Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2020 01:42 AM · On: Chapter 24 - Episode 24(All Better Now)
Great chapter. I loved the scene of Brian trying to put the swing set together. He was so handsome. Fantastic writing.
Author's Response: I like Justin being there and suggesting they hire someone to put the swing set together.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: March 05, 2020 02:30 PM · On: Chapter 23 Season 2, Episode 23(Home is Where the Ass is)
Yeah, I think with Michael being away, the gang pretty much grew up. Now that Michael has returned, they are starting to see things pretty clearly and realizing that he is pretty much an overgrown child.
Author's Response: Now if Michael could only see that. I could change it, but I love anti-Michael too much.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: March 02, 2020 10:15 AM · On: Chapter 23 Season 2, Episode 23(Home is Where the Ass is)
Always Michael wanting to be the center of the world and who doesn't understand that people change. Great update.
Author's Response: The story changes but Michael stays the same.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: March 02, 2020 03:38 AM · On: Chapter 23 Season 2, Episode 23(Home is Where the Ass is)
Great update. Love this story. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response: I will never tire of reading reviews like this. Thank you.
Reviewer: tiger062 (Signed) · Date: March 02, 2020 01:26 AM · On: Chapter 23 Season 2, Episode 23(Home is Where the Ass is)
Just read the last 2 chapters. Emmett's 'prom' was great - much better than the original. Glad that Hobbs was convicted - hate it when lawyers turn on the true victim - happens far too often in reality - espiecially rape cases. Michael - as always - is a dick...
Author's Response: Well this chapter was all about corrections and Hobbs was not going to get away with his dispicable act. Not this time.
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: March 01, 2020 05:20 PM · On: Chapter 23 Season 2, Episode 23(Home is Where the Ass is)
thanks for update, love it
Author's Response: Glad to know that you enjoyed it.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2020 05:16 PM · On: Chapter 22 - Episode 22 (Full Circle)
Why should Brian weigh in on this, it was Michael's life... because Michael has a pea brain that causes him to not be able to think and make a decision for himself????
And you got me with their prom night. I'm a sucker for 'Justin remembering the prom' stories. One of my guilty pleasures. And it choked me up...
But, you just had to throw the Daphne-scenario in there. I felt sick...
Did you ever read butterflytiger's Ruined? I just dread stories like that...
Thank you for making it a memorable night for Justin...
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: I know but I needed something where Hobbs paid for doing wrong. It's a shame that someone had to suffer though. At least the victem got justice.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2020 04:37 PM · On: Chapter 21 - Episode 21(Running to Stand Still)
This was pretty much the standard show episode, but you totally cracked me up at the end: but since he hoped differently... LOL... Good luck with that. David won't want his whiny ass anymore this time, than last.
Good Job!
HUGS ~Cathy
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2020 08:51 AM · On: Chapter 22 - Episode 22 (Full Circle)
It's a very good idea for Prom Daphne and Justin had a good time and Hobbs went to jail.
Author's Response: I always felt that Hobbs shouldn't have gotten off Scot free.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: February 15, 2020 03:24 PM · On: Chapter 20-Episode 20(The King of Babylon)
Once again, I'm chuckling. Some of your rewrites can do that to a person.
First, just because Justin gave the CROWN to David, JUSTIN still won. So, Justin should get the thousand and the Bahamas trip. I couldn't quite figure that one out.
Well, long and short of it... Michael had to eat his words. Justin didn't make a fool of himself... and David out-danced most of the other guys. (Even at his advanced age.)
I'm sure it was all of Michael's grumbling about Blake that had ticked Ted off that he signed David up. Michael really wasn't a very good friend to any of those guys when it came right down to it. He could have also still been pissy about "their invitations being lost in the mail" for Senator Baxters party.
My Favorite line of this chapter: Brian had gone along because he hadn't wanted people to think he was a kept man.
That is SO CLASSIC Kinney... Touché !!!
In regards to Brian being put on suspension and possibly losing his job... WHY HASN'T HE WRUNG MICHAEL'S NECK - LITERALLY???
But, why is that holding up him opening his own agency? I would think that would push him to get it started.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: It does eventually. But as alway Michael's comments get in the way, but Mikey's slowly losing control. Thank you for the lovely comments.
Reviewer: BBQueen (Signed) · Date: February 14, 2020 06:09 AM · On: Chapter 1 -Season 1 - Episode 1(Premiere)
Love this story. Cant wait for more. Michael sucks so much. Love how Brianis so open with him and Justin. Keep up the great work.
Author's Response: Thank you, I'll try.
Reviewer: Lori (Signed) · Date: February 11, 2020 06:12 PM · On: Chapter 20-Episode 20(The King of Babylon)
Wanted you to know I really love this story. Hope to see you post again soon. Thank for the good read.
Author's Response: Thank you, it's nice to know that you are enjoying this.
Reviewer: Draccone (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2020 11:55 PM · On: Chapter 20-Episode 20(The King of Babylon)
I love this story do much. I can't wait for you to post more. I never want it to end. LMAO. Keep up the great work.
Author's Response: At this rate it may never end. LOL.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2020 01:05 PM · On: Chapter 20-Episode 20(The King of Babylon)
I'm glad that Justin won again, but thought it was a great gesture to give the crown to David. It ticked Michael off, so that's always a win-win. LOL
Author's Response: Ticking Michael off is so much fun.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2020 10:09 AM · On: Chapter 20-Episode 20(The King of Babylon)
The changes are very subtle but they are there and make everything even better! Thank you.
Author's Response: Thank you. That's what I was hoping for.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2020 07:48 AM · On: Chapter 20-Episode 20(The King of Babylon)
Lol funny chapter I had actually forgotten all the stuff in that episode
Author's Response: Some of the stuff in certain episodes are difficult to figure in because Justin wasn't aware but a few changes here and there and it works.
Reviewer: nickknack (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2020 04:53 AM · On: Chapter 1 -Season 1 - Episode 1(Premiere)
I am so loving this story and am especially enjoying some of the subtle little changes and details you are treating us to. Eagerly anticipating the next chapter.
Author's Response: Glad to hear!
Reviewer: tiger062 (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2020 02:19 AM · On: Chapter 20-Episode 20(The King of Babylon)
Still intrigued and looking forward to more subtle changes. I like that Ted entered David into the competition and of course Michael is still a 'pain in the arse'.
