Midnight Whispers
QAF Brian and Justin Fanfiction
Reviews For Come What May
Reviewer: Avampiregirl (Signed) · Date: September 30, 2016 06:27 AM · On: Chapter 11

Really one of the best stories I have read in a long time!! Thank you for sharing your writing!!

Reviewer: Enohvee1875 (Signed) · Date: August 14, 2016 12:19 PM · On: Chapter 1

I almost feel sorry for Brian, but we all know what he thinks of that particular word. As for Justin, at first I thught he was getting fed up with Brian but he seems to have matured and is taking the time to read between the lines even though Mr. Kinney is not making it easy. 

Reviewer: chandrika (Anonymous) · Date: August 01, 2016 03:48 PM · On: Chapter 1

great story - thank you for sharing

Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2016 08:38 PM · On: Chapter 11

Loved it

Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2016 07:58 PM · On: Chapter 8

Shouldn't Bryan be dead?   Loving this

Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2016 06:16 PM · On: Chapter 5

What about the lump

Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2016 06:16 PM · On: Chapter 5

What about the lump

Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2016 02:24 PM · On: Chapter 3

Talk about kicking a man.  Give him that gumball kick off cancer lol.   I just don't know what to have if Brian.   What is he going to do.

Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2016 12:14 PM · On: Chapter 2

oh no ia he really going to sell the loft?    is he going to london?   first i wanted him to get the cancer in this, i still sort of do, but he's so down and then there's the thing about not having any insurance and stuff like that but something needs to make him lean on justin.   i love how justin finally realized what he was feeling was love it was so adorable.

Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2016 08:42 AM · On: Chapter 1

okay everyone is reading ur story Rear Window so i decided to start with ur story.  i'm really liking this one but sort of hating the way Brian is.   i had that kinnetic is a failure but i love that justin is there taking care of his man.   i'm off to chapter 2 i hope u cover the cancer in this one but something tells me you wont.

Reviewer: Enohvee1875 (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2016 12:28 AM · On: Chapter 1

I am anxious to see where you take us with this story.  So far Brian, is broke, hitting rock bottom, and in denial. Justin is questioning his feelings or lack thereof toward his guy and wondering if he is going to be drop-kicked off of Mt. Kinney...again. I love it! 

Reviewer: The SNO (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2016 11:35 PM · On: Chapter 11

I read this wonderful story in 2 shots and I'm sorry I didn't comment each chapter.

I was too eager to see where you were leading them. Very interesting arc (Brian sinking so low and the cancer being there without being officially found).

Some fun (Gardner with the wine, Gus with the potatoes), lots of "couples" moments with B&J, Michael really supportive of Justin (for once) and really Brian's best friend (for once as well).

Brian coming to his senses by his own and doing what has become obvious to him: making THE move towards Justin.

Thank you for sharing this with us!

Reviewer: c (Anonymous) · Date: December 01, 2015 11:54 PM · On: Chapter 1

wonderful story

thank you for sharing

Reviewer: Alois (Signed) · Date: November 07, 2015 07:24 PM · On: Chapter 11

I really enjoyed your story Kristine. You took the characters on a believable path and it was a pleasure to read such a fic. Failure is not a commun occurence concerning Brian, and the evolution of the characters here is so well done. I will be looking forward to more from you! Thank your for this wonderful story :)

Author's Response:

Oh wow thank you so much!!  I'm glad you enjoyed the story - I was so afraid while I wrote it that people would think it was stupid or unbelievable (especially because Brian was being put into situations he's never had to deal with before).  So it's great to know that you liked it so much!  :)

Reviewer: Alois (Signed) · Date: November 07, 2015 02:26 PM · On: Chapter 4


Author's Response:

Oh good!!!  Thanks!

Reviewer: Alois (Anonymous) · Date: November 07, 2015 12:40 PM · On: Chapter 2

Hi Kristine! I'm just discovering this story and I love it so much so far! Your writing style is excellent and wow your characterization is outstanding! Bravo! Also love how you write about Michael and Justin's relationship. Anyway, As soon as I can, I will read it all :) Thank you!

Author's Response:

Oh wow!  That's amazing to hear, thank you so much!  I was so afraid when I first started writing because it's so new to me, but I'm learnings o much and really love it.  Also, I'm glad you enjoyed Michael and Justin's friendship - I know that for some reason Michael seems to be hated in this fandom but I've always liked him haha.  Hope you enjoy the rest!

Reviewer: Blossomlegs (Signed) · Date: November 07, 2015 06:22 AM · On: Chapter 1

Just finished reading this fic, and throughly enjoyed it.  Love how Justin stood by Brian through all his angst.  Happy Brian finalllly reccognized what he really wanted and went after Justin.

Thanks for sharing!


Author's Response:

It may have taken Brian a while but he got there haha.  I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for letting me know!

Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: November 06, 2015 02:22 AM · On: Chapter 11

Loved it! 

I was so intrigued by the concept of Brian not being immediately successful with Kinnetik. There aren't too many of this type of Fic around. There are plenty with an unsuccessful Justin, and Brian rushing in to rescue him, but not many with a strong Justin to the rescue... it was interesting to see how the boys would fair with the positions reversed. You did a great job!


Author's Response:

You know that's actually one of the reasons I wanted to write this.  I've read so many fics - every one I could get my hands on - and I just got a little sick of Justin always being the one needing to be rescued.  I'm glad you enjoyed the role-reversal and thanks for letting me know!!  :)

Reviewer: 7wildwaysup (Signed) · Date: November 05, 2015 04:58 PM · On: Chapter 11

I loved it! That was great for your first fic! Keep up the good work...

Hugs Darling ~ Kathleen

Author's Response:

Awww thank you!  It means so much to hear that!  I really appreciate all the feedback you gave.  :)

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: November 05, 2015 04:22 PM · On: Chapter 11

😊. TAG

Author's Response:


Reviewer: 7wildwaysup (Signed) · Date: November 05, 2015 02:46 AM · On: Chapter 3

This is great, I'm loving it so far... ~ Kathleen

Author's Response:

Awesome!!  Thank you so much.

Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: November 04, 2015 07:10 PM · On: Chapter 11

That was such a perfect ending, thank you. Will you be writing anything else? I really love your style. 

I dont think this was meant to make me laugh, but “By the way…” Brian said slowly after he broke away. “I had testicular cancer.” had me cracking up. I could just see Brian saying it and Justin pulling back from him all "WHAT THE FUCK?"

Love love love love! Thank you for writing this x

Author's Response:

Awww thank you!  And yes, I will be writing more.  I already have some ideas in the works and am going to get working on them soon.

And actually, it was supposed to make you laugh lol.  I know cancer isn't exactly a laughing matter, but I never intended for it to play a large role in this fic so I wanted to bring closure to that aspect of Brian's life without playing into too much of the drama.

Thank you so much for all your feedback!  I really appreciated it.

Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: November 04, 2015 01:35 PM · On: Chapter 11

Thoroughly enjoyed this story, Kristine, from their highs and their lows.  Glad it had a happy ending! Thank you for posting this very enjoyable read.  ~Kim

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for taking the time to leave me reviews and I'm glad you liked it!  :)

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: November 04, 2015 06:11 AM · On: Chapter 11

<3 Delightful ending! Bea came to appreciate Justin and left the to-be-christened Britin to him. The boys are reunited, engaged, and can proceed with their favorite games. ;)

Author's Response:

The perfect ending, right?  I am a firm believer of happy endings - I feel like it's a waste to end it sad.  :)  Thanks so much for letting me know what you thought all this time and I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: November 04, 2015 06:04 AM · On: Chapter 11

This is the last chapter?  Wahhh.  I'm glad they got back together and that Beatrice left Justin the house.  Hope the kids don't manage to have her will reversed.  Great story.

Author's Response:

Awwww thanks!  Don't worry about the kids, they don't have aleg to stand on lol.  Thanks for all the support and I'm glad you liked the story!

Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: October 31, 2015 03:55 AM · On: Chapter 10

Here's the link for A Thousand Beautiful Things, for those who need it


Author's Response:

Oh thank you so much!!  I had read it at work but as soon as I got home I couldn't find the link for it, this really helped.  :)

Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: October 31, 2015 03:50 AM · On: Chapter 10

Oh, I had a feeling when we first met Beatrice that she wouldn't make it to the end. You threw me a little with her inital viscious reaction to Brian & Justin, but wound up, I think, where I first figured it would.

Thank you for making a normal Mikey. Glad Brian has gotten his health back! 

Looking forward to next update, although I AM a little sad it will be the last one!

Author's Response:

Well you're right!  Even in my very first drafts of this story she ended up dead - but she grew on me more than I thought she would.  Oh well.  The boys need their house lol

And of course I made Mikey normal, I hate character bashing.  Now I won't say I like all the characters evenly, but I dislike it when people write someone so far off the wall evil that it makes the story unbelievable.  And I really think that Michael is a good guy.

Thank you so much for the review, and I hope you enjoy the final chapter!!  :)

Reviewer: Qaf4life (Signed) · Date: October 31, 2015 12:10 AM · On: Chapter 10

Please up date 


Author's Response:

Don't worry, the last chapter will be up soon - I promise!!  Thanks!

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 30, 2015 03:46 PM · On: Chapter 10

Wow.  So much has happened since the last chapter.  Has Bea left the physical plane?  Where can we find A Thousand Beautiful Things.  I can't locate it.

Author's Response:

Unfortunately, yes, she passed away and Justin found her dead in her bed.  But, as much as I was sad to see her go her death was something I planned from the beginning.  Also, here's a link.


Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: October 30, 2015 12:45 PM · On: Chapter 10

Still loving your story, Kristine. And you have set up for the boys to reunite and live in Britin (Bea's home) in a very logical way.;)  Can't wait to read the rest of this. Thank you again for posting this enjoyable story. ~Kim

Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm really glad you liked it, it means a lot seeing as how great of a writer you are.  I hope you like the final chapter and how everything plays out.  :)

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 30, 2015 06:41 AM · On: Chapter 10

Sounds like Brian might be trending toward Justin and, I'm guessing, the mansion that will become known as Britin. I've been wondering if Beatrice might leave the house to Justin, having pretty much overcome her homophobia.

Author's Response:

Yes, the mansion will be Britin.  I wanted to wrap things up nicely, and that meant giving them the home they belong in together - even if that meant killing off Bea.  Haha, thanks!

Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 30, 2015 05:31 AM · On: Chapter 10

DUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUDDDDDDDDE!!!! I want to shake Brian so fucking much, he needs to get his ass back to WV to be with Justin - especially now... BEA, NO, I WAS STARTING TO LIKE HER!!!

I really love how you had Cynthia and Michael both talk to Brian anout Justin. They know what he wants and what he needs, even if he doesn't.

This is such an amazing story. I'm going to miss it x

Author's Response:

Awww thank you sooo much!!  I'm glad you enjoyed it.  And yes, Brian does need to come to his senses.  But I really wanted his decision to be with Justin to be a purposeful one, instead of one brought on by circumstances.  As for Bea, I'm going to miss her too.  I hated killed her off just as she started being nice but I had planned it from the beginning that way.  

Reviewer: tiger062 (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2015 05:52 AM · On: Chapter 9

I had a sudden thought about the story you are looking for - while I was vacuuming the house....LOL I recently read a story where Justin was in a pysch ward, silent but very gentle. Brian was doing rehab (that or jail) and Hobbs was an orderly that was abusing Justin at night - the outbursts were happening when Hobbs had been on shift and Brian had to figure out what was happening. The story is ‘A thousand beautiful things’ by Lemon_bar

Author's Response:

Yes!  That was the one.  Thank you so much - off how epiphanies can come to us at the strangest places, isn't it?  Ahhh such a good story.  Thank you!!

Reviewer: wellreadbunny (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2015 05:33 AM · On: Chapter 9

It is by lemonbar.

Author's Response:

YES!  Thank you thank you thank you!!  You're amazing!!

Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: October 28, 2015 04:07 AM · On: Chapter 9

Well, I didn't see that turn of events! I hope the boys find some kind of compromise before it's too late!

