Midnight Whispers
QAF Brian and Justin Fanfiction
Reviewer: Blue77 (Signed) · Date: June 09, 2023 09:24 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Hey, I don't know if you keep visiting this site and/or posting here, but I've just discovered this  story and fell in love with it. It has a brilliant plot, it's captivating and I would love to see what happens next. I think our boys deserve a happy ending and the story is just too good to be left unfinished or as a cliffhanger of some sort :)

Reviewer: steff (Anonymous) · Date: September 30, 2015 12:38 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Hey there! Just had a look for your story; I'm glad it's only your computer that causes trouble! (We were quite spoiled by your updates ...) Don't let it bother you!

Reviewer: sweetc (Anonymous) · Date: September 01, 2015 06:19 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

I really enjoed your update.You handled justin's problem in a soft way without brian being too master of the situation.I would like that they will not have other sexual intercourse ritght now though...now it was necessary but....in the future it is not.I'm all for sex between them when justin will be more at peace and is going to understand normal relationship...but for now he is so afraid and he can't really understand nothing about real life.I would not like if brian will take his virginity so he could sell justin to a more caring master...i want a legit and truly caring first time :) maybe not a making love but at least a first time for lust  ( like in the series).

I agree with people who speak against dom/sub relationship ...it is completely out of canon outside bedroom for them and even in bedroom i don't believe either justin or brian love that for regular night..maybe one time a year if even.( i don't either believe that your story will take that turn)

I hope you will release new chapter soon :)



Author's Response:

Don't worry, BDSM doesn't really have a place in this story.  The boys need to learn and grow together, and until some of that takes place, both parties will be reluctant to take things further in the bedroom.  Thank you for the review!  I'm glad you're enjoying the story!

Reviewer: nickknack (Signed) · Date: August 17, 2015 08:48 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Intriguing. Definitely got my attention and looking forward to how this story progresses.

Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 17, 2015 05:55 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

David R - Just exactly! Brain's going to have to handle this very carefully. Which I'm sure he will.

Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 17, 2015 05:45 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Seems people are pretty split over Michael's motives. A lot of us going by the way Michael is in the show. But is it wrong to have preconceived  ideas about him, very possibly. As others write, Mikey's motives  are pretty pure in a lot of ways here.

Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 16, 2015 11:56 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

I get the feeling that Mikey despite, his obviously extensive experiences of the slave trade, in this particular case, is making the situation  more complicated than it needs to be.  I know he's trying to educate Brian. But I think Brian and Justin are capable, in their own way, of sorting out their  situation out.

Reviewer: BritianLover88 (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2015 05:43 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Great first chapter I love it very intresting :)



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I hope you enjoy the rest as well!

Reviewer: sweetc (Anonymous) · Date: August 14, 2015 06:56 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

I don't usually like slave fiction not if they make slave thing acceptable.I can read if in the story is going to win the reason and yep in this kind of fiction i want happy ending i can't stand where slavery perpetuate.I hope Brian will be a good guy and will work by michael and that michael will be good not some kind of 'give the slave little not all'.



Author's Response:

Slavery is definitely portrayed negatively in this story!  I hope you like it :-)

Reviewer: Bryton4ever71 (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2015 01:14 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

  Hi,


First of all, welcome to the site! I'm Jonathan or Jon. Welcome to the obsession that is Queer as Folk! It'll be with you for the rest of your life, so strap in and enjoy the ride!


I'm notorious (ask anyone) for giving opposite-ish, whacko, smart aleck-y, hard hitting, technical and critical reviews. (Although most of the time you need to pick one or two out of the list. I mean, I'm not some kind of monster, right (OR AM I?????)


OK so let's get started. I have technical ideas, good things and bad things to say. I'll try and keep the criticisms CONSTRUCTIVE though, I'm not a troll and I hate those things as well.


So....good things....Out of all the stories on the most recent page, both new and old, yours was the most eye grabbing and obviously I read it first. It's an amazing and original premise and kudos to you for thinking it up. So quit calling it lame cuz it isn't.


About the story...loved the rivalry between Brian and the Sap...great scene. Also the graphic scene in the receiving room with Sleazy Gross trainer. Also I approve of Mikey's treatment of Justin in the limo. I could see this was a very abrupt crash course for a new slave owner by “the activist”


Technically speaking you have a great writing style, hard hitting, clear and understandable. Chap. 2 was a little short but I'm sure you'll make it up to us.


As for graphic scenes of whatnot...DO IT! Don't write a porno or snuff film/story etc where you're writing the story as porn etc is the driving force but if there s a scene that calls for it...let it flow. There's always ways to insert warnings and then afterwards....make it a “morning after” type scene so you don t miss anything plot wise. And stop apologizing for your story. If it is dark/angst...let it be.


Look, remember Queer as Folk....no apologies, no regrets....so don't. Also the show had: unapologetic swearing, blood, implied and not so implied soft porn, and a full on graphic bashing in the 4th season opening. Again, don't make your story constant bashing and beatings and angry angst (I know from experience this will be mostly death to your story) but don't dance toward the dark and then jump away again if you catch my drift. That's annoying and unsatisfying.


