Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2019 04:18 PM · On: EPILOGUE
Way to make me cry, so touching and moving. This was perfect. Please say there is more to this story don't end it here.
Author's Response: Yeah, I though Justin needs some kind of closure. Thank you so much for reading and leaving so many wonderful comments! They are definitely appreciated!
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2019 02:56 PM · On: Chapter 33 Horny
Lol a horny Brian and hot for Justin lol love it.
Author's Response: Who can ever resist a horny Brian? Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2019 12:51 PM · On: Chapter 29 Blue Pills
Justin is being very responsible and that is a good thing he should talk to a Brian telling him he is on it now. I love them together and planning their future.
Author's Response: Yeah, he learned his lesson and knows how to do things right. Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2019 12:14 PM · On: Chapter 27 Future Plans
I feel for a down feeling looking Brian. I hope he perks up and plans a future outside the school with Justin where he will be happy.
Author's Response: Maybe Justin can turn his mind around some day :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2019 12:07 PM · On: Chapter 26 Easter Part 3/3
I got four Disney references I think lol
this was adorable I love sweet Brian, gosh I hope they get married and have lots of babies. The snowman was beautiful and I'm sure that second carrot could have made him Atomically correct lol
Author's Response: I intentionaly wrote 3 but if you found more, yay! I am an absolute disney fan. Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 23, 2019 10:41 AM · On: Chapter 21 Kisses
Lol 😂 that's so funny. Maybe those two boys face Ted the idea for his porn site and that's how they get rich in the future. Silly funny boys.
Author's Response: Yeah, they have their humor :D. I'm glad you had such fun reading this chapter. Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 20, 2019 05:55 PM · On: Chapter 9 Basketball
I loved Brian teaching Justin to play that was really sweet. Then that poor young man who was beat who did that to him.
Author's Response: Yeah, that was really awful :(. But considering who the students are, it's not a surprise. Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: January 29, 2019 09:12 PM · On: Chapter 35 Pillow Love
You wrote the body pillow so well, I could see it clearly in my mind. It was such a cute gift, and the fact that Brian took the time to make it himself, is beyond sweet.
YES!!! Please keep it away from Hunter!!!
HUGS ~Cathy
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: January 26, 2019 12:16 PM · On: Chapter 32 So Who Won?
Food fight! Only with not-yet-cooked food!
So, Justin got egged, I'm betting. I hope they still have many hours of the night left. It's going to take quite a while to clean all that up.
Maybe they will have to save time and showeer together after they get the kitchen cleaned up. Hopefully, they don't get caught down inthe kitchen.
HUGS ~ Cathy
Author's Response: Yep, Justin got egged. I can only imagine how long it took to clean all that up. In my mind they did have enough time. Otherwise they would have gotten themselves a bunch of hours of detention.
Oh and they definitely showered together. No doubt about that!
Hugs! Heidi
Reviewer: JoJo (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2019 11:27 PM · On: Chapter 35 Pillow Love
Love love the Pillow....
Author's Response: Hehe, I'm happy to hear that :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2019 08:43 PM · On: Chapter 35 Pillow Love
What a great idea. Love that this Brian is so loving and caring. Terrific writing.
Author's Response: Thank you. We all need a sweet Brian ever now and then :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2019 09:34 AM · On: Chapter 29 Blue Pills
Yummy! (Sorry, but I fell asleep reading this chapter last night. - but it was about 4:30 a.m. here.)
Very happy for Brian and Justin. And happy the nurse prescribed the pill. Because, Yeah, nurse. You don't tell sombody who got pregnant, when using a condom, they are pretty safe. Although, by the chapter name, 'Blue Pills', I thought 'Viagra - The Little Blue Pill', and I was momentarily confused. I was like, 'HUH'? So, you got me there.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: Hah, yeah double meaning. Blue pills probably most of the time mean viagra but there won't be any of that in this story. If you're inerested in that kind of stories, you can find some in my story Love Over The Weekend.
Hugs! Heidi
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2019 01:34 AM · On: Chapter 33 Horny
Oh they are really something. Love this story and your writing.