I think the story you're looking for is Psychosis, by Tagsit. A great read!


Author's Response:

One last turn before the story ends lol.  I couldn't let it go without one last wrench.  ;)

And unfortunately it's not that one.  Actually, reading her story (which is also wonderful) reminded me of the one I was thinking of.  This is one I didn't read on MW.  I knew it'd be a reach since it isn't on this website, but I figured I'd ask haha.  Thanks though.

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2015 01:59 AM · On: Chapter 9

Forgot to say that the mashed potato scene cracked me up! Perfect father and son moment.

Author's Response:

Lol thank you!  It was fun to write, even if it was short.  I thought it'd be a nice touch.  I'm glad so many people enjoyed it.  :)

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2015 01:54 AM · On: Chapter 9

What a cliffhanger! Will Brian forget his cancer worries in his excitement over launching Kinnetik? Will he be able to compromise to keep Justin in his life? Drat, the story is nearing its end. I do hope all will be resolved for the boys by then...or maybe a sequel? ;)

Author's Response:

I thought it would be a pretty good one ;)  Brian's cancer will only play a small role, so I wouldn't worry about it too much.  As for the compromise, Brian is stubborn...But no matter what, it'll be wrapped up in two chapters.  Hope you're not disappointed.

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2015 01:35 AM · On: Chapter 8

A bit up an upswing with Beatrice which is a great segue from one holiday to the next. But, methinks, there will be angst ahead with Brian's cancer. :(

Author's Response:

Don't worry too much about Brian's cancer.  I never wanted it to play a big role in the story and so it'll be wrapped up quickly.  Perhaps not the best way to handle, but this is a relationship fic, not a cancer one.  I'm hoping I cover it well though.

Reviewer: tiger062 (Signed) · Date: October 27, 2015 02:43 PM · On: Chapter 9

The story I think you're looking for is Psychosis by Tagsit.

Looking forward to reading the end and discovering what the boys finally decide.

Author's Response:

Unfortunately it's not.  *sigh*  Her story is actually what reminded me of the other one I read.  Oh well, thanks though!  :)

And I hope you're not disappointed by the endin, two more to go!

Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: October 27, 2015 01:17 PM · On: Chapter 9

Ack! What a place to end it!  I'm proud of you - LOL!  I loved the scene with Brian and his son in the mashed potato wars - cute!  And since I enjoy angst, you really have set up a major conundrum here between the boys. But since I'm guessing Beatrice's house winds up being Britin, I'm hopeful the boys will find a way to come to a compromise somehow and stay in the house. But what a time for Brian to indicate he wanted to go back to his old ways! I want to shake some sense into him.And poor Justin - I think it would be very much IC for him to yearn for such a life with the man he loves.

Sigh...anyway, still loving this story, Kristine.  Looking forward to the rest of it, and will check out your Halloween story as soon as I can get a chance. Wanted to write one myself this year, but just too much going on at the moment, unfortunately. *Hugs* ~Kim

Author's Response:

Oh wow, that means so much!!  Thank you!  :)  And they are going to have to come up with a compromise, but whether or not Brian is willing is another thing entirely.  He's a pretty stubborn man after all ;).  As for the Halloween story, I hope you enjoy it when you get the chance to check it out.  Thanks so much for taking the time to leave me a review.

Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 27, 2015 07:09 AM · On: Chapter 9

OMG girl you are killing me. Firstly, I am sad we are near the end - how much more do we have left? And secondly, Brian, OH BRIAN... He wants to go back to how things were? AND I JUST COMMENTED ON HOW MUCH HE'D CHANGED!!! Would Pittsburgh Brian snuggle Justin by a fireplace if it was cold????????

How are they going to handle this if one wants to go and oen wants to stay? DON'T BREAK MY BOYS UP. And Justin wants to try raw sexytimes, will he ever get the chance???????

Author's Response:

Lol I'm sorry...But only a little because I'm glad that you're so invested in the story.  Only two more chapters, so not much more, I promise.  And they're shorter like this one is.  Originally they were just one chapter but it didn't feel right so I broke them up.  I had to throw one last curve ball in there to mess everything up.  Brian just needs to make some conscious decisions about his relationship with Justin, rather than merely participate because of their circumstances.  Thank you!!

Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 27, 2015 06:55 AM · On: Chapter 8

God, there is so much I just really bloody adore in this story, Brian and Justin visiting back home, Brian's relationship with Gus - how you stripping Brian of all the things that were so important to him is helping mould him in to this really lovely guy. I love how sweet he's being to Justin. Oh and referring to them as a team, I feel so proud of how far Brian has come in this story.

Author's Response:

Thanks!  I've always felt that the show underplayed a lot of the important ways Brian's supports those he cares about - and who does he care about more than Justin and Gud? No one!  lol

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 27, 2015 05:52 AM · On: Chapter 9

It's good that Brian is getting his life back, but where does that leave Justin?  I seem to remember the story you're asking about, but I don't remember who wrote it.  If you find out let me know I wouldn't mind reading it again. 

Author's Response:

Thanks!!  I'll let you know as soon as I figure it out...Unfortunately nothing so far and I spent a significant amount of time at work looking.  As for Brian and Justin, it may not be as easy to get through this little speed bump as every one wants.  ;)

Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: October 25, 2015 02:32 PM · On: Chapter 8

Very much still enjoying your story, Kristine. :)  I like how they are continuing to work as a team, and how you show their love, but also the stress and tension, that would go with their situation.  Like the stronger Justin here as well. Just the right mixture of sweetness and angst. Thank you for writing and posting this story. I will be looking forward to more of this.  ~Kim

Author's Response:

Oh wow thanks!  It's so great to hear that from you.  I'm glad the balance is good too, I knew that it was getting a little angsty for some people so I figured I'd throw in a bit of fluff.  I hope that as it begins to wrap up you continue to enjoy it.  :)

Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: October 25, 2015 01:55 AM · On: Chapter 8

Nice to see updates to this story... happy to see that the boys seem to be winning over Beatrice, at least a little bit. Very worried about Brian's health... I hope he sees a Dr soon. 