Just be true to yourself and let the story write itself. It will let you know when you need to be dark. Just remember 2 things:


You can't please everyone. And...If you walk on eggshells the only thing you'll get is bloody feet.


JUST AN IDEA: This is pure creativity and you probably won t do it but I was thinking, I love the CAST name but since you have the extra word "the" in there, why not add a small extraneous e to the end making it CASTe  in reference to the "caste" system of many societies where  the slave caste is  likely present. As for the name, hey it worked for CHiPs right?


Anyway, was purely a suggestion.



Author's Response:

Thank you for your honest review.  I appreciate the advice and I'll think it all over.  I'm glad you didn't hate it!  lol.  I had to chuckle at your bloody feet comment.  ;-)  Thank you.

Reviewer: sharon (Anonymous) · Date: August 10, 2015 10:48 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Love it so far...... cant wait for more



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 10, 2015 12:23 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Is Michael noticing  the way Brian is reacting to Justin? If so, not so easy to uphold beliefs in the face of his jealousy, me thinks. At least with regards to this one.

Of course, I could be completely wrong.



Author's Response:

Could be!  Jealous could definitely play a factor at some point!  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 10, 2015 12:05 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Mikey is trying to make a point to a reluctant Brian but he seems almost enthusiastic that Brian should be treating Justin as a slave. I get the feeling.

Reviewer: addicted-to-romione-bedward (Signed) · Date: August 09, 2015 09:43 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Thank you! Any idea how often you'll update? :)



Author's Response:

I'm thinking and hoping about once a week, but I just added a second chapter :-)

Reviewer: addicted-to-romione-bedward (Signed) · Date: August 09, 2015 01:01 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

This is such a different story...but I'm hooked.

I bet Debbie is going to rip Brian a new one. I'm curious of how will Justin adapt to this...and what's Brian going to do with him.



Author's Response:

I hope you enjoy what's going to happen!  I'll try not to disappoint and thank you for your review!

PS: I LOVE your stories! :-)

Reviewer: femmegirl49 (Signed) · Date: August 09, 2015 07:32 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

OK, I like this.  I am already so so happy that Brian saved Justing from the Sap.  I would enjoy reading more of this.  It's a story line I havent' seen before and I think it's quite promising!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you!  The plot had been rolling around in my head for a while and I just couldn't stop thinking about it!  Hope you enjoy!

Reviewer: Ami (Anonymous) · Date: August 08, 2015 01:30 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Great start, really looking forward to seeing how this develops



Author's Response:

Thank you! I'll try not to disappoint!  :-)

Reviewer: Who (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2015 07:16 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

More hope. He's alright



Author's Response:

We shall see!  Thanks for your review!  :-)

Reviewer: soirsagrey (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2015 04:23 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Intriguing start to a story. I'm certainly going to keep an eye out for the next update.

I do like a dark story from time to time and I'm looking forward to the rest of this one.

For a first story this has real potential.

Welcome to Midnight Whispers.

XOXO

Soirsa



Author's Response:

Thank you for the welcome and kind words.  I'm pretty nervous.  I haven't written in a REALLY long time, but I had to get this story out!  I hope I live up to your expectations!  :-)

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2015 03:40 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

This is very well written.  I'm wondering what the time table is.  Is it now, or in the future or what?  I have a feeling that Sap isn't going to give up on owning a virgin.  Your Mikey is a Michael that could have been.



Author's Response:

Thank you for your kind words!  I'll try to keep the characters as canon as possible, although the plot may cause me to change some things.  However, I thought Mikey fit this character well.  Seems like a cause Debbie would stand behind and a cause Mikey would believe in, but he'll still have to whine about it, of course... because he's MIKEY!  lol!

You're probably right about the Sap.  He's a bastard.

As far as the time table goes, it is set in modern times, just AU.  There are parts of the original QAF that needed to be changed a bit.  For instance, Brian already owns Kinnetik, even though he's only 30 and Justin is only 18.  The Sap still owns Babylon.  But I'll do my best to put things in order and show differences as we move on.

Reviewer: ANDROMEDA (Anonymous) · Date: August 07, 2015 02:07 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

 Hi Frances !

I just wanted to congratulate you for posting your first story. I don’t think the story line is weird at all and you should definitely continue.

As per your warnings and the first chapter this story may be too difficult for me to handle. It doesn’t make it any less intriguing or interesting. I’m just a big chicken lol.

However with this kind of plot I do understand why there is rape for instance. I mean you can’t talk about slavery without evoking it or sexual abuse etc. It is regrettably a big part of it.

I wish you good luck with this one and welcome you warmly in the fellowship of QAF fics Authors.

I’m sure you will have many faithful readers, and it will be well deserved.

X.

 S.



