Midnight Whispers
QAF Brian and Justin Fanfiction
Reviews For Boarding School
Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2018 01:41 AM · On: Chapter 7 Mopey Monday

BTW, I was going to ask you if you were going to put your banner back on for the story. It was such a nice banner. And, have we ever been told the name of the school, because I don't think we have.



Author's Response:

Now it's back up. I didn't put it up on the second round because I think it might give a little too angsty image of this story and maybe that repelled readers. I don't know. Maybe now it doesn't matter because all who will ever follow this story knows what this is about. 

Heh yes, the school doesn't have a name. I'm bad with naming things and titles. I couldn't come up with anything. Luckily it's not important plot vice. 

Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2018 01:35 AM · On: Chapter 7 Mopey Monday

I could almost see and hear Justin's eyes roll at the suggestive way Hunter was talking and eating his fries, (that's if you can hear eyes roll ;) But I swear I could. *chuckling* He's really kind of a skanky character. The Littlest Hustler:

I think it’s only a question of time before I get into his pants. Dream on, lover boy.

At least I’m a professional. Yeah, that's exactly why Brian wouldn't want you. 

I'm wondering why Justin is a little standoffish when it comes to affection and sex. That ought to make for a nice reveal later. But it's evident he's not comfortable by lewd remarks and obscene gestures.

Then...

Touché for Justin. Decided to play a little dirty. Watching the common room, and yes he won. He got 'the man'.  Put that in your pipe and smoke it, James.

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=



Author's Response:

Oh yes, we heard Justin do the eyeroll! Hunter is a little too selfconfident when he goes after a man. I think it's because of his former "job". 

I know Justin's little... Wll I don't know what to call it, is going to make a nice reveal. I've read it :D. (I'm being stupid here again) 

Yes, we are so giving the points for Justin! James can suck it.

Thank you for the comment :).

Hugs! Heidi

Reviewer: mcm (Signed) · Date: December 15, 2018 09:00 PM · On: Chapter 1 The Beginning

WOW this story is awsome.. I just caught up and wanted to let you know that i am so glad that you decided to continue.. I really enjoy the banter between all the boys..

 



Author's Response:

I'm happy you're enjoying the story so far :). Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 15, 2018 08:49 PM · On: Chapter 7 Mopey Monday

Great chapter.  The little hustler always did want Brian, but he never had a chance.  Terrific writing.



Author's Response:

Yeah, I think in every universe possible Hunter will always want to "bag" Brian :D. Hopefully he never does in any of them. I'm glad you're still enjoying the story. Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 15, 2018 09:31 AM · On: Chapter 6 Pop Quizzes

Brian protector of Justin !! What happened with the boys and what will be the punishment in this school. Justin lied about why he was there what did he really do? Many questions We'll see!!

Author's Response:

Unfortunately we won't find out what happened between the boys and what the punishment is. This whole story is from Brian and Justin's pov so we get to see what they see. I don't think it would be realistic if the punisment was handled publicly. But yes, there are so many things that need an answer at this point and I'm sure you'll get an answer at some point :). Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 14, 2018 07:59 PM · On: Chapter 6 Pop Quizzes

Well the comment I left on FB kind of turned out wrong. Although Emmett's reason still had to do with sex in school (hey-we are talking Emmett, here), but, if I would have thought about what we knew so far, I should have realized Ted was in to burglary. Afterall, he DID teach Justin how to pick a lock, so it makes sense he got caught.

Hmm, it will be interesting to see the severity of punishment the school hands out. As Justin had told Brian at one time, "They're strict in here. Nobody really misbehaves." It's kind of ominous. But what might be even more interesting is to find out what brought the argument on inthe first place. You fucking asshole. You try that one more time." Yeah, don't sound too good.

So, what's going on with Justin? Brian vs Emmett, I would think Justin would tell Brian the truth before Emmett. But I doubt he was upfront with Brian. Which was a really stupid thing for Justin to do. He knows full well kids talk in there. The discrepancies in stories is bound to come out. Is what he did so bad he doesn't want to admit it? Or is he embarrassed as to the real reason he's in there?  We've had three versions now. Breaking and Entering,  Stealing,  Misbehaving in School.  Gotta wonder, right?

I was almost confused for a moment when Justin recognized the cowry shell bracelet. It was described as familiar. I thought Justin knew it from some other place. Too bad Brian had to pull his hand away from Justin. First 'intimate' touch they would have had.

Still loving it. Thanks for the update.

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=



Author's Response:

Ding ding ding we have a winner :D. Now I don't have to feel bad about myself anymore. Justin has his reason's and I'm sure you'll understand when you find out :).

