Reviewer: auggie (Signed) · Date: December 05, 2017 09:32 PM · On: Chapter 3
Reviewer: Bob (Signed) · Date: June 22, 2017 05:55 AM · On: Chapter 3
Father Bolton adds an interesting twist to the plot. In this chapter there are a few times you need to make paragraph breaks when the character voice changes.
I need to get back to my work; however, I'm having a hard time ending my reading at the moment. Very good story, Bill.
Reviewer: GravityAlwaysWins (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2015 04:43 PM · On: Chapter 3
Hi Bill :)
What a wonderful chapter! I must admit, I laughed out loud at the "Justin, GOOD SUIT!" line :P
Then, I melted at this beautifully written bit - "Brian woke up the next morning, shortly before the alarm went off, with a blonde head nestled on his shoulder and an arm, not his own, resting on his stomach. He found his feelings of love and contentment almost overwhelming. Brian ran his fingers through Justin’s soft blonde hair causing his partner to wake up and smile. “Morning Sunshine."
I can't wait to see where you're taking this. I have a long way to go, but I'm sure I'll enjoy the journey :)
Author's Response: Hope you continue to enjoy the story, yiu have a bunch of chapters to get through. Thanks for letting me know you are reading. Bill
Reviewer: Flossee (Signed) · Date: April 23, 2014 09:01 AM · On: Chapter 3
I really appreciate that you are writing Father Bolton as a down to earth guy. Fingers crossed for Justin winning the $200,000 contract. I assume he does or it wouldn't have been mentioned, but I also know things aren't always simple in QAF land. I shall read on and see if you have put some road bumps in his way. LOL
Cheers :)
Author's Response: not too many road bumps in this feel good story. I like Fr Bolton would like him to reappear later but I'm not sure how or when.
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