Reviewer: Flossee (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2019 05:19 AM · On: Chapter 7
vic32
Thank you so much for the fantastic work comment. Beating Joan at her own game was fun to write. I don't know what I did wrong so I hope you still see my response on this. Sorry a85;
Cheers
Flossee
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2019 11:30 AM · On: Chapter 7
So proud of Justin how he handled Joan was perfect and I'm excited to see where else it goes from here. Fantastic work x
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Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2019 10:11 AM · On: Chapter 6
So many emotions in this chapter and I loved it all. I hope Justin meets Gus soon I bet they get on really well.
Author's Response: I really appreciate your comment, "many emotions in this chapter". I'm so happy you feel this way.
Cheers
Flossee
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2019 09:47 AM · On: Chapter 5
Justin I'm sure will get to know his new world it must be hard after growing up sheltered like he has. Brian will treat him amazingly and guide him. I hope Justin opens up to how he feels about his parents.
Author's Response: Justin will have many struggles with adjusting to his new life, however Brian will be the man we all know he can be when it comes to Justin.
Cheers
Flossee
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2019 08:26 AM · On: Chapter 4
This is so hard for them all and the not knowing why their parents are running even harder I'm sure.
Author's Response: It must be very hard not having the one question you want answered go unanswered, and your life changed so rapidly.
Cheers
Flossee
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2019 08:29 PM · On: Chapter 3
Oh no, my heart is breaking for them both.
Author's Response: Coming from different worlds is does seem like their destinies aren't meant to be with each other.
Cheers
Flossee
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2019 08:16 PM · On: Chapter 2
Justin is so nervous bless him, I do hope he relaxes around Brian soon.
Author's Response: He is terribly nervous, and surprised, surprise Brian is being considerate.lol
Cheers
Flossee
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2019 08:00 PM · On: Chapter 1
Their attraction is strong and that immediate spark jumped off the page. It's going to be hard but I hope they get together.
Author's Response: Thank you for letting me know you read my fic. I really like the way you say "that immediate spark jumped off the page". That is very nice of you to say.
Cheers
Flossee
Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: August 31, 2018 05:23 PM · On: Chapter 2
Justin Amish? LOL
Author's Response: I totally agree with your LOL:)) I try to place Brian and Justin in situations that would certainly be different for them. I'm so pleased it amused you. Thank you so much for taking the time to leave this review; additional it also lets me know my fics are still entertaining.
Cheers :))
Reviewer: Astor (Anonymous) · Date: October 29, 2015 09:50 PM · On: Chapter 7
Go Justin! Love that he stood up to Joan, and I really love that Jack gave him a tutorial using porn. lol
Love this story so much! Excited to read the other parts!
Author's Response: Tutorial using porn. OMG, I love that line. Justin and Joan having a religious face off, well that just had to happen. LOL.
Thank you for reviewing each chapter. I hope you enjoy the remainder of the series.
Cheers :)))
Reviewer: Astor (Anonymous) · Date: October 29, 2015 09:38 PM · On: Chapter 6
Poor Justin is so confused. So glad the family accepted Justin, and Justin with Brian, so easily. I always assume Michael will hate Justin in sight, but he was actually decent. i am loving this story!
Author's Response: Justin may be confused; still he is in the safe hands with Brian to look out for him, and now the rest of the family.
I'm glad you commented on Michael as for some reason I went against how I feel about him. I also went against how I feel about Craig and Jack, which made writing them so much fun and a bit more of a challenge.
Cheers :)))
Reviewer: Astor (Anonymous) · Date: October 29, 2015 09:27 PM · On: Chapter 5
My fave line was Justin saying that the square foil wouldn't fit Brian. lol
Brian being so willing to wait and not pushing Justin is just about the sweetest thing ever. It shows how much he already loves him.
Author's Response: Yay, you told me another favourite line. I'm loving that aspect of your reviews. Yep, I'm not sure how Justin thought condoms worked.
Absolutely, the love gene in this Brian is certainly more tolerant than the Brian we are used to.
Cheers :)))
Reviewer: Astor (Anonymous) · Date: October 29, 2015 09:17 PM · On: Chapter 4
I wasn't expecting Jennifer and Craig to leave Molly and Justin. I hope to see Brian and Justin work out the kiss. I'm sure Brian will continue to have a lot of guilt about it.
Author's Response: I'm pleased Jennifer and Craig's actions were a surprise.
I don't think Brian has too much to feel guilty about as he weighed up his options of telling Molly and believed it would be easier for her if she didn't know. He is trying his best with the situation he has been thrust into.
Did I say thank God for mothers, well we might need to add fathers to that, as both their actions have thrown our men together. LOL
Cheers )))
Reviewer: Astor (Anonymous) · Date: October 29, 2015 09:09 PM · On: Chapter 3
Very excited to see if Brian is able to give up his lifestyle and become monogamous with Justin. They got so close on the show. I love your writing style! You never fail to get me very invested!
Author's Response: This is OOC and AU so I could have fun with the monogamous part. They did get close in the show and I think most of us want to believe they obtained monogamy once the show finished. Thank you that is a beautiful and very rewarding thing to read about you becoming invested.
Cheers :)))
Reviewer: Astor (Anonymous) · Date: October 29, 2015 08:53 PM · On: Chapter 2
The first kiss..I felt like I was there. In my mind I was. Justin must be very confused, but he isn't shying away from exploring his feelings with Brian. One of my favorite things about this chapter was Brian not seeking a trick and instead staying where he was to fantasize about Justin.
Author's Response: What a wonderful thing to say about the first kiss. This is such a great review; such lovely words and interesting insight, topped off by telling me your favourite part which you know I like to hear, so thank you very, very much.
Fantasizing about Justin or a trick, and Brian fantasizing about Justin won out, who would have thunk it? LOL
Cheers :)))
Reviewer: Astor (Anonymous) · Date: October 29, 2015 08:24 PM · On: Chapter 1
Thank God for flat tires. This story already has me feeling anxiety, and it just started. I love that Justin doesn't seem to be freaked out by his attraction to Brian even though it's clearly not accosted to be gay in his environment.
