Midnight Whispers :: QAF Brian and Justin Fanfiction

Reviewer: Kaelkitty (Signed) · Date: May 27, 2018 05:08 PM · On: April 3 (Part Two)

Way to escalate the tension! I'm assuming that "Wolf" is someone from Justin's past, or you wouldn't have mentioned the car crash changinging his appearance. I have 3 possible suspects in mind, now that Ethan has been eliminated, but I won't mention them here as I don't want to predjudice your intentions.

In any case, there are still Simon, Micheal and Lindsay to cope with. Simon certainly wants dealing with as he is a serious sleezeball - surely there must be aome legal jeopardy ensuing from his behaviour. I can see Blaine and his sister working their way into the family over time and B&J helping them to deal with their creepy Uncle - Both Justin and Brian have a wide streak of do-gooder in their makeup, even if Brian does try to hide his charitable urges.

Lindsay has always bugged me - even in the original TV episodes she had that controlling desire to prevent Brian from growing up. I vividly remember her speech to Brian about going to the White Party instead of attending the girls wedding - even though Brian had been the saviour of the whole occasion! I loved your idea of getting her and her family booted from the country club - I bet that caused some angst in the Peterson home.

Your writing is great in general and the comedic touches are wonderful (Ted's taste in baby clothes as an example) but you do occasionally leave out a word or a suffix - I suspect because you are in a hurry to post. Case in point this chapter "Justin emitted a small squeak and tug at his hand" should be "...tugged at his hand". A good technique to catch this sort of thing is to read your work outloud to yourself - if you read out exactly what you have written down you will hear when something sounds odd because something is missing.

Lokking forward to the next chapter,

Ciao, Kaelkitty.

Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: May 26, 2018 12:27 PM · On: April 3 (Part Two)

Wow this is getting more and more twisted for the blights. How Brian isn’t exploding I don’t know. He is doing really well for keeping it as together as he can for Justin. The lengths of creepiness this guys is going to is so far out the universe. My blood is boiling for them and I want to get my hands on Wolf. What will he do next and how far will he actually push it. I do hope Blanes sister is ok.

Im really loving this story x

Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: May 26, 2018 06:48 AM · On: April 3 (Part Two)

Oh shit he got inside Britin their sanctuary this is really getting scary for Justin and Brian

Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: May 25, 2018 08:29 AM · On: April 3 (Part Two)

Can it be Lindsay who gave the pictures she took in the nursery? It's a demon, hateful and jealous, ready to do anything to hurt if that's it. A lot of progress with this chapter, fortunately Brian and Justin are strong together.

Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: May 25, 2018 03:43 AM · On: April 3 (Part Two)

Shit just got real! (Again lol)
ok ok ok I think I got this one! Did he somehow get the pictures from Lindsey ? Cuz remember she took pictures of the room, maybe he stole her film???

Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: May 24, 2018 08:57 PM · On: April 3 (Part Two)

Ruh Roh!!! Is any place of Brian and Justin's safe from this guy? Do they have security at Britin as well? I think its high time Brian and Justing get bodyguards and have them around 24/7 until this guy is caught. Something's gotta give sooner or later.

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