Already looking forward to the next update.

Author's Response:

Yeah I finally got back to a good flow of writing - oddly enough I get to do most of it at work thanks to a promotion that came with a lot more free time (weird huh?)  And yes, the more time they spend at the manor the more she sees that maybe they aren't so different.  Thank you!

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 24, 2015 06:46 PM · On: Chapter 8

The holidays are here and things could have been worse.  I'm glad it wasn't.  It was nice that Brian got to spend time with Gus. Will be waiting for more to see what else you have planned.

Author's Response:

I thought they deserved a little bit of a break, right?  ;)  I hope I don't disappoint in the coming chapters.  Thanks!

Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 23, 2015 03:02 PM · On: Chapter 1

And may I say, you have done a FINE job of doing that. I gpt soooo stressed reading this, but in the best possible way x

Author's Response:

Yay!!!  Thank you!!  :)  Hopefully all the stress with be worth it by the end lol

Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 23, 2015 03:22 AM · On: Chapter 7

Beatrice, I liked you, then you had to ruin it and become a hater, damn you. I really hope she warms up and realises what nice boys they are.

You killed me with Brian snuggling Justin all night to keep him warm, and then making him lay closest to the fire, my heart. I JUST CAN'T <3

Author's Response:

She was too good to be true ;)  

And with the cuddling, I couldn't resist myself - I thought it was too good an opportunity for some fluff, which this story desperately needed.


Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 23, 2015 02:55 AM · On: Chapter 6

A FIRE?????????????? These two can't catch a break! I hope Brian gets his ball checked out soon :( I'm worried about it. I hope his head is okay. SO MANY THINGS WORRYING ME lol

Author's Response:

It seems to snowball doesn't it?  But don't worry, things might take a turn for the better soon.  As for Brian's cancer, it is admittedly going to play a small role in this story - not to trvialize it, but because the story is going to focus on his and Justin's relationship more than anything else.  Thank you!

Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 23, 2015 02:35 AM · On: Chapter 5

Brian had every right IMO to throw the wine over Vance, what an asshole. I love when Brian gets all protective over Justin. But what are they going to do now? :(

Author's Response:

That scene was a little self-indulgent.  I was a waitress for five years and I had SO many customers I wish I could have done that to.  But alas, I had to live vicariously through Brian lol.

And they'll figure something out. :)  Promise.


Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 23, 2015 02:10 AM · On: Chapter 4

Oh God, Lindsay, did not just offer Brian money for looking after his kid, did you? I know he needs the money, but INSULTING!!! And then the family all shouting at him for Justin working so hard, I can only imagine how this must make him feel. I loved him stopping by Justin's work though, that was so cute.


Oh Justin, listen to what Brian is trying to tell you, he didn't mean it was bad that he has to rely on you, it's just he's not used to it. He's a proud man :(


Author's Response:

Cruel right?  She was trying to help, but she was a little misguided.  And yeah poor Brian is struggling with adjusting to the new situation.  

Thank you!!

Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 23, 2015 01:46 AM · On: Chapter 3

It's hilarous how much this story is stressing me out, but I love it. I hate stress usually, but I cannot stop reading. Please tell me it ends happily lol

Author's Response:

Awww, well at least it's the good kind of stress!  I'm glad that the story has got your attention and I hope it continues that way.  And while I won't give away any endings, I will say that I believe in happy ones.  ;)

Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 22, 2015 05:55 AM · On: Chapter 2

NO HE CANNOT SELL THE LOFT, THAT'S HIS HOME!! omg you're killing me here, my heart hurts so much for Brian. But what he did to Justin in the diner was uncalled for, but it is true, he pushes people away. Man, you're good x

Author's Response:

Awww thank you!  That was so sweet.  :)  And unfortunatly Brian is trying to make the best of a bad situation.  In the show he was able to avoid selling the loft because Kinnetik took off - that didn't happen here.  My goal is to strip Brian of all the external ways he identifies himself so he's forced to find other, more constructive ways, of identifying who Brian Kinney is.  

Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: October 22, 2015 05:30 AM · On: Chapter 1

Oh my, goodness. My heart is breaking for Brian. I hope someone takes him on soon so that he gets back on his feet. And how cute is Justin, of course he still feels something. And putting the money into Brian's wallet was risky, but I am glad he did it, and I am glad Brian accepted it.

Author's Response:

It's always a delicate balance with Brian, isn't it?  Luckily Justin has practice walking that high-wire relationship of theirs.

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 21, 2015 09:37 AM · On: Chapter 7

I'm still waiting for an upturn. Bad cess needs to stop dogging Justin and Brian.

Author's Response:

It'll come in time.  They're together, and every challenge they face they're facing together.  ;)  Thank you!!

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 21, 2015 09:20 AM · On: Chapter 6

Justin and Brian are really being put through the wringer, but they appear to be developing an ever-deepening relationship. I'm hoping for an upturn in their professional lives.

Author's Response:

Yeah, they're suffering pretty hard, but you're right, the worse the situation gets, the closer they become.  Which is the most important thing.  :)  Thank you!!

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 21, 2015 08:58 AM · On: Chapter 5

Doesn't look like Brian has hit rock bottom yet but, goodness knows, he'd have been justified in refusing to serve Vance, who's a total slimeball. One has to feel for Brian, who really has swallowed his pride.

Author's Response:

It had to be a big hit to his ego, right?  But you're right, it takes more to knock down the Great Brian Kinney.  ;)  Thank you!

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 21, 2015 08:36 AM · On: Chapter 4

So heartwrenching and beautiful at the same time. This could easily be canon; to me Justin and Brian are in character.

I'm terrified about what will happen with Brian's testicular cancer. I hope he'll get it checked out and treated soon.

Author's Response:

That is such a relief to hear!  When I'm writing it myself it's hard to think of how it would be perceived by you readers.  One of the things I strive for the most is keeping them in character - because to me that makes the story more believable, so I'm glad you think they are!

Thank you so much!!

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 21, 2015 08:14 AM · On: Chapter 3

Looks like Brian's finally realizing what's most important.

How wonderful that Ben and Michael wanted to help Justin and, by extension, Brian.