I'm looking forward to seeing how Brian and Justin manage this attraction and what excuses Brian comes up with to make his way back.
Author's Response: Okay Astor, you are the first person I have ever heard use the phrase, thank God for flat tires.LOL You always surprise me by what you write and I enjoy your unique way of stating things. :) I agree, Brian must have awakened strong emotions since Justin didn't seem to question the fact he wanted Brian, a man.
The next contact isn't really planned by Brian or Justin so maybe we can just say thank god for mothers. LOL
Cheers :)))
Reviewer: Flossee (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2015 07:12 AM · On: Chapter 4
I would like to apologise to the people who took the time to review this fic, and especially this chapter, twice. I lost almost all my reviews from this fic when the system kept failing under our last storage provider and four people were generous enough to replace their reviews. Now it seems I have lost those reviews from this chapter (chapter four) again. I did not delete them and I really want to assure you of this. I am unsure what has happened to them and I have informed Bob who said he is unable to get them back. So just to reiterate, thank you to Brandon, FF and no sleep, and although it is nothing I have done I apologise that the reviews have once again disappeared from the system.
I would just like to add I think my account is being targeted. I used to take my friends laptop with me when I went away from home and I would answer reviews as quickly as possible. I don't do that anymore as I reply once I return. Well now when I leave my home it seems my account gets targeted, so I assume the person knows I am away. When I return I cautiously open my account as I know although there may be lovely reviews, there is always a not so nice review. The person uses a different anonymous pseudonym each time, but the review is always in the same vain. This, and the fact I now seem to be unexplainably losing reviews is very discouraging and as much as I would love to return to this sites as an active member (part of the community) I need to consider if I should or not. I would like the thank eureka1 and AD as returning to your reviews this time was wonderful encouragement.
Reviewer: Brandon (Anonymous) · Date: January 07, 2015 02:41 PM · On: Chapter 7
This is so well done. I enjoy the character development, and you always do such a wonderful job of keeping them cannon even in an AU.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for saying I kept them cannon. Even if I didn't use all the traits they have in the series I was hoping I had included enough to make them, the, Brian and Justin we all know and love. Thank you, I truly appreciate all your comments.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: Brandon (Anonymous) · Date: January 07, 2015 02:39 PM · On: Chapter 6
Debbie is amazing. Justin experienced jealousy for the first time and was thrown in front of the Liberty Avenue gang for the first time. Poor guy. Lol
Author's Response: Debbie, being Debbie, I think would always be cheering Brian and Justin on. In the series she always seemed to be very mindful of the differences, (e.g. age) between Justin and the others, thereby watching out for him. Justin being jealous for the first time, I liked how you picked up on that fact, as Justin hasn't experienced a lot of emotions we all take for granted so dealing with them is all new to him. Thanks for voicing your awareness of the situation as it gives me an insight into the audiences' understanding of the situation. Thanks heaps. :)
Reviewer: Brandon (Anonymous) · Date: January 07, 2015 02:34 PM · On: Chapter 5
The last two sentences are so perfect. Well, the whole chapter is great. I love how Justin got a glimpse of Brian's pain management.
Author's Response: The strangest part about writing this chapter was having Jack explain to Justin what Brian was doing. Weird personified.
Thank you for saying "the last two sentences are so perfect" and the "great" comment. I really appreciate your very kind words. :)
Reviewer: Brandon (Anonymous) · Date: January 07, 2015 02:17 PM · On: Chapter 3
Looks like Brian and Justun are getting married. I love how willing Brian is to give up clubbing and tricking for Justin. Also, I hope Brian gets ahold of the person who spiked Justin's drink.
Author's Response: Although Justin never wanted Brian's lifestyle, in the series, he lived it to have his man. I wanted Brian to want Justin, so he would have to, at least, accept his lifestyle. I hope what I just wrote makes sense to you. LOL
Reviewer: Brandon (Anonymous) · Date: January 07, 2015 02:09 PM · On: Chapter 2
great fic. I am enjoying how patient Brian is with Justin. I love this series. Excited to read it again.
Author's Response: I love an innocent Justin. Writing Justin as the extreme opposite to Brian was so very rewarding and enjoyable.
Reviewer: Brandon (Anonymous) · Date: January 07, 2015 02:00 PM · On: Chapter 1
They are so drawn to each other. I love this plotline.
Author's Response: I really enjoyed writing this plot. Although, the dance was inspired by the movie "Witness", the story is unique, which is always my ultimate goal. I wouldn't call myself an author if I couldn't come up with distinctive story-lines, so I am thrilled you like this one. I'm really happy you commented on how drawn they are to each other, thanks.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: arakiss (Signed) · Date: August 11, 2014 12:16 PM · On: Chapter 1
Hi Flossee!
Of course I understand tolerance - when one is in love, one is willing to overlook small (and not so small ;)) flaws but somehow subconsciously the hope that with enough love that could be changed never fade. The thing is I have trouble with statements like "I love you the way you are and I don't wanna change you". Because for me love is about changes, growing up, learning how to compromise.
I'm babbling :(
The point is I wonder how Justin manages to accept Brian's lifestyle without even thinking about making any demands, without even thinking of possible changes.
I know there is people like this and I appreciate the way you wrote it ( I even thought you've gotta be having real experience with amish ;) ).
All I'm saying is that I'm not like this, maybe I envy it.
Just a little :LOL
Author's Response: Hi Arakiss
I understand what you are saying. I believe you are commenting on "Define MY Brian". Justin doesn't want to change Brian's soul the very essence of who he is, who he really is; still he doesn't want Brian reverting back to his learned behaviors of the past either. However, I think they both grow in the relationship as they move forward and with growth comes change, which Brian notes in Justin's behavior in the final part of the series "Define His Will'. No, I don't think you are babbling, but I think I might be. LOL :)
I love that you thought I had a real life experience of the Amish community. Thank you. As I wrote this I kept thinking to myself how simple and rewarding their lifestyle would be.
I appreciate your thoughts and once again I must tell you how much I like insightful, well thought out comments. I also must say I love the smiley faces, even the sad one, and the LOL's make my day brighter. Thank you so much.
