Midnight Whispers
QAF Brian and Justin Fanfiction
Reviews For DECEPTION
Reviewer: Curious George (Anonymous) · Date: March 22, 2011 10:29 PM · On: Chapter 1

What a treat to find this completed!  Yay, Elsa Rose!

I always disliked The Munchers -- their characters (in the show) never rang true, or necessary, to me, so I always expect the worst of them.  Which you certainly delivered!



Author's Response:

I never really took to them either - as you can tell - even though I know Thea Gill - I hated her character - thanks for stopping by

Reviewer: galenut (Anonymous) · Date: March 22, 2011 05:55 AM · On: Chapter 7

i just finished reading this story.i didn't think i would like it .but once i started i couldn't stop, thanks so much for writing it.



Author's Response:

Thank you for taking the time to review - I appreciate it.

Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2011 11:54 PM · On: Chapter 7

Excellent conclusion to quite a story. You were too kind to Lindsay IMO but I guess supervised visitation is ok.

Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2011 11:13 PM · On: Chapter 7

Blame me for the ribbon everybody :) Well done Elsa finishing this one.



Author's Response:

thanks bunches Mr. B - you are as usual my BFF - love you

Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2011 07:52 PM · On: Chapter 7

Oh that was a wonderful story but OMG suddenly being parents of three children were throw most people lol but the boys have nested and made a safe refuge for their family xo Chris



Author's Response:

so glad you liked it.

Reviewer: Bigdogz09 (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2011 01:25 PM · On: Chapter 7

I really enjoyed this fic.  It feels weird to say that since the subject matter was very serious, but I guess it's the idea that I like of the boys with babies and achieving their life's goals.  

 I enjoy your work so much.  You're such a creative and articulate writer, pure joy to read.

Thanks for sharing this.

All the best.



Author's Response:

thank you - you make blush

Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: February 26, 2011 08:34 AM · On: Chapter 6

Hey ER,

Another fantastic, brillant, wonderful story as expected from someone as talented as you are.

Thanks for sharing with us.

Can't wait for updates. Soon, pretty please with cherry on the top (nearly on my knees begging)

I am abit late in doing catch up as life have been hectic.

Thanks again & take care. xxxx



Author's Response:

Yes I must get me act together and finish this - I'll try to finish this weekend. Thanks for the nudge.

Reviewer: Bigdogz09 (Anonymous) · Date: January 03, 2011 04:28 AM · On: Chapter 6

So happy when I saw your update...yeah, I'm a little behind the wave myself.  Anyway, I love the Taylor Kinney family, and that the B/J have these three kids - despite what how they got them. 

Great imagination on how this all came about, and well written.  Your writing really draws in the reader.  Well done!  Looking forward to your next update.

Happy New Year!



Author's Response:

thank you so much for you lovely review

Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: December 30, 2010 04:22 PM · On: Chapter 6

Excuse my delay reading this great chapter. I could choke Lindsay for trying to flush the infant and Brian was right to take it home too. Did a doctor really try to leave a baby with a homicidal mother? That is too freaky.

I love the farm house. Justin has the best ideas. With all the new stories with babies on the website maybe this is a 2011 tradition starting up. It sure is a popular plot line for our readers.

Wonderful chapter Elsa; Happy New Year Mom, and I hope the next one is much better for you and all of us.

I'm traveling New Years; all over the house! Hehehehe :)



Author's Response:

Great hearing from you Bob - I'm doing the same for New Years - 2011 will rock - it just has to. I'll Skype you Friday.

Hugs

me

Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: December 29, 2010 07:41 AM · On: Chapter 6

This chapter is kind of strange.  I would describe this chapter as


one of huge contradiction.


 


First we have Melanie and Michael – being Michael and Melanie.


Personally I would like to tell where to go.


 


Then we see Lindsey who is a really a very sick woman. She tried to


murder Danny; I never expected that.  What a terrible way for a baby


to start his life on earth.


 


Then we have these beautiful words by Brian spoken to Danny:


                “Hey Danny boy. Welcome to the world.


