Reviewer: gotb30 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2016 05:02 AM · On: Chapter 2 - Beautiful Music and Love
Yes! Ethan has come and gone. I like that Brian came over with food and beer, and they are becoming good friends.
Author's Response: Dear gotb30,
Ethan was a necessary 'evil', so, yes, he came and went. (I met Fab Filippo this year and he was delightful and we had a nice chat. I will never write Ethan as evil again. :) )
Brian realizes that Justin can be a friend, so why not beer a pizza? Hopefully, the friendship goes deeper than that. I hope you continue to read this, as well as my other stories.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: gotb30 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2016 04:53 AM · On: Chapter 1 - A Bit of Morning Sunshine
I'm really enjoying this AU version of B/J meeting a different way, and especially the prom not ending in tragedy!
Author's Response: Dear gotb30,
I'm glad that you're enjoying the story. And, yes, not every prom must end tragically. This story was fun to imagine and write.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2016 11:09 AM · On: Chapter 1 - A Bit of Morning Sunshine
aww that's so sweet.
Author's Response: Dear Galesgal,
Thank you. I'm glad you like it. Who doesn't need a little 'sweet' every now and then?
Take care,
Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Peggy (Signed) · Date: May 02, 2016 06:59 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
This was a delightful read that I have now done twice.
Thank you for sharing.
Peggy
Author's Response: Peggy,
It's fun to go back to stories that you like and I'm honored that this story is one you've read more than once. I was inspired while waiting for a commuter train, wondering what kind of relationships build over time.
I hope you read more of my stories.
Thanks,
Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: January 09, 2015 08:30 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
Liked the story & the slower progression of the boys' relationship. It would have been much healthier like that. But, they ALL move to Toronto? Lol! TAG
Author's Response: Dear TAG,
I liked the idea of trying the 'slow and steady' over time progression. I'm glad you liked it. As for Toronto - sure, why not? I wanted everyone (or almost everyone) to end up in the same town. I've written it as Pittsburgh and New York, so, this go 'round, I went for Toronto. I've heard it's a lovely city. And, after all, it's where they filmed the series. :)
Thanks so much for the supportive comments.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: LibertySun (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2015 10:35 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
Hi Diane, I had the pleasure of reading your story today.I liked the premise of these two becoming good friends well before they moved onto more. It's a bit of a different dynamic for them and it works well. Also, I admire the amount of canon you were able to add into your own tale, it put a new spin on some old favorite scenes.I wanted to mention how much I appreciated you not villianizing Michael in this. He holds a very important place in Brian's life and heart. Brian going to Emmett for advice in the end was too cute.The map you made was a nice little addition. Til' 'Next Time'~Mandi :)
Author's Response: Dear Mandi,
I'm so happy to hear from you and read the great comments. For this story I was inspired by seeing a local commuter train and wondered how it would be for Brian and Justin to travel together daily. As much as I am OK with the 'sex first - date later' way they did it in the series, I can also see that developing respect for each other over time, platonically, would still lead to a great romantic relationship. Michael, for me, is an important part of Brian. He might be whiny, but - no, not the villian. The scene with Emmett was important for the reader to know what was on Brian's mind. I thought that Em was a good choice for a sounding board. The map started out as a device for me, and then I decided to incorporate it into the graphics for the story. (Sorry for the FF readers who don't get to see it.) Thanks for appreciating the story. I respect you greatly as a writer, so what you say means a lot. 'Next Time". :)
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: December 28, 2014 09:45 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
Oh that was lovely a different slant on the usual but we got our boys there 💕
Author's Response: Dear bksbracelet,
Nice to hear from you again. Yes, I was trying a different way of telling their story of togetherness. I think some of the best relationships are built as friendship over time.
Thanks for the lovely review. Happy New Year.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Lorie (Signed) · Date: December 26, 2014 12:47 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
Loved this story. An epilogue with their wedding and honeymoon would be REALLY great. Just saying.