Cheers :))))
Reviewer: arakiss (Signed) · Date: August 10, 2014 02:10 PM · On: Chapter 1
It's a really very interesting plot.
I'm not a religious person myself, maybe a little bit...
But I keep wondering what it's like to accept people so completely without censure even if you love them...
Author's Response: Hey Arakiss
I wholeheartedly love the thoughts you have voiced here, as I sometimes think the same way. I grew up believing what my parents did and my partner was of the same belief so I have never been faced with this situation. However, I hope love would make a person tolerant of their partner's individuality (including religion). This is a very profound review, which I love BTW, as I love insightful contemplation.
This review has made my day. Thank you so much.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: May 03, 2014 03:02 AM · On: Chapter 7
what an interesting premise for a Brian/Justin story. Very good.
Author's Response: Hello. Thank you so much for letting me know you have stopped by and read my fic. I'm truly happy you like the premise and I appreciate the "very good" comment more than you could know, as I'm not a very confident writer. :)
Cheers
Reviewer: Lorie (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2014 03:10 AM · On: Chapter 7
I just read the whole story. I love it. I love Brian being sweet and loving, and Justin being naive is very sweet. Can't wait to read the next part of this story.
Author's Response: Hello Lorie. Thank you for such lovely comments. :) I'm really pleased you like my OOC B/J and that you have read on. I had so much fun writing this, but that doesn't mean people will enjoy reading it; which makes the support and feedback you have given invaluable, thank you so much.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: Hannah (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2014 01:01 PM · On: Chapter 2
The attraction between them is intense! I can't see either holding out much longer let alone for 12 months! :D Great writing!
Author's Response: I don't think I could write B/J holding out 12 months or wait that long for them to be together either. LOL "The attraction between them is intense!" I like the way you put that. :) Thank you for the great writing comment and for taking the time to review. Love the :D, thanks.
Cheers :D
Reviewer: Hannah (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2014 12:54 PM · On: Chapter 1
Wow what a poignant start :D Brian is definitely OOC here but I like that he is considerate towards Justin's situation :)
Author's Response: Hello Hannah. :D I think this is my first review from you and I really appreciate you taking the time to let me know you have read my fic. I'm glad you like the start and I hope you enjoy the rest of the OOC B/J. Thanks also for the smiley face. :)
Cheers
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Anonymous) · Date: March 02, 2014 06:07 PM · On: Chapter 7
I have enjoyed this very much- a very different fic and after 14 years of QAF, that is difficult to do. I would love to see the fic continue- showing them a few years down the road- Justin less naive but still showing their love- maybe a look back fic with vingettes of past experiences.
Author's Response: Hey Sandy, thank you for saying you enjoyed my AU & OOC characters. Also thanks for saying you would like to see this fic continued. I like your ideas. I will keep these characters moving forward, but in what direction now, I'm unsure. I am ecstatic to hear you say this fic is very different after 14 years of QAF, as that is what I hope for when writing B/J stoies, so thank you very much. I really do appreciate you taking the time to review and your input.
Cheers
Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: March 01, 2014 02:54 AM · On: Chapter 7
Thanks for the story; it was terrific. I was one of the lucky ones who read it just before MW had its crash. However, my comment somehow never got posted.
The characters were memorable and the story interesting enough that even though you wrote “The End”, it wasn't,not really. My self and I would guess many readers said, “not so fast.” In our minds we saw the future. What did I see? I am not telling you or anyone else. But please take this as a compliment as we cared enough to look into the future and continued your story.
Again, thanks for the story.
DavidR
Author's Response: Thank you David for letting me know you commented before the system went down; I'm sorry I didn't see it. I agree with what you are saying; I will never write a fic that concludes with "they all lived happily ever after" as I too like an ending where people make up their own minds what the future holds. I am really pleased you didn't tell us where you took the characters. I understand fully what you are saying and I do take it as a compliment. If someone thinks about these OOC characters beyond what you have written then I think that is cause to be chuffed. :) I really appreciate your reviews and I truly like the comments you have made.
Cheers
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: February 28, 2014 01:09 PM · On: Chapter 7
Thanks for the unique story, Flossee. I'm glad to hear you are considering writing a sequel to this story, and continuing to write. :) I'm confident that our previous troubles with the site are behind us now, thanks in large part to the support of our members and other readers. ~Kim
Author's Response: Well that is a nice surprise. I was just checking the site before going to bed. Thanks Kim, and thank you for saying my story is unique as you know that is what I strive for. I'm chuffed. xD Thanks again.
Cheers :) ;)
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2014 07:32 PM · On: Chapter 7
Now in my version of the sequel Justin will start a small garden on the roof, just to keep himself busy and close to his roots. I'm thinking a few salad type vegetables and perhaps a small rabbit hutch. I'm sure he knows some delicious bunny recipes and slaughtering fluffy bunnies is so much quieter then pigs or cattle. I am bothered by the thought of what is going to happen when Brian tries to talk Justin into filming their manly moments. The Amish do not like to have photos taken so live action filming is probably a huge no no. I'm sure Justin will adapt to going to church with Joan, he will no doubt want to become an altar boy. I just hope Brian can maintain his new behaviors toward nameless tricks. It does seems like Justin is starting to enjoy his new life but it will take time for him to adjust to all the new things. Will Brian buy him his own blue Jeep to make it easier to haul bunny feed and fertilizer to his mini farm? Ohhh, maybe he could build a wood working shop and craft his own frames for his art. Thank you so much for this story, I really enjoyed trying to make you add important details, like the color of the Jeep.
Lori
Author's Response: Do you think Justin should grow Pumpkins or Squash? Enquiring minds want to know. xD Maybe instead of taking care of rabbits Justin could just use road kill for their meat products. Oh, you thought I had forgotten all these wonderful ideas did you? LOL Yes you are correct; Justin not having seen a movie wouldn't know how they are produced so he will be surprised when Brian brings in a crew to film their marital activities. LOL The most important part of this whole fic hinged on the colour of the jeep so I thank you very much for your input. :)
Serious note; thank you, you have been reviewing for me from the start and I love your sense of humour. I believe I have only made it to 30 fics because of your support and the laughs we shared along the way; lots of laughs. Thank you my friend.