                 It’s been a bitch so far, but your other daddy


                 is waiting for you and he’s filled with enough  


                 love to keep us all going for the rest of our lives.”


Wonderful words!


 


Then we have a scene that we rarely see; Brian stretched out on the


couch, reading.  Added to that we see late at night Justin giving


Danny a bottle, but more than that, giving Danny the affection and


feeling of protection that a baby so needs.


 


 


Amazing chapter.  Michael, Melanie, and Lindsey (even though she


                                                                                  can’t help it)


                                         VS.


                               Justin and Brian.


 


Thanks for the chapter, maybe just a little calmness before the storm? 


I’m ready!


 


DavidR



Author's Response:

thanks for the great review DavidR - I'm reaady for some peace and quiet as well.

Reviewer: sophie's mom (Anonymous) · Date: December 28, 2010 10:38 AM · On: Chapter 6

wonderful chapter.

i'm sure that brian is going to be giving cynthia a fantastic bonus. it's so well deserved.

once the babies begin crawling i really think they should look into either a nanny or an housekeeper.



Author's Response:

thanks for reading

Reviewer: Cheryl (Anonymous) · Date: December 28, 2010 10:20 AM · On: Chapter 6

Excellent chapter.  Kudos to Cynthia.  Her loyalty is unshakeable.  Can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

thanks for reading - we'll see about Cynthia

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 28, 2010 08:33 AM · On: Chapter 6

Wow!!! What a fantastic chapter.  Lindsay has a lot of nerve, first she tries to kill the baby then she whines that Brian doesn't come see her.  Yay for Cynthia!!!  If anyone can protect the Taylor Kinney family, it's her.  I see trouble brewing when the gang find out that Danny is not with Lindsay.  I can't wait to find out how Christmas goes at the farm house.

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Author's Response:

thanks for reading - yes it should be interesting

Reviewer: DavidR (Signed) · Date: December 24, 2010 12:53 PM · On: Chapter 5

This story has some very strange characters.  It was so weird that


the dinner at Debbie’s was attended by both Michael and Melanie,


and that the dinner was like any other at Debbie’s.  Gus actually sat


next to Melanie.   What?  Now that was weird.  Then Brian and


Justin take Jenny home. Nutty is the only thing that comes to mind.


 


Melanie’s words about “Bitch Karma”, that Brian won’t be spending as much time in the backrooms now that he is raising Gus and Jenny ticked me off.  What Brian is doing in the privacy of his home is holding in his arms a precious little baby girl.  Poor Michael and Melanie haven’t got a clue.


 


Lindsey?  I have enough to think about.  Could things get any more


complicated?  I guess we will find out soon enough.Could be!


 


Thanks for the story.


DavidR


 



Author's Response:

I agree the story is stranger than what I usually write - it was a request from a friend - but even stranger is the basic plot is right out of real life - during the early 70's - my mother was a nurse and the basic premis of what happened to the babies - actually happened - sad I know - I like to think that 'bitch karma' bit both mothers in the ass since then. Thanks for the comments - ERB

Reviewer: Anno53 (Anonymous) · Date: December 24, 2010 02:36 AM · On: Chapter 5

I just found your story, and I absolutely love it! But ... but ... you left us at a cliff hanger! This story is so plausible, because you have all of the characters "right on".  Thank you for sharing your update :)



Author's Response:

you are welcome - it will continue

Reviewer: inabluefunk (Signed) · Date: December 22, 2010 04:22 AM · On: Chapter 5

What? What? What? What? Noooooo! You did not have to end this chapter here, now did you?

Dear Elsa, I have to tell you you know how to keep the suspence and exitement going.

However I have to tell you that all that understanding that Vic and Deb showed to Mel and furthermore the tollerance from all the gang toward Mel during Sunday dinner, well, it does not bode well with me. I dont do neglect and rejection of ones own child AT ALL, and I find it very strange that you addressed this situation as you have, and I have to wonder where you are going with this...I feel something will come to rock their world.

As for Lindsay, well I will have to wait for the update like everyone else to see what you have her do!