I was going to point out in FB that you did come close with Emmett but then I saw your comment here. Good to know you had no idea about Ted. You're becoming my most valuable reviewer because I again thought that was obvious. As a writer I see this in a whole different light. I knew right from the beginning why everyone is in the school and it's hard to see the story from a reader's pov who has no idea about anyting. You're pointing out very important things.

Unfortunately I didn't write anything more about the fighting boys or their punishment. I wrote this story from Brian and Justin's pov and they don't see what happens to the boys so that means we don't know what their punishment is. 

I'm glad to hear you're still enjoying the stor. Thank you for the comment. 

Hugs! Heidi

Reviewer: Lorma (Signed) · Date: December 14, 2018 04:09 PM · On: Chapter 6 Pop Quizzes

Aww protective Brian!  Love it!



Author's Response:

Gotta love him :). I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 14, 2018 03:43 PM · On: Chapter 6 Pop Quizzes

Great chapter.  The boys are getting closer and that is fantastic.



Author's Response:

I'm happy you think so :). Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 13, 2018 08:40 AM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack

Their meeting at midnight was adorable. They could talk to each other and we know why they got there. I hope we will learn a little more about others too. Thank you for the update.

Author's Response:

I'm happy you liked this chapter. You will definitely get to know more about the others too :). Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 13, 2018 12:30 AM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack

Great chapter.  Could just picture our boys on their adventure.  Love how they are getting closer.



Author's Response:

I'm so happy you think so :). Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: Lorma (Signed) · Date: December 12, 2018 10:43 PM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack

This is such an entertaining story!  Can’t wait to read more.



Author's Response:

I'm happy you find this entertaining :). Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 12, 2018 09:52 PM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack

Loved the update, although the boys should of paused in their ascent, and got to 'know' each other a little better. The stairwell can be a good meeting spot. *hint - hint*, as you can hear anyone coming and going.

The next time the guys meet in the kitchen, they will have to have two spoons with one ice cream, because if they won't touch and have fun, their spoons can. (Okay, now I'm getting silly.)

So, Brian did get caught shoplifting, but Justin was simply slacking off in school and his parents wanted him to learn discipline. I think I'm following along okay, but I'm confused at your response to my last review. Based on your comment you're going to get a little confused in the near futute. I've reread it two times, trying to pick apart what you meant about what I said, and can't come up with anything. I know I mentioned homophobic parents, but, hmm...

Well, I'll keep reading. Still loving it, and waiting to find out what Emmett, Ted and Hunter did to be sent there.

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=

 



Author's Response:

Oh excellent idea. Unfortunately we won't get any hot stair moments in this story :(. 

I can so imagine a spoon fight and then maybe that can get a little... dirty, you know :D. 

I feel like a mean person now. You didn't get it. But in the next chapter you will for sure! It's about Justin. But what I said is kinda true. You are now confused, just by another reason :D. I'm sure you'll have a AHA! moment with the next chapter. This is also actually really helpful for me because now I really see what my readers see, to me things are obvious and sometimes that makes writing hard. 

You'll get Emmett's and Ted's stories in the next chapter. Want to guess why Emmett's there :D. Unfortunately I didn't include any story for Hunter because I thought it would be obvious because he's an ex-hustler. His mom (ugh hated her in the show) put him there. And I can't see Hunter as 'opening about past' type. There was never a good moment. 

Happy to hear you're still enjoying this :). Thank you for the comment. 

Hugs! Heidi

Reviewer: KinneysBitch (Signed) · Date: December 12, 2018 06:53 PM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack

Oh wonder what Justin’s story is .... can’t wait to find out..., thanks for sharing 



Author's Response:

I'm sure you're not the only one wondering that :). Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: December 12, 2018 06:24 PM · On: Chapter 5 Midnight Snack

Yeah I'd like to give a Shoutout to......
"MINT CHOCOLATE CHIP!!!!!!!!!! "

Author's Response:

Hah. Isn't it weird that I'v only once tasted Ben and Jerrys and I didn't find it any different from other ice creams. Am I horrible person now? :D

Thank you for the entertaining comment. 

Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: December 12, 2018 03:15 PM · On: Chapter 4 Weak In The Knees

Lol The wonderful Smoothe Sticky Fingers BK! Gotta love a Man good with his Fingers! Haha.
*Kinda brings back memories of my Youth when some of the boys I made out with had mastered the art of un-hooking the back of my Bras with one hand, in the blink of an eye without missing a beat from kissing, pausing, talking or moving! lol aahhh the Good ol Days of Sweet Innocence and getting to second base!
Please more! Love this!
ps then front bra enclosure came and changed the Game !! LoL😂

Author's Response:

Ooh seems like I hit the right spot with this chapter! Sounds like excellent memories :D. I think I might be jealous! 

Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: December 11, 2018 03:20 PM · On: Chapter 4 Weak In The Knees

What a great chapter.  I could picture Hunter from the series trying to get Brian interested and it made feel like it was happening, but we know only Justin gets a chance with Brian.  Fantastic writing.



Author's Response:

Hah, yes, I was kinda trying to make Hunter like he was in the series. Pushing himself on Brian way too obviously. Gotta love that :D. I'm happy you enjoyed this chapter. Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 11, 2018 09:25 AM · On: Chapter 4 Weak In The Knees

Justin is probably right, not throwing himself on Brian can be good to have him haha. Brian pickpocket and Justin breaking and entering is a good pair !!

Author's Response:

Yeah Hunter's tacktik might not be the best one :). 

That would be a perfect pair indeed :). 

Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: KinneysBitch (Signed) · Date: December 11, 2018 07:06 AM · On: Chapter 4 Weak In The Knees

Brian is such a tease...... loving it so far thanks for sharing 



Author's Response:

Hehe. He so is. I'm happy you enjoyed this chapter. Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 11, 2018 07:05 AM · On: Chapter 4 Weak In The Knees

Surprise! I'm already back. I stayed up late tonight to catch up on some of my reading, and came back on to MW, as I saw someone else had posted a WIP I'm reading. (Current count of WIP's I'm reading is 23.) *eyeroll* So, since I saw your posting, I figured I'd read yours first.

Loved the imagery here: James, based on looks, was suited more to standing around a flaming barrel with a beer bottle in one hand and weed in the other. Yeah, I agree. I also think Hunter needs to get over himself a little bit.

Well, if Brian and Mikey didn't get in trouble, I have to wonder why else Brian was put in that school. Did his possibly homophobic parents find out he was gay, and didn't want to put up with him anymore?  I had wondered if that was the reason Justin was in there, you know, because we gotta love Craig Taylor and Jack Kinney. So, I was a littled surprised by Justin admitting to breaking and entering. Or, do the kids that end up in there, have to commit some type of offense? But then when Brian started talking about 'his skill', I immediatley thought, 'predator/sex', but I now have to wonder if he's good at pickpocketing. :)

So, we have a big reveal in the next chapter. Please post the update on FB, so I get a email, stating that, and hopefully I can read it read it right away.

Thanks for this awesome story. I have to wonder how much longer before we get to the fun, prankish stuff.

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=



Author's Response:

You're here again yay! 

23 stories! That is a lot. I can't keep up with even one story. 

That is quite accurate description of Hunter :D. 

I probably explained poorly. Yes Brian is in the school for stealing but Michael wasn't doing it with Brian so that's why he isn't in the school. 

Based on your comment you're going to get a little confused in the near futute. Just a little warning :). 

Yes I will inform in FB about new chapters. 

Hugs! 

Heidi :) 

Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 10, 2018 09:50 PM · On: Chapter 3 Disappointment

First I want to apologize for the delay in my reading this update. Just remember if it takes me a day or two after posting to get to it, I will. So, please be patient with me. I have no intention of abandoning reading it.

Okay, So it sounds like the green-eyed monster is starting to rear it's ugly head. I realized after my first review when I mentioned the tags, that was something I was going to point out, saying that, if we didn't have an Anti-tag, that jealousy would be the next best thing. Am I surprised that it's JUSTIN who's jealous; you bet. I really thought it would be Hunter, as the jealous one. So a surprise it was, but your way, makes for a more interesting story. But, Justin needs to get himself in there, and make himself known, while pushing Hunter away, because Brian really wants nothing to do with Hunter. Something Justin would know, if he would assert himself a little more, and not allowing Hunter to get his chance with Brian. But hopefully before long, it will be Hunter as the jealous one.

If  can interject a request here, a little flirting I can deal with, but please don't let it go any further than that between Brian and Hunter. Not sure if I could stomach that. Besides, I don't believe you would be that cruel. ;)

So, Mikey's working the in the diner. I kind of get the impression that Brian and Michael got into some trouble, and while Brian's punishment was to be sent to this school, Debbie's making Michael work at the diner, hoping to keep him out of further trouble.(just speculation.)

I do have one question for you, due to your response to my last review, do you have this story totally finished? I can see you must have chapter five written, but the whole thing? That's quite a feat. Well, I'm looking forward to that long of a story.