Author's Response: Hehe. Getting even with Mikey is the main theme here.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2020 09:27 PM · On: Chapter 20-Episode 20(The King of Babylon)
I like This Time better for this episode. Your rewriting of each episode is amazing. What a fantastic idea.
Author's Response: Thank you a high compliment indeed.
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2020 08:54 PM · On: Chapter 20-Episode 20(The King of Babylon)
thanks for an ealy update. now another week wating *sniff*
Author's Response: Sorry, but life is getting difficult. Hope you find it worth the wait.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2020 02:46 PM · On: Chapter 19 - Episode 19 (Good Grief)
I don't know if you intended for the funeral to be a comedy routine, but I about died laughing! (it makes me think of another funeral story, but I can't remember which one.)
Where's Debbie when you need her? With Horvath showing up... Then with her idiot son...
Michael and his BIG MOUTH! Cripes! Because of him, the police are now questioning Brian and telling him not to leave town. Man, I hope Brian wrings his bloody neck! I gather there won't be any scene between Brian and Michael in the loft after the funeral... THANK GOD!!!!
And no Daphne and Justin... another screw-up of Cowlips! (Thank you for all your fixes!)
Are Melanie and Lindsay supposed to be together? Where's Gui? We never heard of him leaving...
So, what is Michael dealing with that Brian is spending so much time with him?
I'm interested in knowing how far into the series you plan to go? Are you going to do all 83 episodes?
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: Let me see if I can answer all your questions. I'm glad you found the funeral fun because I was chuckling the whole time I was writing it. Deb is still on the outs with Justin and her meeting Horvath early wouldn't help. Let's face it Michael often said things that had Brian looking bad and weren't even true. At the moment Justin hasn't had any contact with the two, so we don't know what happened. If Melanie was smart she wouldn't take Lindsay back, but Mel isn't the most sensible afterall she did pick Michael to father her daughter. A big mistake in my opinion. Michael is dealing with David, he does nothing but complain about the man but because he doesn't have anyone courting him he keeps dating him. I'm trying to do all 83 episodes, but some of the changes make certain episodes redundant.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2020 11:39 PM · On: Chapter 19 - Episode 19 (Good Grief)
Well, I certainly didn't expect that!! Joan finds out Brian is gay, and dies of shock!! I am just loving the fact that Brian is way more outgoing with Justin this time around, and isn't having any problems with everyone knowing all about the two of them, either!!
Author's Response: I do feel that Joanie dying saves Brian a whole lot of pain.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2020 09:02 AM · On: Chapter 19 - Episode 19 (Good Grief)
I did not expect that. The autopsy will only reveal the heart attack. I'm glad Justin is with Brian this time Michael is so useless.
Author's Response: Maybe, maybe not. Mikey was his usual self pointing out what he felt Brian was doing wrong. Good thing Justin was there to keep things in prospective.
Reviewer: wellreadbunny (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2020 03:13 AM · On: Chapter 19 - Episode 19 (Good Grief)
OK. This was right out of left field. Did not see that happening.
Author's Response: That's good, right?
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2020 02:11 AM · On: Chapter 19 - Episode 19 (Good Grief)
Wow, wasn't expecting that. Great update. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response: Surprise! When I was writing this chapter it just kinda took a twist.
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2020 01:40 AM · On: Chapter 19 - Episode 19 (Good Grief)
thanks for update. Bummer I have to wait a week
Author's Response: Sorry.
Reviewer: tiger062 (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2020 01:34 AM · On: Chapter 19 - Episode 19 (Good Grief)
And the plot thickens. I'm very intrigued. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Yep, of course it does mess with the episodes where Joanie showed up. No showing up at Brian's office or chocolate, chocolate chip cake.
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2020 12:32 AM · On: Chapter 19 - Episode 19 (Good Grief)
Oh boy. Horvath can't really believe that Brian killed his mother.
Author's Response: Horvath doesn't know Brian. This was before he met Deb which could be a good thing.
Reviewer: Draccone (Signed) · Date: February 02, 2020 10:10 PM · On: Chapter 19 - Episode 19 (Good Grief)
I was not expecting that at all. Justin should use Jack's dead to get Brian tested for cancer or something. More please!
Author's Response: That's an idea. Wish I'd thought of it. He does eventually get Brian to get tested if that helps.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: February 02, 2020 08:30 PM · On: Chapter 19 - Episode 19 (Good Grief)
Lol another twist excellent great chapter
Author's Response: Glad you like it. I enjoyed writing this chapter.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2020 03:41 AM · On: Chapter 18-Episode 18(Surprise Kill)
You know... I always thought Mikey should have been glad and grateful he was wanted to be picked up...
I really like how you're able to come up with scenarios for Justin to find out things. It takes Brian being a little more open and accepting of Justin... but hey... that's a good thing!
I'm anxiously waiting for immigration to knock on Lindsay's door... isn't it past time for her and Gui's wedding? Hehe... maybe they secretly went through with it.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: Anything is possible. I know I did something about this but I don't remember what chapter it was in. Just remember the government works slowly.
Reviewer: Draccone (Signed) · Date: January 27, 2020 05:15 PM · On: Chapter 18-Episode 18(Surprise Kill)
I want more and more and more and... More!!!
Author's Response: Don't worry. I do have more and I hope you continue to want to read.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: January 27, 2020 08:49 AM · On: Chapter 18-Episode 18(Surprise Kill)
It's difficult for Justin to fix things when he doesn't know what happened the first time, but he does very well. Are you going to tell us what happened to Lindsay?
Author's Response: Yes. It turns up in the next few chapters. But like with Mikey she can't simply disappear.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: January 27, 2020 08:24 AM · On: Chapter 18-Episode 18(Surprise Kill)
So hard at times for Justin to navigate history when he didn’t know what was going on at times. You do a great job running different scenarios to meet the outcomes
Author's Response: I try my best.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: January 27, 2020 03:30 AM · On: Chapter 18-Episode 18(Surprise Kill)
Great update. Love This Time better than the original in so many ways. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response: Glad you are liking my changes. It's something I've wanted to do for awhile.
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: January 26, 2020 09:18 PM · On: Chapter 18-Episode 18(Surprise Kill)
thanks for update
Author's Response: You're welcome.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: January 20, 2020 09:52 AM · On: Chapter 17 - Episode 17(Solution)
Great idea to call immigration. I hope Lindsay and Gui will end up in jail. I also hope that in your story Michael will not be forgiven as easily as in the series for his shabby behavior.