Cheers :) :)
Reviewer: no sleep (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2014 05:02 PM · On: Chapter 7
"I'm happy it has, and I'm really happy you don't get to kiss him on the lips anymore."
I always wondered about that. I thought Ben was a wuss for putting up with it and I thought it was disrespectful for Brian and Mikey to do it. For Justin, I thought he was just grateful Brian wasn’t fucking Mikey.
“This is Justin's first display of affection in public and in front of Joan no less.”
I was impressed on how Justin handled the situation with Joan. I also thought it was ironic that Brian married a very religious person after being raised by an almost religious fanatic. You did a great job with alluding to the fact that it may not be that easy to get Joan to loosen up and that she more than likely would disappoint Justin who seemed to miss discussing the Bible with someone. At the same time, I like how Justin asserted himself to let everyone know that he loved Brian and was not ashamed to show it. Nice touch.
“This is his normal…”
You can’t tell me you don’t think this is your best work. That last paragraph alone made this story. Brilliant!!! This has got to be a blue ribbon. You go gurl! And please continue.
Author's Response: "I always wondered about that. I thought Ben was a wuss for putting up with it and I thought it was disrespectful for Brian and Mikey to do it." I agree wholeheartedly with this statement. Moot point; the kisses looked anything but comfortable between B/M in the series.
Where you wrote about alluding to the fact that Joan might disappoint Justin; Joan plus each conversation around the table has been taken up in the continuation. I'm sure you can guess which part might be slightly comical, but not overly so, as I want to keep the emotions as the main focus of this AU. I don't know if I will post it as I have given the reader the opportunity to say if they want it or not, and I think you are the only one to express an interest in continuing.
"You can't tell me you don't think this is your best work." LOL You know I do think I have come a long way from that very short first fic and I am going to agree with you in saying this was my favourite one to write and that is probably why I thought I got it wrong when nobody seemed interested. You are very insightful. "That last paragraph alone made this story. Brilliant!!!" Thank you they are very kind words indeed and very much appreciated. "This has got to be a blue ribbon." I think I lost too many reviews for that to happen; I know I lost at least 43 and for a fic only 7 chapters long that is a huge amount, but I thank you for the sentiment and the encouragement.
Cheers :) :) :)
Reviewer: orhida43 (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2014 04:22 PM · On: Chapter 7
I'm sorry that you do not write more B / J story. I read all the stories you've published here. I enjoyed it. Thank you very much!
Orhida
Author's Response: Hey Orhida. I'm so pleased you let me know you have read all my fics and have enjoyed them. Often I see the read count go up and hope someone is enjoying them. I will definitely be writing more B/J fics as I need to get them out of my head. I'm undecided if I will post them to MW, however the response to this story was encouraging. Thank you for taking the time to let me know you have read this one.
Cheers
Reviewer: no sleep (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2014 03:34 AM · On: Chapter 6
"You miss them don't you?"
I love the tenderness and empathy Brian shows to his husband. He could see Justin was hurting and it seemed he knew that Debbie and the rest of the gang was just what he needed. I love that Justin’s loneness was addressed because his religion and upbringing was the only thing the man had known for 21 years before he was suddenly when ripped away from it. He lost his entire world including the only people he had ever known and loved. He’s a stranger in a strange land. Thank goodness he has someone like Brian.
I actually devoured this update at 6 this morning and could not review until 14 hours later. I was itching to review the entire time because of all the thoughts running through my head after reading it. I loved every aspect of this story and would love to read several chapters more, but I know you have health issues and I am grateful for all you have provided. I remember that I liked the movie “Witness” but I never watched it again. This story I have already read three times. Nice going.
Author's Response: Brian's tenderness and empathy; you are hitting on all the areas I wasn't sure MW readers would appreciate, even with an OOC fic. Thank you.
What a lovely thing to say "I was itching to review the entire time because of all the thoughts running through my head after reading it". I really enjoy fics that can do that to me, so I really appreciate you letting me know that my fic has done that for you. :)
I have actually written the continuance to this, while MW was down, but it's still in draft form. I was going to make it humorous and sexy, but that isn't what appeared with each word I typed. The boys stayed in character, as I have them in this fic, and it has turned out very emotional. I thought if health wise I was able and if people liked this fic I would post it. However, just with the lovely reviews you have written it seems like it would be worthwhile.
Three times; I feel really honoured by that. I can't thank you enough for your support, encouragement and very, very, kind words.
Cheers
Reviewer: no sleep (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2014 01:54 AM · On: Chapter 5
"There are a lot of things married men do, still that doesn't seem to bother you that you're not doing them."
"Brian is this a whisk?"
"You know I can't impregnate you, don't you Justin?"
"Brian this piece of foil won't cover you.
LMAO with this Justin’s lack of sexual knowledge. This is a 180 degree change from what Brian is used to and showed just how much Brian loved Justin to put up with it. It is just such a refreshing spin on canon where Justin takes to sex like a duck to water. I also found Justin’s naiveté very endearing as Brian probably did, initially. But the Brian Kinney that is well known as the Stud of liberty Ave can only hold out for so long.
“Justin's desire to be with Brian almost consumed him, yet this goes against everything he has ever learned…”
This also had me wondering. Justin was no only going outside his beliefs but his religion, too. He’s dealing with homosexuality and marrying someone who is considered unclean. Again, I was impressed with not writing Justin as wanting and becoming addicted to sex immediately. I thought the last paragraph was very insightful and showed a great deal of intelligence and strength on Justin’s part.
Author's Response: This review has just made this fic for me. I'm pleased you laughed, and then you pondered where Justin was coming from, especially since Justin is having a struggle with where his loyalties and love are taking him. I value the fact you are happy with me "not writing Justin as wanting and becoming addicted to sex immediately" as I didn't really know if I could make that convincing, since so many want that aspect in a fic, but I was trying to limit the sex and the humour (not delete it altogether as that just wouldn't be me, lol) to get the love story across, and from this review I think I might have achieved that. Thank you so much for expressing your thoughts as they are what is important to me. Your reviews are inspirational.
