Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: December 27, 2011 Title: Chapter 67: Christmas Morning Part 4 of 5

The Christmas dinner at BriTin should be fun. Looks like

everyone will be dressed casual except maybe Brian.  Then

again, if Gucci or Prada make casual; then Brian may dress

casual as well.  Then again – maybe not.

 

Nice couple of chapter.  This story has become a Christmas

Tradition.  Maybe you should stop here and continue next

December.  Just kidding…..

 

I am still having problems caring about Michael and what

happens to him.  I know that is not very ‘Christmas-Like’, but

Michael is ‘eh’. I know he is an important character and a

member of the family, but I just don’t like him. Even JR is now

cuddled up happily in Ben’s lap.

 

Anyway, thanks for the chapters; I am now up to date.

 

DavidR

Author's Response: Yes, Yes. I know Michael isn't your favorite character. (smile) But it's the holidays, and family is important...even if they drive you crazy. (smile) I thought I was going to be able to finish this story without interruption, but that didn't work.. However, I've figured out how to let you know about the brief disappearances...and then I can be back on track. We'll have to see how this works. I'm glad you like this story. More to come....

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: April 19, 2011 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

Hi,

 

Another wonderful chapter in a wonderful story.  There is so much to

comment on, but I will keep this short.

 

You know what I don’t like?  I don’t like Ted.  I like Emmett’s

description that he is simply resentful.  Resentful people are not

likeable often do or say the wrong thing.  That is Ted.

 

Great story, thanks for writing it.

 

DavidR

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: June 12, 2011 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49

Great chapter.

Tjere were those 2 references to Jakcson in the prior chapter that seems unususl.  Maybe?  Maybe not!

Stange that Chris would leave Brian alone when he is under mild edation.   That seemed to me a mistake as Brian is kind of defenseless.  Then again, maybe not.  We will see.

This is just one terrific story.

Thanks,

DavidR

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: November 09, 2011 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

Thanks for another great chapter. 

 

Michael is a lost cause not worth commenting about.

 

Justin needs to talk to Brian.  That is where we left the

Chapter. Seeing Craig being taken away by the FBI and

now there is no doubt the evil that Craig has been part

of – but still he is/was Justin’s father.

 

The pain and hurt that Justin must feel is enormous.  I

am sure Brian  understands that.

 

       “…….rough breath in order to overcome the devastation that

       enveloped him as he  identified the tone of defeat in that hopeless,

       broken voice.”

      

You write so beautifully that I too heard  it – and felt

it.

 

Again, thanks for this great story.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Oh, God, you could not possibly have said anything that would please me more.  Once in a while, the right word, the right phrase just comes along at exactly the right time, and THAT is the purest joy one can have in writing.  So thanks so much for pointing that out.  Your reviews are always especially precious to me, so thanks for reading and commenting and sticking with me to the end.

Hope you won't be disappointed.

CYN

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: June 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56

Thanks for this new chapter.  It was, like the other

chapter, terrific.

 

I have enough to think about with each new chapter,

Book 1 and Book 2 are far to “out-there” to comment

on.

 

Hey, didn’t I remember that one guy got away?  What

happened to him, or is he still out there lurking, and

waiting for his chance to do more damage to Brian?  Of

course, no answer is best, as let the story answer my

questions.

 

No comment about Melanie and Ted.  I have commented

enough.  They both in their own way, are dangerous. 

(Glad I refrained from commenting).

 

Thanks again for the chapter, happy to hear you are feeling better.

 

DavidR

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: September 04, 2012 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58

     I know I have said it before, but I will say it again; this is one great story.  I don’t care if there are five chapters left or five thousand.  Well --- you know what I mean.   I do wish you good health.  If it takes four weeks for the next chapter or forty weeks, I will be here to read it.

    I didn’t miss the irony that it was Cedric and his broom stick that probably saved Brian’s life.  Cedric who was first befriended by Justin; it was Justin who got him the job at Kennetic.  It was Justin …..

    Thanks for this very exciting chapter.

    DavidR

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: March 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 72: FINAL CHAPTER (improved)

Hi,

 

Thanks for the story.  I loved reading it.  It is not easy to explain why,

but one reason is that as a reader, you wrote it in such a way that I had a sort of rooting interest in the characters.  I cared. 

 

The first victory was to get Kai away from Craig.  That was huge.   

Then to accept Kai as part of the Justin/Brian/Gus Family.  It wasn’t

easy, but they did it.

 

Finally – to then get Kai the professional help and support he needed.

Good for Justin to have done that, and good for Brian who was willing

to pay for whatever it was that was needed.  Sure enough, Kai

responded, another huge victory.  OK, maybe he didn’t respond as

fast as Justin hoped, but still it was a huge win – he improved leaving

us with impression that this improvement will continue and continue

and continue.

 

Again, thanks for the story.  I also hope you will find the time in the

future to give us a peek or two or three as to how they are doing.

 

DavidR

 

 

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your kind words and feedback. They mean a lot to me! I am glad that this story touched you and that you cared about the characters. This fic really holds a special place in my heart, and I'm hoping to come back to it in the future for snippets into their lives.

Hugs,

Snow

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: March 19, 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 23

Interesting – I really thought that after the last chapter, things couldn’t

get any worse.  Well I was wrong, they just got worse.  Assuming that

there still is a Justin, and I read that last sentence very carefully – so

not all is lost – maybe?

 

I have to wonder just what does Justin need to start his climb back to

normalcy.  Now that Justin has told Brian everything, maybe it is time

for Brian to do the same.  Some real honesty about his feelings for

Justin could be the switch that turns things around.

 

Great story.  You wrote action and suspense beautifully.

Thanks for the story

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Hi David, In life we know that things often get worse before they get better.  Let's hope that Justin will have the opportunity to work through his guilt.  Thank you for your compliments and for being such a faithful reader,  *hugs*

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: June 07, 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 27

Hi,

    Finally, finally, finally – looks like Justin has finally got the message.

For a while there, it appeared that the was no hope for Justin and that 

he would drag everyone around him down.

 

     Interesting that in the previous chapter, there was some concern

about Brian’s mental health.  As for me, I just about had with Justin

and I could understand the possible awful effects that it may have on

Brian.

     Well, Justin is working hard to recover.  He has got what it takes,

and now I am much much much happier.  It will be interesting to see

how Justin, with everyone’s help, heals.

 

Thanks for this terrific story.

             DavidR

 

 

Author's Response:

Thanks four your continued support, David.  I've been quite busy but am determined to finish this story.  Take care, hon.

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: October 06, 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 32

Thanks for the Chapter. 

 

We have gone from very very very low, to now high. 

So far that is.  I think things are really looking up when

Justin as able to pick  up a brush and a canvas and paint

to releasing some of his negative emotions.    

 

Also, I like the conversations between Brian and Justin. 

They are having fun again.  Yep, having fun and being

able to release negativity through painting are very

hopeful signs.  Hopefully, that will continue, right????? 

(Just kidding).

 

Thanks again for the story.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Thank you, David, for your support.  It's been a long time since Justin has been able to look toward the future with hope.   Glad that you're enjoying the B/J interaction.  I'm having a good time writing it!  :)

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: January 01, 2012 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 34

     That was one terrific story, thanks for writing it and sharing

it with us.  In most good stories there is a message:

 

  “… that Brian Kinney had been his destiny all along.”

 

     Great ending topping off a terrific story.