Author's Response: Lorie,
It's great that you loved the story. Epilogue ... hmm, that would be good ... . I'll have to think about it. :)
Thanks for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: chandrika (Anonymous) · Date: December 26, 2014 12:26 AM · On: Chapter 1 - A Bit of Morning Sunshine
thank you for sharing this great story
Author's Response: Dear chandrika,
I'm happy that you're enjoying it. Thanks for the comment!
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 11:00 PM · On: Chapter 7 - Let Someone Be Close to You
Okay...is it just me, or is this story really as sad as I think it is? I mean really???? Everyone is just up and moving to Toronto and Brian is left with what family to lean on? And poor Sunshine he just can't get no play can he lol.
Well, I'm off to read the next chapter to see what happens next.
Author's Response: Dear Jazzepoet,
I suppose Brian is sadly left behind a lot, but it all works out in the end. Sunshine will find his happiness, too, eventually.
Thanks for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 10:11 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
Nice to see they get a happy ending, although I wasn't too thrilled with the idea of legitimising unprotected sex just because they are partners. But hey, that is just my opinion. An enjoyable evening read. As I say, you should work on development and description more, but you do seem to have a great plot idea here and it did work in general. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: Dear Dido_MagnaCarta,
I've asked some experts and researched a little, and unprotected sex is understandable in this case. I know what you're saying, but I'm going with the 'prevailing winds' on this one. I appreciate what you're saying about development and description. I'm working on improving it.
Thanks, again, for the constructive comments. Merry Christmas.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 10:03 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Halfway to My Destination
The idea of them making love in this way s more pleasing to me- not to mention it avoids the whole ambiguity caused by Brian fucking a 17 year old, as in the original series. To my mind, that is not appropriate, and it isn't something I like to explore. However, I am much more comfortable with this scene. Very passionate and erotic.
Author's Response: Dear Dido_MagnaCarta,
The original series did 'push the envelope' with the young 17 yr old Justin. The British QAF had Nathan at 16. Yeesh!
This, older, Justin is more sure of what he wants and why. And, apparently, so is Brian.
Thanks to my beta, JustBeAQueen, for the additional 'steam' in the scene. Thanks for the comments.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 09:54 PM · On: Chapter 6 - Waiting With a Smile
"You're not as annoying as other guys." That is definitely very Brian Kinney. Onto the next chapter...
Some constructive criticism; work on developing your description and exploration of Brian and Justin's feelings beyond just simply stating how they feel. Show the reader more of their actions and reveal their thoughts through longer dialogue. I keep feeling throughout this story that parts I would like to know more about are simply too brief for my liking. That said, I do enjoy the idea of this plot and like the general method you are taking. I like that the shower scene did not end in sex, but there was a spoke of conflict in the wheel that leaves the reader wondering when they will get together. I have to credit you for that in general. Writing romance in multi-chapters is very difficult.
Author's Response: Dear Dido_MagnaCarta,
I'm glad that the dialogue seems to fit Brian's character.
I appreciate the criticism. I'm working on developing a writing style that has more exploration of feeling and just general description. I'm working on an original fic that's multi-chaptered that I'm going to get back to now and I'm going to try to flesh it out. Let me know if you're interested in reading it and reviewing it.
Thanks, again,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 09:39 PM · On: Chapter 4 - Starting Something New
I will be honest; I don't like your twist for the Stockwell arc. It's very anticlimactic to me, seeing as they spent so much time collaborating on how to bring him down. However, in terms of the story, it does rationalize why Brian's friends would move to Toronto and the reason for Stockwell's slim victory is also rational. But my main problem is how Brian gets caught; would he seriously just admit to fucking Stockwell up? That doesn't sound like him. But that is just my opinion; the whole thing didn't end well with me.
I am interested to see where this whole Pink Posse arch will go to, however. Also nice to see the birth of Kinnetik largely following the canon series and Justin bonding with Gus.