Cheers
Reviewer: no sleep (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2014 05:03 PM · On: Chapter 3
"You have premarital sex, with numerous partners; your body is unclean."
That was a shocker!
It had been so long that I had to read from the beginning again, but I enjoyed this even more. I had missed that dance somehow and could see how utterly romantic that was. And I was shocked here thought for sure Justin had no inhibitions after presenting himself nude to Brian earlier. This was a very interesting chapter.
Oh, I wanted to respond earlier to a question but the sight disappeared and now I don't quite remember what was asked, but I say life is too short and do only what you love. My time is severely limited now to RL issues. I even bought DVDs of Spartacus on Black Friday and have only gotten through the second season and haven't even cracked open Game of Thrones. I gave up TV a long tine ago for fanfiction, but I have gradually gotten back into it. But it is also stories like this one that keeps me away form TV. :)
Author's Response: I'm happy you thought that line was shocking and the explanation of not judging in chapter 4 was believable.
"Thought for sure Justin had no inhibitions after presenting himself nude to Brian earlier" I'm really thrilled you found this chapter interesting as I was hoping the reader would make up their own minds on whether Justin would have wanted Brian or not. One reader (unfortunately the review is lost) said they thought Justin would have wanted Brian, and I would probably agree with that.
Thank you so much for those very kind words "stories like this one that keeps me away from TV". Last night I sat at my computer and tried to edit chapter six again since I had done some editing direct to MW and hadn't saved it. I literally sat with a bucket by my feet as I was feeling poorly, but I don't want people thinking I am trying to dragging my reposts out and I hope the final chapter isn't too far away. I have decided with the response in some reviews, along with the kind people who have put this fic in their favourites (which you are one; thank you so much) and the people who put me on their favourite authors list that I can't be boring everyone. LOL I was overwhelmed that some people, I didn't even know read my fics, reviewed to support me and I can't thank them enough. I probably will continue to post if my health issues can be resolved. However, if they can't, I will still try and support MW and the other authors if possible. I do love writing these characters; I just thought I was wasting my time posting my stories.
I know this is a little off track; I tried watching Spartacus, but it was to bloody for me. I hope you're enjoying it. I wanted to watch it even more when I realized ‘mandagrammy' has a crossover and I think that would be a great era to write Brian and Justin, but I find you do lose a lot of the story if you don't understand both worlds.
I hope you don't think I haven't noticed. Thank you so much for the smiley face. :) ;) xD
Cheers /
Reviewer: Bob (Signed) · Date: February 21, 2014 05:30 PM · On: Chapter 5
:)
Author's Response: Thanks Bob that really was a fun way to start my day.
:'-D Crying with laughter
o/ Cheer "Yay, yay."
Reviewer: Bob (Signed) · Date: February 21, 2014 05:29 PM · On: Chapter 3
:)
Author's Response: : - 7 Smirk
o/ Cheer "Yay, yay."
Reviewer: Bob (Signed) · Date: February 21, 2014 05:28 PM · On: Chapter 2
:)
Author's Response: : - D Grinning
o/ Cheer "Yay, yay."
Reviewer: Bob (Signed) · Date: February 21, 2014 05:28 PM · On: Chapter 1
:)
Author's Response: That was unexpected; one on each chapter. lol I love these faces as I'm just learning what they mean. (:-) Smiling with helmet. OMG, do you remember the outtake where Jennifer (Sherry Miller) put her helmet on backwards? It is one of the funniest things I have ever seen. xD This symbol is apparently becoming the same as lol and I still xD when I see that scene.
o/ Cheer "Yay, yay."
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: February 20, 2014 02:24 AM · On: Chapter 3
Hi, Flossee - sorry you lost so many reviews. I know how that feels! But I wanted you to know that I did enjoy your story, particularly how Brian cared for Justin here and his reactions to all his new experiences out in the 'big, bad world.' I hope you will consider posting another story in the future when the inspiration hits you again.;) ~Kim
Author's Response: Hey Kim. I must say I am having trouble getting excited about reposting this fic. I loved writing this and it is probably my favourite fic that I have written as I tried a new writing style; holding back on the humour and sex to portray the storyline. While the reviews are no longer there I actually miss the interaction with the readers. They are the ones that keep me on track and give me a laugh (I lost all my smiley faces) :( :( :( they are the reason I post what I write. I have been writing the whole time MW has been down and still I can't get these AU, OOC characters out of my head. LOL I assume you can relate to that. I will definitely finish posting this part of the story. All seven chapters, which I have to edit since I did some editing direct to MW. Silly me. xD You have to laugh as I thought my post fics days were over and fate dictates otherwise. LOL Life is fun and sometimes funny. Thanks for the review; I know we are all in the same situation with the reviews, but it's nice to know some people are reading the fic again.
Cheers
Reviewer: XPO787 (Anonymous) · Date: January 24, 2014 12:07 AM · On: Chapter 2
I always enjoy your unique stories. Hope, you will continue writing. This story is interesting. It's the first BJ-Amish fic that I'm reading.
Please, continue writing. :)
Author's Response: Hey XPO787. I know you will be aware that I did answer your review when you first posted it, but unfortunately the system has wiped out my reply. Thanks so much for saying my stories are unique as that is what I strive for. Like you this is the only Amish fic I am aware of and I'm very happy you are finding it interesting. Thank you for taking the time to review and the smiley face. I really appreciate your kind words.
Cheers
Reviewer: CFC (Anonymous) · Date: January 23, 2014 01:59 PM · On: Chapter 2
I would hate to see you stop writing as you are good and an enjoyable read.
This story is getting a pass from me as I just don't see how it could have a happy ending, as Justin would surely be shunned if he goes with Brian and lose his family. Or he could stay with his family and lose Brian and be unhappy.
I am trying to stay away from unhappiness in stories, as real life has enough right now.
So, please don't let the reaction to one story push you away from writing more, just know that some of us just can't handle unhappiness right now.