Author's Response: You'll learn more about what happens to Lindsay in later chapters. Michael won't be forgiven at least not by Justin. However he does need to be around for bad guy status. One thing for sure he doesn't get Ben.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: January 20, 2020 08:53 AM · On: Chapter 17 - Episode 17(Solution)
It is so clever how Justin can gently manipulate Brian’s responses to the actions with the power of hindsight
Author's Response: Hindsight does help.
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: January 20, 2020 08:18 AM · On: Chapter 17 - Episode 17(Solution)
great. Thanks for update
Author's Response: You're welcome. Hope you liked it.
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: January 20, 2020 01:56 AM · On: Chapter 17 - Episode 17(Solution)
Sneaky Justin. Good job. Never liked Gui.
Author's Response: Yep, Justin can be very sneaky.
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: January 20, 2020 01:34 AM · On: Chapter 15 - Episode 15 (The Ties That Bind)
Daycare is a great idea. Justin continues to remember problems and come up with great solutions.
Author's Response: It did block Mel and her attitude.
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: January 20, 2020 01:29 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Episode 14(A Change of Heart)
I like how Justin's uncle was gay and left a hefty inheritance to him. Sneaky Kip, but I did like how Justin tried to trick him inot not getting to Brian. So happy that Brian is accpeting Justin's help.
Author's Response: Justin not having to worry about tuition was a surprise to him and now Kinnetik can get off the ground earlier. I like that Brian didn't diss Justin, but included him when Kip came calling.
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: January 20, 2020 01:10 AM · On: Chapter 13- Episode 13 (Very Stupid People)
A much older and wiser Justin is filled with lots of good ideas.
Author's Response: Yet he still looks so young. Haha!
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: January 20, 2020 01:02 AM · On: Chapter 12-Episode 12 (Move It or Lose It)
Finally had time to catch up on this AU. I like how Brian is believing Justin that Michael is a pain. Justin seems to be navigating this new universe pretty well. Love the rewriting of the script.
Author's Response: Thank you. There were certain things I just had to change.
Author's Response: Thank you. There were certain things I just had to change.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2020 10:36 PM · On: Chapter 17 - Episode 17(Solution)
Wonderful update... totally loved the ending:
The next day Justin made an anonymous call to Immigration. I can hardly wait to see how you play this out. Will they deport Gui earlier than planned (which doesn't seem the way Immigration would handle something like that.) BUT... if Immigration comes knocking on Lindsay's door, Lindsay is bound to get in trouble.
Marriage Fraud is a federal crime; they can be imprisoned for not more than five years, or fined not more than $250,000, or both.
(I highly doubt Brian's got the money to bail out his friend.) hehe...
My big question is: Who is Lindsay going to blame for the leak to Immigration?
I REALLY HOPE Mr. Snob isn't forgiven so easily... yeah Deb will probably allow her baby back in the fold like he didn't rip her heart out... but with Brian and Ted starting Kinnetik, they won't have time to say, "That's okay, Mikey." He spits on them, yet, thinks he should be forgiven.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: What's even worse is that she was involving Gus in a federal crime. Something Mel should have warned her about. The question about who Lindsay is going to blame is a good one. You'll just have to wait and see. Justin doesn't have time to worry about Mikey.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2020 08:42 PM · On: Chapter 17 - Episode 17(Solution)
Oh this is getting really good. Love it. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response: Glad you like it. Thank you for the wonderful review.
Author's Response: Glad you like it. Thank you for the wonderful review.
Reviewer: wellreadbunny (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2020 08:24 PM · On: Chapter 17 - Episode 17(Solution)
Good for Justin. Someone finally used their head.
Author's Response: Thank you, I like Justin to come out ahead.
Reviewer: BBQueen (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2020 07:55 PM · On: Chapter 1 -Season 1 - Episode 1(Premiere)
Im so glad you updated. I always wondered why immigration was never called. Glad justin is doing that...love this story..plz keep going
Author's Response: Somewhere there was a part where justice was served but I can't seem to find it.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2020 09:18 AM · On: Chapter 16 - Episode 16 (French Fried)
Let's see what you'll find so Justin can stop Brian from losing his rights to Gus. In the series he should have made Gui understand that he was Gus' father and that Gui had nothing to say. Brian gave up too easily. Mélanie being a lawyer she could have found a solution for Gus to have 3 parents. Maybe in your story Lindsay and Gui will end up in jail. I'm sure Mélanie and Brian will take care of Gus very well.
A self defense class is welcome and Justin should warn Daphne about Hobbs.
Author's Response: Don't worry Justin is indeed able to stop Brian from giving up his rights. Gui will be a thing of the past. As for Daph, Justin won't let her be alone with Hobbs and she'll know why they are taking self defense classes.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2020 06:02 AM · On: Chapter 16 - Episode 16 (French Fried)
Well, I was wondering if the girls were broke up... as last we heard, they were still living together in the house. This was another Cowlip screw-up. What type of friends and family would allow this? Brian came off as spineless to me. That day in the grocery store... he should have threatened Gui, not slunk away and let Gui have the last word. He was STILL Gus' father. He should have forbidden Lindsay having Gus around Gui... should have told her he would turn her in and take Gus away if she went through with this... not give up his rights. The whole arc makes me boil. And Melanie as an attorney, should have been very vocal about the laws she breaking... and done it in front Gui. The whole bunch, just let Gui and Lindsay ride roughshod over them. Well, my dear, you can really fix it this time.
Self-defense classes can never hurt. Justin needs to explain to Daphne what happened at prom, so she knows not to bully Hobbs.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: Daph knows but she's man enough to stand against Hobbs. The thing about the girls is Justin wasn't as involved with their goings on the first time so a lot of what's happening is new to him.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2020 05:23 AM · On: Chapter 16 - Episode 16 (French Fried)
Great chapter seeing Mel off side a bit was interesting in the series and a interesting spin here thank you
Author's Response: Shame she fell back into old habits. Maybe she'll learn.
Author's Response: Shame she fell back into old habits. Maybe she'll learn.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2020 02:53 AM · On: Chapter 16 - Episode 16 (French Fried)
Great update. Lindsey was never a favorite of mine. Mel can be a bitch, but she is an honest one. Terrific writing.
Author's Response: She has pissed me off too many times for me to make her nice. I'm hoping to redeem Mel though.
Author's Response: She has pissed me off too many times for me to make her nice. I'm hoping to redeem Mel though.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2020 09:50 AM · On: Chapter 15 - Episode 15 (The Ties That Bind)
A daycare is a great idea and in addition it prevented Brian from having his usual ways of managing pain after the announcement of his father. I love all the new ideas you have and it's so much better!