 

Thanks again,

DavidR

 

Author's Response: I am very lucky to have such a faithful reader in you, David. Your comments are always welcome and inspire me to continue writing. Thank you! :)

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: April 30, 2011 Title: Broken Open

Nice chapter.  The Hobbs issue was neatly tied up and ended. 

Though Justin understands that issues don’t always end happily. 

Surely things for Hobbs, his sister and niece are still a mess, though

their lives are abou

t to be so much better.  Then again, they did pay a

huge price for Justin's actions.  We have expressions that deal with that:  "unintened condsequences," also "hit happens," and as Brian said, "Life Sucks.".

 

Poor Justin has seen in person that sometimes, bad people do bad

things that hurt good people, but sometimes good people do good

things that hurt good people.  In a way it is/was sort of what he did.  I

am glad Justin is out of that business.  Not that it doesn’t need to be

done, just that it’s time for Justin to let other do it, and move on.

 

Yep, time to move on to Brian’s brother.  Maybe he can teach both Brian and Justin some things. As for Justin we saw that he has a propensity for violence or at least live in that environment. Can putting paint to can canvas and create satisfy the need or urge or whatever that is?  I don’t know!

 

Thanks for the chapter and the story.  It’s another one of your terrific

stories.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Poor Justin has seen in person that sometimes, bad people do bad

things that hurt good people, but sometimes good people do good

things that hurt good people.  In a way it is/was sort of what he did.  I

am glad Justin is out of that business.  Not that it doesn’t need to be

done, just that it’s time for Justin to let other do it, and move on.

 

This...This right there is what I  was going for.  In this story, I didn't want to portray Brian or Justin as these paragons of virture, always doing the right thing.  We often want to think of our hero's in those terms, but in truth the 'real' hero's in life are often terribly flawed and sometimes make fatal mistakes.   I tried to demonstrat that in Brian's speech to Justin where he said, "how many times have you seen good cops shot down because they had a moment of moral conscious?"  They hesitated because they didn't know if what they were going was 'morally right', and when that happens, often ppl get killed. Does this mean they are always right in their choices? Of course not, but their intentions are to save lives...and in a split seconds time they have to make that choice knowing, they may be wrong.  

 

Cops often are faced with this dilema, as are our military personnel.  They often make life and death decisions in the name of the greater good and often suffer the conseqences.  Yeah, like Brian said, "Life sucks"    Justin is at the point where he's seeing his past choices, and though not regretting them, is tired of having to make them.  I think he's going to do very well in his new profession.  He's always going to have 'edge' to him. It's in his nature, ( I actually viewed him that way in the show.  Fearless in a lot of ways. Hey, just being with Brian Kinney was fearless!  lol) but the violence has gotten too much for him.   He will move on, and he'll learn some valuable lessons about true trials and struggles, and see life through a different perspective throug his relationship with Liam.  

 

I am happy to move on to that storyline!  I love Brian/brother themes...(can you tell? lol)   Liam is a hero in his own right, and Justin is going to see that.  Brian, will go through some soul searching himself. He still hasn't dealt with his past...his relaitonship with his mother. His over protectiveness and attachment to his brother.   Both of which he still hasn't told Justin about it, (though Justin knows about his mother because Deb told him a lot of it, but even she doesn't know about Liam)  That converstaion has to happen.

 

So glad you like this story DavidR!  It is different for me.   Some ppl don't like seeing Justin like this.  They feel I'm making him out to be a 'bad' person.  That is NOT my intent. My intent is to portray him as a real human being.   One of the 'true' heros we don't often acknowledge or read about.  Being a hero sometimes is a messy job... I"m glad you got  that! *hugs* This comment made my day!  Thank you

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: March 10, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Mirror, Mirror

I only just finished Chapter 11.  Somehow I must have

passed this story by but no longer.  I thought that Justin

seeing Brian as ‘only’ and individual without the Brian

Kinney persona was very powerful. 

 

Another powerful aspect of all this would have been for

Justin to see the real possibility of Brian dying.  What

would Justin do?  How would he live?  Would he be able

to handle the funeral?  Etc. etc. etc.  Then again maybe

that is coming in the following chapters. Just a thought. 

 

Thanks for this terrific story. You have an excellent  

writing style.  Lucky me, I have many more chapters

to read.

 

DavidR.

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: December 29, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

This chapter is kind of strange.  I would describe this chapter as

one of huge contradiction.

 

First we have Melanie and Michael – being Michael and Melanie.

Personally I would like to tell where to go.

 

Then we see Lindsey who is a really a very sick woman. She tried to

murder Danny; I never expected that.  What a terrible way for a baby

to start his life on earth.

 

Then we have these beautiful words by Brian spoken to Danny:

                “Hey Danny boy. Welcome to the world.

                 It’s been a bitch so far, but your other daddy

                 is waiting for you and he’s filled with enough  

                 love to keep us all going for the rest of our lives.”

Wonderful words!

 

Then we have a scene that we rarely see; Brian stretched out on the

couch, reading.  Added to that we see late at night Justin giving

Danny a bottle, but more than that, giving Danny the affection and

feeling of protection that a baby so needs.

 

 

Amazing chapter.  Michael, Melanie, and Lindsey (even though she

                                                                                  can’t help it)

                                         VS.

                               Justin and Brian.

 

Thanks for the chapter, maybe just a little calmness before the storm? 

I’m ready!

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

thanks for the great review DavidR - I'm reaady for some peace and quiet as well.

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: December 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Autumn Rose

This is one great story, though I certainly hope you know where you

are going with it.  Most likely, Justin murdered Michael.  Now if this

were a different fic. you would get a standing ovation.  (Ok, just

kidding).  Justin did more than possibly kill Michael, he murdered

many other Michaels, peoples husbands, sons, lovers, and more.  I

too have never read a fairy tale with the title “Prince Charming and the

Vampire.” 

 

Good luck as you certainly are one courageous author taking us to a

point that is going to need some very logical explanations. I don’t see any.

 

Ethan?  I am not going to even comment.  I can’t handle anymore at

this point. I am certainly looking forward to the next chapter.

 

Again, thanks for this terrific story.  I don’t have a clue as to where we

go from here and that is good.  I think?

 

DavidR

 

Author's Response:

I am glad that you are reading this story. Thank you for taking the time to tell me your thoughts. No worries, I will NEVER start a story before knowing exactly where I am going with it. I have this outlined until the end and I am a hopeless sucker for happy endings. Even though you do not see plausible outcomes just yet, I do hope you will continue reading and that you will find my plot enjoyable. *hugs* Mandi

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: January 01, 2011 Title: Chapter 4: The Ravens

Terrific last couple of chapters.  That was so clever having the

caretaker of the Endless Summer’s name to be Ian.  Then – to top is

all, he uses a violin to mesmerize Justin.

 

In this last chapter Justin compares what it happening to the Twilight

Zone.  No way –  this is waaaay beyond the Twilight Zone.   

 

I so enjoyed the way you have Gus and Justin “plop” or worse in the

snow by the North Wind. Real cute! 

 

There is so much good to comment on, but just know that I think this

is a terrific story, and I so enjoy reading it.

 

 Thanks again,

     DavidR

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: January 22, 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Breaking the Ice - Wedding Reception: Part Two

I just wanted to let you know that I am another of the readers of this

wonderful story.  I am only just finished chapter 11, meaning that I

have so many questions yet to be answered.  Therefore, I don’t

expect any answers here, but I am sure I will find out  the answers in

the ensuing chapters. 