Author's Response: Hi CFC. I understand your hesitation, but I can't reassure you as to the outcome as that would give away the whole crux of the fic. You may be surprised as to what happens, however I would never push you to read something you don't want to. I feel the same way about cancer fics as it reminds me of real life, and usually the fics are way off base and I just want to yell at the screen for the author to at least get it right and not belief everything they find on the web. Sorry that's my little outburst for the day. LOL Really, I think it is just that I don't want the constant reminder.
I hope life improves for you. I wish you ever happiness and I hope you can find something or someone that can put a smile on your face every day (I have that and I know how important it is). Thank you for your kind words and letting me know you enjoy my other fics.
Cheers
Reviewer: taurus 1958 (Anonymous) · Date: January 23, 2014 11:24 AM · On: Chapter 2
I enjoyed your stories.I do hope you continue to write. I hate to see a talented writer discouraged. You are truly appreciated.
Author's Response: I smile whenever I see your reviewer alias as we are both bulls (Taureans). I presume you have heard we are supposed to be stubborn; I say that's a load of rubbish, we are just patient people who wait for others to come around to our way of thinking. LOL Thanks for letting me know you are enjoying my fics and your very kind words. Question: Am I to stubborn to change my mind???? LOL Sorry, I hope you don't mind me having a little fun with your review, I truly do appreciate you reading and reviewing.
Cheers
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: January 23, 2014 03:51 AM · On: Chapter 2
Have always loved your unique and often humorous stories about the boys. But I didn't post every time. Regret it now. Hope you change your mind and decide not to leave us.
Author's Response: Hey Anonymous, thanks for your kind words. At least I now know I'm not boring everyone, just the majority.LOL I really would like to thank you for any support you may have given me in the pasts, I can't say anything specific as I'm not sure which Anon you are. I sincerely appreciate you taking the time to tell me you have enjoyed my previous efforts.
Cheers
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2014 03:22 AM · On: Chapter 2
I'm so glad that Justin has been able to escape the farm, I have a feeling there will be lots of new experiences for him to adjust to. Now lets hope they can find a place to stash the girls so the boys can have a little privacy. I'm am trying no to think about you stopping posting your delightful stories. The tears are flowing down my cheeks at the thought of a world without your unique looks of the world of QAF. I'm willing to bet the exhaust fumes from those dangerous red Jeeps is what has made you mind go all wonky. I think you need to spend a few hours in quiet contemplation kneeling on the floor of the shed to get your mind right with god again. It could be a build up in fluids causing you to go light headed. I just hope if you really do need to stop writing you won't cast off all your close friends who still worship QAF. Now back to this chapter, I'm a little worried about Daphne, she is looking a little pale and I'm afraid she might have a parasite problem. I hope she can be tested at the free clinic. I bet Ted would be just the one to take her to the doctor. I do think a shopping trip with Em would be good for Justin, he will need some fancy pants to really show off his assets when he discovers Babylon. I sure hope he takes to driving a Jeep quickly, well I guess he can always crash the ugly red one and then get the safer blue one with amazing gas mileage. Must dash, the mean librarian is glaring at me. I think she can tell I'm reading impure material.
Lori~ wishing for WIFI
Author's Response: I love waking up to your quirkiness as it puts a smile on my face and I know all is right with the world. A jeep, a shed and quiet contemplation, where do you get these ideas??? LOL I think you should invite the librarian to join you, she probably needs a little fun in her life; can you imagine being surrounded by all those well written and exciting books, she is probably hankering for a little badly written fun with porn (there may be porn in this one, I can't promise, lol). She might even have a suggestion on how Justin can ditch the girls, and where Daphne might be able to get an exorcism for her parasite problem. Okay, after writing that maybe I have been affected by exhaust fumes; note to self, don't sit in the shed with the jeep (undisclosed excellent colour which may be red) running or I will turn a disgusting shade of blue. Thanks for taking the chance at being exposed, by the librarian, to leave this review. I have truly missed you on this site. As always my friend I appreciate your type and duck fun library review, thank you.
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Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: January 22, 2014 10:44 AM · On: Chapter 2
Thanks for the chapter. So far it has been really terrific
reading. I think the women should remain as they
could/would add so much more to the story. Since the three
of them can during Rumspringar smoke, and drink, I was
wondering about sex. If the women are ‘that’ attractive, then
there are many non gay men in the Liberty Avenue area and of
course other places they may visit. I don’t expect an answer as
let the story tell me whatever I want to know. Is it only gay sex
between Brian and Justin that would cause Justin to be an
outcaste from his Amish Community?
Anyway, there is so much for us to learn plus a good story
line. This story is going to be fun. Thanks again.
DavidR
Author's Response: Hi David. The next chapter will submit Justin to more of Brian's world and the consequences might not be so pleasant. I won't say any more as I don't want to give too much away. LOL I'm glad you're looking forward to reading more. I had intended to write this as drama and then write a few one offs as humor to introduce Justin to clothing etc, but now I don't think that will happen. I hope you're not too disappointed as there is very little humor in the story. Honestly, I didn't know you read my fics so thank you for taking the time to read and review this one, I really do appreciate it.
Cheers
Reviewer: tiff (Anonymous) · Date: January 22, 2014 06:41 AM · On: Chapter 2
Sorry to hear you won't be posting anymore. But I have to say, it will be unfortunate for the readers that do still post. Not having the gift of writing myself, it must be difficult to put in so much effort for fewer replies. Still, were it me, having the talent and the devotion of even a few eaders would be more than enough.
Author's Response: Hi Tiff. Thank you for letting me know you have read this fic. I hope you understand your review is one that has me thinking I may be boring people and I have no intention of doing that. I will explain. When I first came to this site everyone was met with a smiley face from Bob, readers and other authors would come and say hello and encourage you to continue. The atmosphere was very welcoming. Now however some of the reviews I receive are quite odd. I have had a person tell me they aren't enjoying the fic only the jokes, another who obviously reads my work has only ever reviewed with ‘Y is Justin in a wheelchair' and multiply just telling me what is wrong with my fic; I have even had people wait until I review their fics and then they tell me how much they enjoy mine, which seems odd as they have never reviewed any of them. I pride myself as being a very astute person, but you can see the mixed signals I'm getting here. Do I actually have people enjoying these fics as I can't tell if they don't review and the last thing I would want is to bore people? I really enjoy writing and I will probably continue to do so, but I just won't post them. I actually have to write them down as they won't leave me alone until I do. Where you write ‘having the talent' this is how I see it. There are authors that write the same old, same old and string the words together well and there are authors who aim at original fics as I do, and I know my writing leaves a lot to be desired, but there are very, very few authors that can do both and if my talent is original plots then boring readers would be my nemesis. I hope now you understand my reasoning.