Author's Response: I'm happy to hear that! Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: January 22, 2019 10:07 AM · On: Chapter 32 So Who Won?
It was a very funny battle. Now they have to clean up !!
Author's Response: Yep, they had their fun and now they have to clean it up but knowing those boys they will probably have a lot of fun doing even that :). Thank you for the comment
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: January 17, 2019 07:09 PM · On: Chapter 28 The Day at the Beach
They had fun, and now they are sick! haha
Author's Response: Heh, yeah, they really shouldn't have gotten all wet and cold :D. Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2019 08:54 PM · On: Chapter 25 Easter Part 2/3
Love how this story let's them be young and learning the world. Terrific idea and great writing.
Author's Response: I'm happy you think so :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2019 05:29 PM · On: Chapter 23 Bird Houses
Great chapter. It is so easy to picture them in each chapter. Your writing makes that possible.
Author's Response: I'm happy you to hear that. I think I would be failing miserably if it was the opposite, so thank you for telling me :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2019 04:52 PM · On: Chapter 20 The New Year
Great chapter. Just knew that Mikey was not going to be happy at some point. Yay!!! Did I remember to say that he is not my favorite character. LOL
Author's Response: Did you mention? Mhh... I'm not sure :D. I'm definitely not a fan either. One of the best things in writing fanfiction is that you get to make your least favorite characters miserable :D. Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: KinneysBitch (Signed) · Date: January 04, 2019 08:29 AM · On: Chapter 19 Christmas Day
Mmmmm why can some of the other kids go home and Justin can’t??? It’s got to be something to do with Craig maybe?
Oh well have to wait and see
Author's Response: There is a reason and you will find out later. Seems like that is all I say to my readers nowadays. You'll find out later :D. But let me say, you are getting warmer :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Lorma (Signed) · Date: January 02, 2019 11:56 PM · On: Chapter 18 First Snow
What a fun story. Each chapter is more playful.
Author's Response: I'm happy you're enjoying this story :) . Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: January 01, 2019 09:29 AM · On: Chapter 17 A Lesson In Theft
Brian learning to steal to Justin to get closer, weird idea but the chapter was pretty funny even if Emmett and Ted were not very happy.What Brian will bring back to Justin? Surprise. Thank you for this update and Happy New Year 2019.
Author's Response: Well, Brian used to love stealing and did it for fun. Now that he doesn't need to anymore he's going back to his old ways. They're just plaing around :). Amazin and happy New Year to you too! Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2018 09:02 AM · On: Chapter 16 Compassionate Tears
But I love Brian for wanting to know and no saying anything nd will not repeat anything that Justin could tell him. Justin needs to realize that. Justin is really insecure here Is he being rejected by all his family to finish there? Maybe when they learned that he was gay? He does not trust Brian and at the same time he's afraid he'll break up. It really hides the truth.
I love Emmett He ts a tender and lovely guy.
Author's Response: Yeah, Brian is so curious about Justin and he really wouldn't tell anyone but Justin's is simply not ready to confess :(.
That's Emmett, can't help but love him :).
Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: December 30, 2018 11:20 PM · On: Chapter 16 Compassionate Tears
Okay, Justin clearly has anger issues. Hmm, maybe that got him in there. I remember during QAF when he got so mad at Dixon, that he told him, f*ck, you, the queer is leaving. After what he did to Emmett's tee, and not speaking to Brian for three days, just from Brian continually asking him what caused him to be in there, I can definitely see him balking authority and lashing out. Either with teachers or his father.
But he really also has insecurity issues, too. Maybe he's never really felt like he belonged any where before, as just Brian saying the word, breakup', caused him to halt, and stop with the attitude. That could have happened either in his old school, or at his home. I'm aware you are purposely withholding this information, but it's fun to speculate on the few clues you give us. (I wish other reviewers would take a stab at what they think is the reason for him being in there, instead of saying they just wonder why.) It would be fun to hear what they think. (I think I missed my calling of being a detective. I certainly love looking at all angles.)