 

However – one question that keeps on popping up is:  just why did

Jack and Joan adopt Brian and then treat him so badly?  That just

doesn’t make sense to me. Then why adopt?

 

 Anyway, I am so curious about Fin’s career.  Even in baseball you

only get three strikes. It appears that he suddenly will tell the public he

is gay and has a gay relationship.  I wonder (and don’t tell me) if he

now is going to admit to an out of wedlock son.  And – if he does,

how about that his son is also gay and has an out of wedlock child.  

Geeez!

 

Anyway, thanks for the story.  I do enjoy your writing style – lots of

information and not rushed.  And of course I really really really ike this

story.

 

 DavidR

Author's Response:

Hello, David!  Thank you for reading my story and for the review!:)  I won't spoil any of it for you, but I WILL say you are not the first one to ask the question about why Jack and Joan would adopt; perhaps since they were Catholic, maybe Joan was infertile/unable to conceive for some reason after having Claire (although I'm not sure if she's older or younger) and they felt pressured to have another child through adoption?  Or, like some parents, they saw Brian as some sort of status symbol, or maybe Jack didn't feel "manly" enough without a son to perpetuate his name.....I know unfortunately people don't always adopt children for the right reason(s).

But strangely enough, I hadn't even thought of the Brian/Claire angle of the story, so I  thank you for that!  I think you may have just given me a plot bunny there for the sequel to this story, which I am planning on writing shortly to encompass Fin's run for governor.  Thanks again for the insightful, thoughtful review!:)

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: February 01, 2011 Title: Chapter 31: The Next Step of Their Journey

At this point I think Brian said it best, "Well, that was one hell of a party, Sunshine,".......  It sure was.  That was one terrific story and I am so happy to hear that you expect to writea sequel.  As far as Fin's future, whether he wins the election or not, he has already won, and will most liked win much more.

As usual, I have another question.  Why is Justin now Justin Taylor-Kinney but Brian is still Brian Kinney. Shouldn't  Brian now be Brian  Kinney-Taylor? I just don't get it and I must admit it bothers me some.

Anyway, thanks for this terrific story.  Things are looking good for everyone,  then again, we know that "shit happens."

Thanks again,

DavidR

 

Author's Response:

Hi, David - Thanks as always for the review; glad you enjoyed the story.  I always appreciate your insightful comments after you read a chapter!  As for the name change, good question.  I guess I was thinking of Brian normally being the more dominant of the two or the one always seeming to have to "be in charge" and "on top," to quote Justin - LOL!  It's not exactly equitable, though, I agree.  It just seemed like the way that Brian would approach it, needing to maintain some sort of control over his life, I guess, but then again he had matured in this story to where he was capable of expressing and giving emotion more.  So perhaps the way his character was in the story, he wouldn't have been so adverse to taking Justin's name, also.  Very thought-provoking question, and I thank you for it as well as reading and reviewing!  Hope you'll stick around for the sequel, which I should be starting on fairly shortly!:)

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: October 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Finally Home

      I finally found the time to read this chapter.  I have been reading it all along, but always a few chapters behind.  I really enjoyed the entire story.  It did have some great moments.  I liked the way it ended:

             "I’ll be there."

     A  wonderful way to end the story. 

     Thanks again for the story.  I had fun reading it.

     DavidR

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: September 05, 2013 Title: Chapter 36: Fin and Tony's Love Story

Hi,

     There is a large piece of me that would prefer Fin loses.  I

like the relationship he now has with Tony.  It is good, very

good.  There Is no doubt that if Fin wins, things will change. 

Will the relationship get better?  Maybe, but maybe not.

    If Fin loses, Brian has still gained a father.  Justin has gained

a father in law and a friend, Gus has gained great grand

parents.  Sadly, although Gus now has a grand father, he and

his grand father are very distant.  What I am trying to say, is

that everyone has already won.  I would hate to have things

become screwed up by Fin winning the election.

    I know my reasoning is kind a f**ked up.  But I feel that way,

and it seems right to me.  If Fin loses then everyone wins

(Brian, Justin, Tony, Gus).  If Fin wins – then who knows?

Sometimes, losing is winning.

     Thanks for this terrific story.

DavidR

Author's Response:

Hi, David! So great to see your comments!  I am glad that you are still following this story. And no, I don't think your reasoning is wrong.  I can understand it totally.  I know that is one of Tony's fears as well.  I can see both viewpoints here.  There will be good and bad points about winning or losing the election. Things will definitely change for a lot of them.  There could be some good come out of either outcome, as well as some issues; it remains to be seen how this plays out.  I WOULD like to get back to the more 'human' aspect of this story, especially once the election is over.

Thank you for reading this latest chapter and for your always thought-provoking comments!  I always look forward to reading them.  I will get the next part up very soon.  *Hugs* ~Kim

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: April 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 4: You Know Me Too Well!

Nice couple of chapters. 

 

I am glad that Fin knows and expressed the problems that Brian will

face if he should agree to become Fin’s Campaign Manager.  Of

course we know that backing down is not in the make-up of any of

the four of them.

 

I like the description of the honeymoon.  Brian and Justin stories are

unique in a way that having a Brian happy and a happy Justin, make

for a happy reader.

 

I know, without conflict, issues, and drama, there is no story.  I’m sure

that when they return from the honeymoon the expression “the

honeymoon is over” will make itself known.  Maybe a better

expression will be "the shit hit the fan".

 

Again, thanks for the story.

 

DavidR.

 

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the insightful comments, David!  So glad you'll be following along on the sequel.:)  And you're right - I'm setting the story up for what is to come and the campaign will be the focus point for all four characters.  And of course, along the way, there will be further development of Brian's relationships with both his father and grandparents, along with Tony's ongoing wish for a bigger commitment from his partner (sound familiar? LOL!).  Thanks for taking the time to review!:)

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: May 17, 2011 Title: Chapter 8: New and Old Family Entanglements

Nice chapter.  I particularly liked the thought:  “He was more

amazed that he actually had family that cared enough to want to do all

that; it was certainly a major departure from what he was normally

used to.”  Wow, ain’t that the truth.  Excellent writing. 

 

However, if Justin expects Brian to have a Daddy/Finn

relationship, well I just don’t see it.  The title of Daddy is often

earned when the child is 4 or 6, or  something like that.  He is

the guy who checks under the bed for monsters, and provides

other childhood needs.  At Brian’s age, current personality, and I

should add background,  a good warm and caring relationship

may develop --  But Daddy?  Justin should lower his expectations

if  that is what he is hoping for.  (I think?)   If will be interesting

to see how you handle that relationship and how far (or really

how close) they get.

 

Terrific story.   There are  lots and lots of interesting things going

on: Brian and Finn, the election, maybe a baby, and who knows

what else!  

 DavidR

Author's Response:

Hi, David!  I always look forward to your thought-provoking and well-constructed comments - thank you!:)  I tend to agree with you about Fin and Brian - I think eventually in this story they WILL grow closer together, but I could never see Brian calling him "Dad."  I just don't think that fits his character.  BUT - I think they CAN come to a closer relationship through mutual respect and concern.  There will be some issues and events come up through Fin's campaign that will draw them closer together in that regard.  And there will also be plenty of other emotional issues that will have to be addressed as well, for example, Justin's wish for an expansion to their family, and Tony's wish to have a more permanent, 'official' relationship with his partner.  Hope you will stay on to see how it all progresses and will keep writing your very insightful comments - thanks again.:)

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: June 16, 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Brian's Decision

Hi,

Another wonderful chapter.  So much information.