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=



Author's Response:

It is totally okay :). You take your time.

Hah yes, Justin’s the jealous one in this story. And yes, he has a long way to go if he wants to claim Brian because he has himself a rival in Hunter. Let’s see how that goes.

I don’t think anyone in this fandom particularly enjoys seeing Brian (nor Justin) with other people and especially with Hunter. Hunter just does not fit in there. So even though I promised I won’t give spoilers I think you’re pretty much safe here :).

I always thought it was weird that in the show Michael didn’t or at least it was never mentioned that he worked at the Diner. I think would have been quite in character for Debbie to make Michael work in the diner when he was in his teens. These are just my thoughts. As for Michael and him getting in trouble, no he did not do anything illegal. That is another thing that will kinda be in chapter five (Brian-vice, ch 5 is a big deal!) if you read between the lines and interpret and so on. I can explain after I post it if you don’t see it :).

Yes, I do have this whole story finished. I could never write as other people in this fandom seem to. Like write a chapter and immediately post it. I never write long stories in chronological order. I write a scene here and there until it’s finished. Usually I start quite near the end of the story so I know what I’m aiming for.

Thank you so much for the wonderful and supportive review. I appreciate it!

Hugs! Heidi :)

Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2018 10:21 PM · On: Chapter 3 Disappointment

Let The Games Begin!!! hehe
Yeaahhhh umm I read about the Mpreg in notes and sure enough "Senior a Moment" and yeaahhhh I forgot lol sorry about that . ( maybe next time *wink*
Oh yeah ! Hunter! I'm need you to step up off Brian!!! lol

Author's Response:

Hah, don’t worry, it happens to the best of us :). We’ll see about Hunter and Brian. Not making any huge spoilers here!

Yeah, Michael busing tables at the Diner. I imagine he has to bite his tongue quite a lot because in my world he is spoiled and not used to hearing orders from all around him.

Thank you for the comment.

Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2018 02:38 PM · On: Chapter 3 Disappointment

Hi, Heidi! So glad to see another chapter to this.  Someone's jealous.... LOL!  I like the slow build up here, and Hunter is the perfect one for Justin to focus his jealousy on.  It will be interesting to see how far Brian goes with Hunter to get Justin's 'attention.'

And I find it the funny, the idea of Michael busing tables - ha!  Looking forward to the next part. :)  ~Kim



Author's Response:

Hi Kim :)

Yes, we can say someone is a little jealouos! Michael should have bussed tables in the show. Maybe that would have thought him a thing or two :).  Thank you for the comment.

Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2018 09:19 AM · On: Chapter 3 Disappointment

Justin is already a little jealous it's too cute! I hope we will know what these boys have done to be in this school since Michael is still at home.

Author's Response:

You will find out everyone's story eventually :). Well, except Hunter who's story is obvious :). 

Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 11:37 PM · On: Chapter 2 Missed Chances

Come on boys; sneek out of your rooms after lights out!

Gotta love Hunter: “I think I’m going with basic flirting and when he starts to flirt back I think I’m going to go for playful foreplay and come on to him for about a week. Then I’ll just fuck him.”  In your wildest dreams, Hunter. Besides, Brian's a TOP! So, IF the opportunity should ever arrive, you will be participating as Bottom Boy!

So, Brian is a little bit of a prankster. It's nice to see him relaxed a little, and not so uptight.

Loved the update. Loving this story.

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=

 



Author's Response:

This story has 35 chapters plus a small epilogue. Believe me, they have time to sneak out after bedtime! :D

Hunter dreams big, we gotta admit that. He just doesn't know what he's up against :). 

There is kind of a reason why Brian's a prankster. You just have to read between lines a little in ch 5 :).

I'm so happy to hear you're loving this story. Thank you for the comment and huger that huge hugs! 

Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 10:31 AM · On: Chapter 2 Missed Chances

Hello I'm here and I'm glad you've put the story again. I like how Brian and Justin are getting closer. Ted was funny with his blue pen, he has OCD? Looking for more.

Author's Response:

Hi! The boys will slowly build up their relationship :). Hah Ted and his pen. He's just being obsessive. I am too because I have wrist pain problems and once in a decade when I actually find a pen that is easy and painfree to write with I hung on to it. These are once again these weird things about myself that I put out there. Thank you for the comment! 

Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 03:45 AM · On: Chapter 2 Missed Chances

Wait! Wait! I'm here!!!! Too!!! Was just being lazy about not commenting, sorry lol!! Love how they keep missing each other. This is a MPreg right? If so I like want that baby here yesterday!! lol Looking forward to the next update.