Cheers
Reviewer: sophie'smom (Anonymous) · Date: January 22, 2014 04:29 AM · On: Chapter 2
Poor Justin having the "English" lifestyle thrown at him and him not really knowing how to handle it. He's as attracted, to Brian as Brian is to him.
A year? So much will happen by the end of that time. Exciting.
Sorry you feel you need to stop writing, I've always enjoy your stories. I used to comment on every story I've read. After a while when my reviews were passed over, not replied to, I stopped. I understand the time you put into writing and posting your stories, but some writers don't understand the time it takes us readers to read and review. Maybe posting your stories on a different site may attract different readers. I wish you luck with whatever you decide.
Author's Response: Justin does struggle with the lifestyle he has been thrown into and he will have misgivings. I know, that's no surprise but I'm trying really hard here not to give anything away. LOL
I will still writing my fics I just won't post them as I really don't want to bore people. Thank you for saying you always enjoy my stories I appreciate that. I agree with you about reviews; since I started reviewing I review everything I read and only recently have I not been able to keep up with reviewing every chapter on some fics, but that is because of health reasons. I too stop reviewing when the author doesn't pay me the courtesy of replying as I find that to be rude. Thanks for the good wishes and for your help in the past, I've always appreciated your input.
Cheers
Reviewer: sophie'smom (Anonymous) · Date: January 22, 2014 03:55 AM · On: Chapter 1
Instant attraction. Magnetism. Whatever, it's exciting.
Jennifer carries the burden of her son's secret. It must be a heavy one, for Justin doesn't even know.
How is Justin going to handle what he's feeling?
Author's Response: Jennifer has many layers, just like an onion. LOL (I don't know why I wrote that analogy, I guess I'm just in a silly mood). I'm glad you think it is exciting, and I hope it stays that way although it will be a little while before they get together. "How is Justin going to handle what he's feeling?" he is definitely going to struggle. Thank you so much for reviewing, I really appreciate it.
Cheers
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2014 11:54 PM · On: Chapter 2
Now that I know why Justin and the girls are in Pittsburgh, it all makes sense. It must be hard to get Justin to realize that because everyone in the area is gay, he won't have to worry about unwanted attention being paid to his sister and Daphne. Everything is so new to them. TV, electricity, not having to wear their Amish clothing. I wonder how Debby will react once she meets them. They will be going back to the diner won't they?
Author's Response: I like it when you add the words" it all makes sense", as you know I don't have a beta so it helps me to know if I'm on track. They can use electricity etc., but they won't try everything they are allowed. Justin will hold back on something's and so far they only have their Amish clothing. I had intended to write this as drama and then write a few one offs as humor to introduce Justin to clothing etc, but now I don't think that will happen. He will meet Debbie, but I am trying really hard not to give anything away so I hope you stay tuned. Thank you so much again for your support.
Cheers
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2014 11:31 PM · On: Chapter 1
I wonder what Craig's previous life was. Even in Amish country Brian is attracted to Justin but is kind enough to know that anything he starts will only hurt Justin in the eyes of the community. I look forward to seeing how you get them to meet again.
Author's Response: "Craig's previous life" I'm glad that didn't go unnoticed as it is important. I see you have moved on to the next chapter so some of your questions will have been answered. Thank you for taking the time to review, I hope you are enjoying the fic.
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Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2014 09:43 PM · On: Chapter 2
What a dilemma to be in for both men. Brian trying desperately to hold back, and Justin wanting to 'take the plunge,' but his beliefs and upbringing holding him back as well. It's like two powderkegs waiting to combust. Something tells me that once Justin is giving 'proper tutelage' in the fine art of having sex, he might just be one very enthusiastic participant, and Brian may find himself with a delicious handful on his hands.;)
A little surprised that Craig would agree to let Jennifer ship them off in Brian's care considering where he lives and his lifestyle (sorry, I can't remember now if his sexual orientation was brought up in the previous chapter (?)), and I could still imagine the two girls being hit upon by the lesbians that also hang out around Liberty Avenue. I can still remember the "Boots are Made For Walking" song blaring from Babylon during that girls' night out. Which reminds me, I could just imagine Justin's reaction to THAT place - ha! And to Debbie as well. Talk about sensory overload!
I also suspect that Jennifer might know exactly what she is doing, and is either testing Justin's willpower intentionally, or knows in her heart that her son will never be able to live the regimented, strict life he has been dealt, and is pushing him to find out where his true heart lies. Lots of conflicts and emotions here! Looking forward to the next part. ~Kim
Author's Response: I like it when someone says what they think might happen as it keeps me on track to try and surprise them. LOL "two powder kegs waiting to combust" I think virgin Justin actually might physically combust if he continues to live so close to the man of his dreams. xD No sexual orientations were discussed previously, the only dialogue was that Jennifier had an inkling Justin wasn't into the opposite sex. Babylon, Debbie and sensory overload will definitely ensure. LOL Thanks for the encouragement Kim and for taking the time to review and give me a laugh; I really appreciate it.
Cheers
Reviewer: Silverfish (Signed) · Date: January 20, 2014 07:52 PM · On: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed the start of this story. I especially like stories where the characters Brian and Justin portray are set in worlds poles apart and where it is very difficult for them to bridge this gap ! It's all about the chase really... I love this idea and you could really feel the tension at the dinner table! Brilliant ploy by Justin to use his lmited abilities to try and beguile Brian! Well, it worked, but it was so sad as well, that Brian knew he should not look at him or talk to him...
He doesn't know it, but he loves him already. If he's willing to sacrifice his own needs so that Justin can remain safe and not get shunned or any problems with the elders or his father, then Brian's already a gonner in my opinion!!