BTW, I enjoy your story very much. TTFN Marla

Reviewer: Rainbow12004 (Anonymous) · Date: December 21, 2010 12:29 PM · On: Chapter 5

i love it



Author's Response:

thank you

Reviewer: sophie's mom (Anonymous) · Date: December 21, 2010 11:35 AM · On: Chapter 5

good update.



Author's Response:

thank you

Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: December 21, 2010 10:46 AM · On: Chapter 5

What a pleasant surprise to find a new chapter to this story Elsa Rose. I'm very curious to see how this goes next. I'll lend you the hamster if you need him.



Author's Response:

hmmmmmm - okay - the next chapter is slice of reality - something that happened to a patient my mother had many years ago - (that was a foreboding hint)

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: December 21, 2010 09:53 AM · On: Chapter 5

Oh no, has something happened to Lindsay or the baby?  I had to go back to chapter 4 to refresh my memory...no hardship that.  Is Justin's new space in the same building as the loft?  I knew Justin would do great by Jenny Rebecca, but Brian seems to have fallen under the little one's spell.  He's a much better father to JR than Michael could ever hope to be.  And don't get me started about Debbie.  Grrrrr.  I love how Vic defends Brian.  In fact I love this chapter and all previous ones and happily look forward to where you take this in the next chapters.



Author's Response:

thank you - I'm following the direction of the plot bunny - glad you are enjoying it

Reviewer: PrairieCityGirl (Anonymous) · Date: December 17, 2010 11:02 AM · On: Chapter 4

It's nice to see you've been posting here, after your break!  I really enjoyed "Broken Angel", and I hope you intend to continue this one.

My only comment.....seems that these days, most women use the 1 year maternity leave and then go back to work.  You inferred that Justin would take more than a year off... at least that's how I interpretted it...I'm curious why.  (Then again, as I'm still at home and my kid is in grade 8, I'm not against people taking more than 1 year to stay at home to raise their kids!)

Hope to see you updating soon!  And good luck with your published projects!



Author's Response:

thanks for stopping by - I am almost finished with the next chapter - and will post soon - I know most maternity leave is a year - but think each family has different needs - I barely took 3 weeks off with each child - my daughter took off 8 years - it's all different. Thanks for the good wishes.

Reviewer: marietta (Signed) · Date: November 13, 2010 03:19 AM · On: Chapter 4

Great story as usual from you, I love when Brian is portrayed as a good father, and Justin is a good teacher. Together they can do anything even taking care of 3 children. They can only expect help from Emm and Vic, the rest of them are just some selfish bunch of people. But most I was disappointed in Deb, always telling how good mom she is, and in the end both Michael and Deb refused to take care of their next of kin. Update soon., please.



Author's Response:

will do my best to update soon - thanks

Reviewer: Bigdogz09 (Anonymous) · Date: November 11, 2010 09:01 AM · On: Chapter 4

Great story.  Love B/J being the stable ones...though actually, they were from time to time in the series.  Mel outside with another woman...figures...

Looking forward to the update.

Reviewer: rose (Anonymous) · Date: November 11, 2010 03:31 AM · On: Chapter 4

great as every story written by you. thanks for sharing :-)) rose

Reviewer: Ispazz (Signed) · Date: November 11, 2010 03:08 AM · On: Chapter 4

I’m so happy that Gus is thriving in the new environment!


I’m with Brian “F*ck Them”


I’m so happy that Justin staying home with the kids knowing he isn’t giving up anything thing but he’ll only be gaining the most precious moments of his children life and he’ll still be able to create his art until he goes back to school. Its not uncommon for young people to put their life on hold for their children and return to school when their kids are older. I know for a fact I did so much better going back in my mid twenty than before I had children.


I hope Michael realize what he gave up and regrets it, happy someone but Debbie in her place!


Can’t wait for the next update!

Reviewer: Ispazz (Signed) · Date: November 11, 2010 02:50 AM · On: Chapter 3

I’m stinkin mad! Those women don’t need anymore children not noticing Gus was outside in the middle of the night alone, not feeding him! But Gus was so cute and smart thinking to grab his blankly and knowing his daddies would rescue him. My heart melted!