Author's Response: Thank you. A great compliment makes my day.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2020 10:01 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Episode 15 (The Ties That Bind)
So, I take it the girls are still together... but even still, if Melanie was in Florida (I NEVER understood this) did she fly home solely for the reason and fact that Brian was going to watch Gus? And if she was in Florida... why did Lindsay even call her? That says so very little about the women's characters.
But, it all turned out good... the daycare is an excellent idea, and good to have in place from the ground up. Will Ted be the CFO? And since Melanie was helping out... will he put her in as the company lawyer? Although that could get sticky if custody issues come up. We've heard nothing about Cynthia yet either.
And Brian working after hearing Jack's news, was a much-needed improvement.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: I'm thinking Melanie went to visit her parents who live in Florida. If i'm right they were separated, though Mel probably called to check in on Gus before she left to come home.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2020 09:54 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Episode 15 (The Ties That Bind)
Ha! So clever a day care centre and a business distraction for Brian before he went it to Brian Kinney pain management
Author's Response: It's not original but it did seem to fit my plot.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2020 06:17 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Episode 15 (The Ties That Bind)
Great chapter. Love all these new ideas you keep coming up with. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response: Thank you. I couldn't help coming up with new ideas, which isn't easy with all the wonderful writers we have on this site.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2020 04:48 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Episode 15 (The Ties That Bind)
Love it!! What a great idea it was for Justin to come up with daycare at the agency, and definitely good timing, too. It eliminated the opportunity for Brian to go out, and made him look good in front of Melanie, which is always a good thing.
Author's Response: Melanie showing up and berating Justin was something I wanted changed. Glad you loved it.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2020 02:02 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Episode 14(A Change of Heart)
First, thank you for the long chapter, and I have to say, I like and approve of the story arc changes. I like the new character introduction of Mark, and who couldn't love Uncle George... God rest his soul.
I have to wonder what Craig did to George that his hand was severely burned and claw-like.
Jennifer is an ass... and she's wrong... they DO NOT have two hundred thousand dollars... One hundred thousand is Molly's - held in trust by Mark. How does she figure that's theirs? How do they plan to get their hands on it? Jen should take the money and run... Craig will probably burn it up on his whores.
So, Marcus got nothing? I'm assuming Justin received a very nice mansion in the bequeathment. But, I'm a little confused regarding the emancipation. Justin told Ryder he was 18. Eighteen is considered an adult... thus no reason to file emancipation, and Craig would have had no right to Justin's money.
Will Brian agree to live in Justin's new mansion? It has to be a mansion if Uncle George had that much money.
Well, screw Ryder and Kip. Ryder should have been informed that Kip made a play for Brian and was rebuffed... thus the act of getting Justin fired. Well, with Brian quitting, maybe he can clue Marty in. I hope Ryder goes bankrupt, and Kip will lose his job. I REALLY hope Brian and Justin run into Kip, and Brian tells the sniveling baby to go screw someone who wants him... oh yeah... he's ugly... and probably can't find anyone. But Brian needs to humiliate him publicly.
Kiki needs to pull Brian aside and tell him what Debbie was doing to Justin. Hmm... maybe Justin and Brian can boycott the diner. What a witch!
And KINNETIK is born!!! At least with this change of events, Michael can't ever accuse Justin of being with Brian for his money... or using him.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: While Craig would have no rights to Justin's money, he would try to get it anyway. With the emancipation whether Justin needed it or not, it did block Craig. There's lots more coming, twist and turns I hope will surprise you.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2020 12:40 PM · On: Chapter 13- Episode 13 (Very Stupid People)
Aargh... I just lost my review...
I'm so happy that Brian decided to start his own agency - even a few years early... and asked Justin to join him... that should chap Mikey's ass.
I was a little confused:
"He actually admitted lying to me!" Brian growled.
It came out of the blue... no precursor as to who lied or about what... and then nothing reiterated after that. (Did Kip maybe admit Ryder didn't ask him to sit in on the meeting?) But, why would Brian be mad at Ryder for that?
Trouble's brewing at Chez Muncher's. Gui... Parental Rights...
Justin needs to figure out how to bite this in the bud. (This was when Melanie cheated - right?)
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: Thanks to your review I added a bit more hopefully making it clearer.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2020 12:05 PM · On: Chapter 12-Episode 12 (Move It or Lose It)
Okay, so it's 'let's play catch up' this morning... even at 5:30.
This was great... I'm glad Justin took the initiative and talked to Emmett. Like I said previously, it's been a long time since I watched the series, but I'm not sure how much Justin was around then... it must have been right after they came back from NY, and he was stayong at Debbie's.
But, widdle Mikey is trying to trump - best friend - I'm glad Brian got his number. But, if Justin wanted to play 'cross-examination' - I have no doubt he could talk circles around Michael.
Ah... no munchers to interrupt the spanking this time...
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: The first season there were lots of things that Justin didn't have knowledge of and this time he's not staying at Debbie's.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: January 04, 2020 01:12 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Episode 14(A Change of Heart)
Well, sorry to hear about Justin's Uncle George passing, but what an amazing turn of events. Now Justin won't have to work at the diner with Deb anymore, who by the way, I'm really waiting for someone (Brian would be great) to knock her down a few pegs. And Kip, while he thought he was accomplishing something by getting Justin fired, basically just got his by Brian getting ready to quit and start his own agency. Loved it!!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked this. Justin needed to have money and so Uncle George was born.
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2020 01:26 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Episode 14(A Change of Heart)
thanks for update
Author's Response: You're very much welcome.
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2020 11:43 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Episode 14(A Change of Heart)
Oh yes, I forgot about Debbie. She steals Justin's tips?
Author's Response: Debbie was getting sneaky, much to Kiki's disappointment.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2020 10:01 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Episode 14(A Change of Heart)
It was so good. Justin can help Brian make Kinnetic. it was only Kip who still found a way to harm someone. I like the turn that history takes. Debbie's behavior is quite miserable.
Author's Response: Kip's messing with Justin hurts Ryder since he'll no longer have Brian being brilliant. And Brian doesn't miss out on his trip to the Bahamas.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2020 09:55 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Episode 14(A Change of Heart)
Woohoo this is so much fun reviewing the series and putting little twists on them.
Yay money for the new agency and Justin did not have to suck weasel Kips dick!
