Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2019 08:28 PM · On: Chapter 4
Poor Justin and Molly I wish they could hug as I think they both need it so badly. My heart aches for the loss of the child life can be so cruel at times can't it,
I hope happiness comes for them soon x
wond work x
Author's Response: Thank you for not only reading this fic, but your comments convey that you could feel the emotions of the characters. It has been a joy to answer your reviews and I must admit to you it took me a little while to reply as I had to go back and read this fic, as I wrote it in 2014. For me it was interesting to see where my writing was at that time. I can't thank you enough for sharing your experience of this story with me.
Cheers
Flossee
Reviewer: Bob (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2016 10:59 PM · On: Chapter 4
This is really very well done, and your writing skills are a noticeable improvement. A most deserving featured story.
Author's Response: I really, really appreciate those words. I felt my writing had improved since posting my first fic, so I am ecstatic someone else has acknowledged they think it has also. Thank you for recognizing it with a blue ribbon.
Cheers :))))
Reviewer: Kimberly E Howard (Anonymous) · Date: April 19, 2016 10:15 AM · On: Chapter 4
Spam stuff. Left it up for the review count as it was a review just a spam review.
~bob
Author's Response: Bob I was confused about this. We deleted it the first time it came through, yet this time it has a name on it. I'm not fussed if spam reviews are deleted as I really only want to converse with like-minded people about B/J stories. I am voicing my thoughts here in the hopes that anyone else that might think about spamming my fics knows I'm not interested in such rubbish and they will end up in the delete bin.
Reviewer: cuivresdesaxe (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2016 04:31 PM · On: Chapter 4
I knew there was an amish Justin story somewhere in the qaf fanfiction world but just found it by chance, and I am glad I did! It's just beautiful. I know close to nothing of the Amish but there certainly is nothing disrespetful in you Define series, quite the contrary. The "do not judge" principle is just so powerful. Love the interaction between Justin and Joan and the tenderness between the two men. Now I'll cross my fingers for a new Define story...
Author's Response: Hello bea :)))
Welcome to MW. I am just so thrilled that you stumbled upon my 'Define' series. It is reassuring to hear you say there is nothing disrespectful throughout the series. Feedback like that is invaluable. I love your phrasing "quite the contrary. The "do not judge" principle is just so powerful ", and "crossing your fingers for another Define story". Thank you so very much as I really do appreciate such a thoughtful and kind review.
Cheers :)))
Reviewer: Astor (Anonymous) · Date: January 16, 2016 03:10 PM · On: Chapter 4
Although hard to read because of the emotions at times, I found this story very real and very well executed by you. Not every story has to be Brian and Justin skipping through the prairie. It was an enjoyable read. Thank you.
Author's Response: I love that analogy, "Not every story has to be Brian and Justin skipping through the prairie", that is so well said. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this fic. I certainly enjoyed writing it. However, it is I that should be thanking you for such kind comments. Thank you so very, very much.
Cheers :)))
Reviewer: Brandon (Anonymous) · Date: January 02, 2015 04:52 AM · On: Chapter 4
I love how Justin is Jenny's favorite parent. Great story. Justin's journey into his new life is believable.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you once again; this time for mentioning Jenny's favorite parent. Even though picking up a child etc. goes against Justin's upbringing, he puts his little girl first, allowing them both to form a close bond. I love the parts you have picked out to comment on, I also truly appreciate the "great story" comment, and that you thought the fic was believable. Thank you so much.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: September 23, 2014 09:48 PM · On: Chapter 4
I'm worried that your head might have suffered when it was hit by a wall during that recent barn raising. Did you honestly mean to write Brief moment of time when selfishness ruled their lives. How is most of a pregnancy a brief moment of time? Not to mention that both of them were acting the same evil way, willing to cast off one child and only keep one from the litter. I can't really say this story has ended on a happy note but it seems like Brian believes he is content to eat boring PB&J for the rest of his life. I still think Justin needs some high voltage shock therapy to get over this idea that he's Amish. I thought it was down right horrible of Craig to suggest that since he didn't have the guidance of an Amish Elder he could be allowed to do something so crazy as let an infant be baptized. Why is it always some old hairy man who gets to interpret the word of the Lord? I do have to hand it to you for coming up with the brilliant idea of the girls naming the remaining infant after Justin's mother as a sure fire way to find a way into Brian's wallet. I have to tell you I have really enjoyed this series. I think you did a stunning job of keeping Justin very oddly Amish and sadly Brian very willing to change and be happy with oddly Amish. Your stories are never the same, always new and exciting. You bring excitement and a splash of crazy into the story we love so much.