Author's Response:

They're their own little family and family takes care of their own.  :)  And while he's making progress he still has a long way to go.  Thank you!

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 21, 2015 07:36 AM · On: Chapter 2

Brian doesn't yet realize that throwing Justin off the Kinney cliff didn't work or, of course, that Justin's love for him has deepened.

I'm curious to see if Justin will help Brian win the Kingston account.

It's good to see friendship has developed between Michael and Justin. I am wondering when Gus will enter the picture...

Author's Response:

I always feel like Michael's and Justin's friendship was underplayed in the show.  It seems that they're simply civil to each other until the very last season when Justin leaves Brian and Brian goes off on Michael - then they seem best buddies all of a sudden.  I don't know, just something that bothered me lol

As for Gus, to be honest, he'll play only a small roll in this story.  In fact, everyone will only be small side characters as the majority of this will focus on Brian and Justin's relationship.  I hope it's still good though.  Thanks!

Reviewer: eureka1 (Signed) · Date: October 21, 2015 07:13 AM · On: Chapter 1

I just discovered this story--interesting could-be-canon premise and opening chapter.

Author's Response:

I'm glad you like the way it's started, and I hope that you continue to enjoy as the boys go on this journey.  I am trying to keep it as in character as possible, even as I steer away from what happened in the show.

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 20, 2015 09:29 PM · On: Chapter 7

Just when you think things are getting better, they get worse.  I'm wondering if things will work out for the better in the end.

Author's Response:

I'm evil aren't I?  I don't really want to give away the ending, but I do believe in happy endings - I can't tell you the number of times I'd been frustrated by a sad ending and I feel like I've wasted my time reading it.  That being said, I want them both to learn and evolve.  And I want to accomplish that by making them suffer.  ;)  lol thank you!

Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: October 14, 2015 03:16 AM · On: Chapter 6

Great to see an update! Our boys just can't seem to catch a break... but somehow, I think Justin's new-found friendship with the elderly woman who lives in a large West Virgina estate will come back into play!

Author's Response:

Oh yeah I just WONDER what kind part she'll have to play.  ;)  I know I wasn't very subtle, but I wanted to give people a little hope.  

Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2015 02:28 AM · On: Chapter 6

Hi, Kristine! I was delighted to see an update on this from you. I really enjoy this story, and the emotions you evoke with it.  I have a suspicion that Bea is about to play an important part in their lives coming up.;)

I will be looking forward to your next update.  ~Kim

Author's Response:

Maybe she will. ;)  And yeah I wish I didn't have to take a break, but I'm glad to be back.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 09, 2015 06:32 PM · On: Chapter 6

The apartment going up in flames!  At least they have each other.

Author's Response:

They do have to have something to rely on, right?

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 09, 2015 06:21 PM · On: Chapter 5

Ack.  Things were looking up, now this.

Author's Response:

Lol Yeah that's kind of the theme of the story unfortunately.  But I don't believe in sad endings.  ;)

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 09, 2015 06:15 PM · On: Chapter 4

Things are looking bad.  Brian needs to see the doctor.  Justin needs to work only one job.  How does it work out?

Author's Response:

Things will get better, I promise.  They're both stubborn men and they need a little time to grow.  

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 09, 2015 06:03 PM · On: Chapter 3

I remember reading this chapter before and thinking it would have been so much easier if Kingston had said yes. It was surprising that Brian sold his loft.  At least Brian has moved in with Justin.  Let's hope things start going up for both of them.

Author's Response:

But things can't be easy, then they'll learn nothing haha.  

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 09, 2015 05:45 PM · On: Chapter 2

Now that Justin knows what he needs to do how does he go about it?  How does Brian get Kingston in his pocket or does he.  Things seem to go from bad to worse for Brian.

Author's Response:

Unfortunately that's a common theme in this story - things going badly for Brian.  But I want Justin and Brian to bond over their adversity.  Thank you!

Reviewer: Diana (Anonymous) · Date: October 09, 2015 12:15 PM · On: Chapter 6

What an amazing story!!! 

It's a completely different approach of Brian's and Justin's realtionship and i LOVE it!!!!

I'm really excited to see how it's going to continue and i hope it's VERY soon :):):)

Best wishes to you.


Author's Response:

Oh wow!  Thank you so much!  I hate that I had such a long hiatus - I HATE when I want to finish a story and the author leaves for what seems like ages.  But the story will be updated regularly now!  I hope you continue to enjoy it.  :)

Reviewer: Annie-Eliza (Signed) · Date: April 21, 2015 06:58 AM · On: Chapter 5

So I just read this all five chapters on a slow night at work and I can already tell that it is going to become one of my favorite fics ever written. It is so emotionally intense and raw. I am upset about how Brian pushed Justin off the cliff but god, he's going through such a rough time. You made it a little better by making him slowly accept that a job's a job but then Gardner walks in. Jesus, what an asshole. I didn't think he was that much of an asshole in the show since he did try to understand why Brian did what he did when it came to Stockwell but I can see him turning on him like this after Brian told him he was going to take his clients. I can't forgive him for having Brian blacklisted or calling Justin a slut though.Seriously, Gardner is a total asshole.

Every character is written so well. I am not a huge fan of character hate and you write them as human beings. Flawed, well-meaning, sometimes hurtful people. I absolutely love your approach. It breaks my heart to see Brian like this. Seeing him fall and feel absolutely worthless is so upsetting. I he needs to open up to someone. He has a problem when it comes to letting people take care of him and his situation is cutting into him deeper than anyone else can tell, including Justin. I really do think he has slipped into a deep depression that he can't find a way out of. When I am reading his despair and desperation, it makes me want to cry for him. I would be completely breaking down if I were in his position. I would say that he's strong since he hasn't started bawling like a baby yet but that would be much healthier than what he's doing now.

And I want to shake him for not getting checked out! I know he doesn't have insurance and I know that the weight would fall on Justin to take care of him but the sooner he does it, the less he's going have to worry about. Yeah, they'll be in debt due to his treatment and surgery but if the cancer just stays in the testicle then he'll be fine most likely. By waiting, he's letting it spread and that has me on wit's end.

