Reviewer: nosleep (Anonymous) · Date: August 07, 2011 02:20 AM · On: weightless
"I sighed, knowing it was the best that I was going to get out of him. Then I followed him downstairs, gave him a very intense kiss goodbye (which Vic appreciated a little too vocally), and then tried and failed to convince him to kiss Luke good bye, too."
Nobody seems to like Luke.
This was a very intense chapter. Justin is so pathetic in his need for Brian, yet he has all the other more important stuff hanging over his head. He is very naive.
I just curious on who he is going to choose as a guardian over the inheritance.
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: August 05, 2011 01:14 AM · On: weightless
Just wanted you to know that I am enjoying your story. You have done a great job of presenting the boys in an intriguing light and I love the way you have portrayed Justin's son - I can almost feel like I'm sitting there while he's gurgling, trying to learn to walk and talk, being fussy when he's 'dangled,' etc. I like how protective Justin is toward his son - I can see him being that way and I feel it's very true to his character traits. And I can see the boys slowly becoming more and more connected to each other emotionally.
Oh, and for what's it worth, I have no authority or say-so whatsoever in the matter, but I echo the other reviewer - I, too, feel it's worth a blue ribbon in my opinion and I told the administrators that as well. Again, it's not up to me, but this story is well constructed and interesting, and you've been updating it quickly, which I appreciate very much. I know how much those little symbols mean to me (and you're right, I never know, either, when they're going to pop up but I love it when they do!), so I hope they will consider this one for that honor. Thanks for sharing this story with us.:)
Kimberly
Author's Response: Sorry for the delay in response, RL is a bit crazy right now...
I'm really, really pleased to hear that you're enjoying it. I tried to breathe a little more life into the teenage-parent!Justin cliche, and I'm glad that it's working for you. I also have a strng dislike of AUs where Brian and Justin just fall in love overnight, because one of my favorite things about thier relationship is the clash. Ooo, how I love the clash.
Re blue ribbons (I actually got a note from an admin about this, a few posts down), what I meant by arbitrary was that there's no formal, or even explained, way of how they are awarded. It just seems to be based on whatever the admins like. Which they totaly reserve the right to do, it's their site, but... you know... an FAQ question explaining that wouldn't go amiss. You should mention that, since you seem to have cred with them or something. *g*
Reviewer: Kemma (Signed) · Date: August 04, 2011 10:40 AM · On: weightless
Once again, great chapter! I love to hate Michael (though I can appreciate it when he's written as an ally of Justin's from time to time) and I really, really don't like him in this story! I can't believe how he keeps insinuating that his mother's house is HIS house -- he's cwazy! After this chapter, I have no idea how you're going to play out Brian and Michael's relationship -- before I read this, I was rooting for Justin to get those two back together, but now I'm not so sure. Hmmm.... I know other reviewers have said Justin's really immature, but I think he's probably the most mature out of all of them -- he's just got a lot to deal with, plus he still is, technically, just a kid. I can't imagine having a kid at his age or having to deal with half of the things he has to deal with, all while he's still a teenager! And, btw, I adore Luke -- you've done a great job of writing about him and characterizing him as Justin's son. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! Michael isn't completely evil--he's got a good heart, he just usually lets his vindictiveness overshadow it. I won't say what happens in later chapters, but... Michael tends to come through when people are in need.
Justin is certainly dealing with a lot. He's very mature for his age, perhaps a bit more so than he was in canon, but he also has a lot to learn. You can only be so mature before you really need experience to carry you the rest of the way. This whole story is about the growth of that maturity, and the maturing of his relationships.
I love that you love Luke! Babies are so often ridiculously boring and I tried hard to give Luke a personality. After all, anyone who's every babysat knows that all babies have personalities!
Reviewer: Reader (Anonymous) · Date: August 04, 2011 07:19 AM · On: weightless
Every new chapter takes a new turn....really entertaining.
Hopes that this fic. get nominated for a blue ribbon. Excellent writing with an incredible story unraveling itself.
Author's Response:
Thank you! As far as I can tell, blue ribbons seem to be handed out a bit arbitrarily, but I certainly wouldn't say no to one!
I can assure you that featured status is not arbitrarily given. It's based on writing talent, reader response, entertainment value, grammar, spelling, and emotional impact. Usually it also requires that a story be completed.-ADMIN
Reviewer: sophie's mom (Anonymous) · Date: August 03, 2011 09:30 PM · On: weightless
thank you for helping justin and luke out with cal's will. that will help alot. did justin even realize that he has the house to live in?
what a whiny child michael is. petty and jealous.
vic is heavenly.
brian's getting better, you can see the beginning of his protective side coming out.
chris is trouble.
Author's Response: You're welcome! Though things certainly haven't settled yet--Justin still has to find a guardian for Luke's inheritance. I don't think he'll keep the house, though. Even if it's been paid off, he'd still have to pay taxes on it, which can be very hefty, especially if Cal lives in the same kind of neighborhood that Justin's family did. Plus, you know, utilities and stuff.
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
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