Author's Response: Kip didn't get a chance to try to mess with Brian thanks to Justin.
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2020 07:05 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Episode 14(A Change of Heart)
OMG! What a strong chapter. Kip the rat is an idiot. Craigs brother knew him well, I hope Jennifer can it see it too. Soon! Brian gets the money he need. I'm happy for him. Justin deserves some relaxation. Thank you!
Author's Response: In looking for ways to make things go better for Brian with Justin's help I had to give another character that wasn't there a way to be of help.
Reviewer: tiger062 (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2020 02:51 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Episode 14(A Change of Heart)
Debbie stealing tips??? Her whole attitude is very suspicious - makes me wonder what she knows and what she's up to... Kip is a slimball - as always... Love the new twist... Some heads are going to expode - looking forward to it - you know Debbie...Michael...Ryder...
Author's Response: When you really look back Deb wasn't as supportive as she claimed to be. Sometimes writing a certain scene you can't help but put in twists that hopefully no one would expect.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2020 02:42 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Episode 14(A Change of Heart)
Wow, this was great. So much better than the original except for adding Kip. What a weasel he is. LOL. Fantastic writing.
Author's Response: Unfortunatly Kip will always come off as bad.
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2020 02:11 AM · On: Chapter 13- Episode 13 (Very Stupid People)
Brian is so much more open and I love it. They are so close. You can feel more trust from Brian. Brian and Justin forever <3 You write so beautifully! Thank you so much for sharing!
Author's Response: Now that was very nice of you to say. Michael has less say in how Brian should live his life has left Brian being more open.
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2020 02:02 AM · On: Chapter 12-Episode 12 (Move It or Lose It)
I like Brian and JUstin's development so much. Okay, Justin can now assess and change everthing better. Oh poor Emmett. Great chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you. There are some things that went down with Emmett and Ted that Justin didn't know about, so changing things might be a little difficult.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2019 02:24 PM · On: Chapter 13- Episode 13 (Very Stupid People)
I am all for Brian starting his agency now vs. later. And I definitely hope Justin is able to somehow stop Brian from giving up his rights to Gus, even if Melanie and Lindsay stay together. I never liked that he did that.
Author's Response: I never liked it either. That and the fact that Lindsay almost got away with an illegallity.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: December 30, 2019 07:34 PM · On: Chapter 13- Episode 13 (Very Stupid People)
Great twist I did wonder how you would spin this good job
Author's Response: The twists will be coming soon in the next few chapters. Hope you like them.
Author's Response: The twists will be coming soon in the next few chapters. Hope you like them.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 30, 2019 12:25 PM · On: Chapter 13- Episode 13 (Very Stupid People)
It was great and Brian is going to set up his agency. I can't wait to see how you're going to prevent Brian from losing his rights to Gus because of the French.guy.
Author's Response: I hope you enjoy what I have planned for the French guy.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 30, 2019 11:08 AM · On: Chapter 13- Episode 13 (Very Stupid People)
Oh, this is so good. You are great a rewriting the original scenes. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response: Thank you, your comment makes me happy.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 28, 2019 02:36 PM · On: Chapter 12-Episode 12 (Move It or Lose It)
I hope Justin will prevent Emmett from spending too much time at See the light! Michael is still whiny, some things don't change
Author's Response: I don't think Justin knew exactly what went down with the See the Light but he's sure to do something to medigate what happened. It's so hard to un-whine Michael.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 28, 2019 02:32 PM · On: Chapter 11 - Episode 11 (Surprise!)
It's good that Justin was able to change the birthday a bit. There has been less drama.
Author's Response: Nobody had any reason to blame Brian.
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: December 27, 2019 02:02 PM · On: Chapter 12-Episode 12 (Move It or Lose It)
thanks for update
Author's Response: You're welcome.
Reviewer: tiger062 (Signed) · Date: December 27, 2019 02:23 AM · On: Chapter 12-Episode 12 (Move It or Lose It)
Hmmm - found I had 4 chapters to catch up with - RL!!!!! I have to admit I'm very suspicious of Michael...could be it's because I never liked him...could be because he knows more than he's letting on. Looking forward to finding out...
Author's Response: I really, really wanted to put it on Michael, but with all the things he messed up on if I had him arrested, we wouldn't be able to fix the other things.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: December 26, 2019 08:20 PM · On: Chapter 12-Episode 12 (Move It or Lose It)
Here's hoping Justin talking with Emmett gets him feeling back to his usual self soon and not going through with the "See the Light' group. While it did work out for him in the end, all he really needed was a good friend to help him out and Justin ended up being a really good one to him.
Author's Response: I have big plans for Emmett later on.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 26, 2019 03:26 AM · On: Chapter 12-Episode 12 (Move It or Lose It)
Great chapter. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response: Thank you. Glad you liked it
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2019 03:07 PM · On: Chapter 11 - Episode 11 (Surprise!)
Oh oh did Michael have his fingers in the attempted break -in? It wouldn't surprise me...I'm glad Justin can change things.
Author's Response: I'd like nothing better then for Michael to get the blame but there is nothing there there.
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2019 03:00 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Episode 10 (Queens of the Road)
It started so well, despite the attempted break-in and Brian is open to things until Michael opens his mouth.
Author's Response: At least nothing was taken and Justin didn't run-away to New York. Sadly Michael is such a downer.
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Signed) · Date: December 23, 2019 07:33 PM · On: Chapter 9 Episode 9-(Daddy Dearest(Sonny Boy)
I love this story so much and I'm glad Brian didn't sign his rights. Rules of conduct for Michael....LOL How he holds the spoon is unique. ;D
Author's Response: It's always nice to know you love this story and even nicer to see reviews.
Author's Response: It's always nice to know you love this story and even nicer to see reviews.
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: December 23, 2019 03:45 PM · On: Chapter 11 - Episode 11 (Surprise!)
thanks for update.
Fucking Debbie
Author's Response: Debbie is still herself but tranlates differently this time.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: December 23, 2019 12:05 PM · On: Chapter 11 - Episode 11 (Surprise!)
I'm glad that Justin managed to change that party to a nice dinner instead. That didn't have a very good ending. And I do like Justin having more of a presence at the loft. It seems that this time around, he is having more access to things that he wasn't aware of before - now it's all firsthand knowledge.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked what Justin managed. Hopefully the end results of what happened before and what is happening now continue to improve.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 23, 2019 02:44 AM · On: Chapter 11 - Episode 11 (Surprise!)
