03, 2012 10:01 PM · On: Finally Home
i liked it it was different love the open brian and family thanks kim
Reviewer: gail (Anonymous) · Date: October 03, 2012 06:33 PM · On: Parallel Universe
how did joan call brian all the time if they don't have a phone?
Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: October 03, 2012 05:12 PM · On: Close Enough
A Featured Story for October 2012. Thank you for publishing on Whispers.
Reviewer: Bryton4ever71 (Signed) · Date: June 17, 2012 02:13 PM · On: Finally Home
That was THE most adorable ending ever! I'm loathe to admit it but I need a guy willing to ..be there... for all those yummy moments as well...well anyway great ending, i bet it alone won yu the blue ribbon.
Reviewer: Bryton4ever71 (Signed) · Date: June 17, 2012 11:31 AM · On: Escape Attempt Number One
I've never read a story where the Kinney family is functional....sort of...I'm not sure how to feel....it s nice
Reviewer: Bryton4ever71 (Signed) · Date: June 17, 2012 11:25 AM · On: Parallel Universe
OK you're not going to believe this but I have had this story favorited since LAST Christmas when I found it. But due to my own WIP s and other stories and life, i never got around to reading it. Now I'm glad I did because I'm reading it on a boring rainy June Saturday and I needs me some Christmas in June! It's been cloudy and rainy almost all June in my area. Weird! Very depressing so I'm really enjoying your story. I've seen the movie too btw so, I'm sort of superimposing everything. You did everything very well so far.
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2011 02:34 PM · On: A False Proposal
Whoa that was different usually the Ethan is all about me this Ethan was not stuck on himself but he seems to wat to lead a glamorous lifr
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2011 02:25 PM · On: Unwelcome Guests
lol uffed and stuffed. He didnt even get lunch. hope he had on shoes. Damn Ethan.
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2011 02:16 PM · On: Sleeping with the Enemy
Pooe Etah hes coming with a calvary and Justin could give a flying fuck. Totally lovethis
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2011 02:02 PM · On: Confusion
Aww that Ethan. He is always geting the dirty end of the stick
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2011 01:56 PM · On: Escape Attempt Number Two
Oh man poor Brian
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2011 01:49 PM · On: Escape Attempt Number One
Oh i just loved this chapter. I could so see Brian smirk over the coffee cup.
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2011 01:40 PM · On: Parallel Universe
I love nice Claire. I always try to make Laire nice. I love how serious he is about telling thrm of hi kidnapping and they are just eatit up
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2011 01:27 PM · On: Kidnapped
lol so funny. He really didnt think it through and now hes out of gas. lol
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2011 01:19 PM · On: Bad Timing
Oh this is great. I think I started reading this before but now i hall finish. That Joan so demanding
Reviewer: Yvonne Reid (Anonymous) · Date: July 05, 2011 08:00 AM · On: Finally Home
I loved your story so much,I never saw the movie of this but I think your story is def better anyway :)
Thanks xxx
Author's Response: Thank you! xxx
Author's Response: Thank you! xxx
Reviewer: Yvonne Reid (Anonymous) · Date: July 05, 2011 04:35 AM · On: Sleeping with the Enemy
Yaaaay,I love this chapter alot!!!
Reviewer: Yvonne Reid (Anonymous) · Date: July 05, 2011 03:46 AM · On: Kidnapped
Loved it alot!!
Reviewer: DiddiAskew (Anonymous) · Date: March 09, 2011 10:54 AM · On: A False Proposal
As I tend to avoid incomplete stories, I am waiting hopefully for the repost of chapters 11 - 15.
Looking Forward,
A.
Author's Response: I know, I'm sorry about that! Reposting them now :)
Reviewer: StarLightBliss (Signed) · Date: March 05, 2011 11:58 PM · On: Unwelcome Guests
I just started reading this story today and it's really great :) Only problem is chapters 9 through 15 aren't showing up for me for some reason. It's torture :( haha. And it seems the story was just going to get to the really exiciting/climactic part.
Reviewer: TECH SUPPORT (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2011 05:11 AM · On: Finally Home
This chapter (and maybe more) needs to be reposted.
See announcement
Reviewer: BluvsJ (Anonymous) · Date: March 01, 2011 05:07 AM · On: Kidnapped
Poor Justin...he must think Brian is a homicidal maniac.... I can't believe he kidnapped him!!!!!...didn't Debbie see what was going on????