Lindsay is seriously ill and Mel’s a beotch! Michael is a whiney man child! I have a feeling all these children are going to be Brian and Justin’s! Bring on domestication for are boys! Loved the wife comment still laughing ! I loved how Justin told Brian how it was going to be. Their great partners and I have a feeling even better parents! Life going to throw them some curve balls.

Reviewer: Ispazz (Signed) · Date: November 11, 2010 02:23 AM · On: Chapter 2

I’m very pleased to see the boys both so in character! I love the comparison between Brian and Justin childhood. I enjoy Vic so much I’m so happy Brian can be open with him.


 


Justin is being so involved with Lindsay. Gus is so sad and confused as a mommy my heart bleed for the little boy. I hoping he gets to be where he feels safe and loved soon without all those crazy girl emotions.

Reviewer: Ispazz (Signed) · Date: November 11, 2010 02:06 AM · On: Chapter 1

Okay I laughed at Debbie comment about keeping reigns. Neither Brian nor Justin can keep the other under control their both independent strong willed men and they allow each their freedom for mistakes, growth and partnership.

Even if it’s being supporting Lindsay who has always been able to will Brian to do whatever she wants. I’m glad Justin being supportive of Brian and allowing his partner to vent his frustration out on him and letting it roll of his back.

I’m loving Brian in this! words are just words in his actions shows he loves Justin. I fully believe in this quote “Love is more than three words mumbled before bedtime. Love is sustained by action, a pattern of devotion in the things we do for each other every day."”

 

Reviewer: jm c (Signed) · Date: November 11, 2010 01:38 AM · On: Chapter 4

I love this story Mel give her baby girl Jenny to brian and justin wow now brian and justin are getting linds kid too double wow . this is the best story i can not wait to read the nect chapter

wonderful job writting this story

Reviewer: BluvsJ (Anonymous) · Date: November 10, 2010 09:20 PM · On: Chapter 4

OMG..... has everyone gone nuts!!!!! Mel hates Brian and yet she left him her baby...Mikey is the father and can't handle the baby...Debbie can't take care of the baby..but..she can come to the house and try to take over...until Justin set her straight.... Linds is in terrible shape and can't even take care of herself.... and poor Brian and Justin are taking care of everyone's kids.... things are so screwed up.... and the worst part is that as soon as Jenny gets a little older...either Mel will come back or Mikey will decide he wants to raise his kid!!!!... I think I will wait till this fic is complete to finish reading...because everyone is starting to get on my nerves....lol.... Thanks...   

Reviewer: Rainbow12004 (Anonymous) · Date: November 10, 2010 12:20 PM · On: Chapter 4

i love it

Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: November 10, 2010 11:10 AM · On: Chapter 4

Oh dear; you really set up our boys this time. How this works out will be most interesting. I don't know what seeing Mel will do at this point. It was a stretch to have Mel dump JR on Brian like that legally but what the heck; this is fiction! I almost see them bonding with the kids and later the girls want them back or some such ka ka. Could be tasty, and mean. I wonder where you're headed with this plot line.

Will Mel return?

Will Michael be a father some day?

Will Lindsay stay twisted forever?

Will Justin have a kid too?

Will Emmett dump his love child on Brian and Justin?

LOL!

Reviewer: sophie's mom (Anonymous) · Date: November 10, 2010 11:06 AM · On: Chapter 4

i like their little family, hope mel stays away. although, she no longer has any rights. if i were brian i'd make sure she never sees her.

justin handled debbie very well.

Reviewer: Bigdogz09 (Anonymous) · Date: November 10, 2010 09:50 AM · On: Chapter 3

I love how the boys are working together to give Gus a new life.  Mel and Linds...I won't go there, I never liked their characters.  I blame the writers of the show and the bad actresses, too.

Looking forward to your update.



