I just wanted to say that this is one brilliant story. I love everything. Best of all: you know your grammar, and punctuation. Also, you use the correct tense. I'm *so* fed up with authors who can't be bothered to get a beta. Some stories have good ideas, but are impossible to read because the author mixes up their tempi, or doesn't know how to spell. But those are just the tools you use to create this amazing tale. Very important, but you need a little bit more as an author. May I just say, you've got plenty more!
I adore Brian in this, he still has some "asshole" moments, but overall, he definitely has grown up. Justin - torn between maturity and a little too much self-confidence, so well written! I love the way you portray our boys!
I also love your set of original characters, Judson most of all. But also Shane, who seems to struggle with the things he knows about Brian. Gus! What an amazing kid! Funnily enough, he reminds me of my best friend's little boy, who's a precocious (but cute) little chap. JR - too sweet for words.
The QaF characters - Debbie, seen in an unkind light for a change. Jen, the same. Michael and Ted, total idiots (hated them on the show, so totally buy into your characterisation). Lindsay - now, is she pro Brian or anti? Wavering a bit? Mel, I hope to see some development there. Emmett, one of my fave characters, hope you have a scene or two for him as well!
You handle them all so well, so believably. But best of all, your own characters. Every single one has something unique, whether it's the Englishman who wanted to be French (funny, that!), or the "hairdresser from hell" with his assistant with the purple hair. Cynthia had her moment in the spotlight, and you've even given Hunter a profession. Vic - clearly not Debbie's brother, so I'm hoping to see more of him.
Your tale has everything once could wish for, it's atmospheric, it's believable, with good, strong characterisation. Can't wait to read more! This reads like some professional novel, so well crafted. Thank you so much for typing it all up for us to read!
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you so much. *blushes* Hope you continue to enjoy!