A few chapters back, I voted (not that I have a vote)

for Brian not to be Finn’s Campaign Manager.  Well –

Brian didn’t listen to me.  Oh well!  All the reasons

against the decision was nicely laid out in this chapter.

That is except one.

 

I never felt that bringing Brian and his father together

into a better and closer relationship was a good reason

for Brian to accept the proposal.    What if, Finn wanted

to do something one way and Brian disagreed. Now what?

it is quite obvious that neither can be told NO, and the person

live to say no again.  You know what I mean. 

         Finn to Brian, “no!”

or how about ---

         Brian to Finn, “no!”

 

Anyway, let’s see just how well the two of them will get along.

Tony and Justin just may have to play referee.

 

Thanks again for the story; it is really good and getting better.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Hi, David!  Always look forward to your thought-provoking comments.:)  Yes, I can see your point about the two working together - this could almost be like two trains on a collision course and no way to stop them - ha!  Two alpha males could be a bad thing.....but maybe a GOOD thing for dramatic plot purposes.:)  Thanks for checking in and leaving me feedback - I greatly appreciate that.:)

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: October 01, 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Confrontations and Revelations

Thanks for this terrific chapter.  The tension level of this story

just increased 10 fold. 

 

I do understand that security will probably keep Fin safe – I hope.

I have to wonder that since Craig is involved, is Brian really safe?

I am concerned.

 

Adam is a real problem.  I don’t at all accept that his Mom

working for Fin was the cause of his parents break up.  Maybe a

catalyst, but the cause?  I doubt it.  However Adam is like an

injured animal – very dangerous.

 

It will be interesting to see what happens next.  How Fin handles

the crowd and the haters in the crowd.  I will be satisfied if

everyone comes out of this in one piece.

 

Thanks again,

DavidR

 

Author's Response:

Thank you, David - I always look forward to your insightful comments.:)  Yes, there will definitely be some tense moments coming up, perhaps in ways some don't realize.  And there are so many ribbons of emotions running through this story.  It is definitely somewhat darker than "Wedding Present" in that respect, but I think the additional drama will also help be the catalyst to bring some of the characters closer together as well as cement some hopes and dreams.  Of course, there will also be some dashed dreams, too, or at least some that are changed in the meantime.  Thank you for reading and especially leaving your thoughts - I'll be looking forward to hearing more of them in the future.:)

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: July 04, 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Looking Into a Mirror

      Alex?  That definitely adds – I don’t know what -- to

this story.  I have to wonder where we are going with

him.  I must admit, that a little diversion from the anger

and hate of Turner,  Stewart, Stockwell, Craig is nice .  I

did enjoy the conversation where Brian told Justin about

Alex.  Like Justin, I too am just a little skeptical of Alex’s

story, but I agree, it really doesn’t matter much (at this

point).  I too am not at all surprised what a kind and

caring man Brian is.

    Will Debbie get a new ‘lost boy’?

    Will Gus get an older brother?

    Will Fin and Tony get married and raise a kid (Alex?).

And I can think of a ten other possibilities, which of

course no reply from you expected.  As always, let the

story unfold.  Of course, Finn is still running for

Governor, I haven’t forgotten.

 

     Thanks for the chapter.

     David R

 

 

Author's Response:

Hi, David!  So happy to see you still reading this story! Thank you for the insightful comments, my friend.  Yes, there is a lot still to tell here; I am gradually moving the action more toward the Pitts and Harrisburg to delve a little more into some of the other subplots running through the story.  And Alex will be a surprise in some ways as well.:)  Thank you for the comments; they are always so thought provoking.  I hope you continue to enjoy Fin's race for governor; I think he has a legitimate competitor now.  This is up next for update, so it shouldn't be too long now.  Thank you again for all your support.  *Hugs*  ~Kim

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: August 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 29: Dead to Me

Sadly, it doesn’t appear that this is over for Justin.  Had it been, I could see him back at Britin, feet up on the kitchen table, having the cookies & cream ice cream cones with Gus.  Craig, a total sleaze bag, held the honored title of father, and ruined it. Emotions run deep, and often not logical.  I don’t know if this could ever really end for Justin, no matter how much he tries, no matter what he claims.

 

Just exactly what did Craig do this time?  He contributed to Turner’s campaign.  That was his right to do so, though he broke the law with the amount he contributed.  Yes, it was done, not for the benefit of Turner, but as an aggressive act towards both Justin and I believe more so towards Brian.  Still, I don’t think it was necessary to destroy the man.  I could see possible jail time for Craig, (maybe?), as he should be getting a visit from a couple of IRA agents soon.  It is impossible to defend Craig, but to destroy him?  I don’t think that is necessary.

 

Once again, thanks for this great story.

DavidR 

 

Author's Response:

Hi, David!  You always impress me with the thoughtfulness you put into your comments; I thank you sincerely for that.:)  And I thank you for still following along on this rather convulated story.  I tend to agree with you - Craig is certainly not a sympathetic character, and Justin may SAY that he has cut all ties to his father and now considers him as good as dead, but deep down he is still his father.  So perhaps he may have some influence in what does or doesn't happen to him.  However, as you pointed out, it is a legal matter now, and his punishment may not be up to Justin to decide.  Craig may just have some other tricks up his sleeve as well...hmm...

I will update this story again just as soon as possilble; there is still a lot left to say here.  Thank you again for your constant support of this story, David!  I am very grateful for that.:)  *Hugs*  ~Kim

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: November 27, 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Combating Hatred With a Four-Letter Word

      There is so much happening, but “The Moment” that Justin walked onto the stage to confront Craig is simply “The Moment,” at least to me.  What followed next was beautifully written, and very intense.  Some times it is hard to define a person, but to me, Craig is mean.  It doesn’t seem harsh enough, but I looked up its definition.  Some words used to define mean were:

             cruel, spiteful, malicious.

Yep, that defines Craig for me.  There are so many other things he should be doing rather than confront Fin, actually Justin.  Why isn’t he with his lawyers, accountants, and other professionals as he sure is in trouble.  He too has become irrational. 

     Finally, I am glad Brian is giving Alex another chance, or at least making an effort find out what happened.  From the initial time we met Alex, he just doesn’t sound like a kid who would do what it appears he did.

     Thanks for the chapter.

     DavidR

 

Author's Response:

Hi, David!  I'm glad to hear from you again.:)  Yes, I agree; I think it took a lot of courage for Justin to go out on that stage and confront his father, especially with all the crowd there and knowing that whatever he said would be broadcast all over the web and throughout the state.  I think, too, that Craig was, indeed, blinded by so much hatred and misplaced anger over what he perceived as a great injustice done to HIM that he didn't even stop to think about the consequences of his actions, nor does he realize that what he did may backfire on him.  I think he has finally put a face on the untold number of voters who choose not to look beyond Fin's sexuality and see the great leader that he has been for them and WOULD be for them as governor. 

I will be concentrating more going forward on not only the conclusion of the campaign, but also the more personal aspects of the story, such as Alex's troubling emotions, Fin and Tony's relationship, and the father-son dynamics between Fin and Brian.

