Reviewer: Enohvee1875 (Signed) · Date: August 14, 2016 12:19 PM · On: Chapter 1
I almost feel sorry for Brian, but we all know what he thinks of that particular word. As for Justin, at first I thught he was getting fed up with Brian but he seems to have matured and is taking the time to read between the lines even though Mr. Kinney is not making it easy.
Reviewer: chandrika (Anonymous) · Date: August 01, 2016 03:48 PM · On: Chapter 1
great story - thank you for sharing
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2016 08:42 AM · On: Chapter 1
okay everyone is reading ur story Rear Window so i decided to start with ur story. i'm really liking this one but sort of hating the way Brian is. i had that kinnetic is a failure but i love that justin is there taking care of his man. i'm off to chapter 2 i hope u cover the cancer in this one but something tells me you wont.
Reviewer: Enohvee1875 (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2016 12:28 AM · On: Chapter 1
I am anxious to see where you take us with this story. So far Brian, is broke, hitting rock bottom, and in denial. Justin is questioning his feelings or lack thereof toward his guy and wondering if he is going to be drop-kicked off of Mt. Kinney...again. I love it!
Reviewer: c (Anonymous) · Date: December 01, 2015 11:54 PM · On: Chapter 1
wonderful story
thank you for sharing
Reviewer: Blossomlegs (Signed) · Date: November 07, 2015 06:22 AM · On: Chapter 1
Just finished reading this fic, and throughly enjoyed it. Love how Justin stood by Brian through all his angst. Happy Brian finalllly reccognized what he really wanted and went after Justin.
Thanks for sharing!
JoAnn
Author's Response: It may have taken Brian a while but he got there haha. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for letting me know!
Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 23, 2015 03:02 PM · On: Chapter 1
And may I say, you have done a FINE job of doing that. I gpt soooo stressed reading this, but in the best possible way x
Author's Response: Yay!!! Thank you!! :) Hopefully all the stress with be worth it by the end lol
Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 22, 2015 05:30 AM · On: Chapter 1
Oh my, goodness. My heart is breaking for Brian. I hope someone takes him on soon so that he gets back on his feet. And how cute is Justin, of course he still feels something. And putting the money into Brian's wallet was risky, but I am glad he did it, and I am glad Brian accepted it.
Author's Response: It's always a delicate balance with Brian, isn't it? Luckily Justin has practice walking that high-wire relationship of theirs.
Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 21, 2015 07:13 AM · On: Chapter 1
I just discovered this story--interesting could-be-canon premise and opening chapter.
Author's Response: I'm glad you like the way it's started, and I hope that you continue to enjoy as the boys go on this journey. I am trying to keep it as in character as possible, even as I steer away from what happened in the show.
Reviewer: Severus_divides_into_H (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2015 09:29 AM · On: Chapter 1
Hi there! I loved the beginning of this story. I love your writing style and the way you describe characters. Brian and Justin are perfectly in-canon for a situation like this – I’m happy you chose this idea, it’s so bittersweet and it has a lot of potential. It’s a pity we don’t have enough stories based on this turn of events.
I *loved* how you described Justin’s confusion about his feelings toward Brian. I think he isn’t used to seeing his strong partner like that – bitterness is burning in Brian, he’s more callous, colder, it seemed to me that he started to give up. But Justin still obviously loves him – I loved how he put money in his wallet.
Thank you for an amazing start! I can’t wait for the next chapter! I wonder how long you're going to make this story?
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much! I'm glad you think Brian and Justin are in character because that is the number one priority for me. The more in character they are, the more realistic is feels for you. :) And I chose this idea because it seemed like it wasn't really explored much.
And as for Justin's feelings, you nailed it! They are passing a crossroads and Justin is seeing a different side to Brian. But he is still a devoted partner even when he's confused. :D
I loved reading your review, it was so nice! Updates should be pretty regular, so you won't have to worry about that. And the story is going to be 12 chapters long and all the chapters are about the same length as this one, more or less.
