Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2019 05:18 PM · On: Chapter 3
My heart is in bits. They should have adopted both children never separate them. I can't imagine the pain they are in.
Author's Response: Justin's emotional turmoil must be overwhelming vast. He thought he couldn't raise his son, only to find out he could, and now that has been taken away from him. Brian of course is in the same situation, the emotions for both men must be devastating.
Flossee
Reviewer: Astor (Anonymous) · Date: January 16, 2016 03:07 PM · On: Chapter 3
Well this chapter was an emotional one. Very well done though. Let me go get my Kleenex though. I hope the next one is happier.
You and getting me in my feels. lol
Author's Response: I'm glad this made you feel for the men. It was very sad writing. I hope you enjoyed the ending.
Cheers :))))
Reviewer: Brandon (Anonymous) · Date: January 02, 2015 04:27 AM · On: Chapter 3
This was a very hard chapter. I feel so devastated for Brian and Justin. I look forward to seeing how they are able to move forward after losing a child.
Author's Response: Knowing where I wanted this chapter to go, it was very sad to write. There is no greater loss than losing a child, and it will not be flippantly brushed over. Although they will move forward, the pain will be with them forever.
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: September 23, 2014 07:41 PM · On: Chapter 3
Awww, this really is a sad chapter, what do you think did the little fella in? Will there be an autopsy? I bet Justin will want to make the coffin. The amish are buried in plain wooden boxes. I'm not sure if they are required to do the embalming or not. But since the baby was born in a hospital I bet it will have to be handled in the real world way. I hope Brian decides to take the girl twin now. Those nasty girls don't deserve a baby. They better not depend on Brian to support that baby. Now that I'm all sad I think I better go eat lunch before I read the next chapter.
Lori
Author's Response: Yes, this is the sad chapter and I had to end it sooner than I wanted as it was going to a real bizarre place. :(
I think an IC Brian would always support people he loves, be it with money or in other ways, but this is an OOC Brian so you won't know until you have comsumed your lunch.
My Vegemite lunch was very tasty; thanks for asking. LOL
Cheers :)
Reviewer: nicolle_midnight2013 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2014 01:38 AM · On: Chapter 3
Hello, dear Flossee!
This is so sad!
It is very unfortunate death of baby of Justin, but is there still a child who needs your love as a father.
Hugs, my dear!
Fatima.
Author's Response: Thanks Fatima. I love it when someone comments like this as it means they are thinking about the characters, and yes, as sad as it might be there is another child to think about and to love. I really appreciate this insightful comment, my friend.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: Lorie (Signed) · Date: July 03, 2014 01:19 AM · On: Chapter 3
Beautifully written chapter. Very sad about the death of their son.
Author's Response: Hey Lorie
Thank you for saying this is beautifully written. I am trying to improve my writing so it's a delight to get positive feedback. I'm pleased the child's death didn't stop you from reading on and giving a comment. I truly appreciate that you have taken the time to review each chapter.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: June 27, 2014 05:42 AM · On: Chapter 3
This was very sad. Though Justin sees this and many other
things as God’ s will, still I am sure Justin will suffer this loss for
the rest of his life, God’s will or not. But but but – there is a
precious baby girl waiting to held by her Daddy Justin. Somehow
Justin needs to celebrate the birth of his daughter, who will be
his daughter for the rest of his life. For all the pain , Justin is so
much richer. He has a baby.
Just one more thought, I expect a strong Brian and a strong
Justin to NOT give up their parental rights.
Thanks again for the chapter.
DavidR
Author's Response: Hey David
What a great attitude being able to see where Justin may gain strength after this degree of adversity. I love your positivity and I hope in RL you are able to maintain such a wonderful perspective.
I really appreciate this review David, from the insightful feedback to the direction you hope B/J take, thank you.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2014 06:24 PM · On: Chapter 3
How sad the Lyndsay and Melanie are willing to give up one of their children. I'm glad that Brian, in the end, was willing to take the chance to raise their son. It's such a shame that the life of that one child was cut short. All that love, yet Justin firmly believes it's God's will. You are right this chapter is sad, but so well written.