But I love Brian for wanting to know and understand. Sometimes it helps to share and get stuff off your chest. Like he said, he's not going to be writing an essay about it, and I'm positive he's not going to be splashing any bulletin boards with the info. Justin needs to realize all of that.
Gotta love Ems tenderhearted ways. He always was a caring, loving kind of guy.
Well, you keep writing, and I'll keep guessing - how about that?
HUGS ~ Cathy
Author's Response: Oh yes, Justin surely has his bad moments, that just doesn't happen that often.
I can admit that I'm purposely witholding the information but you'll understand in time :). I would absolutely love to know what my readers think about Justin. I'm sure they have loads of interesting theories. So I'm happy to hear your thoughts!
Getting stuff off your chest can definitely help in some cases. Maybe in Justin's too. But I don't think it's that easy to tell when you've witheld the information so long as Justin has.
Yes, we love Emmett! He is the sweet caring kind even in the show. Gotta love that :).
Hugs! Heidi
Reviewer: KinneysBitch (Signed) · Date: December 29, 2018 12:33 AM · On: Chapter 14 The Brownies
Loving this story can’t wait for the next update
Author's Response: I'm so happy to hear that! Next chapter will be up in about fifteen minutes :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: JoJo (Signed) · Date: December 27, 2018 08:24 PM · On: Chapter 14 The Brownies
So loving this dare I say sweet story
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! I'm so happy to hear that :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 24, 2018 08:11 AM · On: Chapter 12 Winner Takes it All
Insomnia has given a very interesting chapter and full of sweetness and hugs! Thank you for that and Happy Holidays to you too.
Author's Response: Yep, finally some action! I'm glad you liked this chapter. Thank you for the comment :).
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: December 18, 2018 03:01 AM · On: Chapter 8 Almost Is Not Enough
Thanks for update
Author's Response: You're welcome.
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2018 11:43 AM · On: Chapter 7 Mopey Monday
good one
Author's Response: Thank you
Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2018 01:41 AM · On: Chapter 7 Mopey Monday
BTW, I was going to ask you if you were going to put your banner back on for the story. It was such a nice banner. And, have we ever been told the name of the school, because I don't think we have.
Author's Response: Now it's back up. I didn't put it up on the second round because I think it might give a little too angsty image of this story and maybe that repelled readers. I don't know. Maybe now it doesn't matter because all who will ever follow this story knows what this is about.
Heh yes, the school doesn't have a name. I'm bad with naming things and titles. I couldn't come up with anything. Luckily it's not important plot vice.
Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2018 01:35 AM · On: Chapter 7 Mopey Monday
I could almost see and hear Justin's eyes roll at the suggestive way Hunter was talking and eating his fries, (that's if you can hear eyes roll ;) But I swear I could. *chuckling* He's really kind of a skanky character. The Littlest Hustler:
I think it’s only a question of time before I get into his pants. Dream on, lover boy.
At least I’m a professional. Yeah, that's exactly why Brian wouldn't want you.
I'm wondering why Justin is a little standoffish when it comes to affection and sex. That ought to make for a nice reveal later. But it's evident he's not comfortable by lewd remarks and obscene gestures.
Then...
Touché for Justin. Decided to play a little dirty. Watching the common room, and yes he won. He got 'the man'. Put that in your pipe and smoke it, James.
{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=
Author's Response: Oh yes, we heard Justin do the eyeroll! Hunter is a little too selfconfident when he goes after a man. I think it's because of his former "job".
I know Justin's little... Wll I don't know what to call it, is going to make a nice reveal. I've read it :D. (I'm being stupid here again)
Yes, we are so giving the points for Justin! James can suck it.
Thank you for the comment :).
Hugs! Heidi
Reviewer: mcm (Signed) · Date: December 15, 2018 09:00 PM · On: Chapter 1 The Beginning
WOW this story is awsome.. I just caught up and wanted to let you know that i am so glad that you decided to continue.. I really enjoy the banter between all the boys..