Author's Response: Dear Dido_MagnaCarta,
Unfortunately, Stockwell 'had' to win in this particular AU in order for Toronto to look appealing to the others. As far as Brian admitting to the Stockwell anti-campaign .. I think his 'no apologies, no regrets' mantra would also apply to being confronted with the truth. Kind of a "Yeah, so what if I did?" kind of attitude. He's so honest. When he was asked about being gay, he fessed up. (Not that it's the same thing, but you get my drift.) I always try to write that Justin gives Brian the name for Kinnetik. I like to see Justin and Gus getting along. One of my beta's gushes over the Justin/Gus parts. (Love you, Cricrijolie!)
Thanks, again, for the great comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 09:31 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Taking Stock in Stockwell
I am always intrigued by focus on Brian and Justin as friends. Of course, Michael is always going to be his best friend, but there is potential in what Brian and Justin can share, particularly as you showed here with them conspiring together to bring Stockwell down. I thought you could have developed the section about Brian's feelings towards working for Stockwell a little more; that is a crucial element to his character, the fact that he was a weakness for selling his soul for cash. However, I did enjoy the kiss they shared but with the promise that they stay friends. That was very important- first it avoids cliches and secondly, it makes the progression towards their love seem more gradual.
Author's Response: Dear Dido_MagnaCarta,
You SO get what I'm doing with the story. I wanted to show how Brian's relationship with Michael is different with the one with Justin. The kiss shows a promise of more.
Yeah, the Stockwell thing could have been fleshed out more, I suppose. I guess I'm putting a lot of stock in the fact that fans already know Brian's 'soul for cash' character. But we know, as Debbie does, that deep down there is good. :)
Thanks for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 09:24 PM · On: Chapter 2 - Beautiful Music and Love
Very interesting. I like how you approached the Ethan angle through Brian's eyes and still stay true to him seeing through Ethan's stories. I also think it was good that you had Ethan's roaming eyes established from the start- it did seem a little out of sync that he suddenly cheated on Justin when everything seemed to be fine. At times, I felt there could be a little more development- like showing us through the dialogue what Ethan was like instead of just mentioning him in passing. That said, I would like to see what happens next.
Author's Response: Dear Dido_MagnaCarta,
It's nice to feel appreciated for my approach. I wanted to mention Ethan, because I feel that it's important for Justin's 'development', I had originally put more Ethan in the story, but one of my betas said there was too much. Of course, another beta suggested a WHOLE additional thing about Brian flirting with Ethan, but I just didn't want to go there. It's funny about Ethan - either I barely mention him, or I'm "all in" (Fiddler's Three).
I hope you continue to enjoy. Thanks for the comments. I truly enjoy them.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 09:07 PM · On: Chapter 1 - A Bit of Morning Sunshine
This looks pretty interesting. I like the fact that you have avoided the stereotypical sexual route to build up a slow and steady romance on a train. Sounds good. Writing is easy to follow and I would like to know what happens next.
Author's Response: Dear Dido_MagnaCarta,
Thanks. I like to write stories where the relationship builds over time. Thinking about it now, it's about my 3rd or 4th time writing that way. :)
Thank you for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 07:59 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
Hi, dear friend! So happy to see that you have finally posted this story! I loved the concept, and how you were able to change some of canon to fit the plot. I enjoyed this very much. Thanks for posting it. Hope you had a great Christmas. Best wishes for the coming year :) Hugs ~Kim
Author's Response: Dearest Kim,
It took me long enough, didn't it? It's the longest it's ever taken me to write a story. But, as you know, real life gets in the way. Today my mother is in the hospital again for the 2nd time in 2 weeks, so, yeah, Christmas was a little broken up.
The concept for the story came to me when I was waiting for a local commuter train and considered the guys having 10 minutes together every day. I DO love to drag out their getting to know each other over time. It's about the 4th time I've written it that way. :)
All my best to you and yours.
Love,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: taurus (Anonymous) · Date: December 25, 2014 03:33 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
Nicely done. B/J relationships is always a good story. Keep writing.
Author's Response: Dear Taurus,
Thanks for the encouragement and the comments!
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: soirsagrey (Anonymous) · Date: December 25, 2014 03:01 PM · On: Chapter 1 - A Bit of Morning Sunshine
Thank you for this delightful, sweet story.