This was much better than the disaster party. Your ideas are amazing. Great writing. Happy Holidays.
Author's Response: Thanks. I think Brian was the one hurt by how the original party ended, but he'd never let on. Merry Christmas!
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: December 23, 2019 12:02 AM · On: Chapter 11 - Episode 11 (Surprise!)
Suspicions... definitely... especially when one of the men said, "I thought you said this was going to be easy." Yeah... Justin should have hid outside or around the.corner and saw who was at the loft that day. Unequivocal proof. Oh well... if no neighbors can give a description... and no fingerprints... it's a moot point.
This was a MUCH better party. Michael still got together with David... we'll have to see how the job in NY goes now.
I'm still on my phone, and can hardly see to type.
HUGS. ÷Cathy
Author's Response: I have the same problem with reading on my cell phone. I'm glad you like the party since I didn't appreciate how everyone griped at Brian for doing what Debbie asked.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: December 22, 2019 02:56 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Episode 10 (Queens of the Road)
That's Michael for ya. Always one to ruin a good idea. Brian probably mentioned that it was Justin's idea and he just shot it down. Maybe Justin can still try to convince him of doing it. But I was very happy that Justin thwarted the break in at the apartment.
Author's Response: The only drawback is now Justin doesn't get to steal Brian's credit card and go to New York.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 19, 2019 08:35 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Episode 10 (Queens of the Road)
I hope that Brian will not take into account the opinion of Michael who does not have the well being of Brian at heart nor that of Ted apparently. Damn Michael! It's a shame we don't know who wanted to steal the loft.
Author's Response: Give me enough time. The problem is that this time nothing was stolen, so you don't have any clues.
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: December 19, 2019 07:42 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Episode 10 (Queens of the Road)
Fuck Mikey I say lol
Author's Response: If you remember, Mikey was always chastising Brian when ever something went wrong, like the Kip Thomas thing, or the Marvin Telson one.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: December 19, 2019 02:29 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Episode 10 (Queens of the Road)
I've been watching for this, and ended up reading it on my phone. I think my eyes are officially crossed.
I'm a little disappointed. We didn't find out who the supposed robbers are, and no one was caught. Or why they thought they could rob it. Because last time, there was a key and code used.
Damn Mikey... keep your trap shut. He NEVER had Brian's best interest, and apparently, not Ted's.
What will happen to Ted now?
I'll have to reread this when I can actually see it.
HUGS. ~Cathy
Author's Response: Sorry about your eyes. I have plans for Teddy so never fear. As for the breakin, it might be solved in a later chapter.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 19, 2019 01:28 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Episode 10 (Queens of the Road)
Oh how I hate Mikey. Never did like him , never will. Great chapter. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response: Thanks. The next two might be a little light, seeing as how Justin wasn't in them much.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2019 11:21 PM · On: Chapter 9 Episode 9-(Daddy Dearest(Sonny Boy)
UGH! I've been snowed in for two days! Anyhoo... (as Emmett would say)...
Yes, there is no help for Michael. That spoon holding is classic. I wonder if he did that specifically for the show... if so, Cowlip really put the first step in a simplistic, ridiculous Mikey. It opened all sorts of doors for fanfiction. I want to make a good impression... good luck!
Yes! Brian told Michael that Justin wasn't a one-night stand.
Parental Rights... Justin STILL has his work cut out for him, as Brian didn't sign them away, UNTIL... Gui came into the picture. So, I'm not hooting and hollering just yet.
And to go back to my other review regarding Boy Wonder... maybe Justin needs to mention it to Brian... asking why he calls him that... tell him he's NOT a cartoon character... and although I didn't comment at the time... the no comic book sounds like an AWESOME change. I always felt Michael used him to make HIS dream come true. He certainly had no problem still throwing Justin under the bus, so to speak. i.e... Ethan, the cancer. etc...
Good Update... Loft Robbery Next????? I am beyond excited!!!! Because I NEVER believed it was Justin!
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: Thanks for the great review. You are right the loft robbery is up.
Author's Response: Thanks for the great review. You are right the loft robbery is up.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2019 09:19 AM · On: Chapter 9 Episode 9-(Daddy Dearest(Sonny Boy)
'm glad Brian keeps his rights to Gus. It's fun to see Justin stay in the background even if there are moments that never change especially with the whiny and childish Michael
Author's Response: Mikey does seem to mess things up.
Reviewer: nickknack (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2019 04:45 AM · On: Chapter 9 Episode 9-(Daddy Dearest(Sonny Boy)
I am so enjoying this story :-)
Author's Response: So glad to hear it. Makes my day.
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2019 12:13 AM · On: Chapter 9 Episode 9-(Daddy Dearest(Sonny Boy)
I'm really enjoying the alternate reality. It is very interesting watching Justin navigate his mistakes, but realizing that some things don't change, no matter what he does.
Author's Response: If only we could all look back and fix things.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: December 15, 2019 07:41 PM · On: Chapter 9 Episode 9-(Daddy Dearest(Sonny Boy)
I'm glad that Brian didn't sign away his rights to Gus. While I feel the hospital was wrong in not letting Melanie in to be with Gus while he was there, it wasn't right of Lindsay and Melanie to try and make Brian take his rights away just to get hers.
Author's Response: That was one of the things I didn't like about the series. That and the fact that Michael got to keep his rights didn't seem fair.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 15, 2019 06:07 PM · On: Chapter 9 Episode 9-(Daddy Dearest(Sonny Boy)
Great update. Michael is just not trainable. Not my favorite character. Tried to like him, but just couldn't. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response: He was my least favorite character as well.
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Signed) · Date: December 15, 2019 12:12 PM · On: Chapter 7 Episode 7 (Smells like Codependence)
Okay, Jennifer is making the same mistakes. This is pity. And Michael should listen better, than he shouldn't have to be offended. I realized again with how much shit Justin has to deal with. And despite his knowledge, he cannot prevent everything. :( I love the story.
Author's Response: Jennifer changed during the course of the show. But what if she hadn't? Michael never listens, he's in his own world.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: December 13, 2019 08:52 PM · On: Chapter 7 Episode 7 (Smells like Codependence)
Yeah, it's good for Justin to now remember Craig's attack on Brian outside Babylon. Hopefully, they can avoid that. Forewarned is Forearmed. I ALSO hope the car accident goes to the police this time.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: You can hope, but while some things change others stay the same.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: December 13, 2019 07:42 PM · On: Chapter 6 - Episode 6(The Art of Desperation)
Hey! It's catch up day for me! This moving is for the birds, and only having access to my internet a couple of hours a day, is playing havoc with my reading and writing.