I'll be updating this again soon.  Thank you for reading and for consistently reviewing this story; I am very appreciative.  *Hugs* ~Kim

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: August 13, 2016 Title: Chapter 60: Spread a LIttle Sunshine - Part Two

    Well, we have finally come to the end of this story, though as

they say, more like ‘the end of the beginning.’  A long time ago I

wrote that when Justin became Justin Taylor Kinney, I was

concerned that you would make Justin, Justine, and also Tony,

Tina.  Happily, that didn’t happen.  I didn’t feel the connection of

dad and son between Brian and Fin.  My guess is that it will take a

few more years.  Neither one is an easy person to get close too.

    It was a wonderful story, and I truly enjoyed reading it. Thank

you so much for writing it.

DavidR

Author's Response:

Hi, David!  Always a delight to  hear from you. :)  I'm glad you feel I kept Justin & Tony IC; I do think it was easier in a way for them to bond than it was for Fin and Brian. Father and son are such strong-willed, alpha characters that share so many of the same traits that I think it IS hard - and would be unrealistic - for them to become close that quickly.  That may be something I could explore down the road, as I do think I will do a follow-up story in this 'verse at some point later. :)

Thank you for bearing with me in between updates, for reading, and for the comments!  They are deeply appreciated.  ~Kim

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: June 24, 2011 Title: Chapter 3: balance

Hi,

 

Nice story so far.  Justin is just a kid and really needs help.  Twice in

this chapter it was mentioned that he needs to speak to someone. 

Debbie offered and Jennifer suggested therapy.  Whatever – he has

got to do something.  Right night he is living in a poisoned

atmosphere. 

 

Should he take Sara’s car?  Should he move into Cal’s house?  Like

QAF, should he move in with Debbie or maybe even Brian.  I don’t

know, but he needs to take some action, and soon.  Even though I

doubt if he sees it, but there are options, all is not lost.

 

Anyway, time or really future chapters will tell.

 

Thanks for this find story.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Thank you! Justin seems to be coping well at the moment, and probably wouldn't ever take Debbie or his mother up on their offers, but there's only so long he'll be able to manage. He IS living in a poisoned atmosphere. You've got several good ideas for places for him to go... We'll just have to wait and see if Justin can stop being stubborn long enough to ask for help, yeah? 

Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review. I really, really appreciate feedback!

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: July 21, 2011 Title: Chapter 9: twist

Nice chapter.  The real question is:  does Luke think ‘Da’

is Justin or is ‘Da’ his Hippo.  ( Ok ok, just kidding)

 

I am happy that Justin is finally getting the help he

needs.  Slowly but surely he is getting the support

group he needs – thanks to Brian. 

 

Justin has been acting like a kid; then again, that is just

what he is.  I do think that Justin does see it as it is, he

really can’t go home again.  There were several hints to

that – when Jennifer only looked at Justin but seems to

ignore Luke.  I find that very strange.  I haven’t seen in this story where she accepts Luke as someone very

special, her Grandson.  As for Craig?  Whatever…..

 

Thanks for this terrific chapter, this story is just getting

more and more interesting and is fun to read.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Lol. It could very well be the hippo that Luke was referring to! Wouldn't Justin be embarrassed? 

Justin is indeed not going home again. He knows it, and he's trying to let his mother know it. Jennifer definitely doesn't seem very attached to Luke, but that may change over time... 

Sorry for the delay in responding--real life has been crazy these last few days!

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: August 21, 2011 Title: Chapter 18: epilogue - end

Thanks for the story.  We sure took a long trip. From Justin with a

kid, and being an unwanted prisoner in his parent’s house, to

what looks like a pretty good future.

As far as the ending, I finished it with a happy ending.  Why not?

 

Again, thanks for the story, I enjoyed it.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

You're welcome! It was definitely a journey, and I'm glad that you were here to enjoy it as each new twist and turn was introduced. Cheers!

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: July 18, 2011 Title: Chapter 10: PART TEN + EPILOGUE

That was one terrific story.  

 

All I want to say is thank you, it sure was enjoyable reading.

The line for me in this last chapter was:

            “It's pretty much the only reason I worked flat out for four years.

                 So I could move here and find you."

Great line – congratulations.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Thank you for your support throughout. The feedback really makes it all worthwhile.

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: July 13, 2011 Title: Chapter 7: PART SEVEN

Hi,

 

Very interesting.  I do enjoy having Brian and Justin tell their side of

the story.  One particular comment by Justin I thought was very

telling.  Yes – when he met Brian and the rest of the family, he was

only a kid, and they were adults.  I hadn’t realized the effect that had on him. 

 

Also interesting is that everyone else in the family has become a

success.  That is except Justin, who needs to feel equal.  He is still

much younger than anyone in the family.  Maybe, just maybe his art

work will soon be recognized and then he can feel like a success. 

Until he feels equal and a success, and of value, it is best that he keeps

‘some’ distance from Brian.  I can’t see Brain, or Marissa, or anyone

convincing him that of course he is of great value.   Like the rest of us,

Justin will have to find that feeling and belief for himself.

 

Thanks for the story,

DavidR

 

Author's Response:

That is very true. Other people can make us feel better, but in the long run it has to come from the inside. Justin will have to find his own way.

Thank you for commenting. I'm glad you're still enjoying it.

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: August 19, 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Guess what?  I really like this story.  There is something about the

way you write Justin that makes him so likable.  It has something

to do with the way other characters see him – except the few who

are total jerks anyway.

 

So Justin finally said a few words.  That is good enough for now.

 

Thanks for the story – I do enjoy it.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Awe, thank you David. I'm so happy that you enjoy my story. Anyhoo, who wouldn't like Justin? Other then Michael, lol?

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: August 29, 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - No Barriers To The Future

Hi,

 

I did like the story.  When I read chapter 1 and had to read the

other chapters a day or so later, I had several questions that I

hoped would be answered in those later chapters.

 

First:  I thought the B/J breakup due to Michael’s

           word was really kind of flimsy.  It needed

           a much more in depth explanation.  Hopefully

           you would and you did. 

 

Second:  I hoped that by the end of the story

               Justin would be moving back to Pittsburgh

               to be with Brian.  Nice ending!

 

Sure enough, that is just what happened.  I still think that in

Chapter 1, a better explanation as to why Brian believed Michael

would have made  this a better story, even though you did

explain it in later chapters.

 

All and all, you did a terrific job and happily for me, I read this

story and I did enjoy it.

 

Thanks for writing this and sharing it with us.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Well David, I so look forward to your thoughtful comments! You certainly put a lot of effort into your reviews - and that is precious to me as a writer.

I am also thrilled that I seem to have covered your bucket list for this story - lol. And, while I agree that Brian believed Mikey on very flimsy grounds, I see this as very much in character for Brian. His still views himself as unworthy of being loved, and because of this, needs little evidence that it was good while it lasted, but now it's all over as he expected. He doesn't think he deserved Justin's love to begin with, and is always willing to put the needs of those he loves before everything else - and this is even more true of Justin - even though he is so often misguided in what he thinks is the right thing for those around him.

I am so glad you enjoyed this story. Take care.

loving life,

Charle

 

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: September 23, 2011 Title: Chapter 10: PART NINE

All I can say at this point is that I really don’t know.

 

Where is Justin and why did he leave?

 

Is Naomi all right?

 

Brian feels as he feels; who can argue with that?  However, any

chance that something happens and he sees things differently?

 

Is there any chance at all that Brian and Justin really talk about it –

whatever it is?  Can they learn to finally communicate?