He luvs him soooo much...
Carry on with an update ASAP. Loving this story!!
Author's Response: He luvs him soooo much... LOL I've never written anything like this before so I'm really pleased you are enjoying it. I love a selfless Brian (here I would say I hope he stays that way, but I already know if he does. LOL) "worlds poles apart and where it is very difficult for them to bridge this gap" I like the way you put that, I enjoy that in a fic also and I hope the ending isn't predictable. Thank you so much for the review as I really do appreciate it and I'm not just writing that as I have been pondering whether to make this the last fic I post. The response to my previous fic and this one hasn't been great and I don't want to bore people by posting snoozefest material. LOL
Cheers
Reviewer: taurus 1958 (Anonymous) · Date: January 17, 2014 06:39 PM · On: Chapter 1
i like the way the story starts off so far. Continue on with the journey to each others loving arms.
Author's Response: This is exactly what I am trying to portray in this fic; they need to be in each others arms where they belong. Thank you taurus 1958 for taking the time to let me know you like the beginning. I really appreciate it.
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Reviewer: no sleep (Signed) · Date: January 17, 2014 11:15 AM · On: Chapter 1
My reading ability is limited so I prayed I would be able to finish this chapter. I did not want to stop in the middle. Initially, I thought it was another Amish story, which I've only read one other. This one took me by surprise. Your writing style of this took my breath away. This is not just another Amish story. I thought it was going to be lightweight going by the banner-- not so. I felt the sexual tension at the dinner table and the heartfelt disappointment in the buggy. The scene with Justin presenting himself nude and in need was Oscar worthy if this was a movie.
It is rare to read something that is presented so uniquely after reading so much QAF fan fiction, but you have accomplished it with this chapter. I'm definitely looking foward to the rest of this story.
Author's Response: I really hope I don't disappoint you in the remaining chapters. This has not been written as light-hearted fun which most of my fics are, and that is the reason I haven't used the humor category. It will have small amounts of levity as I couldn't image life without any. Some of the first chapter was based on the movie "Witness" which was my motivation for that chapter, but not for the remainder of the fic. I liked your comment about my banner as I am trying to make my own and if it seems frivolous maybe I need to try harder. Thank you no sleep for such a lovely review. This is the nicest review I have ever received and I really appreciate you taking the time to leave it.
Cheers
Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: January 17, 2014 12:29 AM · On: Chapter 1
I'm so glad I could inspire you to post another story. I will send you a email soon with some ideas, I did live for nearly 20 years in an area infested with Amish. I'm positive Brian could cause a great deal of loin problems in the community. I'm at the library right now, trying to not make any trouble. Being surrounded by all this electricity makes me giddy. Besides reading I'm downloading music to my itunes account, Queer as Folk Sound Track is being added right now. I plan to take a nap as soon as I get home so if you need the brain feel free. Oh, I think you forgot to mention Brian's new Jeep is a beautiful blue color. Everyone knows that is the post perfect color but I think it would bring some depth to this story.
Lori
Author's Response: Thank goodness you're sleeping as now I can have free reign on the brain using. LOL Yes I think adding the colour of the Jeep would definitely add depth to my fic; however, I'm pretty sure in this fictional world there are no blue Jeeps. Alas, he will have to have a red one. However, red automobiles do go faster. LOL If you want a compromise can we maybe agree on black. xD OMG, I read your email and only one small section of that information is in this fic, and I don't think I can add the rest or I would need psychiatric care afterwards. I love thinking of you trying to look inconspicuous in the library while on MW; at least it isn't a porn chapter. LOL
Cheers my friend
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2014 08:12 PM · On: Chapter 1
Interesting beginning! Loved Justin's ploy with the napkin and Brian's reaction. :-) The dance reminds me of the one in "Witness." I think I've only seen one other Amish Justin fic before so Justin's inner turmoil should be interesting to read about. And Craig is perfect as a stern, Amish father - ha! Looking forward to reading more. :-)
~ Kim
Author's Response: You're correct Kim the dance scene came from "Witness", I just changed the song. Please don't tell me the name of the other Amish fic until I conclude posting this one. I want to read it, but I don't want it to influence me. I don't think this is going where the readers might think and I hope there are some surprises along the way. I'm writing Brian OOC and I might have gone to the extreme. LOL Thanks for joining me on this one and taking the time to review.
Cheers
Reviewer: CFC (Anonymous) · Date: January 16, 2014 01:07 PM · On: Chapter 1
>Well written. Interesting premise.
In the US, tyre is spelled tire. It should be 'an excellent view of ..Justin's....
Looking forward to more chapters. Thank you for posting.
Author's Response: Hello CFC. Thank you for the tyre spelling. I am Australian and I try to use the US spelling as I know most of the readers are from the US, so I will change it. Thank you for saying it is well written, I am trying to correct the tense Sarah has picked up as incorrect. I'm glad you like the premise as I really like to write different subjects each time, that's my goal even more so than the actual wording, if that makes sense. LOL I really appreciate your review and helping me out.
Cheers
Reviewer: sarahyellow (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2014 10:46 AM · On: Chapter 1
I really like the premise for this story a lot. It makes sense for an AU, since they DO live in Pennsylvania. And I can definately picture Justin as a naiive, stiffled Amish young man. I liked the reason you gave for Brian having to go on an interlude into AmishWorld because it was realistic, but I would like to gently say that your story was hard to enjoy past the main plot element, due to the way you constantly jumped around from tense to tense. I suspect that you're not a native English Speaker? I think you have some great plot ideas, and a clear understanding and ability to communicate the QAF cahracters that we love within those plotlines, but I do think you could benefit greatly from a beta reader.
Hope you consider it, since I really think this story is a great idea!
Author's Response: Hello Sarah. I'm glad you like the premise. English is my first language; however, I don't claim to write well as I have a mathematical brain. I did say I put this up in a hurry, but if you would like to beta it for me I would love to take you up on the offer. Thanks for reading and commenting, I really appreciate your honesty and I will go back and look for the incorrect tense. I haven't been able to get on to MW in the past couple of hours and I was still in the middle of posting this when it went down.
Cheers
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