Lori
Author's Response: A brief moment in time: For a head of lettuce, I am very old. For a mountain, I have not even begun. Do you like me trying to be profound??? LOL Now, what movie did that quote come from??? ***Google, Google, Google*** Okay, it's not word for word, but it came from "Remo". Do I now need to write no copywrite intended, only praise for such wisdom? LOL Oh, and many thanks to that particular search engine. :D
I can see why you didn't think this had a happy ending as everyone seemed to be human in the end and not evil incarnate, so we had no one to blame for such unhappiness. I know; it even surprised me a little that it didn't end with a malicious Craig, Joan or Mel. LOL
Thanks for acknowledging my fics are never the same and for the "always new and exciting" comment. "You bring excitement and a splash of crazy" that's my aim as I think sometimes people take themselves and the world to seriously, so I like to share my eccentric type of folly. Although some may think I share too much. LOL
I'm so happy you were able to return to MW and that you now have a non-Amish existence my friend. :)
Cheers :))))
Reviewer: arakiss (Signed) · Date: August 20, 2014 08:14 PM · On: Chapter 4
I was so sad for Justin - losing his son...questioning His will... struggling to find his balance.
At least he started to paint and he has his daughter and his Brian to love.
Author's Response: Hey Arakiss
Yes, it is very sad that Brian and Justin lost their son. I really wanted them to relish their daughter and have her to help fill the empty void in their hearts that was left by their loss. I also wanted Brian to be Justin's strength, his rock, when he went through his many struggles. I needed to show Justin reunite with his family, if only for a short time, and I used Brian's thoughts as much as I could to show he was going through this too. I think both these men could face anything together, but that's just my opinion. Thank you for your thoughts as you know how much I appreciate them.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: nicolle_midnight2013 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2014 02:00 AM · On: Chapter 4
Hello, dear Flossee!
As I had written before, I really love this series. You did a great story and this fourth part is the prettiest of them all. I love the way love is reported. Not only love boys, but of all others.
The interaction between Joan and Justin was amazing and the brotherly love between Molly and Justin is very beautiful.
I love the final line. is one of the most beautiful settings of love I have ever read.
"My love", "My Brian" unspoken words conveying love and comfort are breathed, but never vocalized, because When these men listen With Their hearts there is the need for words.
The story is beautiful!
A big hug, my dear.
Fátima.
Author's Response: Hello Fatima :)
I can't tell you how much your comment about the fourth instalment being the prettiest means to me. Going from forbidden love (only because Brian didn't want to ruin Justin's life) to everlasting, strong, supportive love was quite a journey, yet an enjoyable one.
A huge thank you to you for mentioning the love between the other characters as I'm so pleased their interaction was also noted as a pivotal part of this series.
I love it so much when someone tells me their favourite line; I really appreciate that you have put so much thought into the story, which is evident in your reviews.
Thanks again my friend for reviewing each chapter.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: July 04, 2014 08:57 PM · On: Chapter 4
To me, dedicating this final chapter belongs to the Daddies of
this world. True, this chapter is far more complex that just
father/daughter. Still – to further my opinion: imagine Jenny,
Justin’s baby daughter, on Brian’s lap. Brian’s love would be so
strong that you would probably need a tire iron to pry Jenny loose
from him.
I could see this as a Father’s Day Chapter. I don’t want to
short change the funeral scene, and the Molly/Jenny meeting,
but here we have the devastation of the death of a son, and the
miracle of a daughter. That is what evoked the most emotion
form me. I have to wonder if it is a male type of response. No, I
guess not. This has more to do with my background. Of course
each reader takes with him/her their understanding of the story
based upon their background and experience.
So in short, Happy Fathers Day to all fathers.
I hope that makes sense as an additional feedback.
DavidR
Author's Response: Hey David
I get what you are saying about the funeral scene etc. and I didn't think of it that way so you are right. I must admit I had trouble with the Happy Father's Day reference until my grey matter kicked in and then I realized you come from a country that has just celebrated that day. Here we celebrate it in September. I'm not going to pretend I understood all this review, but thank you for the additional feedback.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: July 04, 2014 03:50 PM · On: Chapter 4
"Unspoken words conveying love and comfort are breathed, but never vocalized, because when these men listen with their hearts there is no need for words."
That is a lovely line, Flossee! Finally got a chance to read the last chapter of this. So many emotions swirling around in this final part - love, sadness, bittersweetness (hope that's a word!), redemption, change. I do love how these two have evolved with their relationship, and how they are willing to make changes out of their love for each other. And I can totally see Justin as a loving father in this scenario especially.
I hope at some point you will either write a little more about whether or not Justin and Molly continue to see each other, either as an addition to this story or in a new story in the same 'verse. Would also love to read more about Justin's role as a father, and about how his life continues to evolve with Brian in the non-Amish world. Thanks for writing this. Enjoyed it very much. *Hugs* ~Kim
Author's Response: Hey Kim
I really appreciate your comment on the last line as it's nice to know it is a fitting end.
Thank you for mentioning all the emotions that came through for you; I'm chuffed that you feel I have successfully conveyed all these emotions. I'm truly pleased you like how both men have evolved and the way Justin took to his role as a father.