Anyway, I loved this. If nothing else, I'm getting a chance to 'watch' the show again, which is long overdo.
I had forgotten the Marvin Telson thing was this early on. And even though no Jennifer at the art show, it sounds like Debbie put her two cents worth in Jennifer's ear. Did Deb also confiscate the tip? Brian ALWAYS tips.
And so glad Brian wanted to bring Justin and Daphne to Babylon!
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: Limited access to the internet is a bummer. If I got it right Justin didn't know about Telson, so I had to figure a way around that. Jennifer is on my bad list, unfortunately Deb messed up what might have kept Craig from learning, but since Justin was unaware that Craig found his drawings there was nothing to be done. Did Deb confiscate the tip, I think so in this version. Brian, in this version, does some unexpected things.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2019 09:34 AM · On: Chapter 7 Episode 7 (Smells like Codependence)
I love Justin's workbook where he has written down everything he has to do differently! So Jennifer told Craig, Justin is quieter in his reaction that's fine. I always hated how Debbie threw Brian to the wolves with Jennifer and I often wondered how she could always claim to love Brian as a son when she uses him and denigrates him all the time. I can not wait to read more, if Justin and Brian went to New York together would be so different and good for them I think.
Author's Response: Gee, we think so much alike. I wanted to reply sooner but for some reason none of my review page showed the respond button. Thank you for your review.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2019 02:58 AM · On: Chapter 7 Episode 7 (Smells like Codependence)
Really great. Don't we all wish at some point that we could redo our life or at least parts of it. I love this story. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response: Thanks for the wonderful compliment. I know that there are points in my life that I could redo. Hope you like what I've come up that really go away from the series.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2019 12:55 AM · On: Chapter 7 Episode 7 (Smells like Codependence)
Wow, and Jennifer still went and told Craig about Justin. It seems the more things change, the more they stay the same!! I'm sure it's going to take some time for Justin to forgive her for that, too. But I do like how Justin has a binder with all the things written down that he shouldn't do this time around.
Author's Response: In spite of Justin's warning, Jennifer still reacted the same as she had. I blame Debbie for that, it was her discription of Brian that sealed the deal. However, thanks to Brian's help things end up differently for Justin.
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2019 11:03 AM · On: Chapter 6 - Episode 6(The Art of Desperation)
As in real life, you change your opinion more often. I also don't think Debbie is the great mother. Her affection often came with a price tag. And I don't want to start with Michael.... :(
Author's Response: I'm afraid that Michael does not come out good in this story.
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2019 10:42 AM · On: Chapter 5 - Episode 5 (Now Approaching ...The Line)
I'm late..Sorry. I find it really interesting how this develops, with the knowledge of what Justin has now. I hope he can avoid many mental and physical injuries. Thank you so much for sharing!
Author's Response: I think you'll be surprised with some of the things that happen. Don't ever be sorry, expecially for leaving such a nice review.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: December 03, 2019 10:04 PM · On: Chapter 6 - Episode 6(The Art of Desperation)
I definitely like the new version of the happenings in this chapter. Brian giving Justin his card to contact him if need be and telling Justin that he and Daphne should go to Babylon with him to celebrate the success of his show. Debbie, I am none too happy with. And neither is Justin. He is definitely seeing how she really is, and he doesn't like it.
Author's Response: I felt that Brian could have been a bit more helpful without making Justin feel like a kept boy. I wasn't happy with Debbie talking the way she does and getting away with it.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2019 09:46 AM · On: Chapter 6 - Episode 6(The Art of Desperation)
I love this story and it's more and more surprising. We're about to get Jennifer to tell Craig unless ... I can not wait to read more.
Author's Response: I'm afraid Miss Tattle Tale, stays in character.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 01, 2019 08:42 PM · On: Chapter 6 - Episode 6(The Art of Desperation)
Great update. Love this time around. Hope it ends happy. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response: Well, it depends on what you call happy. LOL. Thank you for reviewing and saying such lovely things.
Reviewer: 7wildwaysup (Signed) · Date: December 01, 2019 06:50 PM · On: Chapter 6 - Episode 6(The Art of Desperation)
I'm loving this story Darling!
You should know that you've posted this chapter twice, back to back...
Hugs Hon ~ Kathleen
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm going crazy but I have fixed the posting. At least I think so, so if you check to make sure I'd appreciate it.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2019 11:17 AM · On: Chapter 5 - Episode 5 (Now Approaching ...The Line)
Again, I'm really liking this new and improved series. With Jennifer not finding him at Woody's, maybe it will calm some of her qualms about telling Craig. Then there won't be no beating up Brian.
The GLC art show must be coming up. Maybe Lindsay won't ask him to enter this time...either that... no naked pictures of Brian. Oooh... but Jennifer did see Brian at the show. (Vivid imagination - that woman.)
The therapist went a lot better. I'm sure it helped that Justin acted more grown up.
Restocking with Tracy. Dr. Dave must be on the horizon. But, Tracy didn't seem all that impressed with Michael. I look forward to how you handle that little tidbit. Will Michael be chasing her?
I'm still nervous about the loft robbery coming up. Hmmm... maybe when Justin sees the prepetrator leaving (Michael?) he can call Brian and tell him the loft was left unlocked, after seeing him leave.
You, my dear, had the right idea on a re-do. I'm presuimg you are having to watch each show prior to writing your chapter. What an awesome way to rewatch it.
We stil need some major attitude adjustments with the 'family'.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: As you may have noticed Justin doesn't have much to do with Michael unless Brian does. So some things come out quite different then you would have thought. I had a lot of fun with the robbery which I don't think you'll see coming. Yes, I do watch the series and I have to remind myself that this is from Justin's POV, some things he didn't have knowledge of and unless someone else brought it up there wasn't much he could do. But what he does do with Daphne's help is pretty good.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2019 10:50 AM · On: Chapter 4 - Episode 4 (Ted's not Dead)
For this chapter not having Justin involved... I found him in quite a bit of it. hehe!
I'm so glad Justin can witness all the bitchiness of how the other's treat Brian. Maybe it will help him understand things more so from the get go.
Melanie is downright vicious. Her actions toward Brian should help Justin when it comes time for the giving up parental rights. Justin could point out her faults and attitude. Does Brian really want someone who talks and acts the way she does, raising his son?