 

It will be very interesting to see how all this unfolds. At for me – I

don’t know!

 

Thanks for this terrific story, I really have enjoyed  reading it.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

I hope the ending will answer all your questions. Thank you for your review.

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: October 21, 2013 Title: Chapter 36: Long Distance

        I finally caught up and I just wanted to let you know how much I am enjoying this story.  I think this long distance relationship will work as the attraction they both have is enormous, but this time, they seem to have become best friends.  That should help a lot.

       I found the chapter ending kind of strange.  If Brian left for Pittsburgh, and Justin was with him, then why did Brian go to New York – or is Justin moving to Britin and the long distance experiment is over?  It is not clear to me or did I miss something.  I guess I will find out in the next chapter.

       Again, thanks for this story.   I really enjoy reading it.

       DavidR

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: February 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Thanks for the story, I finally caught up.

 

It appears that Brian is actually finding happiness.  A word rarely

attributed to him.

 

Again, thanks for the story.

DavidR

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: November 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Sorry, but I have no idea how I feel about this possible story.

It seems hard to accept that two grown men in love, everything

about to go the way they had hoped it would, could be so

affected by what some else had said.  Whatever that is.

 

I will happily stand by and see what happens, but at this point

you can count me as skeptical. 

 

Good luck as this sounds like a really difficult project.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Thank you DavidR for your response!

I must say that you have very valid points. I guess this one will be a bit on the difficult side to swallow and will require a bit more of a suspention of disbelief when it comes to B & J.  However, I will do my very best to make it as plausible and as believable as possible. I myself am not sure if I will succeed, but I will give it my all. I would absolutely love your opinion on how the story progresses, even if it's a dissenting one. Constructive criticism will only help me become a better writer. I hope you'll stick around for a couple of more chapters and will let me know what you think.

Keep in mind that this story focuses more on Gus and his perspective, so for me personally, it's more of a writing excersize that focuses on other characters other than our favorite couple (though they are a part of the story).

Thank you again!

Cheers,

Vin

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: November 13, 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Deb's Story

Nice couple of chapters.

 

FYI, when Gus goes around and either talks to (Debbie) or tries

to (Lindsey and Brian), a quiet sadness enters the story.  A

sadness of what could or should have been.  When Debbie

used that name Sunshine, and Gus remembered, I was able to

feel an emotional twinge.  Nice writing!

 

So far so good.  It has become pretty obvious to both Sunny

and Gus, that something strange happened to break Justin and

Brian apart, or maybe nothing more than two stubborn

people.  We shall see.

 

Thanks for the chapters, I enjoyed them and look forward to

more or them, and of course more answers.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Thank you very much for your thoughtful and detailed review, David! You have no idea how much it means to me to learn what people actually think. I appreciate it greatly!

Cheers,

Vin

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: December 09, 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Epilogue

That was one terrific story.  I have had PC issues for almost

the entire month.  My PC is back and to my joy so is the rest of

this story. 

 

For me, the highlight is when Brian called Debbie to insist on

having the entire family at Sunday dinner.

 

Sorry, but I don’t agree with the ending, though that is your

choice to end it there, and my right to disagree.  But it is really

not all that important.

 

What I do agree with is that was one terrific story.

I really really really enjoyed it.

 

Thanks again,

DavidR

Author's Response:

Dear David,

Please forgive me for a seriously delayed response to your comment. Thank you so very, very much for reading my story to the end and for your thoughtful, insightful and altogether woderful comments! I truly appreciate it.

To respond to your current comment more specifically, the Sunday dinner with the whole family was a good moment for me too, I felt inrodinately happy writing that scene, which is kind of silly. It pleases me to no end that it was a highlight for you. Thank you for letting me know that! :)

As for the ending, I'm sorry you didn't like it as much as I'd hoped. I've mentioned it before that I knew this ending wouldn't be a favorite with everyone. I am very, very happy that it didn't detract from your liking the story overall.

Again, I can't thank you enough, David, for all your amazing comments and for sticking with this story to the very end!

Happy Holidays!

Cheers,

Vin

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: December 18, 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: The Solo Mission

Hi,

     I don’t think I have read a story from Gus’s point of view

when he was a child.  I am enjoying this and you are doing a

terrific job writing this POV. 

 

I didn’t expect Lindsey and Mel. to split up, but given their

problems, I think it is best.  Also, he certainly appears to be

best for Gus, and Brian too. 

 

I like the description of Justin being Brian’s Justin (that tells us

all we really need to know about Brian's and Justin's

relationship), and Gus naming the bear Justin.  Of course in

QAF, Justin’s bear was named Gus. 

 

Thanks for the story.  I like it a lot.

DavidR

 

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: January 31, 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Coping

This story certainly has taken a turn to a much darker tone.  It

appears to be much more difficult to tell it from Gus’s point of

view.

 

Still, no one is really listening to Gus.  Blake and Ted did a nice

job in trying to explain addiction, but even they really didn’t

listen to what Gus has to say.

 

Let’s just hope that things, whatever that is, gets better.  Gus

still loves him Mother, and wants her back.  From what I read, I

think he needs her too.

 

Thanks for the chapter.

DavidR

Author's Response:

Thank you for your review, it actually pointed out something about this chapter that I didn't notice before, that Gus doesn't actually say much to the grown-ups. I conceptualized the interactions separately and then put them together to make a chapter. I tend to focus more on what he's thinking. Part of the reason I had Ted and Ben talk so much is because this chapter might be the basis for later parts in the series. Thank you for your thoughtful review. Please keep reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: March 15, 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Quiet Happiness

Thanks for the chapter.  It is really fun to see things through Gus’s eyes.  You do a beautiful job describing things from a child’s point of view.  To be that consistently must be difficult. 

 

Gus is turning out to be a really terrific kid, and he seems happier with each passing chapter.  Maybe when it gets a little warmer, the next time they come here to NYC they can take Gus in a horse drawn carriage though Central Park.  They better hurry as they are trying to do away with that, as some feel that it is cruelty to the horse. Then again, many don’t feel that way.  Either way, for now, it is still a very popular tourist thing to do. 

 

Again, thanks for the story.

DavidR

 

PS:  Forget the horse drawn carriage; I think Gus would love a Broadway show.  So would Justin and Brian.

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: May 11, 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 - Taking a Swing At Surprises

Those were a nice couple of chapters.  I am now back up to

date.  I do enjoy reading situations from a kid’s point of view.

Sometimes it is so simple, and other times it gets very

complicated.  That was a good explanation of Justin’s ‘flash

back’.  I think Gus got it, or a much as he is currently capable

of understanding.

 

Nice ending with Brian petting the dog.  We all knew that was

going to happen, as it was only a question of when.

 

Thanks again,

DavidR

 

Author's Response:

Thank you for your review!!! I’m glad you think the flashback explanation worked. To be honest, I was waffling about how to do the Brian dog thing, so I was relieved that it fit in the last chapter.

Please keep reading and reviewing!!!

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: July 10, 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30: A Friend and Unfriendly Smiles

Thanks for these last few chapters.  I hadn’t realized that when Brian told Lindsey that he paid for her to get sober but not to take his son back, he left her with nothing.  That is what Debbie accused him of.  It does put Lindsey in a difficult position.  Still – Debbie has to learn to keep her f… hands to herself.  Happily, Gus had a better way of saying that.

 

Thanks again.