Author's Response: I'm happy you're enjoying the story so far :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 15, 2018 08:49 PM · On: Chapter 7 Mopey Monday
Great chapter. The little hustler always did want Brian, but he never had a chance. Terrific writing.
Author's Response: Yeah, I think in every universe possible Hunter will always want to "bag" Brian :D. Hopefully he never does in any of them. I'm glad you're still enjoying the story. Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 15, 2018 09:31 AM · On: Chapter 6 Pop Quizzes
Brian protector of Justin !! What happened with the boys and what will be the punishment in this school. Justin lied about why he was there what did he really do? Many questions We'll see!!
Author's Response: Unfortunately we won't find out what happened between the boys and what the punishment is. This whole story is from Brian and Justin's pov so we get to see what they see. I don't think it would be realistic if the punisment was handled publicly. But yes, there are so many things that need an answer at this point and I'm sure you'll get an answer at some point :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 14, 2018 07:59 PM · On: Chapter 6 Pop Quizzes
Well the comment I left on FB kind of turned out wrong. Although Emmett's reason still had to do with sex in school (hey-we are talking Emmett, here), but, if I would have thought about what we knew so far, I should have realized Ted was in to burglary. Afterall, he DID teach Justin how to pick a lock, so it makes sense he got caught.
Hmm, it will be interesting to see the severity of punishment the school hands out. As Justin had told Brian at one time, "They're strict in here. Nobody really misbehaves." It's kind of ominous. But what might be even more interesting is to find out what brought the argument on inthe first place. You fucking asshole. You try that one more time." Yeah, don't sound too good.
So, what's going on with Justin? Brian vs Emmett, I would think Justin would tell Brian the truth before Emmett. But I doubt he was upfront with Brian. Which was a really stupid thing for Justin to do. He knows full well kids talk in there. The discrepancies in stories is bound to come out. Is what he did so bad he doesn't want to admit it? Or is he embarrassed as to the real reason he's in there? We've had three versions now. Breaking and Entering, Stealing, Misbehaving in School. Gotta wonder, right?
I was almost confused for a moment when Justin recognized the cowry shell bracelet. It was described as familiar. I thought Justin knew it from some other place. Too bad Brian had to pull his hand away from Justin. First 'intimate' touch they would have had.
Still loving it. Thanks for the update.
{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=
Author's Response: Ding ding ding we have a winner :D. Now I don't have to feel bad about myself anymore. Justin has his reason's and I'm sure you'll understand when you find out :).
I was going to point out in FB that you did come close with Emmett but then I saw your comment here. Good to know you had no idea about Ted. You're becoming my most valuable reviewer because I again thought that was obvious. As a writer I see this in a whole different light. I knew right from the beginning why everyone is in the school and it's hard to see the story from a reader's pov who has no idea about anyting. You're pointing out very important things.
Unfortunately I didn't write anything more about the fighting boys or their punishment. I wrote this story from Brian and Justin's pov and they don't see what happens to the boys so that means we don't know what their punishment is.
I'm glad to hear you're still enjoying the stor. Thank you for the comment.
Hugs! Heidi
Reviewer: Lorma (Signed) · Date: December 14, 2018 04:09 PM · On: Chapter 6 Pop Quizzes
Aww protective Brian! Love it!
Author's Response: Gotta love him :). I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 14, 2018 03:43 PM · On: Chapter 6 Pop Quizzes
Great chapter. The boys are getting closer and that is fantastic.
Author's Response: I'm happy you think so :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 13, 2018 08:40 AM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack
Their meeting at midnight was adorable. They could talk to each other and we know why they got there. I hope we will learn a little more about others too. Thank you for the update.
Author's Response: I'm happy you liked this chapter. You will definitely get to know more about the others too :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 13, 2018 12:30 AM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack
Great chapter. Could just picture our boys on their adventure. Love how they are getting closer.
Author's Response: I'm so happy you think so :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Lorma (Signed) · Date: December 12, 2018 10:43 PM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack
This is such an entertaining story! Can’t wait to read more.