Author's Response:

You're here! I love you! I'm happy you're so excited but you probably didn't read the story notes. There won't be a baby unfortunately :(. I'm sorry!

Thank you for the comment! 

Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 12:01 AM · On: Chapter 2 Missed Chances

Hello, Heidi!  I am enjoying the bantering in this cute story.  I could definitely see Ted having a favorite pen - ha!  And I like the slow attraction building up between Brian and Justin. Still very interested in when they first meet, and their back stories.

Thank you for posting this story!  Hang in there. XOXO  ~Kim



Author's Response:

Hah, Ted and his pen :D. 

You will get to know everyone's backstory but time for everything :).

Thank you for the comment.

Reviewer: britinmanor (Signed) · Date: December 07, 2018 01:02 AM · On: Chapter 1 The Beginning

Hey Heidi, Sorry I just got around to reading this today. I checked when it was first posted, I even copied and pasted the chapter, because the story plot appears that good to me. It just so happened, two other people asked me to beta, and after I said yes, I got 25 chapters to do. So, I have been swamped with that. Finished it earlier today. I had a few WIP's to catch up on, and I planned to read yours. I remember seeing Kim post that two other chapters of your story was posted, so imagine my surprise when I only found one tonight, and that it was only posted today. Did you have a lack of comments? Isn't there a read count, though? That way you should be able to see how many people are actually reading.

Well, I for one, found this first chapter to be well written, and the plot and story already has a good feel to it. I know I will definitely keep reading, so I really hope you will keep writing and posting. You mentioned MPREG, but said, Nobody will be having any babies, but you will have to be able to stomach MPreg. Does that mean that there will be boys in the school pregnant, but we won't have to read about them having the babies?

I did check the tags for your story, hoping for an Anti-Michael fic. I figured if Brian was coming into the school, we'd have dear, little Mikey falling all over himself, trying to be Brian's choice. Hmm, instead we got no Michael at all. But I suppose Debbie's little angel, won't need a school like this.  We DO have Hunter, though. Still cocky and wanting Brian. Perfect canon characterization.

Did Emmett mean he could count the gay kids on one hand, or does he need all ten of his fingers and thumbs? ;)  I hope Emmett gets to continue to be a part of this story, as he wasn't listed in the characters. I really love Emmett, and it will be fun to see if he's still campy as a teenager, and if Ted will hold the dorky persona.

Hmm, so Brian is still the gorgeous one, even as a teen. I had to chuckle when he mentally went over his list of items to unpack. I heard nothing resembling underwear and socks. And no wonder there, that he zeroed in on Justin, by just a glance. It's a shame they are not going to share a room. Maybe someone will be nice, and switch with Justin...

Loving the story, and I hope we soon get an update.

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=



Author's Response:

Hi Cathy :) 

I'm glad you find the plot interesting. I actually posted 3 chapters and only one person reviewed to the last two. I'm a person who takes that very personally and basically goes and cries under the bed when that happens. And as for read count. It dropped to 1/3 from what I'm used to. 

 

As for the MPreg T**. I so want to answer your question but I've promised myself I will never give spoilers :). You just gave to read more. 

 

Sorry, this is not anti-mikey. Debbie would never send her precious baby boy into this kind of school. But happily he won't take much of our time in this story. 

 

Aaah! I somehow skipped Emmett when I added tags. He will definitely be in this story all the way to the end. I added him. Thank you for pointing it out. 

 

Hah Brian will always be Brian. I'm sure he probably has s few pairs of socks and underwear even though he didn't mention them. Now using them is another thing :). 

 

Thank you for the amazing and so supportive review. I appreciate it so much! 

 

Extreme big hugs! 

Heidi

Reviewer: mcm (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2018 10:24 PM · On: Chapter 1 The Beginning

So glad to see this back up. I am really enjoying this story. I was unable to review on earlier reading. unrealiable internet.  Thank you for taken the time and engery to write this story and share with us 

 

 

~Teresa~



Author's Response:

Internet connection can be a bi×××. I'm so happy to hear you're enjoying the beginning :). Thank you for the comment. 

Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2018 06:47 PM · On: Chapter 1 The Beginning

Hello, Heidi - I'm glad you had a change of heart. I'm at lunch, but I'll leave a more detailed comment  when I get home. Thank you for reposting it. I hope your readers will leave feedback for you as you requested.

 

 

 

 

 

 



Author's Response:

Hi Kim :)

It started to feel wrong. I devoted 6 months of my life to this story and if people are going to reject it right from the start I want to know why. Happily there seems to be some people who liked the beginning. 

Thank you for being so supportive. 

 

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