Midnight Whispers
QAF Brian and Justin Fanfiction
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: July 08, 2017 10:48 PM · On: I blame Justin for turning me into this happy Sap. Freaken Sunshine.

Awe what Brian did for Justin was just the sweetest and the best and I bet he me,to to them in time.

 

i fully understand were Sam is coming from that fear is awful and I pray that it goes from her so she can relax and just enjoy this time and remember it.

 

oooooh my god, poor Justin, I hope all will be ok and whoever did better watch out. 

 

This is is incredible xxx

Reviewer: Proud Acadian (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2017 02:42 PM · On: I blame Justin for turning me into this happy Sap. Freaken Sunshine.

I love the story but I have one small suggestion to make reading a little easier.

Place a line with symbols (example: ...... **** ^^^^^^^^^ ) to denote a leap of time or place. 

Example:  one sentence I read:

"Well if mom didn't then no one was. Because we know crabby pants over here doesn't like birthdays." Molly mocked Brian. Justin laughed at as Brian glared at her."

The next sentence is:

"What are you doing?" Brian asked as Justin brought some blankets into their room."

It take a few seconds for the reader to figure out where we are. I

 

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