Author's Response: I'm happy you find this entertaining :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 12, 2018 09:52 PM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack
Loved the update, although the boys should of paused in their ascent, and got to 'know' each other a little better. The stairwell can be a good meeting spot. *hint - hint*, as you can hear anyone coming and going.
The next time the guys meet in the kitchen, they will have to have two spoons with one ice cream, because if they won't touch and have fun, their spoons can. (Okay, now I'm getting silly.)
So, Brian did get caught shoplifting, but Justin was simply slacking off in school and his parents wanted him to learn discipline. I think I'm following along okay, but I'm confused at your response to my last review. Based on your comment you're going to get a little confused in the near futute. I've reread it two times, trying to pick apart what you meant about what I said, and can't come up with anything. I know I mentioned homophobic parents, but, hmm...
Well, I'll keep reading. Still loving it, and waiting to find out what Emmett, Ted and Hunter did to be sent there.
{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=
Author's Response: Oh excellent idea. Unfortunately we won't get any hot stair moments in this story :(.
I can so imagine a spoon fight and then maybe that can get a little... dirty, you know :D.
I feel like a mean person now. You didn't get it. But in the next chapter you will for sure! It's about Justin. But what I said is kinda true. You are now confused, just by another reason :D. I'm sure you'll have a AHA! moment with the next chapter. This is also actually really helpful for me because now I really see what my readers see, to me things are obvious and sometimes that makes writing hard.
You'll get Emmett's and Ted's stories in the next chapter. Want to guess why Emmett's there :D. Unfortunately I didn't include any story for Hunter because I thought it would be obvious because he's an ex-hustler. His mom (ugh hated her in the show) put him there. And I can't see Hunter as 'opening about past' type. There was never a good moment.
Happy to hear you're still enjoying this :). Thank you for the comment.
Hugs! Heidi
Reviewer: KinneysBitch (Signed) · Date: December 12, 2018 06:53 PM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack
Oh wonder what Justin’s story is .... can’t wait to find out..., thanks for sharing
Author's Response: I'm sure you're not the only one wondering that :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: December 12, 2018 06:24 PM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack
Yeah I'd like to give a Shoutout to......
"MINT CHOCOLATE CHIP!!!!!!!!!! "
Author's Response: Hah. Isn't it weird that I'v only once tasted Ben and Jerrys and I didn't find it any different from other ice creams. Am I horrible person now? :D
Thank you for the entertaining comment.
Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: December 12, 2018 03:15 PM · On: Chapter 4 Weak In The Knees
Lol The wonderful Smoothe Sticky Fingers BK! Gotta love a Man good with his Fingers! Haha.
*Kinda brings back memories of my Youth when some of the boys I made out with had mastered the art of un-hooking the back of my Bras with one hand, in the blink of an eye without missing a beat from kissing, pausing, talking or moving! lol aahhh the Good ol Days of Sweet Innocence and getting to second base!
Please more! Love this!
ps then front bra enclosure came and changed the Game !! LoL😂
Author's Response: Ooh seems like I hit the right spot with this chapter! Sounds like excellent memories :D. I think I might be jealous!
Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 11, 2018 03:20 PM · On: Chapter 4 Weak In The Knees
What a great chapter. I could picture Hunter from the series trying to get Brian interested and it made feel like it was happening, but we know only Justin gets a chance with Brian. Fantastic writing.
Author's Response: Hah, yes, I was kinda trying to make Hunter like he was in the series. Pushing himself on Brian way too obviously. Gotta love that :D. I'm happy you enjoyed this chapter. Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 11, 2018 09:25 AM · On: Chapter 4 Weak In The Knees
Justin is probably right, not throwing himself on Brian can be good to have him haha. Brian pickpocket and Justin breaking and entering is a good pair !!
Author's Response: Yeah Hunter's tacktik might not be the best one :).
That would be a perfect pair indeed :).
Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: KinneysBitch (Signed) · Date: December 11, 2018 07:06 AM · On: Chapter 4 Weak In The Knees
Brian is such a tease...... loving it so far thanks for sharing
Author's Response: Hehe. He so is. I'm happy you enjoyed this chapter. Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 11, 2018 07:05 AM · On: Chapter 4 Weak In The Knees
Surprise! I'm already back. I stayed up late tonight to catch up on some of my reading, and came back on to MW, as I saw someone else had posted a WIP I'm reading. (Current count of WIP's I'm reading is 23.) *eyeroll* So, since I saw your posting, I figured I'd read yours first.
Loved the imagery here: James, based on looks, was suited more to standing around a flaming barrel with a beer bottle in one hand and weed in the other. Yeah, I agree. I also think Hunter needs to get over himself a little bit.
Well, if Brian and Mikey didn't get in trouble, I have to wonder why else Brian was put in that school. Did his possibly homophobic parents find out he was gay, and didn't want to put up with him anymore? I had wondered if that was the reason Justin was in there, you know, because we gotta love Craig Taylor and Jack Kinney. So, I was a littled surprised by Justin admitting to breaking and entering. Or, do the kids that end up in there, have to commit some type of offense? But then when Brian started talking about 'his skill', I immediatley thought, 'predator/sex', but I now have to wonder if he's good at pickpocketing. :)
So, we have a big reveal in the next chapter. Please post the update on FB, so I get a email, stating that, and hopefully I can read it read it right away.
Thanks for this awesome story. I have to wonder how much longer before we get to the fun, prankish stuff.
{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=
Author's Response: You're here again yay!
23 stories! That is a lot. I can't keep up with even one story.
That is quite accurate description of Hunter :D.
I probably explained poorly. Yes Brian is in the school for stealing but Michael wasn't doing it with Brian so that's why he isn't in the school.
Based on your comment you're going to get a little confused in the near futute. Just a little warning :).
Yes I will inform in FB about new chapters.
Hugs!
Heidi :)
Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 10, 2018 09:50 PM · On: Chapter 3 Disappointment
First I want to apologize for the delay in my reading this update. Just remember if it takes me a day or two after posting to get to it, I will. So, please be patient with me. I have no intention of abandoning reading it.
Okay, So it sounds like the green-eyed monster is starting to rear it's ugly head. I realized after my first review when I mentioned the tags, that was something I was going to point out, saying that, if we didn't have an Anti-tag, that jealousy would be the next best thing. Am I surprised that it's JUSTIN who's jealous; you bet. I really thought it would be Hunter, as the jealous one. So a surprise it was, but your way, makes for a more interesting story. But, Justin needs to get himself in there, and make himself known, while pushing Hunter away, because Brian really wants nothing to do with Hunter. Something Justin would know, if he would assert himself a little more, and not allowing Hunter to get his chance with Brian. But hopefully before long, it will be Hunter as the jealous one.
If can interject a request here, a little flirting I can deal with, but please don't let it go any further than that between Brian and Hunter. Not sure if I could stomach that. Besides, I don't believe you would be that cruel. ;)
So, Mikey's working the in the diner. I kind of get the impression that Brian and Michael got into some trouble, and while Brian's punishment was to be sent to this school, Debbie's making Michael work at the diner, hoping to keep him out of further trouble.(just speculation.)
I do have one question for you, due to your response to my last review, do you have this story totally finished? I can see you must have chapter five written, but the whole thing? That's quite a feat. Well, I'm looking forward to that long of a story.
{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=
Author's Response:
It is totally okay :). You take your time.
Hah yes, Justin’s the jealous one in this story. And yes, he has a long way to go if he wants to claim Brian because he has himself a rival in Hunter. Let’s see how that goes.
I don’t think anyone in this fandom particularly enjoys seeing Brian (nor Justin) with other people and especially with Hunter. Hunter just does not fit in there. So even though I promised I won’t give spoilers I think you’re pretty much safe here :).
I always thought it was weird that in the show Michael didn’t or at least it was never mentioned that he worked at the Diner. I think would have been quite in character for Debbie to make Michael work in the diner when he was in his teens. These are just my thoughts. As for Michael and him getting in trouble, no he did not do anything illegal. That is another thing that will kinda be in chapter five (Brian-vice, ch 5 is a big deal!) if you read between the lines and interpret and so on. I can explain after I post it if you don’t see it :).