Justin is also so heartbreaking here. He's trying so hard and believes in Brian so much but he's working himself to the bone trying to keep both of them afloat and pay Brian back for all that he's done. Part of me wants to tell Brian that it's okay that Justin takes care of him since it was the other way around for so long but Justin is 20 years old. He's a kid and it's hard to see him in this position. Three shifts a day is way too much and, just when things are starting to get easier on him, everything screws up again.

Seriously though, amazing job. I am so hooked to this already. I hate that I didn't find it until just now. However, since I took up writing my own stories, I barely give myself time to read other talented authors. I'm glad you've posted your story and this is an amazing first one to start out with. I have a story idea that revolves Brian suffering from depression but I'm not sure I'll be able make it as good as this. Can't wait to read the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Oh my god!  Thank you!  I had to read this like five times because it made me smile so much!  I can't believe you enjoyed it so much, but I'm so glad you did!  For one, I am not a fan of character hate either.  Sure, there are some I like more than others, but I'm not going to crucify any of them just because I don't like that.  I hate it when people write someone out of character just for a story - it makes it less believable for me.  So I appreciate that you like the way I did it.

As for Brian's cancer, it's frustrating the way he handles it, isn't it?  He is a stubborn man and believes that because there's nothing he can do about it, he might as well do nothing.  On the other hand, keep in mind that I'm focusing more on his relationship with Justin rather than the cancer.  So it'll be in the background more than anything.

And when I was writing these last few chapters I kept thinking to myself that I as being so mean to Justin - and he's my favorite!!  But not only is his support of Brian good for Brian, but I think in the long run it'll be good for him.  Yes he's so much younger than Brian - still a kid in many ways - but since this is an AU I'm excluding many of the things in the show that helped him mature and thus I needed other means to do that.  They're a bit cruel...but hey, gotta keep it interesting, right?  

Thank you SOOO much!! 

Reviewer: Noitish (Anonymous) · Date: April 20, 2015 08:16 AM · On: Chapter 5

Damn this is bleak! And not just the humiliation of the job situation but the health issue Brian is so successfully ignoring. I have to wonder how he even cares whether he's employed or not, when he knows he's probably dying. Man, Justin's gonna be pissed off when he finds out..!

Author's Response:

Brian is very good at being stubborn - especially about things he can't change.  Unfortunately, his health is something he can't fix right now.  As for Justin finding out...we'll Just hve to see about that.  Thank you!

Reviewer: M (Anonymous) · Date: April 01, 2015 11:42 PM · On: Chapter 4

The only poor one here is justin . Dose not Brian know what a JOB of any kind is.

Author's Response:

Brian is struggling here.  Not just with his job, but also his sense of worth.  He's not just in a funk, but in my mind he's in a depression.  It's hard to get motivated to go find a job you don't even want when you're depressed.  But don't worry, things will get better, I promise.  And Justin's hard work won't be in vain.

Reviewer: steff (Anonymous) · Date: April 01, 2015 10:24 PM · On: Chapter 3

I like your story! I'm looking forward for more chapters to come! Thank you for sharing!

Author's Response:

Thank you for letting me know!  I appreciate it!

Reviewer: wellreadbunny (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2015 05:55 PM · On: Chapter 4

Poor Brian and Justin. They just can't catch a break. Really good chapter. Will it always be Brian's POV ?

Author's Response:

They will eventually, but they need to learn a few things about each other first.  And no, it'll switch back and forth between both of them.  Thank you!

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2015 03:42 AM · On: Chapter 4

Poor Brian.  Things keep getting worse.  While it might be painful, for both him and Justin, if it makes them equal that's all that counts.  Hopefully there is some good news coming soon.  Working to make a go of Kinnetic and having cancer isn't a good sign.

Author's Response:

I'm glad you're looking on the bright side, because you're right!  Making them more equal is one of my main goals - even though it does suck a little.  ;)  And I believe in happy endings, so good news WILL come...eventually.  Thank you!

Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: March 16, 2015 02:48 AM · On: Chapter 3

Great installment! I like this mature, responsible version of Justin.

Also, thank you so much for giving us a believable Mikey; who, although he still loves Brian, is also very happy and content with his own reltionship. It has become a trap of many QAF writers to morph Mikey into some sort spawn of the Devil himself, LOL!

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response:

I'm really glad you like how I portray Michael.  I agree with you, a lot of the stories I read have him written so evily, which he just isn't.  I'm not saying he's my favorie character, but he is a generally good person and I wanted my fic to be as true to the characters as possible.

Thank you so much for your review!

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2015 03:19 AM · On: Chapter 3

Darn, I'm so sorry that Brian didn't manage to win over Ed, but the story is going great so I can't complain.  Can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Awww, thank you so much.  And yeah, I have a bit of a sadistic streak so things are going to be tough for Brian for a bit longer before they get better.

Reviewer: wellreadbunny (Signed) · Date: March 11, 2015 05:41 PM · On: Chapter 3

Excellent! You covered a lot. Thank you. I can't believe he turned Brian down, now what?

Author's Response:

Yeah I guess my chapters do tend to be a bit expansive, but I figure then you have more to read every time.  ;)

And Brian has a long row to hoe, but he IS Brian Kinney.  He won't stay down long.

Reviewer: sasha (Anonymous) · Date: March 08, 2015 02:37 PM · On: Chapter 2

brian is an asshole, i don't think justin should come back to him until he grovels! and maybe even then. that was unforgivable and uncaring! like brian doesn't love justin at all. i don't understand him.

Author's Response:

Brian was being a bit of a jerk, well, more than a bit.  But Justin is also strong, and knows what he was doing.  While he won't be a rug for Brian to walk all over, he isn't going to be stubborn and refuse to work out what Brian did.  As for Brian, he's at a point where he is adamantly trying to convince himself he doesn't love Justin which makes him do mean things and think mean things.  Hopefully in time he'll win you back over.  Thank you sooo much!  :)

Reviewer: wellreadbunny (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2015 05:12 PM · On: Chapter 2

I like where this story is going , but wouldn't it be easier and faster to sell the corvette than the loft, and why does he need to go to England ? If Vance just pitched Kingston isn't he in the Pitts.