Thanks again!
Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: February 21, 2015 03:44 PM · On: Chapter 1
This is your first attempt at writing? Well, I'd venture to say you're a natural!
The story was immediatley compelling. The characters are just right. The atmosphere is an ominous one, and one angle not often expolored in QAF FanFic - the one of an adult Brian Kinney not being successful in everything he does. But there's also a sense of levity to keep the entire thing from being too dark... I guess Jason, Jan, Jesus, Jack & Jonathan couldn't make it to Babylon that night, LOL!
Also, Justin questioning his feelings - or lack thereof. Like I said - ominous!
I'm very intrigued, and looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Yeah, it is. I mean, I've had to write things for school but I've never written this kind of thing before. I'm glad you like it!
And I'm glad you like the balance between the moods of the story. Because it is serious, but if nothing makes you smile at least a little then there's no point in reading, right? :D
Thank you so much for leaving me some feedback, I really love hearing what you think. I hope that as the story continued you'll like it!
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: February 20, 2015 09:27 PM · On: Chapter 1
This is a great beginning. Brian would certainly act like this when he was failing. Justin is being so supportive. It seems like Brian is thinking Justin won't want him if he is a failure or lacking in money. We know that's not true. Looking forward to reading more.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked the beginning. And you're exactly right, Brian is afraid of that. He thinks his only value is in what he can provide for others - but that'll come up more later. ;)
I hope that you continue to like it!
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2015 11:00 PM · On: Chapter 1
I'm glad that Justin still feels something for Brian, you had me scared for a moment. I appreciate that Brian knows that the money in his wallet was Justin's and he didn't make a fuss about it. A thank you would have been nice, but it wouldn't have been Brian. I like how you wrote this. Looking forward to reading more from you.
Author's Response: Well I'm glad that you were a little worried, because that means you care! Thank you so much for your review, and I'm so glad that you you've enjoyed it so far. I hope I don't let you down! :)
Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: February 19, 2015 08:09 PM · On: Chapter 1
Welcome to MW! We love getting new writers. Kinda sad beginning here - really hope there's better to come. TAG
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope that I don't let anyone down. ;) And yeah, the beginning is a bit of a downer, but how can Brian get back on top if he doesn't hit rock bottom? Lol
Reviewer: linda (Anonymous) · Date: February 19, 2015 03:32 PM · On: Chapter 1
I like the beginning--will be interesting to see how he gets back on his feet, so to speak. I especially like the J. names during, Ha!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked all the different names, I was hoping it would be amusing to break a little of the tension. :)
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2015 03:30 PM · On: Chapter 1
Hi, Kristine! Welcome to MW! Bob and I are glad you decided to post your story here! Interesting first chapter. It's obvious that Brian's current financial status is weighing heavily on his mind. I think he is quite IC here, although he's coming off as a bit of a jerk toward Justin at times. One minute he wants Justin; the next, he's hunting for another trick. He doesn't come across as too grateful for Justin being there, but again, I think it is in large part to him not feeling like he needs anyone's help, and perhaps just a bit of denial here about his current financial situation.
Interesting take on Justin's POV as far as his feelings toward Brian. Not sure what direction you are heading with this one, but I'll be curious to find out if you explore his conflicted feelings toward Brian more in upcoming chapters.
And just a suggestion if I may - your chapter is fine as far as the formatting goes, but normally it is easier for readers to follow if there are doublespaces between each paragraph. But again, just a thought. It is perfectly fine the way it is if that is what you prefer.;)
Thanks again for posting on the site, and welcome!
Kim
Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for the welcome! And you're right, he is being a bit of a jerk, but he's got a lot of lessons coming his way. ;)
And yes, Justin's feelings towards Brian are going to be one of the main focuses of the next few chapters until he figures out what they are, and what to do about them.
Thanks for the suggestion - I've never formatted stories before so I'll take your advice.
Thanks for leaving some feedback, I really appreciate it!
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