Yes, I do have this whole story finished. I could never write as other people in this fandom seem to. Like write a chapter and immediately post it. I never write long stories in chronological order. I write a scene here and there until it’s finished. Usually I start quite near the end of the story so I know what I’m aiming for.
Thank you so much for the wonderful and supportive review. I appreciate it!
Hugs! Heidi :)
Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2018 10:21 PM · On: Chapter 3 Disappointment
Let The Games Begin!!! hehe
Yeaahhhh umm I read about the Mpreg in notes and sure enough "Senior a Moment" and yeaahhhh I forgot lol sorry about that . ( maybe next time *wink*
Oh yeah ! Hunter! I'm need you to step up off Brian!!! lol
Author's Response:
Hah, don’t worry, it happens to the best of us :). We’ll see about Hunter and Brian. Not making any huge spoilers here!
Yeah, Michael busing tables at the Diner. I imagine he has to bite his tongue quite a lot because in my world he is spoiled and not used to hearing orders from all around him.
Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2018 02:38 PM · On: Chapter 3 Disappointment
Hi, Heidi! So glad to see another chapter to this. Someone's jealous.... LOL! I like the slow build up here, and Hunter is the perfect one for Justin to focus his jealousy on. It will be interesting to see how far Brian goes with Hunter to get Justin's 'attention.'
And I find it the funny, the idea of Michael busing tables - ha! Looking forward to the next part. :) ~Kim
Author's Response: Hi Kim :)
Yes, we can say someone is a little jealouos! Michael should have bussed tables in the show. Maybe that would have thought him a thing or two :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2018 09:19 AM · On: Chapter 3 Disappointment
Justin is already a little jealous it's too cute! I hope we will know what these boys have done to be in this school since Michael is still at home.
Author's Response: You will find out everyone's story eventually :). Well, except Hunter who's story is obvious :).
Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 11:37 PM · On: Chapter 2 Missed Chances
Come on boys; sneek out of your rooms after lights out!
Gotta love Hunter: “I think I’m going with basic flirting and when he starts to flirt back I think I’m going to go for playful foreplay and come on to him for about a week. Then I’ll just fuck him.” In your wildest dreams, Hunter. Besides, Brian's a TOP! So, IF the opportunity should ever arrive, you will be participating as Bottom Boy!
So, Brian is a little bit of a prankster. It's nice to see him relaxed a little, and not so uptight.
Loved the update. Loving this story.
{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=
Author's Response: This story has 35 chapters plus a small epilogue. Believe me, they have time to sneak out after bedtime! :D
Hunter dreams big, we gotta admit that. He just doesn't know what he's up against :).
There is kind of a reason why Brian's a prankster. You just have to read between lines a little in ch 5 :).
I'm so happy to hear you're loving this story. Thank you for the comment and huger that huge hugs!
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 10:31 AM · On: Chapter 2 Missed Chances
Hello I'm here and I'm glad you've put the story again. I like how Brian and Justin are getting closer. Ted was funny with his blue pen, he has OCD? Looking for more.
Author's Response: Hi! The boys will slowly build up their relationship :). Hah Ted and his pen. He's just being obsessive. I am too because I have wrist pain problems and once in a decade when I actually find a pen that is easy and painfree to write with I hung on to it. These are once again these weird things about myself that I put out there. Thank you for the comment!
Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 03:45 AM · On: Chapter 2 Missed Chances
Wait! Wait! I'm here!!!! Too!!! Was just being lazy about not commenting, sorry lol!! Love how they keep missing each other. This is a MPreg right? If so I like want that baby here yesterday!! lol Looking forward to the next update.
Author's Response: You're here! I love you! I'm happy you're so excited but you probably didn't read the story notes. There won't be a baby unfortunately :(. I'm sorry!
Thank you for the comment!
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 12:01 AM · On: Chapter 2 Missed Chances
Hello, Heidi! I am enjoying the bantering in this cute story. I could definitely see Ted having a favorite pen - ha! And I like the slow attraction building up between Brian and Justin. Still very interested in when they first meet, and their back stories.