Wonderfully written without being overly sweet or fluffy. I read this story in one go, just before leaving for the evening celebrations with the family.
I wish you a merry christmas, love, happiness and health for 2015.
XOXO
Soirsa.
Author's Response: Dear Soirsa,
I appreciate the comments. I posted the whole story so that folks could do just that, read it all. (Sometimes I feel that's not done often enough.) A little 'gift' for the holiday. :)
Thanks for the kind review. All the best for the New Year. XOXO
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Anonymous) · Date: December 25, 2014 11:38 AM · On: Chapter 4 - Starting Something New
Poor Brian...:( I hope, Justin comes to his senses.
Author's Response: Dear Randy-Fan,
Brian will persist and shine through.
Thanks,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Anonymous) · Date: December 25, 2014 09:08 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Taking Stock in Stockwell
Okay, Michael remains in Toronto with Ben, but he has Justin and they fall in love. I hope, they use their chance. Beautiful chapter...:)
Author's Response: Dear Randy-Fan,
In the series Michael and Ben marry in Toronto, so, I figured it woulnd't be too far-fetched that they decide to live there and one day marry.
I'm happy that you're enjoying the story. Thanks for the comments.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Anonymous) · Date: December 25, 2014 08:52 AM · On: Chapter 2 - Beautiful Music and Love
I love your story and your way. Ethan is a dork, but a home of their own, is a good way. Brian is wonderful in your story. I hope they come together. Thank you for sharing...:)
Author's Response: Dear Randy-Fan,
I have mixed feelings about Ethan. I think he was stupid to lose Justin the way he did, yes. But he's necessary for Justin to move forward in his life.
I'm glad that you like Brian here. Thanks for the comments.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Randy-Fan (Anonymous) · Date: December 25, 2014 08:38 AM · On: Chapter 1 - A Bit of Morning Sunshine
Hi! Great start. I'm curious what happens in the next chapter. Thank you for sharing....:) I loove Brian and Justin together<3
Author's Response: Dear Randy-Fan,
Thanks for the kind comments. I hope you keep enjoying. We all love our boys, don't we? That's why we're here!
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 06:10 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
Hi,
I just wanted to let you know that I enjoyed the story. I
didn’t think it made much difference where they all wound
up. It was just the right touch that they all ended up in the
same city.
Thanks for the story.
DavidR
Author's Response: Dear DavidR,
I'm glad that you enjoyed the story. Everyone had their own reasons to go to Toronto, and I hope that I made it plausible for each of them. It IS happy that they are all there together.
Thanks for the comments!
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 06:04 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
I love the way this story has a happy ending. A perfect Christmas present.
Author's Response: Dear YumYumPM,
MY Christmas present was all of the wonderful comments that I received today from you and the others.
Thanks so much!
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 05:53 AM · On: Chapter 9 - In His Bed and His Life
Five years later and they are living together. As you say in your end notes. The next step. Can't wait to find out what it is.
Author's Response: Dear YumYumPM,
Thanks. I felt that cohabitation was natural for them at this point. It took a long time to get here, but here we are. I hope you like the ending.
Thanks for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 05:34 AM · On: Chapter 8 - Halfway to My Destination
I like how they found the bomb and no one was hurt. And that Brian decided he's willing to risk things to keep Justin in his life.
Author's Response: Dear YumYumPM,
I thought (this time around) a threat would still move the plot forward, without any injuries. Glad it's appreciated.
Thanks, again, for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 05:28 AM · On: Chapter 7 - Let Someone Be Close to You
Everyone's gone to Toronto? What are your plans for our two friends?
Author's Response: Dear YumYumPM,
Seems to be a trend for emigration, doesn't it? Most stories end with them in New York or Pittsburgh, so, I figured, why not Toronto as a "second city" for the gang?
Thanks for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 05:23 AM · On: Chapter 6 - Waiting With a Smile
Justin looks like he's ready for more, but after two failed relationships will this one work? Is Brian willing to risk their friendship for a roll in the hay? Off to the next chapter to find out what you've planned.