Debbie needs a cutting down. Who's the owner of the diner? I think a little visit is in order to see him. Let him know what goes on. Two can play games. Who is Debbie to decide Kiki should have all the grunt work? That is so wrong on so many levels. We still haven't learned why she cut his hours. (I'm betting Mikey complained to Mommy about Brian spending time with the kid instead of ME... his best friend.) Maybe Justin should make a comment to Brian. Explaining when his mom tells his dad (now that she knows) he is going to need money to get his own place.
Never a truer statement... Vic is the sane one in that family.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: I had to rework the story line so that Justin found out what occurred and that helped. It's a little tricky but I think when we get to that part you'll see a difference. Debbie is jealous of Justin and while she thinks she's punishing Justin, it's poor Kiki that's caught in the middle. Telling tales don't work so much in this story, but somehow it all comes out in the wash. Justin plans to stay out of Michael's way as much as he can and learn to stand on his own two feet. Luckily Vic comes out much better in my version.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2019 10:07 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Episode 3 (No Bris, No Shirt - No service)
I'm just loving this story! Justin may have the abilty to 'change' his destination, but... I love the new and improved Brian. Maybe the non-stalking helps.
Micheal is an ass. I wish Justin and Daphne would out him at the Big Q. You know, all innocent like. in front of Marley... "Hi Michael. Sorry Brian and I left you at Babylon." Couldn't you just see his face? He also should have told the guys how Michael managed to get the booth in the diner. Michael's "faults" should be pointed out from early on.
And Debbie! What a freak! I'm with the kids. My Michael... such a sweet boy. A mother is blind.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying this story. Brian is more willing to listen to Justin who is not as immature as he was. You're right about Michael. Outing him would be too easy. Debbie changes according to the chapter, what Brian didn't know could hurt him and did.
Reviewer: purpledee (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2019 07:02 AM · On: Chapter 5 - Episode 5 (Now Approaching ...The Line)
I am loving this story so far. It reminds me of a few others, but better.
Love your stuff, here or on KD.
Thanks
Deb L
Author's Response: Glad to know you're loving this. I'm hoping not to repeat certain things This Time.
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2019 03:59 AM · On: Chapter 5 - Episode 5 (Now Approaching ...The Line)
I hope Jennifer comes around soon.
Author's Response: Let's just say you might be a little surprised with how this turns out.
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2019 03:55 AM · On: Chapter 4 - Episode 4 (Ted's not Dead)
Really enjoying the alternate universe. Can't wait to see what you do with all the episodes. I remember the first time I watched Season 1 and saw the bashing. it was devastating. I am looking forward to how you handle that one.
Author's Response: I've got a few tricks up my sleeve. Hope you like them.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2019 01:44 AM · On: Chapter 5 - Episode 5 (Now Approaching ...The Line)
Here's hoping Justin throws Jennifer off the trail for awhile. She means well, but the second she told Craig about Justin, all bets were off. And Justin needs to find a way to bypass Debbie. She seems to be keeping him away from Brian at all costs.
Author's Response: If she hadn't heard Debbie's verson of who Brian was Jennifer might have been more understanding. I'm afraid there is no hope for Jennifer Taylor.
Reviewer: PA Boi (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2019 01:28 AM · On: Chapter 5 - Episode 5 (Now Approaching ...The Line)
Brian less hedonistic is very interesting. Love this story. Bill
Author's Response: He doesn't seem to be listening to Michael as much.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: November 27, 2019 04:02 PM · On: Chapter 5 - Episode 5 (Now Approaching ...The Line)
Justin more mature makes good decisions.
Author's Response: At least he sees where he went wrong last time.
Reviewer: PA Boi (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2019 08:32 PM · On: Chapter 4 - Episode 4 (Ted's not Dead)
Some things the same, others very different. You are taking us on a fascinating journey. At least Mikey is still a big jerk!! Bill
Author's Response: As we go along little things change, that makes a big difference. Some things change for the better. Unfortunately Michael isn't one of them.
Reviewer: PA Boi (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2019 08:24 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Episode 3 (No Bris, No Shirt - No service)
Fascinating premise. Can't wait to see how things develop. Bill
Author's Response: Thank you. Your review means a lot to me.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2019 08:52 AM · On: Chapter 4 - Episode 4 (Ted's not Dead)
What happens with Debbie ? Brian is a little different here. It 's Wednesday soon ?? Love your story.
Author's Response: Debbie will be on the outskirts, since Justin isn't going to coddle her. Brian is Brian without the walls, the walls he put up because he was dealing with abusive parents and a Mikey that wanted more than Brian was ready to give.
Reviewer: 7wildwaysup (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2019 04:46 PM · On: Chapter 4 - Episode 4 (Ted's not Dead)
What's up with Debbie? I can understand trying to shine a positive light on Michael, and even pushing him towards Justin. But, why is she cutting his hours back, and treating him oddly?
Can't wait for more...
Hugs Darling ~ Kathleen
Author's Response: Debbie is responding to Justin the way she would if Michael hadn't introduced them. The fact that Justin is more mature than he was and well liked at the Diner, making bigger tips, has her in Mikey mode.
Reviewer: tiger062 (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2019 02:48 AM · On: Chapter 4 - Episode 4 (Ted's not Dead)
I'm really enjoying this. But what's up with Debbie - Micheal's probably got something to do with that. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Debbie loves to think she's helping everyone, only Justin doesn't need help.
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2019 02:39 AM · On: Chapter 4 - Episode 4 (Ted's not Dead)
What does Debbie have a problem with Justin? And Brian seems different or just beause of the changed Justin? When I'm finished with the chapter, I'll look for the next one. ;) I'm looking forward to more. Thank you so much for sharing!
Author's Response: She seeing that he's getting more tips than she is, is what I think.
Reviewer: KinneysBitch (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2019 12:47 AM · On: Chapter 4 - Episode 4 (Ted's not Dead)
Think Michael has been bitching to his mommy about Justin..... great chapter
Author's Response: I'm not sure why, but if Deb was as wonderful as she thought she was more people would have her on their side.
Reviewer: 7wildwaysup (Signed) · Date: November 23, 2019 02:22 AM · On: Chapter 1 -Season 1 - Episode 1(Premiere)
I’m loving your take on this wiser and patient Justin. I’m intrigued and love how he’s already on to all of Michael’s manipulations. Good for Brian for following his heart d84;a039;
Hugs Darling Kathleen
Author's Response: Know thy enemy is Justin's moto.
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