Author's Response:

Yes, rape and abuse is an unforgivable aspect to this type of plot, but it wouldn't be realistic without it.  HOWEVER... that said, while there will be dark scenes, I'll try to write around them so readers don't have to READ them in depth to understand the plot, just be aware that the scenes are happening.  And there won't be a ton.  I enjoy the boys happy over said any day.  :-)

Thank you for your kind words!  I hope you give the next couple chapters a shot as they won't be as uncomfortable to read as the first one.  The first one was meant to  grab attention however, showing the readers what our boys will be up against.

PS: The King's Will is my FAV story right now.  You may have noticed.  ;-)

Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 07, 2015 11:18 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

While Brian at first, might not have much clue what is happening under his nose. He is in a very

good position to be effective. He has a very strong sense of justice and cares about  others. He also has a lot of power and wealth. And he's not afraid to put up a fight.

It may seem like a mistake to Mikey that Brian get involved but he will soon realiize. Justin is every bit the incentive Brian needs to change his way of thinking. Could almost have been there the way you descibed it.        Extremely impressive first go.



Author's Response:

Ah, you get it!!  :-)  I'm glad you got that from the first chapter.  Gives me more confidence in my writing!  Thank you for the review!  And we all know how big of an "incentive" Justin has shown to be over the years. ;-)

Reviewer: Astrid (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2015 10:01 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Welcome to MW, we are always happy to see new authors!

The story start very well, I'm excited about the next chapters. 



Author's Response:

Thank you for the welcomes and the review!  :-)  Hope I live up to your expectations!

Reviewer: chaval (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2015 08:13 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Très bon début.



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: taurus (Anonymous) · Date: August 07, 2015 08:12 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

You got my attention. Nice job for your first story. Keep on writing.



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: Artfuleye66 (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2015 06:40 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Loving it so far can't wait to read more



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Hope I live up to your expectations!

Reviewer: sophie'smom (Anonymous) · Date: August 07, 2015 06:21 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Off to an intetesting start.
Brian just went broke keeping Justin away from the Sap. Hope he gets some pretty big clients to help build up is money since reselling is against the law. Maybe Brian can put him to work at the agency.

Seems that tjis can get to be very dark, don't know if I'll be able to stick with it. We'll see.

Author's Response:

Thanks for you review! :-)  There may be times when it gets pretty dark, but I will give lots of warning and try to keep to explain it well enough in the following chapters where you don't absolutely have to READ the dark scenes if you don't want to, just be aware of them... if that makes sense.  lol.  The reselling aspect will be explained soon as will Brian's financial situation.  He did spend an awful lot, didn't he?  Haha... but it's for JUSTIN and we all know he would.  ;-)  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: starfire64 (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2015 04:52 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Please continue! This just sucked me right in, haha. I’m looking forward to seeing where you go with this :  ) *Hugs* Janet



Author's Response:

Oh, I'm so glad to hear it caught your attention!  Thank you for reading and commenting!!

Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2015 04:35 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

First of all welcome to Whispers :) This is definitely not going to be an easy read, but I will stick with this until the very end ;)

Author's Response:

Thanks for the welcomes and thanks for reading and commenting!  I promise to not make it too hard to read!  All pain and angst is no fun for anyone.  ;-)

Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: August 07, 2015 04:20 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

This looks well written but I'm hesitant to read dark stories, especially, slave ones. I will take a one-eyed squinted look at it from time to time, though.



Author's Response:

I understand your relunctance, but thank you for reading and even more so, thank you for commenting!  :-)  I promise it won't be TOO dark and it won't be all the time either.  I enjoy seeing the boys happy as well!  ;-)  However, I had to put in the warning because I didn't want to shock people... and it is slavery... never a nice subject.  But they're working against it!  Thanks again!

Reviewer: LegendaryBritinKinlor (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2015 03:51 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Oh I LOVE this!! Very original idea. Even better Brian beat The Sap always love when that happens! Looking frward to more and I do so hope you'll keep going with this. Great start.

Well done!

:)



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I've been thinking about this plot for MONTHS and finally had to put it down!  And I hate the Sap too.  One of the perks of writing this story to sticking it to that dirtbag!  Haha!

Reviewer: Jessica (Anonymous) · Date: August 07, 2015 03:42 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Love it!Please keep it on



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I hope you keep loving it!  :-)

Reviewer: tiger062 (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2015 03:33 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Very intriguing beginning. Definitely looking forward to reading more.

Author's Response:

Thank you, thank you!

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: August 07, 2015 03:03 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Welcome to MW! Great start on this story. I'm already poised for more. TAG



Author's Response:

Thanks for the warm welcomes and thanks for reading!  I hope I don't disappoint!  :-)

Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2015 01:25 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Auction

Hi, Frances!  I really liked this first chapter!  Intriguing beginning!  Please continue - I really think I will enjoy this one, despite the darkness. 

If you need any assistance with a banner, BTW, we have some readers happy to help. Just let Bob or me know.:)

Thanks for posting your story here on MW!  ~Kim



Author's Response:

Thatnks for your vote of confidence!  I promise I don't intend the story to be all "doom and gloom" but I have to throw a bit in to stir up some mess and make it a little... realistic.  But I love the boys happy just as much as the next fan!

And as far as the banner goes, I'd love some help.  lol.  I'm really worthless in that department!

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