Thank you for posting this story! Hang in there. XOXO ~Kim
Author's Response: Hah, Ted and his pen :D.
You will get to know everyone's backstory but time for everything :).
Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 07, 2018 01:02 AM · On: Chapter 1 The Beginning
Hey Heidi, Sorry I just got around to reading this today. I checked when it was first posted, I even copied and pasted the chapter, because the story plot appears that good to me. It just so happened, two other people asked me to beta, and after I said yes, I got 25 chapters to do. So, I have been swamped with that. Finished it earlier today. I had a few WIP's to catch up on, and I planned to read yours. I remember seeing Kim post that two other chapters of your story was posted, so imagine my surprise when I only found one tonight, and that it was only posted today. Did you have a lack of comments? Isn't there a read count, though? That way you should be able to see how many people are actually reading.
Well, I for one, found this first chapter to be well written, and the plot and story already has a good feel to it. I know I will definitely keep reading, so I really hope you will keep writing and posting. You mentioned MPREG, but said, Nobody will be having any babies, but you will have to be able to stomach MPreg. Does that mean that there will be boys in the school pregnant, but we won't have to read about them having the babies?
I did check the tags for your story, hoping for an Anti-Michael fic. I figured if Brian was coming into the school, we'd have dear, little Mikey falling all over himself, trying to be Brian's choice. Hmm, instead we got no Michael at all. But I suppose Debbie's little angel, won't need a school like this. We DO have Hunter, though. Still cocky and wanting Brian. Perfect canon characterization.
Did Emmett mean he could count the gay kids on one hand, or does he need all ten of his fingers and thumbs? ;) I hope Emmett gets to continue to be a part of this story, as he wasn't listed in the characters. I really love Emmett, and it will be fun to see if he's still campy as a teenager, and if Ted will hold the dorky persona.
Hmm, so Brian is still the gorgeous one, even as a teen. I had to chuckle when he mentally went over his list of items to unpack. I heard nothing resembling underwear and socks. And no wonder there, that he zeroed in on Justin, by just a glance. It's a shame they are not going to share a room. Maybe someone will be nice, and switch with Justin...
Loving the story, and I hope we soon get an update.
{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=
Author's Response: Hi Cathy :)
I'm glad you find the plot interesting. I actually posted 3 chapters and only one person reviewed to the last two. I'm a person who takes that very personally and basically goes and cries under the bed when that happens. And as for read count. It dropped to 1/3 from what I'm used to.
As for the MPreg T**. I so want to answer your question but I've promised myself I will never give spoilers :). You just gave to read more.
Sorry, this is not anti-mikey. Debbie would never send her precious baby boy into this kind of school. But happily he won't take much of our time in this story.
Aaah! I somehow skipped Emmett when I added tags. He will definitely be in this story all the way to the end. I added him. Thank you for pointing it out.
Hah Brian will always be Brian. I'm sure he probably has s few pairs of socks and underwear even though he didn't mention them. Now using them is another thing :).
Thank you for the amazing and so supportive review. I appreciate it so much!
Extreme big hugs!
Heidi
Reviewer: mcm (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2018 10:24 PM · On: Chapter 1 The Beginning
So glad to see this back up. I am really enjoying this story. I was unable to review on earlier reading. unrealiable internet. Thank you for taken the time and engery to write this story and share with us
~Teresa~
Author's Response: Internet connection can be a bi×××. I'm so happy to hear you're enjoying the beginning :). Thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2018 06:47 PM · On: Chapter 1 The Beginning
Hello, Heidi - I'm glad you had a change of heart. I'm at lunch, but I'll leave a more detailed comment when I get home. Thank you for reposting it. I hope your readers will leave feedback for you as you requested.
Author's Response: Hi Kim :)
It started to feel wrong. I devoted 6 months of my life to this story and if people are going to reject it right from the start I want to know why. Happily there seems to be some people who liked the beginning.
Thank you for being so supportive.
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