Reviewer: Myhazel_eyes (Anonymous) · Date: October 07, 2009 04:17 AM · On: Chapter 144: Calvin Klein
Hey, excellent French ... Bravo ;)
Brian and Justin are coming to meet Pat and they come with a computer. Super gift for a welcome. With that, they plan to hire him with Randy, Devin and Zack for a pub Calvin Klein (I like CK)... He meets the rest of the family at Debbie’s and especially the beautiful Randy... That’s still enough to make flip Ted . And with the tacit approval of Debbie and the others, a relationship is set up between the two boys ... I’m getting feel a little hot...
Super Chapter
Author's Response: Your sister helped with the French. Kids breathe life into the story. Glad you liked it and thanks so much for your comments.
Reviewer: complicated (Anonymous) · Date: October 02, 2009 07:55 PM · On: Chapter 144: Calvin Klein
WOW. Excellent.
Love this chapter. Another young love in the air.
Good job Jt & Mr Hamster.
Kiss. Kiss. Kiss.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm delighted you liked it. Kisses back to you.
Reviewer: alys (Anonymous) · Date: October 02, 2009 10:35 AM · On: Chapter 144: Calvin Klein
randy and patrick... they work fast ;-)
Author's Response: Horny teenagers don't mess around; it's down to business and learn their names later. hehehe :P
Reviewer: Ihintza (Anonymous) · Date: October 02, 2009 07:26 AM · On: Chapter 144: Calvin Klein
I love this meeting with Brian and Justin and later with the group. So Patrick will take part in an advertising campaign with the beautiful Randy and the little blond elves, Devin and Zack. He will live a wonderful experience... I understand he's happy and apparently he and Randy seem very well get on.
Difficult French, isn’t it? ;) I'm glad this is my mother tongue (with one mother and my two dads, and spanish with my second mom) because I wouldn't like to learn it. I think sometimes my english sucks too... If you want a hand in these sentences, this is :
Patrick, come get this computer = Patrick, viens chercher cet ordinateur (and like Pat is upstairs, it's even = Patrick, descends chercher cet ordinateur)
Please Ben, I want this = S’il te plaît, Ben, je le veux
Big, big love
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the better French phrases. I've added them to the story. I don't plan to use much of it; it was necessay to bring a bonding moment between Ben and Patrick in the chapter. Thanks for commenting and big big love back to you and yours.
Reviewer: cakdg (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 01:56 AM · On: Chapter 144: Calvin Klein
Nice introduction of Patrick to the family. He also has a lucrative modeling gig and a new playmate in Randy. All of the these good things happening for him so quickly. I bet it's a bit surreal for him...I'd be afraid to wake up and find it was a Cinderfella dream. But how lovely when he wakes up and finds that it is all real. *g*
Good one! On to the next...
Author's Response: You'll soon see that for only 14 years old; he's a very wise kid. Patrick has both feet firmly on the ground and he will protect his reality and turf. He has his sights on catching the fox of his dreams soon. Glad you like it cakdg and thank you so much for telling me.
Reviewer: Eileen (Anonymous) · Date: October 01, 2009 11:33 PM · On: Chapter 144: Calvin Klein
Love the story so far. Kids seem to hook up real easy.
Small suggestion: May I suggest that the next hook up start off as disliking each other and slowly get together?
Author's Response: Add a lttle angst up front; I like that twist. Clever girl! Thanks for the plot idea. And really thanks for taking your time to comment.
Reviewer: Dave (Anonymous) · Date: October 01, 2009 09:31 PM · On: Chapter 144: Calvin Klein
Of course two hot boys are going to hook up. Like duh? The boys were lucky to meet Brian and Justin and get modeling gigs for big bucks. I laughed at Debbie holding up dinner so they could play. She always takes good care of her boys. That is so Debbie. Loved it.
Author's Response: Debbie's a romantic at heart. At the very least the boys are on the way to be great friends. Thanks Dave for all you reviews and comments. Mr. Hamster's very happy now reading your words.
Reviewer: Jay (Anonymous) · Date: October 01, 2009 08:45 PM · On: Chapter 144: Calvin Klein
Like the new kid. Love the story and I am always disappointed when I log on and there isn't a new chapter. I really like this storyline. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for letting me know Jay. It helps so much to hear from you.
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