Author's Response:

thanks

Reviewer: mysid (Anonymous) · Date: November 09, 2010 08:37 PM · On: Chapter 3

I LOVED this chapter.  Justin declaring, "...this blond is soooooo not the wife," is a refreshing change from many "Brian and Justin raise a kid" fics in which Justin morphs into June Cleaver.  Instead, you keep him perfectly in character, bratty and self-confident.  But the best part is that despite his declaration, he makes it perfectly clear, in words and deeds, that he is prepared to do whatever is necessary to help Brian care for Gus and the new baby.  He may not be a "wife", but he will be a wonderful parent.

I suspect that Michael and Deb's annoyance with Brian will vanish as soon as he gets full custody of his own baby--which now seems a near certainty.  (And he might even get to name her too!)



Author's Response:

so glad you got that - I don't want Justin to just fall into place like so many fics - but in real life shit happens and when it does families/partners/spouses deal with it gracefully

Reviewer: Marny (Signed) · Date: November 09, 2010 05:51 PM · On: Chapter 3

Glad to see an update, love this story.
Love Justin to take action in advance, he so loves Gus.

* hugs *



Author's Response:

thank you

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: November 09, 2010 08:16 AM · On: Chapter 3

It's nice to see how well Justin is handling this.  Gus is adorable but Melanie is a Bitch!  Lindsay's not going to be able to handle one kid much less three.  This could get very interesting if Brian and Justin end up with all three, after all how much help could Michael be?



Author's Response:

I can't see Michael being any help at all - just saying

Reviewer: BluvsJ (Anonymous) · Date: November 09, 2010 05:53 AM · On: Chapter 3

WTF...is going on at Mel and Linds house???   Mel can't get out of bed...Linds is going off the deep end... and poor Gus is sitting on the porch in the middle of the night!!!.... too bad Dr. Phil doesn't make house calls...lol...  the only thing that worries me is that if something doesn't change very soon... Brian and Justin are going to be raising... 3 kids.... I can't wait to see how this turns out... Thanks....



Author's Response:

life does throw curves as the boys will find out

Reviewer: Rainbow12004 (Anonymous) · Date: November 09, 2010 03:41 AM · On: Chapter 3

I love it



Author's Response:

thank you

Reviewer: jm c (Signed) · Date: November 09, 2010 01:41 AM · On: Chapter 3

I love this story i can not wait to read the next chapter

wonderful job



Author's Response:

sorry for the delay on this one - I'll try to be faster with the next

Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: November 09, 2010 12:48 AM · On: Chapter 3

Sounds like they may end up with two kids before this is over with. Lindsay's a mess, Gus is better with our boys, they have the room now, and Mel can't be depended on for shit.



Author's Response:

Bob - you just never know what life is going to bring - ps thanks for the banner

Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: November 09, 2010 12:32 AM · On: Chapter 2

Very interesting developments here. I love this plot line and where it's going. I don't have my main computer so my answers are short until it returns.



Author's Response:

thanks Bob

Reviewer: sophie's mom (Anonymous) · Date: November 09, 2010 12:25 AM · On: Chapter 3

seems to me that they've all come to the right decisions.

Reviewer: Robstatic73 (Signed) · Date: November 04, 2010 04:50 AM · On: Chapter 2

What an interesting concept. Great so far! 



Author's Response:

thanks bunches

Reviewer: justbeyourself (Signed) · Date: November 03, 2010 09:39 AM · On: Chapter 2

Great! What an utterly different storyline. 



Author's Response:

THANK YOU

Reviewer: BluvsJ (Anonymous) · Date: November 01, 2010 05:15 PM · On: Chapter 2

I am so glad that Uncle Vic and Emmett are standing by them...they are true friends..as for Lindsay..not only did she ask Brian to lie for her...but...she expects him to stand by and hold her hand 24/7...what a selfish BITCH...the only person I feel sorry for is the innocent baby she is having...Thanks... 



Author's Response:

so true

Reviewer: Bigdogz09 (Signed) · Date: November 01, 2010 10:03 AM · On: Chapter 2

Very interesting story, all kinds of suspense and intrigue.  Can't wait to see this play out.  Looking forward to the next chapter.