Author's Response:

It would, except Brian doesn't only want to get to England, but he also wants to pay off the last of his credit card bills.  If he only sold the 'vette, he'd still have a hundred thousand dollars to worry about.  I guess I should have been more clear about it, but he assumed that when he got Kingston as a client, the money from that would buy him a new place to live.  And in the next chapter you'll find out that Vance's rep went to England as well, so Kingston is in London - making them come to him.  Thank you for leaving me some feedback!

Reviewer: Severus_divides_into_H (Signed) · Date: March 03, 2015 11:54 AM · On: Chapter 2

Wow, that was one painful chapter! Things are getting so heated and interesting… I loved this update – and additional ‘thank you’ for making it so long!:) I can’t get enough of this amazing story.

Brian was a real Asshole in this chapter. Poor Justin… I’m not sure I could ever put up with such behavior. I understand Brian’s worried and scared, he hates when people help him, he doesn’t want to look weak… but boy, he treated Justin terribly! That was so humiliating. Sometimes I think Brian just likes to suffer. Being hurt and alone is easier to him than trying to work on the relationship with the person he loves most. He just can’t open up, he can’t really treat Justin like his partner. I admire Justin’s strength and his patience, Brian was *so* bitchy, unpleasant and angry in this chapter that he seriously pissed me off! I don’t remember the last time I was this furious with him! But I loved it, of course, because I love feeling so many things when I read. You’re very talented.

The meeting with Gardner was sad... Even though I’m angry with Brian, I’m still sorry he has to go through so much bullshit. That’s humiliating, no confidence will save you from feeling like a failure.

I loved the moment when tricks recognized Justin :) I always enjoy seeing other people’s reaction to Justin’s role in Brian’s life.

Drunk Brian was kind of adorable, I loved how he couldn’t take his hands off Justin :) Even though he’s an asshole, he still loves this boy. But I can’t forgive him for publicly humiliating Justin in the diner for helping him. That was such an awful moment… so embarrassing and painful. Poor Justin… my heart’s breaking for him. I’d be mortified! I’d run away to where no one can find me! This is why Justin’s ‘after-that’ realization that he loves Brian stunned and practically electrified me. It was so… realistic and *painful*. Really, really painful. You managed to show that love sometimes is like that. It breaks, it hurts, it can be ugly and cruel. But it’s real. I’m proud of Justin. Now I’m torn, though, because I hate Brian a little right now. I don’t want Justin to go back to him just like that, after what he did in the diner. Maybe it’s difficult to me because I’m more or less an unforgiving kind of person – I would never make a first step after Brian’s words. But Justin is different, he’s stronger… so I don’t know what to expect. I can’t wait to see what you planned!

Brian’s business seems to be going up - *finally*! I’m happy for him. I’m looking forward to seeing what his actions will be.

Thank you for this fantastic, gut-wrenching update! I feel very emotional right now. I can’t wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Oh wow!  You're review is making me blush!  I'm so glad you're enjoying it, and don't worry, about all of the updates are this long so you'll be able to get in big chunks at a time. :)

And yes, Brian was a jerk, but it was a combination of him pushing Justin off Mt. Kinney, and feeling bitter at being in the lowest point of his life.  Justin was just the target and he was overly brutal.  But honestly, I'm a little glad you're so angry because I want people to feel. 

As for the tricks, I'm really glad you took notice of it because I put it in there for an important reason.  I wanted you all to remember that while Brian is being a little bitch ;) other people still recognize that Justin is a part of Brian's life.  They know who he is and they know that he and Brian have a thing - even if it's unconventional.

As for the humiliation, Justin is strong.  He knows why Brian did it and is willing to give him a little slack.  I emphasize a little here, because he isn't going to turn into a rug.  But also remember, that in the show Brian says a lot of hurtful things to Justin - and even vice versa - that never get addressed between the two of them.  So don't expect Brian to grovel...but it will be addressed.  :)

Thank you so much for your wonderful review!  I really hope that you'll continue to enjoy it.

Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: March 01, 2015 02:42 PM · On: Chapter 2

Hi, Kristine - still enjoying your story. This is well written, too.;) I must admit after reading this latest chapter that my emotions are all over the place here. I'm torn between Justin's loyalty and love toward Brian, versus him being a doormat and way too forgiving of someone who totally humiliated him in public, and said some awful and hurtful things.  Whether or not it's because of Brian's tried and true methods of pain management, there also has to be some boundaries and a threshold met before Justin decides he's done all he can and tells Brian he's had enough. I think that last tirade was about as bad as you can get, and if I were Justin I would have told him to go to hell. In a way, then, I think he's letting Brian off way too easily here.

And even when he is alone, Brian still seems to think of Justin as just a convenience, interspersed with brief periods of actually sounding like he cares for him.  It would totally serve him right if Justin chose to remain in the Pitts and let Brian head off to England on his own. Perhaps then - when Brian finally learns somehow that Justin is trying to move on and make a life of his own - will he finally realize what he has done, and what his pushing Justin away has cost him.

Intriguing story! Will be looking forward to reading more.  ~Kim

Author's Response:

What Brian did was definitely over the top, and don't worry - Justin' isn't going to be a doormat...per say.  He's just determined and in love.  :)  It'll be addressed more than once and hopefully you'll be satisfied with the Justin stands up for himself.

And Brian - at least my Brian - is confused about his feelings for Justin and he is more trying to convince himself that he isn't in love by insisting that Justin is just convenient.  But then sometimes Justin is just too lovable ;) and he forgets lol.  

Thank you so much for letting me know you're enjoying this, and I hope you continue to do so!

Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: March 01, 2015 05:23 AM · On: Chapter 2

Wow! Excellent update...

I had a much longer comment written... 4 times, but the site was not letting me post. So, instead you got the mcuh shorter version. 


Author's Response:

Ohhh, I hate when that happens!  I'm sorry about that, but I'm glad you put so much effort into letting me know what you think.  It means a lot.  :)  Thank you, and I hope you continue to enjoy.