Reviewer: BluvsJ (Anonymous) · Date: March 01, 2011 04:58 AM · On: Bad Timing
if Brian knows what's good for him... he should tell his "mom" to take a hike and go to Debbie's for Christmas...lol...
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: February 28, 2011 01:43 PM · On: Finally Home
I owe you an apology for this part of my previous comment.
2.There is also a problem with the use of (') and (") this time when using contractions like I'll and can't etc. In almost all the contractions in the story there is I"ll instead of I'll and can"t instead of can't. These are all easy to fix.
It turns out the problem with the I'll and can't type words was because of my browser. I read the story using the print button since I was reading a completed story and didn't want to go from chapter to chapter. I just looked at a couple of the chapters separately and that problem isn't there. Only when I use the print button to bring up the entire story. Very strange.
So please accept my apology. I would edit my comment if I could.
There is also a problem with the use of (') and (") this time when using contractions like I'll and can't etc. In almost all the contractions in the story there is I"ll instead of I'll and can"t instead of can't. These are all easy to fix.
Reviewer: galenut (Anonymous) · Date: February 28, 2011 07:19 AM · On: Finally Home
great story,sorry to see it end.
Reviewer: Dilia (Signed) · Date: February 28, 2011 05:53 AM · On: Finally Home
Yaaaaahoooo ... we got rid from that so not good-looking with the most annoying voice ever so called a man 'LOL'... our boy finally together for ever ... I'm so happy about the way you ended it but on the other hand I'm sad too because I'll miss the enjoyment while reading it and the excitement while the daily checking for new update.
Good Luck. you are the best. *Hug and Kisses*
Reviewer: Dilia (Signed) · Date: February 28, 2011 04:49 AM · On: It Isn't Over
WOW... that was amazing ...you stirred up every kind of my emotion... going to the next chapter.
Reviewer: blklizard (Anonymous) · Date: February 28, 2011 04:36 AM · On: Finally Home
This was a delightfully cute and fun story to read. Really enjoyed reading it. Nice plot idea. In an AU story it is fine when Brian and Justin as well as other characters are OOC. So you shouldn't worry that they are OOC. It all fit the story well. I like reading stories where the writer puts B/J into a book plot or a movie plot but make it a B/J story. It makes for a good au plotted story. You handled this one very well.
However, as good as the story is there are a few things you might want to consider fixing to take this from a fun read to a well crafted story. Nothing to do with the plot or how the story is written that is fine. My suggested are all cosmetic type corrections that will make the story a little easier for readers to read. The story will flow better in the readers mind. These suggestions are all easy to fix and will make your story better.
1. There are many instances in the dialogue where an apostrophe (') is used instead of quote marks ("). The difference just messes with the mind's eye when reading. It throws off the cadence while reading because the eye is seeing something that isn't right and makes the brain pause while reading.
2. There is also a problem with the use of (') and (") this time when using contractions like I'll and can't etc. In almost all the contractions in the story there is I"ll instead of I'll and can"t instead of can't. These are all easy to fix.
3. There are quite a few times at the start of a sentence or dialogue where a lower case letter is used instead of a capital letter. Also easy to fix.
4. And finally I suggest putting the story into a word document and use spell check on the story. There are quite a few misspelled words that are easy to fix with spell check. A lot of them are just transposed letters that can happen easily to anyone when typing. Proof read darling proof read or maybe I should be saying spell check darling spell check. It will make your story so much prettier.
I hope you won't be offended by these suggestions. These are all easy fixes that can be corrected by proofreading the story before it is posted. A lot of them can be fixed by using the find and replace editing button in word doc. The same with the spelling errors using spell check. Fixing these kinds of cosmetic errors before posting a story makes a neater cleaner easier to read story for readers. Believe me most readers will appreciate it.
I think I saw a note that this is your first story. You did well… cute, cute, cute. It is a great first effort and I hope you continue to write many more stories. I certainly look forward to reading them.
Reviewer: Dilia (Signed) · Date: February 28, 2011 04:07 AM · On: Close Enough
Now I'm in suspense... going to read the next chapter.
Reviewer: Babble_on (Anonymous) · Date: February 28, 2011 03:24 AM · On: Finally Home
Just read the whole story, loved it! Great read! Hope you have another one up your sleeve......
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: February 28, 2011 02:39 AM · On: Finally Home
So romantic and a perfect ending!!