Author's Response: Hey :)
Thank you for saying this is well written as I'm trying really hard to improve my writing and I thought with the last paragraph nobody would notice the script so I'm ecstatic that you liked it and left such a lovely comment.
"All that love, yet Justin firmly believes it's God's will" I love what you wrote here as it just sums up the whole chapter so well.
Thank you so much for taking the time to give me your thoughts, as you can see they have really encouraged me.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2014 11:22 PM · On: Chapter 3
Hi, Flossee - was surprised to see first of all that this was being extended past the initial three chapters, but glad to see there would be more. Secondly, you warned us, but I still didn't see that coming. OMG. Not sure what to say or think now. How very, very sad for both men. I could feel the love between them as they sought to sacrifice their own desires for the sake of the other, and to have this happen after Justin was so filled with joy over the prospect of raising their son is just really tragic. I don't suppose we could hope that Mel switched a dead baby with a live one? No, didn't think so. Sigh...I do hope you explain what happened to Justin's son in the last chapter. And I agree with Sandra - I hope they fight for both children now. These two women have no right raising either child. Way too conniving for my taste.
Will be anxiously awaiting the conclusion to this! Thanks. ~Kim
Author's Response: Hey Kim :) I know it is hard for some readers to go on such a rollercoaster of emotions and this fic certainly has been that. While it was hard to write I actually enjoy the challenge of getting the men's feelings across without smothering the story with sex or sexual intimacy, so your review is extra special because what you wrote is saying that I have achieved that "I could feel the love between them as they sought to sacrifice their own desires for the sake of the other, and to have this happen after Justin was so filled with joy over the prospect of raising their son is just really tragic". That really validates the fic for me; thank you very much.
The child's death will be explained and maybe the women will redeem themselves (I did say maybe, lol).
I really appreciate your support Kim, thanks heaps.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: no sleep (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2014 03:14 PM · On: Chapter 3
I read this chapter yesterday but could not review it at that time. It was so sad that I didn't even know how to respond. I was so angry with Mel and Linds that they would choose one child and discard the other and that they would dump the responsibility onto Brian and Justin. And after all that, the child dies. Justin must feel like he is being punished, God's will or not.
I think that I read about a case of surrogacy where a woman conceived twins but the couple who where paying her only wanted one of the siblings and refused the other, leaving her with a child she could not afford. I believe she sued to retain both babies. I think that is exactly what Brian should do. They are not the type I would want raising my child.
And poor Justin, I wouldn't be surprised if he took the next buggy back to Amish country.
Author's Response: You are correct Justin would see it as being punished. I am so pleased you made that statement as it confirms for me that these characters are presenting as I envisage them. I know you are aware that I write some of my fics from real life events, but choosing one baby over another wasn't written with any event in mind. I agree it is terrible to only want one child and I love the fact the surrogate ended up with both children. I also like the idea of Justin maybe one day returning to the Amish life, but the reason would need to be sound. I am enjoying the ideas people are proposing and while this fic will end the series I may return to it someday as the suggestions have been wonderful.
Haha Justin waiting in line to catch a buggy back to Amish country; that I would have to see. Is there a buggy station in Pittsburgh? :D
I am sorry if you had trouble reviewing. Thank you so much for persevering and leaving such a thought-provoking review because as always I really appreciate your insight. :)
Cheers :)
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2014 06:15 AM · On: Chapter 3
I did not see that coming. I have no other words other than this was so unfair...the dads would have to be the ones to completely suffer the loss wouldn't they.
Author's Response: Hey Tamara. I know this is such an unfair situation for the men and that they are the ones to suffer the loss; the consolation, if there can ever be one, is that they have each other for support. I like it when a person says they didn't see the direction the fic took, yet that wasn't my sole aim here as I was just a little upset about the direction of the ending so I cut it short. Thank you for the review, my friend.
Cheers
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