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: March 01, 2015 05:11 AM · On: Chapter 2

How does he get to England, cause I know he will?  How's Justin going to get Brian to take him serious?  I'm loving this story so much I want moooooorrrreee.

Author's Response:

Well Brian is going to have to make some sacrifices in order to make his company a success.  I'm glad you're liking it so much!  I hope you continue to do so.  :)

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: February 28, 2015 10:28 PM · On: Chapter 2

Way to torture the boys! Next you'll be giving them both paper cuts and then pouring lemon juice over them! LOL! TAG

Author's Response:

Well everyone likes to see them suffer a little, right?  This makes them closer.  :)  Thanks!

Reviewer: Severus_divides_into_H (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2015 09:29 AM · On: Chapter 1

Hi there! I loved the beginning of this story. I love your writing style and the way you describe characters. Brian and Justin are perfectly in-canon for a situation like this – I’m happy you chose this idea, it’s so bittersweet and it has a lot of potential. It’s a pity we don’t have enough stories based on this turn of events.

I *loved* how you described Justin’s confusion about his feelings toward Brian. I think he isn’t used to seeing his strong partner like that – bitterness is burning in Brian, he’s more callous, colder, it seemed to me that he started to give up. But Justin still obviously loves him – I loved how he put money in his wallet.

Thank you for an amazing start! I can’t wait for the next chapter! I wonder how long you're going to make this story?  

Author's Response:

Wow!  Thank you so much!  I'm glad you think Brian and Justin are in character because that is the number one priority for me.  The more in character they are, the more realistic is feels for you.  :)  And I chose this idea because it seemed like it wasn't really explored much.

And as for Justin's feelings, you nailed it!  They are passing a crossroads and Justin is seeing a different side to Brian.  But he is still a devoted partner even when he's confused.  :D

I loved reading your review, it was so nice!  Updates should be pretty regular, so you won't have to worry about that.  And the story is going to be 12 chapters long and all the chapters are about the same length as this one, more or less.

Thanks again!

Reviewer: Toto_too514 (Anonymous) · Date: February 21, 2015 03:44 PM · On: Chapter 1

This is your first attempt at writing? Well, I'd venture to say you're a natural!

The story was immediatley compelling. The characters are just right. The atmosphere is an ominous one, and one angle not often expolored in QAF FanFic - the one of an adult Brian Kinney not being successful in everything he does. But there's also a sense of levity to keep the entire thing from being too dark... I guess Jason, Jan, Jesus, Jack & Jonathan couldn't make it to Babylon that night, LOL!

Also, Justin questioning his feelings - or lack thereof. Like I said - ominous!

I'm very intrigued, and looking forward to more.

Author's Response:

Yeah, it is.  I mean, I've had to write things for school but I've never written this kind of thing before.  I'm glad you like it!

And I'm glad you like the balance between the moods of the story.  Because it is serious, but if nothing makes you smile at least a little then there's no point in reading, right?  :D

Thank you so much for leaving me some feedback, I really love hearing what you think.  I hope that as the story continued you'll like it!

Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: February 20, 2015 09:27 PM · On: Chapter 1

This is a great beginning.  Brian would certainly act like this when he was failing.  Justin is being so supportive.  It seems like Brian is thinking Justin won't want him if he is a failure or lacking in money.  We know that's not true.  Looking forward to reading more.

Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm glad you liked the beginning.  And you're exactly right, Brian is afraid of that.  He thinks his only value is in what he can provide for others - but that'll come up more later.  ;)

I hope that you continue to like it!

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2015 11:00 PM · On: Chapter 1

I'm glad that Justin still feels something for Brian, you had me scared for a moment.  I appreciate that Brian knows that the money in his wallet was Justin's and he didn't make a fuss about it.  A thank you would have been nice, but it wouldn't have been Brian.  I like how you wrote this.  Looking forward to reading more from you.

Author's Response:

Well I'm glad that you were a little worried, because that means you care!  Thank you so much for your review, and I'm so glad that you you've enjoyed it so far.  I hope I don't let you down!  :)

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: February 19, 2015 08:09 PM · On: Chapter 1

Welcome to MW! We love getting new writers. Kinda sad beginning here - really hope there's better to come. TAG

Author's Response:

Thank you!  I hope that I don't let anyone down.  ;)  And yeah, the beginning is a bit of a downer, but how can Brian get back on top if he doesn't hit rock bottom?  Lol

Reviewer: linda (Anonymous) · Date: February 19, 2015 03:32 PM · On: Chapter 1

I like the beginning--will be interesting to see how he gets back on his feet, so to speak. I especially like the J. names during, Ha!

Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm glad you liked all the different names, I was hoping it would be amusing to break a little of the tension.  :)

Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2015 03:30 PM · On: Chapter 1

Hi, Kristine! Welcome to MW! Bob and I are glad you decided to post your story here!  Interesting first chapter.  It's obvious that Brian's current financial status is weighing heavily on his mind.  I think he is quite IC here, although he's coming off as a bit of a jerk toward Justin at times. One minute he wants Justin; the next, he's hunting for another trick. He doesn't come across as too grateful for Justin being there, but again, I think it is in large part to him not feeling like he needs anyone's help, and perhaps just a bit of denial here about his current financial situation.

Interesting take on Justin's POV as far as his feelings toward Brian.  Not sure what direction you are heading with this one, but I'll be curious to find out if you explore his conflicted feelings toward Brian more in upcoming chapters.

And just a suggestion if I may - your chapter is fine as far as the formatting goes, but normally it is easier for readers to follow if there are doublespaces between each paragraph. But again, just a thought. It is perfectly fine the way it is if that is what you prefer.;)

Thanks again for posting on the site, and welcome!


Author's Response:

Hi!  Thanks for the welcome!  And you're right, he is being a bit of a jerk, but he's got a lot of lessons coming his way.  ;)

And yes, Justin's feelings towards Brian are going to be one of the main focuses of the next few chapters until he figures out what they are, and what to do about them.

Thanks for the suggestion - I've never formatted stories before so I'll take your advice.

Thanks for leaving some feedback, I really appreciate it!

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