Reviewer: rose (Anonymous) · Date: February 28, 2011 01:08 AM · On: Finally Home
ohhhh... that was a sweet ending. great story. I enjoyed it very much. :-)) rose
Reviewer: Dilia (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2011 11:07 AM · On: Crossed Paths
That was a great update...a wonderful and interesting chapter... thank you so much ... please update soon.
Reviewer: galenut (Anonymous) · Date: February 21, 2011 05:54 AM · On: Crossed Paths
thanks for another great chapter.
Reviewer: Kiddo (Anonymous) · Date: February 20, 2011 05:45 AM · On: Cracking
Again two great chapters
i wonder what brian will do when he finds out about ethan and justin...
can't wait for the next part
Reviewer: Dilia (Signed) · Date: February 20, 2011 04:51 AM · On: Cracking
Thank you so much for updating ... you are the best author ever.
Reviewer: galenut (Anonymous) · Date: February 20, 2011 04:38 AM · On: Cracking
loving this story.
Reviewer: Sling (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 11:38 PM · On: Cracking
More more more!!! I love it ;) Even though it's not going after the original plot (Which is in my opinion no real problem ;) ) I love it! ;) I like your twist
Reviewer: evene (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 08:07 PM · On: Cracking
read all the chapters and went back to :) comment for you. you are very good writer.
Reviewer: evene (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 08:07 PM · On: A False Proposal
:)
Reviewer: evene (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 08:06 PM · On: Unwelcome Guests
:)
Reviewer: evene (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 08:06 PM · On: Sleeping with the Enemy
hot :)
Reviewer: evene (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 08:06 PM · On: Lust
:)
Reviewer: evene (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 08:05 PM · On: Confusion
:)
Reviewer: evene (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 08:05 PM · On: Escape Attempt Number Two
:)
Reviewer: evene (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 08:04 PM · On: Parallel Universe
:)
Reviewer: evene (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 08:04 PM · On: Kidnapped
:)
Reviewer: evene (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 08:04 PM · On: Bad Timing
:)
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 08:00 PM · On: Cracking
Thanks for updating so regularly - and congratulations on the blue ribbon.
Reviewer: TECH SUPPORT (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 07:32 PM · On: Cracking
It is very rare we grant a blue ribbon featured status to a new author's unfinished story, but two people have suggested this story for a blue ribbon, and you have posted chapters very quickly according to our records. We trust you will finish it and continue to write for Whispers since you are certainly very gifted with words.
Reviewer: maryrmel@ig.com.br (Anonymous) · Date: February 15, 2011 03:31 PM · On: Bad Timing
Congratulations! Series wonderful. Please write new chapter shortly.
Hugs,
Melo Maria
Reviewer: Dilia (Signed) · Date: February 15, 2011 06:06 AM · On: A False Proposal
WOW...that was the best two chapters I've ever read ... I told you before that I'm a big fan of longing and angst stories...but I have to say that your story is the best ...I liked how you put Justin through those hard emotions...and Brian's jealousy is my favorite. please don't leave us wait too long .
Good Luck.
Reviewer: Kathrin (Anonymous) · Date: February 15, 2011 03:35 AM · On: Bad Timing
Thanks for the new chap! God, I feel so sorry for Brian. Please update asap! :) *hugs*
Reviewer: Bigdogz09 (Signed) · Date: February 14, 2011 10:24 AM · On: A False Proposal
This reminds me of a movie with Mario Lopez. I like your version better. Ewww, chin rat planning their wedding gives me hives. Looking forward to your next update. Very enjoyable!
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: February 13, 2011 09:08 PM · On: Unwelcome Guests
Again a very engrossing chapter! And to think that I believe you weren't going to continue this at one time; I've very glad you were persuaded to keep going! I know this was a takeoff on a movie, but it is very fresh and inventive and you write very well. So glad you are sharing it with us.:) And go get the (right) man, Justin! LOL!
Reviewer: 087bue (Anonymous) · Date: February 13, 2011 08:18 PM · On: Unwelcome Guests
dame ethan to hell.hope hustin breaks up with him.
poor brian, really hoping he will stand up to his family
Reviewer: Dilia (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2011 05:18 AM · On: Sleeping with the Enemy
Incredible chapter ... Thank you very much ...I really enjoy reading it... Please update soon.
Reviewer: rose (Anonymous) · Date: February 10, 2011 12:35 AM · On: Sleeping with the Enemy
hot chapter :-)) rose
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: February 09, 2011 02:34 PM · On: Bad Timing
We need more!!!!