DavidR

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: August 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33:Birthday Wishes

     It is not unusual for family members not to get along.  Some line up on one side, and others line up on the other side.  Sure it makes Gus sad, especially so when it involves his own mothers.  But – that is life, and it doesn’t look like there is going to be any improvement in family relations any time soon.        

      Brian’s and Justin’s birthday present was wonderful.  I guess they understood the pressure Gus has been harboring having difficulty reading.  Those of us who don’t have or never have that problem, have problems understanding that a child that young would feel such pressure.  Now we know!  Great ending to the chapter.

      DavidR

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review and support!!. I hope you don't mind if I respond to your comments out of order.

First, I'm so glad you enjoyed the gift/father-son bonding. Speaking for myself, as a person with a severe learning disability, the pressure/fear related to having trouble with a brain that doesn't want to cooperate,starts early and doesn't go away. That said, adaptive technology is a great help and so are people who are willing to be supportive, patient, and understanding. :-) People like you and the others in the wonderful Whispers community!!!

Secondly, it's true that family strife is nothing new or original, but it's often painful. Gus wants to be a good boy, he just doesn't realize that he can't be perfect. The good thing is that, whatever their differences, everyone in the family loves him even if they're not very good about showing it all or most of the time.

Please keep reading and reviewing, thanks!!!

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: October 02, 2012 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35:The Value of a Routine

     It is an imperfect world, people say things and do things they shouldn’t.  Jordan’s mother was wrong to do and say what she did.  Good fiction will often mirror the real world.  A slur in fiction is, like it or not, mirrors real life. Even previous Gus is not perfect.  Career day with Debbie was not perfect, by a long shot.  Ok, ok, only Brian and Justin are perfect (just kidding!)

    Thanks, terrific chapter.

    DavidR

Author's Response:

Yes, you're right that life is definitely not perfect. Although I hope to make Gus' fictional life a pretty good one overall, we will see if my muses agree. I know you were kidding in your review, but sometimes I do worry that I'm making Brian, Justin, and Gus too perfect in this little au. I just love their family life so much that I'm not really eager to explore their darker sides, at least for the moment. Thank you as always for reading and reviewing. I always enjoy hearing from you. :-)

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: December 31, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

    Thanks, I liked the story.

 

     It could end right there or you could write a sequel.  If this

is it, then fine, it was certainly worth reading.

    If a sequel comes to mind, then you already have developed

the characters and a story.

 

   Again, thanks for the fine story.

 

DavidR

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: January 30, 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Terrific story.  The changes from chapter to chapter have been

amazing.  We start off with Justin being abused, and only a few

chapters later to him moving in to Britin with his two sons.

Wow!  Then to top it all off, Melanie and Brian, though

probably only temporary, are going to live under the same

roof. That deserves a double Wow!

 

Now B & J just signed partnership papers, and had their own

private commitment ceremony.  Geeez, what is next?  Of

course you should not answer that question as I will simply

wait to find out.

 

Thanks again, to the story.

DavidR

Author's Response:

Lol... I wasn't planning on telling you anyway :P

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: February 02, 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Thanks for this terrific story.  I really didn’t see that much

gloom.  Sure Lindsey is gone, but now Brian has Justin

and two more little Justins (Sam and Eli), and he now has

his parental rights to Gus back.

 

Justin has Brian, Tom gone from his life, and two sons to

raise.  For the most part, things turned out really good.

Even Gus still has one mom and two dads who love him,

and two younger brothers plus JR.

 

Again, thanks for the story, I enjoyed reading it.

DavidR

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: February 10, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Ch 4 - The Last Postcard

Thanks for the story, it was terrific.  Most of all, I always enjoy,

but rarely find, a story where Brian is celebrated by all, and

given credit for the man he is.  Those postal cards were

wonderful.

 

Again, thanks for the story.

DavidR

Author's Response:

Dear DavidR,

Thank you.  Brian should be celebrated; he did a lot for a lot of people during the series.  This way, with the postcards, he has something tangible to go back and look at to remind him.

Thanks for the review!

- Jackie

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: March 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Tuesday, August 23rd, 2005...Part I

Thanks for the story, it really is well written and wonderfully creative.  However – I am not as forgiving as Justin.  I know Brian was dealing with cancer, low self esteem, and scared of his relationship with Justin.  Still he was, in my opinion, obligated to tell Justin.  The only way we know how bad it was for Justin was from Jennifer. I think a little paragraph or two about Justin’s feelings about being stood up would have shown in detail that Brian’s actions were cruel.  I know Brian was in surgery the day they usually meet, but Brian knew before that day that he wouldn’t meet Justin.  I don’t believe Brian is a cruel person, but here, that word fits his actions.  As I said, I am not that forgiving.

 

I loved the chapter.  I am so glad that Justin told Brian how he felt.  Now let’s see how Brian responds. 

 

Anyway, thanks for the chapter and the story.  I am really enjoying it.

 

DavidR

Author's Response:

Dear David,

It's so good to see your name in the comment section! I've always loved and appreciated your thoughtful comments in the past and I do this one as well. I think you are right - Brian was cruel. I also think that Justin SHOULD HAVE made more of an issue of it. You are right, it was a missed opportunity on my part. Reading back over the chapter, it does seem that Justin was a tad too lenient. I guess, the only way to justify Justin's permissive attitude is with the fact that he loves Brian so deeply. So....I'll go with that. LOL! However, I will do my best not to miss great opportunities for good-old-fashioned-yet-so-satisfying angst again. :)

Thank you again for sharing your thoughts with me and keeping me on my toes. I hope you'll continue to do so.

Cheers,

Vin

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: June 09, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Thanks for the story.  That it sort of how I see too, 15 years from the

QAF end.  I too assumed they finally lived together as a loving

couple, at Britin.

 

Nice job, nicely written. Thanks again.

DavidR

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for this kind review. I'm happy that you liked the story, and any time I hear 'nicely written' it makes me smile with appreciation.

 

I have no doubt that Brian and Justin couldn't live apart for any length of time, and that they settled in at Britin as soon as Justin established himself in the art world.

 

That's my fantasy, and I'm sticking to it!

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: May 20, 2013 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

    That was a wonderful story.  As I am sure you know, it is really

great when eventually, B & J are happy and together.  Sure, it took awhile, but that is where we end up.  You know the phase

“happily ever after?”  Well that is what happened here, and we

should add, “’and they lived’  happily ever after.’”

    One more time, thank you for this wonderful story.

    DavidR

Author's Response:

Yes, it's really great when they end up together, unlike in the show. Thank you very much for reading and commenting. Hugs.

Yoli

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: November 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: the screams all sound the same

As I said in prior comments, you do write action very well.  This chapter was action packed.  I could almost visually see the fight.  Happily though, it was written, else I probably would have had to look away.   

   “ ……  the prince rips out the hunter's heart, crushing it in his hand. The man's eyes roll     

    back, and Justin watches for a few seconds, knowing that he is now dead”.

Now that was gruesome.  Remind me never to p*ss you off.  I think I will skip lunch.

      I wonder how long it will take for Justin and Dustin to find out who hired these guys? What is Brian going to say?   We will see as the story unfolds.  I think the “s*it is going to hit the fan.  I know that this is just a wild guess, but I don’t trust Marcus.  He just may side, not so much with Craig, but with the King and follow tradition.  I think he is that sort; a rule is a rule, and he must obey the King (I think?); though he would be a wonderful ally for Justin to have.

