Reviewer: Astor (Anonymous) · Date: November 09, 2015 02:43 PM · On: Chapter 1
Well, this one really gets me in my feelings. What a toolbag that guy is to laugh. I hope Justin can forgive him. Cheating after being monogamous will be a hard thing to get past, but their love is strong enough to.
Author's Response: Justin may have expected Brian would cheat at some stage, yet to do it so Justin can have a certain lifestyle may not be acceptable. Still, I'm sure Justin will understand it since Brian is the one that has always catered for their financial security and he certainly will appreciate Brian did it for their future family. I hope.
Love the comment about your feelings. Thank you.
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Reviewer: Brandon (Anonymous) · Date: December 23, 2014 05:33 PM · On: Chapter 1
Just crushing. The angst killed me. I hope Justin can forgive him.
Author's Response: I believe Brian and Justin were destined to be together. That said, I'm sure they would have problems just like everyone else. I was extremely pleased that I could convey with a gesture, the unopened box of condoms, Justin's mindset, as it allowed the whole fic to flow from Brian's POV. Just crushing; what an apt statement. Thank you.
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Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: October 18, 2013 10:01 AM · On: Chapter 1
Beautifully written. Amazing
Author's Response: I can't tell you how happy I am about this review. This is my favourite fic along with the poem I wrote, and again it doesn't get much attention in the way of reviews so I am ecstatic that you have taken the time to leave such lovely words. Thank you so very, very much.
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Reviewer: no sleep (Signed) · Date: October 09, 2012 01:10 PM · On: Chapter 1
Flossee, Flossee, Flossee, you can't write somthing this angsty and this tempting and not write a full story to back it up. It is just pure torture to do otherwise. You say you don't do angst but this and many others of your one-shots say that you do and do so very well.
Please, Flossee, you can't do this to your readers.:( Please give us more of this story. As a matter of fact, I bet you have a epic story you are secretly holding out from your readers. No one who writes like you do could not have.
What do you say? :)
Oh, by the way, now that I'm done with my shameless pleading and begging. This was one hell of a story. You go Gurl! And please give us more of this.
Author's Response: Was it wrong of me to laugh while reading this, as I am flattered but I’m also a little embarrassed as I don’t have an epic story I'm secretly holding on to. I think it was nervous laughter. No sleep I am starting to think I can write angst thanks to you and I will now need to put that category on some of my work. Thank you for the one hell of a story compliment, it means so much to me when someone appreciates my writing.
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Reviewer: starfire64 (Signed) · Date: October 08, 2012 11:17 AM · On: Chapter 1
Hi Flossee, OMG, this is so powerful, and wonderfully written. Is there going to be a second part to this? I’d love to know if Justin forgives him ( hint, hint- Ha). ~*~ Hugs, Janet
Author's Response: I believe Justin would forgive Brian as he probably wouldn’t have been there confronting him with the unopened condom packet and the commitment it symbolised if he didn’t want to understand why. As for Brian; to make such a commitment would speak volumes to how he feels about Justin. I love it when someone asks for a second part as it means they are interested in the story but I also like it to be open to various interpretations. ie Justin lover or not; I happen to love the character. Powerful and wonderfully written, I really appreciate such a lovely review Janet, thank you, thank you so much. I have a confession; I went to the other website, but I will review here. I hope that incentive for more chapters soon, pretty please. LOL.
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Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: October 08, 2012 10:12 AM · On: Chapter 1
:)
Author's Response: ;) I can’t say this enough, thank you for all the work you do to get my categories updated and banners onto this site. You’re an awesome asset to MW. Thank you also for the stars and the review.
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Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: October 07, 2012 09:55 PM · On: Chapter 1
Hi, my friend - this is very powerful writing. I can imagine Brian possibly doing this - he was renowned for acting first and then explaining his actions later. It kind of cries out for a second chapter where the scene continues and Brian actually attempts to explain why he did what he did (hint, hint).
Kind of reminds me of what he did in the beginning of "Parent Trap" when they broke up (wish me luck - I think the next chapter I update soon is where he'll have to try and explain his motivations back then!). At least for me, I've found that it's not always easy for Brian to verbalize, or even understand, some of what he does, but as you said I think the important point is that he tries for Justin's sake.
