Midnight Whispers :: QAF Brian and Justin Fanfiction

Reviewer: M_elle_22 (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2010 05:30 AM · On: Chapter 91: First Gay Love

WOW, you did some major editing of this chapter. The opening and closing paragraphs are really clunky and not at all as well written as the rest. I remember a lot of sex before. Wheln I read it origionally, I was shocked a bit at first, but I wonder why you couldn't just put in a chapter warning for underage sex instead of editing it out completely.

My answer is probably in other chapter reviews. I guess I'll take a peek at those, LOL. It seems you get a lot of complaints regarding your take on things. I personally believe that too much PC -ness is very unhealthy. PC comments are just as stereotypical as generalizations. I think the next generation is being seriously warped by how we as adults and media say one thing but do another. For example, we teach them their best is good enough throughout highschool, but the moment they try getting into college or apply for a job they learn real fast that that is so far from the truth!

My parents use sexist and racist phrases they were taught, things I certainly taught my daughter was very rude. Like she didnt already know, having since pre kindergarten been taught to only speak in acceptable terms.

Sometimes I think that in our attempts to improve the world and human relations within it, we are begining to go backwards. For one example, its like, and being white I wouldn't mind your bf's opinion on this, only a black person can comment on their color and history but if a white person does it it automatically means I'm verbally segregating them by even mentioning it.

I'll probably be shot for just mentioning it...

Author's Response:
It's funny but he gets more discrimiation being with a white man from his family and friends than I do. Really nobody gives me any back talk but they run him down all the time. You're right about too much to do about some issues.

Yes I did cut out the heavy sex scenes, several people thought it was sick to graphically describe underage teens having sex. So once again I made some changes.

Thank you for reading and enjoying my story.

Reviewer: balrogtweety (Signed) · Date: January 31, 2010 01:45 PM · On: Chapter 91: First Gay Love

Glad their first time was great.

Author's Response:
That's a magical moment for any gay boy.

Reviewer: complicated (Anonymous) · Date: September 04, 2009 08:28 PM · On: Chapter 91: First Gay Love

Beautiful. Very well writen. Perfect first time for the boys.

Love you so much JT.

Kiss, Kiss.

Author's Response:
Memories...I had my own to draw on for this chapter. I hope it made things very real for the readers.

Kisses back!

Reviewer: Ihintza (Anonymous) · Date: September 04, 2009 06:32 AM · On: Chapter 91: First Gay Love

First day at school for my son and he seems very happy (He is sitting next to a beautiful girl in class called Jade and she offered him a cookie and the teacher is nice and he loves recess and…etc…etc…). Well, and me, I was worried all the day and I even cried this morning when I left him at school

Very nice chapter. I smiled all through my reading because I’m remembered my first time. I'm glad it goes well for Toby and Keith. The first time (nice or not) is always in your memory... (See !, I always smile !)... Beautiful chapter, always so well written, so vivid

You're great, JTS

Big love from a smiling girl

PS: 14, Gex ? We have to talk…I thought you said mom you were 17 the first time... My god ! Oh yes, you can look at me like this and try the sweet smile of the angel with me, it doesn’t work anymore…You’re Devil with an Angel’s face. :P

Author's Response:
I remember my first day of school at 6. It was a magical moment. I guess it was hard for you to let go of him even for a few hours. Later on parents love school time and dread the summers when they are stuck with the kids all day long and they can't wait until school starts up again. Glad you liked the chapter. It was a special one for me to write. Don't rat out your brother; he might get some dirt on you someday. It would be best if he owes you one. Thanks so much for your comments Ihintza.

Reviewer: Myhazel_eyes (Anonymous) · Date: September 04, 2009 12:48 AM · On: Chapter 91: First Gay Love

I just open my laptop and check the update.... and O M G !

So beautiful

I was 14 for my first...

Tons of kisses for you and Mr Hamster

Gex

I'm sure Tim was a wonderful boy ;)

Author's Response:
Glad you liked it. You're my 1100th reviewer so the next chapter is dedicated to you Gex. Thank you!

Reviewer: rose (Anonymous) · Date: September 03, 2009 11:58 PM · On: Chapter 91: First Gay Love

and I thought 13 is a little bit young to have sex.... great updates...:-)) rose

Author's Response:
Thank you rose; it might be young for girls but not for boys.

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