       Thanks again for the chapter.

       DavidR

Author's Response:

LOL :) Sorry for the ick factor! :)

Criag has a new plan up his sleeve to keep Dustin and Justin preoccupied for awhile. And unfortunately, this new plan will affect Brian! 

Thanks again for your great comments :)

Best wishes,

Snow

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: September 27, 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Give it all to Me

    Nice chapter.  My concern though is what will Brian say when he finds out.  Also, how does one tell your lover that you are now a Hybrid.  Craig told Justin:             

              "He won't accept you anymore, not like this…….”

If pity makes Brian soft, then what will fangs and claws do.  Soft, softer, softest!

    Anyway, thanks for the story.  It is sure tol get even more interesting.  I have no idea how all this will play out.

    DavidR

 

Author's Response:

Yeah... Brian's reaction isn't going to be one of sudden acceptance, that's for sure. Thank again for your comments, I hope you continue to enjoy this!

Hugs,

Snow

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: October 29, 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Intermission

     Very good action scene.  I do believe that the 3 wolves are dead, and that Justin just saved Brian’s life.  I just don’t think that Brian sees it that way.  I do wonder if Brian will now reject Justin - at least for now.  It sure is going to be interesting to hear (read) Justin’s explanation as to what he is.  Brian can’t say he doesn’t believe him, he saw it for himself.       I don’t think that Craig is as secure and invincible as he thinks he is.  Who knows what Molly will discover in those books.  Also, l still feel that it is better for Jennifer to have the spell broken, and returns somehow to Tucker, taking Molly with her. Assuming that is possible. I get the feeling that it is better to be human than a hybrid, werewolf, or vampire.

    Wonderful last few chapters. 

    Thanks again.

    DavidR

  

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your comments and feedback! A lot will be happening in the next few chapters. Thank you so much for reading!! :)

Best wishes to you!

Snow

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: November 09, 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Dominos

     I thought from the beginning that the Craig / Justin relationship wouldn’t last.  However, I never thought that Craig would try to have his own son killed.  I did feel felt that Justin, to protect his mother and sister, would do something to get rid of Craig, but I just wonder whether he could kill his own father.  Hopefully he and Molly can find something is that book to do something.  Now that Brian is bate, I don’t know the extent Justin will go to insure his safety.  I wonder how Dustin will feel when/if he finds out that Craig has hired wolves to kill Justin.  The intrigue is interesting .  Nice going!

    Thanks for the Chapter.

     DavidR

Author's Response:

Justin is more human than monster, regardless of being a hybrid, and that is a trait that he isn't willing to trade for anything. You'll learn more about Craig's motives in the next chapter. Thank you so much for your comments! I always appreciate them :)

Hugs,

Snow

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: November 28, 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: Pucker Up

      Interesting couple of chapters.  There are huge conflicts. 

     There is sweet, energetic, lovable little Justin Taylor who is now a monster – sometimes.  I do understand Brian’s dilemma.  Plus, being compelled, as Justin cleverly understood, was a terrible thing for Brian to experience.  Can he accept Justin even if Justin promises never to use it?  Brian faced death, a horrible death because of Justin.  Is Justin worth it? 

    Dustin was faced with a conflict: sworn to protect his prince, and sworn to obey his prince.  We saw what happened when the two came into conflict.  What happens if/when Justin’s and Craig’s conflict become known?  When Dustin finds out that it was Craig who hired the killers, now what, as he is sworn to protect his prince.  Who will Dustin side with, or given the conflict, will he become powerless and ineffective?  Even Marcus will face a difficult choice.  Does he do what is best for the pack, or support his king, or maybe even take Justin’s side.  These conflicts are very cleverly written, and it will be very interesting to see how all this plays out. I won’t even try to guess.

    Thank for the chapter.

    David R  

Author's Response: Brian has a lot to think about it, and unfortunately for him, Craig has another plan up his sleeve to keep his head in the game. Dustin also has a lot to think about. He has made a true friend in Justin, but Craig is the king... when Dustin finds out the truth, what will he/can he do? And you're right, even Markus has some choices he will need to make soon. I'm so happy that you are enjoying this story. Having never written a supernatural story such as this before (except for my poor attempt at The Lover which I scratched and will probably never continue writing), I really wanted to avoid it from being "vampire/werewolf porn" or fluff. So I really appreciate your comments on the numerous character conflicts that are going on in this story. Thanks again!

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: February 09, 2013 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43: Monsters, Men, and everything in between

     Thanks, that was a wonderful chapter – so much happened.  I had hoped that Craig would be spared and banished to Transylvania or where ever they can send a Hybrid never to return.  Not that he is not a sh*t, but he is Justin’s father.  Even Justin wanted to resolve the problem without killing.  Very clever to have Dustin fight Craig as I really didn’t want Justin to kill his own father.  Still Justin helped, but only to save Brian.

    I know you say that we are near the end of this story, yet there are so many issues to be resolved.  To list a few:

          Justin really had no desire to be King.  Now what?

          What is Brian’s role.  One of your other readers joked that now Brian would be Queen.  I don’t think Brian would like to be called that (that was funny).  Now what?

          What about Molly and Jennifer?

          What about Dustin’s (I don’t know what you call them) friends?

    Yes, the end is near but still…….

   Thanks again for this terrific chapter and story.

    DavidR

Author's Response: Yes, there still are quite a few issues to resolve, which I hope I can resolve in the next few chapters! The chapter I am working on right now deal with Jennifer and Molly, once that's out of the way, I can work on the rest. LOL, I can't really imagine a Queen Brian, but that IS funny! :) Again, thanks so much for your review! I hope to have the next chapter up later today!

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: March 05, 2013 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50: It's only time

    I have been disappointed with Justin these last few chapter.  He is happy being King of the Hybrids.  It is a life he wants to live.  As for my point of view, it is not a life that Brian would like to live.  Even before this chapter, I figured that it is time for Brian to say good bye to Justin.  It makes sense to me.

   Problem is, that this wasn’t the last chapter.  Justin's interest in witch craft, and where are the witches?  Is there something that can be done?  If not, maybe Justin and Brian can live a type of long distance relationship.   Maybe yes, maybe no. 

   I gather there is one more chapter.  Let’s see what you come up with.  Personally, I am ok, with the separation.  I don’t see a way out.

   DavidR

Author's Response: I'm thinking this story may end at chapter 52..potentially 53 if I can't tie all the loose ends together in 52. Brian never felt welcomed in the pack. Other than Justin, there is no desire for him to join them, and Justin finally realized that Brian won't ever be happy choosing to be with him in the castle...there will always be regret of some kind because of Brian's past experiences with the pack as a human. It's too much bad memories and bad history. The witches are coming back! You'll see them soon :) Thanks so much for your reviews!

Reviewer: DavidR Signed
Date: May 18, 2013 Title: Chapter 23: BIG QUESTION!!

    I finally caught up and am now current with this story.  I like

it.  You have done a real good job.  I don’t intend to go anywhere,

so let the story take as long as it is going to take.  I know that is

not much help, but what I hope you will get out of my comments

is just let it happen. 

   So, write when you can or want.  Please – it is a good story,

don’t rush it.  If you don’t put out a new chapter for several

weeks (or whatever), so what?  I will be here to read it when you

do.

  Thanks for the story.

  DavidR

 

Author's Response:

Just a HUGE thank you for the review! x