Reviewer: Sling (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2011 12:27 PM · On: Sleeping with the Enemy
more more more please ;)
Reviewer: Marny (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2011 03:58 AM · On: Sleeping with the Enemy
lovely chapter ... and sleeping with THAT enemy is not a problem.
* hugs *
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2011 03:07 AM · On: Sleeping with the Enemy
I am really enjoying your story - it's sweet and hot all wrapped up into one and I loved the idea of their other senses being heightened in the dark. I had to laugh out loud at the part about it not being a good idea to have sex with your kidnapper; I beg to differ when it comes to THAT man - LOL! Looking forward to the next update - thanks for writing!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for this! - It really made me smile :)
Reviewer: Dilia (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2011 11:18 PM · On: Lust
your story is great and ineresting ... please keep going ... oh,I just have a little observation,in terms of the context of the events,you portrayed them so well but what about the internal conflicts of our boys maby you should've portrayed it a little bit more ,like what was justin thinking when he surrendered to his and Brian's lust...or justin's principles in life ...was he used to cheat or Brian was special to him and he couldn't resist him for some reasons...maby I'm just a big fan of angst stories 'LOL'
pardon my lack english .
Thank you and good luck
Reviewer: sophie's mom (Anonymous) · Date: February 03, 2011 11:28 AM · On: Lust
oh boy trouble brewing.
brian's parents want him to go out and make friends yet they give him a dorky shirt and wants him speed dating. what is wrong with that family?
Reviewer: rose (Anonymous) · Date: February 01, 2011 01:25 AM · On: Confusion
I really like your story :-)) rose
Reviewer: sophie's mom (Anonymous) · Date: January 30, 2011 06:34 AM · On: Confusion
i've been reading this on the bus in the mornings so i haven't been able to comment. it a good story, but i don't like this brian. not at all. where is his confidense. his self worth? justin right now i'm not too crazy about either although i can understand him.
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2011 02:07 AM · On: Escape Attempt Number Two
I am really enjoying this unique, funny, but touching story. Looking forward to the next installment!:)
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: January 25, 2011 09:30 AM · On: Escape Attempt Number One
I am really enjoying reading this story! And I'm jealous you're able to update so quickly! Love the premise here - looking forward to seeing how it progresses; I mean, come on now - how long could anyone hold out against Brian Kinney, anyway? LOL
Reviewer: rose (Anonymous) · Date: January 25, 2011 01:53 AM · On: Parallel Universe
it is getting better and better :-)) rose
Reviewer: blue (Anonymous) · Date: January 24, 2011 07:44 PM · On: Kidnapped
good chapter.will justin try to run away when he gets a change.
Reviewer: brian (Anonymous) · Date: January 24, 2011 10:15 AM · On: Kidnapped
this is getting very interesting. i really like it. i just hope that justin's boyfriend isn't ethan. be interesting to see how this pans out.
Reviewer: carlou (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2011 06:39 AM · On: Kidnapped
Please don't give up on your story,there is a lot of potentiel for adventure and comedy,it's refreshing.I just love the way you brought those two fantastic characters together.
Reviewer: Kiddo (Anonymous) · Date: January 24, 2011 03:29 AM · On: Bad Timing
great start
looking forward to the next chapter
Reviewer: GiggleBean (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2011 05:56 AM · On: Bad Timing
nice opening
great so far
Reviewer: 087bue (Anonymous) · Date: January 23, 2011 05:33 AM · On: Bad Timing
looks good.what will justin say
Reviewer: brian (Anonymous) · Date: January 23, 2011 05:18 AM · On: Bad Timing
welcome to mw nice to have you aboard this love train. this is going to be an interesting story. nice cliff hanger. more chapters soon??????
Reviewer: TECH SUPPORT (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2011 03:03 AM · On: Bad Timing
I spaced your chapter for you. I suggest 11 pt font, and 1.25 space if you are using WORD.
Welcome to Midnight Whispers.
Reviewer: Marny (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2011 03:01 AM · On: Bad Timing
Mmm this looks like fun. Please new update * grins *
* hugs *
Reviewer: Lupin111 (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2011 02:16 AM · On: Bad Timing
I watched the movie, and it was too funny! Love to see what you do with it.
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2011 01:24 AM · On: Bad Timing
Ooh...I like the story plot here! I'm looking forward to seeing how this progresses! Thanks for writing it.:)
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