The part where Justin wordlessly throws the unopened box of condoms at Brian was so compelling. Thanks for sharing this with us. *Hug* ~Kimberly
Author's Response: - this is very powerful writing; thank you so much Kim. I feel Brian was reluctant to discuss the company’s situation with Justin because he probably felt like he had failed to provide for them and their future, which I’m sure he perceived as his role. He probably acted without thinking, driven by desperation only to regret it immediately. I am thrilled when something like Justin tossing the condom packet is picked up on, as some subtle lines can be missed even though there is meaning in them. I can’t remember the exact scene in Parent Trap but I do know it was in Brian’s Office or the Restroom, and I do remember Justin came in just after it. I will leave Brian explaining himself to your fic, which by the way you know how involved with it I am, and I do wish you luck. Thank you so very much Kim for taking the time to leave such a lovely review.
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Reviewer: BrianaWriter (Signed) · Date: October 07, 2012 08:57 PM · On: Chapter 1
This is Outstanding. I had to read it more than once because it was so EXPLOSIVE, and a very DARING risk for an author at this site to take. I'm not sure if a lot of readers at this site can handle this. For that, I take my HAT off to you. I say the more daring an author is, the more they gain my respect. Provided it is done with all the class you display here.
Like Bigpaw said, it's very beautifully written and it does get to the core of one's heart. Mine's was beating real fast the entire time. Felt like I was having a heart attack.
I can't stress this enough, Flosee... a really extraordinary thing you wrote here.
Sincerely, Delores
Author's Response: Delores I am absolutely ecstatic about what you have written here. It is ever so flattering as when I posted this I was sure readers would find it difficult. EXPLOSIVE, and a very DARING risk for an author; thank you so much as I posted it knowing I was proud of the writing and I thought even if I received no reviews I would still feel it is one of my better pieces. Very beautifully written, a really extraordinary thing you wrote here; I’m so glad you can’t see me as I’m not admitting to a few tears. Okay I am trying to lighten the mood, please don’t have a heart attack as I need my fix, especially as your fic has left us hanging. LOL. Thank you Delores everything you said is so very much appreciated.
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Reviewer: BigPaw (Signed) · Date: October 07, 2012 01:01 PM · On: Chapter 1
Damn you, this is not what I needed tonight. But I have to say it is beautifully written and sad enough to rip my heart in two. Now knowing me, here is where my mind is going...Micheal must have been spying and saw the whole misguided attempt to try and save the family and business. Micheal is always trying to catch a glimpse of the dream he will never have. Since Micheal doesn't stop to realize what might have forced this unholy act to take place he only sees it as Brain being done with the blonde boy and he is only to happy to run ahead and break the news, tell him to start packing and find a new home. I hope Justin was quick enough to pull the small handgun he keeps in the bedside table, loaded of course and through his tears manages to get in one killing shot and then drags the corpse down to the basement where Sven the housekeeper will take care of it on Monday. I'm sure Justin is upset but all he needs to do is talk to Brian and I'm sure all will be forgiven. I am afraid Sunday dinners at Deb's might be a little tense for a week or two but everyone will soon realize what a huge relief it is to be rid of Michael. I assume Sven will be too scared to just dump his body in the woods. I think he'll take it to a low cost funeral home and get a cheap cardboard box to stuff him in. The scum sucker special $199.87 with a nice bunch of half wilted petunias to toss over the grave, Plastic grave marker extra $9.49 Hey, Sven's not made of money and he'd hate to ask Justin to pay him back even if he saved the receipt. But that's just the little things I had to add to keep myself sane.
It really is such a good story, way too short of course but you sure managed to pack a lot with just those few words. You do realize they don't charge by the word when you post stories here.
Lori
Author's Response: OMG we are awake at the same time so now we have a sharing dilemma. My computer is very torpid today and it decided the fewer words the better. Don’t charge by the word when you post stories. ROFLMAO. I love your review; the spendy cardboard box, the wilted petunias and plastic grave marker were priceless but all purchased with the upmost aplomb. I’m so glad you didn’t blame Theodore for dobbing. Justin would definitely forgive Brian as I wouldn’t write him any other way. I apologise for Michael not appearing; it is obvious you missed him but I will keep your secret that he is your favourite. Thank you for writing the second chapter. LOL.
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