Thank you also for your very kind words and for saying you would like to read more of this AU/OOC fic.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: July 04, 2014 03:37 AM · On: Chapter 4
Thank you so much for the story. It was simply terrific.
The ending was very special, ending is a way that was satisfying to me. What I hoped would happen, happened. Sure, in your way and in the emotional depth you choose. It was so important to me that Justin accepted his daughter fully. I know that the loss of his son will never fully heal. But there was a precious baby girl who need her Daddy. Yes, she has him.
Thanks again.
DavidR.
Author's Response: Hey David
I should be thanking you because if it wasn't for you I would never have given this series a conclusion. The reason I thank you for that is because it was a pleasure to write and it allowed me to go a little deeper into the emotions of these characters. I would really like to dedicate the last chapter to you, however; I need your permission first.
Thank you for your very kind words; I'm so happy you found the ending very special and satisfying. "The story was simply terrific" thank you; truly, thank you so much.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: July 04, 2014 01:21 AM · On: Chapter 4
Flossee:
This is such a unique universe. It was very sad that the child died and I was hoping to see Justin and Brian raise it. I liked how you brought Molly into the last chapter, bringing closure to the series. I have enjoyed it. Thank you for the creative outlet.
Author's Response: Hey Sandy
Thank you so much for letting me know you contemplated where you wanted this fic to go, as to me that means you were invested in the story. Thank you, also for saying this is a unique universe as you know that is what I strive for. I may not have received a copious amount of reviews for this fic, but OMG the calibre of the reviews has been outstanding, as is yours. I truly appreciate you taking the time to review and for leaving such positive feedback.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: no sleep (Signed) · Date: July 03, 2014 07:09 PM · On: Chapter 4
“…he now constantly wonders why Justin's God would do this to a man that worships Him.”
“The painting shows all the flaws of the paper…”
“Joan could watch over their son in the afterlife.”
“…because when these men listen with their hearts there is no need for words.”
I try not to review when I’m sleepy or pressed for time, anymore. Therefore, my time is limited, so most of the time I copy and or read the fics for short periods of time (that’s a lot of times in there, LOL). Anywho, I like to savor this story because of the beautiful poetic words of love written. This time, you have even conveyed grief in a very emotional, yet, not soppy, way. And the ending with the child and Molly and the pervious visit from Craig and Jennifer, brought it full circle.
Delightful and heartwarming!:)
Author's Response: Hey Sandra
Somehow you always manage to choose lines I felt touched me as I wrote them and that makes me think maybe I got it right; thank you so very much.
I don't know what to say in reply to the beautiful words you have expressed here. I will just say the parts below from your review are very rewarding for me as I'm not a confident writer.
"I like to savor this story because of the beautiful poetic words of love written. This time, you have even conveyed grief in a very emotional, yet, not soppy, way"
"Delightful and heartwarming"
I'm truly pleased you liked the fic coming full circle and thank you once again for leave such lovely words.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: July 03, 2014 05:42 AM · On: Chapter 4
It was interesting to see that Jack is responsible for bringing Jen and Craig to comfort their son. It was also nice to see that Justin was able to communicate with his sister and that Jenny Rebecca is now a year old. I've enjoyed this look into Justin's life and trials. Good job!
Author's Response: Thank you for the ‘good job' comment; I'm really glad you enjoyed the series. It was very pleasurable making Jack and Joan's characters more human.:D Justin seeing Molly and his parents was requested by DavidR and Starfire64 so I hold them solely responsible for this last part of the series. Haha Seriously; I'm happy they did because I enjoyed writing these characters. Thank you for each review you left and the positive feedback. I truly appreciate it.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: July 03, 2014 01:30 AM · On: Chapter 4
Beautiful...but I still can't stand the munchers. It's also refreshing to know that the tragic events didn't cause Justin to run away from Brian.
Author's Response: Hey Tamara
Thank you so much for the ‘beautiful' comment my friend. Mel and Lindsay didn't really redeem themselves completely; I agree. I did have a suggestion that Justin may return to Amish life and I love that idea, but for now I will just let people take these characters wherever they see fit and fingers crossed they have enjoyed this series. I truly appreciate your insight and the support you give me, thank you.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: Lorie (Signed) · Date: July 03, 2014 01:22 AM · On: Chapter 4
Glad that Molly got to see her brother and niece. Wish Brian and Justin could have a child to raise. It would be very interesting to see how they would merge all their beliefs into the raising of a child.
Author's Response: I love what you have written here. It's an absolute privilege to have someone want certain things for these characters and I can see it would be interesting to have Justin and Brian raise a child. I wanted Justin influence in the child's life to be apparent even with the munchers raising her and I couldn't resist Jenny choosing Justin as her favorite parent. Are you allowed to have a favorite parents, as I know you aren't allowed to have favorites with children? LOL Thank you again for taking the time to leave such a thought-provoking review.
Cheers :)
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