Author's Response:

thanks

Reviewer: Cheryl (Anonymous) · Date: November 01, 2010 09:53 AM · On: Chapter 2

It's good to see you've included Vic and Emmett in Brian and Justin's circle of supporters.  I have a feeling they'll really need them in the near future.  Great chapter!



Author's Response:

thanks

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: November 01, 2010 07:18 AM · On: Chapter 2

I know I've said this before but it bears(bares?) repeating.  I love your dialogs Knowing that Emmett and Vic are siding with Brian is GREAT!!!   Looking forward to the next chapter



Author's Response:

thank you bunches

Reviewer: Rainbow12004 (Anonymous) · Date: November 01, 2010 06:31 AM · On: Chapter 2

i love it



Author's Response:

thank you

Reviewer: sophie's mom (Anonymous) · Date: November 01, 2010 06:23 AM · On: Chapter 2

buying the lofts, great idea.

oh lindsay coward that you are, oh what a tangled web you weave.



Author's Response:

no kidding

Reviewer: sophie's mom (Anonymous) · Date: November 01, 2010 06:11 AM · On: Chapter 1

let me see if i understand this right.

lindsay got pregnant by sam, but being the coward she is she is letting everyone think the baby is brian's and what that she's carrying it for him and justin to raise?

seems to me that it doesn't involve debbie at all and maybe for once she should mind her own business. i don't see lindsay's pregnancy as something that should take mel and michael's happiness away. it truly doesn't involve michael at all.



Author's Response:

yes, but we all know that Debbie thinks everything is about Michael - and Lindsay isn't planning on letting Brian and Justin raise the baby - she's given Brian parental rights, but that's it. Much like Michael has parental rights for Mel's child

Reviewer: jm c (Signed) · Date: November 01, 2010 05:45 AM · On: Chapter 2

this is a great story i can not wait to read the next chapter



Author's Response:

thank you

Reviewer: Rainbow12004 (Anonymous) · Date: November 01, 2010 01:13 AM · On: Chapter 1

i love it



Author's Response:

Thank you

Reviewer: Cheryl (Anonymous) · Date: November 01, 2010 01:06 AM · On: Chapter 1

WOW!  You're off to a great start with my plot "bunny", just as I thought you would.  I like the backstory you included of Brian's past.  Can't wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

thanks Cheryl

Reviewer: BluvsJ (Anonymous) · Date: October 31, 2010 11:06 PM · On: Chapter 1

OMG... for an intelligent woman..Lindsay sure is a fucking moron.... her "deception" will last for about nine months... because once the baby is born..looking like Sam and probably smoking a cigar... lol...everyone will know it's not Brian's and in the meanwhile.... Mel, Debbie and everyone else will hate Brian for something he didn't do... with friends like her.... Brian doesn't need any enemies....



Author's Response:

thanks for leaving this review - it will be an interesting ride that is for sure

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 31, 2010 09:12 AM · On: Chapter 1

Oh, I can see right now this is going to be good.  I've always like the way you do dialog, it sounds so right.  So Brian is going to let everyone think Linds kid is his....interesting concept.  Can't wait to find out the answer to Justin's question.  Are Deb's last remark a threat or a promise?  I'll stay tune for the next chapter to find out.

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Author's Response:

Thank you 

Reviewer: Shadowcat (Signed) · Date: October 31, 2010 08:54 AM · On: Chapter 1

How strange is this. I was wondering, only about two days ago, if you were going to post something new soon, and here this is.

Interesting, can't wait to see how this one's gonna come back to bite Lindsay in the ass.

Looking forward to the next installment ; )



Author's Response:

I just finished Broken Angel - and found this plot bunny in my mail - LOL

Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: October 31, 2010 08:24 AM · On: Chapter 1

What a twisted web the munchers weaved and our boys are stuck in the middle of it. This is an outstanding plot idea full of possible intrigue and of course....Deception!



Author's Response:

can you believe I'm starting another B/J fic - wow

Reviewer: jm c (Signed) · Date: October 31, 2010 05:42 AM · On: Chapter 1

I like this story i can not wait to read the next chapter



Author's Response:

thanks

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