Author's Response: Dear YumYumPM,
Justin has rules this time around and it doesn't involve a 'get laid' mentality. Brian is still sorting out his feelings. I'm glad the story is keeping you involved.
Thanks for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 05:14 AM · On: Chapter 5 - Liberty Diner's New Delivery Boy
Three years! How time flies. At least Brian let Justin help with his cancer. How did his business deal with his being out? Looks like Brian might be riding in the Liberty Ride. But I could be wrong, you seem to delight in putting twists into this story.
Author's Response: Dear YumYumPM,
Justin wouldn't take 'no' for an answer. He needed to help his friend. I didn't mention Kinnetik, but business is OK without Brian (or Ted). Read on!
Thanks again for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 05:05 AM · On: Chapter 4 - Starting Something New
Stockwell won? Rats. I was wondering if there was a Gus in this universe. Shame he's leaving for Toronto and Mikey will get to see him. At least Brian has Kinnetik. How will the Pink Posse turn out?
Author's Response: Dear YumYumPM,
No bashing = good. Stockwell wins = bad. Gotta take the good with the bad. :) Kinnetik has a future, unlike the Pink Posse. It's all about the leadership.
Thanks for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 04:55 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Taking Stock in Stockwell
Mikey and Ben in Toronto! Now that was a surprise. Hopefully Brian's plans for Stockwell work. Will Brian be fired like in the series are do you have something unusual planned like you did for Mikey and Ben.
Author's Response: Dear YumYumPM,
I like to surprise the readers, at least a little. Stockwell will feel a sting from the Kinney/Taylor efforts. I hope you continue to enjoy.
Thanks for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 04:36 AM · On: Chapter 2 - Beautiful Music and Love
I like how this diverges from the series. Justin went to the prom with Daphne, but didn't get bashed. Ted's disappeared! Mikey is already with Ben and left the country, amazing. Ethan still is a disappointment. Brian actually got together with Justin outside the subway! Will Justin get to meet Emmett?
Author's Response: Dear YumYumPM,
Yeah, Justin doesn't have to get bashed every time we go through the timeline, right? There will be other deviations that make things less dramatic. I'm glad you're liking the characters and caring about them. I see Emmett in our future. :)
Thanks for the comments,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 04:28 AM · On: Chapter 1 - A Bit of Morning Sunshine
I like this. Didn't even know Pitts had subways, I live in a state where they don't have 'em. Love how Brian is getting to know Justin and not just jump him.
Author's Response: Dear YumYumPM,
Actually, the train I depicted in Pittsburgh is an above ground train. Some of the trains here in Chicago run as a subway and then go above ground.
Yes, Brian is getting to know Justin. I seem to favor stories where they develop a friendship before anything sexual.
Thanks for the comments.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: TheGirlNoOneKnows5 (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2014 03:37 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
What a wonderful story!
Merry Christmas lovey :)
xoxo
Author's Response: Dear GirlNoOneKnows5,
Hello, lovey. It's nice to know that you enjoyed the story. Thank you for the nice review.
Merry Christmas,
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: December 25, 2014 02:14 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
Let me guess. This story was written by a Canadian.
Author's Response: Dear Anonymous,
No, not written by a Canadian. But, one of my beta-readers is Canadian, so maybe that influenced me. I hope you enjoyed the story.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: steff (Anonymous) · Date: December 25, 2014 02:10 AM · On: Chapter 1 - A Bit of Morning Sunshine
Thank you for your christmas gift! Coud'nt stopp reading. Best wishes for a happy 2015!
Author's Response: Dear Steff,
Thanks. Yes, I wanted to finish it by Christmas for all of the QAF fans out there. Best wishes to you for a happy New Year, also.
Thank you for the review.
- Jackie Mag
Reviewer: CFC (Anonymous) · Date: December 25, 2014 12:44 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Everyone You Love
Sweet story. It is an interesting thought, what if they had all ended up in Canada.
Author's Response: Dear CFC,
I thought it was a happy way for them to end up. It didn't necessarily have to end with them in New York or Pittsburgh.
I'm glad that you enjoyed the story. Thanks for the review.
- Jackie Mag
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