Midnight Whispers
QAF Brian and Justin Fanfiction
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Reviewer: BluvsJ (Anonymous) · Date: October 11, 2009 11:03 PM · On: Chapter 10

You think destroying Brian BODY and SOUL is a way to show how strong he is and how much you admire him ????? what total BS... How about leaving him and some of your readers with a little DIGNITY and RESPECT..... This is my final thought on this matter..... 



Author's Response:

As you wish.  Apparently, I can grant YOU respect, while you have trouble doing the same. At the risk of being redundant (!) to each his own.

CYN

Reviewer: BluvsJ (Anonymous) · Date: October 11, 2009 09:26 PM · On: Chapter 10

OMG.... if you wanted Brian dead.. why didn't you have him crash into the truck???  why torture him to the point that even if he does live... he will be totally destroyed both mentally and physically??? Do you hate Brian and all the characters so much.. that the only one that you made the least bit likeable is Emmett??? I realize you have the right to write whatever you want....but.... I don't have to read it......  I am sure there are others that feel the same.....



Author's Response:

Hmmm, is there an echo in here?  :)  To reiterate, you are certainly free to stop reading whenever you like, and to dislike it as iintensely as you like.  To each his own, and if others feel the same, they are just as free to express their displeasure and disdain by simply not reading.  However, just to be clear, to admire someone is to have some inkling of how strong they are, and I apparently believe in Brian a hell of a lot more than some of you do.  But that's just my estimation, and you are free to disagree.

Thanks for the input.

CYN

Reviewer: Kitty_Ballou (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 04:15 PM · On: Chapter 10

You're sooooooooooo mean... *cries* Such a chapter + such a bad cliffhanger... And poor Brian! *sobs*

So hurry up!! NOW! You can't leave us here with so many tears and sorrows - go on writing! PLEAAAAAAAASE!!!



Author's Response:

Sorry.  I truly didn't intend to write such a cliffhanger; it just turned out that way.  But I am working on the next chapter and hope to have it up in a few days.  And thanks for your encouragement.

CYN

Reviewer: scrub13 (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 12:02 PM · On: Chapter 10

You aspire to hit the readers emotions on a violent and disturbing level. At that you succeed in spades. In creating interstesting characters and a compelling storyline you fail dramatically. The last chapter more than hit the mark in imagery and the remainer of Matthew was there, It was masterful and sickening. And if the story had direction, it would work. Being dark or violent isn't a bad thing. In fact most of my favorite fics have a sinister edge to them. But after 10 long, brutal chapters I'm at a loss as to what I'm supposed to feel for anyone other than Brian. His is the only plot that has advanced at all and it's tough to read, much less enjoy. Plus the abuse he took was more than most humans could withstand. He'll be traumatized for years to come at best.

My problem with this story has nothing to do with the violence, but rather with the lack of honest emotion between the characters. So now we have Brian physically and psychologically damaged, Justin emotionally crippled and basically looking for any guy who'll put up with him mooning after Brian while supporting his art and expensive needs, and the rest of the gang following the same old tired script of Brian-bad, Justin -good. Well except for Daphne, the wise all knowing friend who sees through the BS.

Only Emmett has stepped outside his normal comfort zone and stood out as interesting. His intereactions with Brian have been similar to Ted's in season 5. Emmett was my favorite character in the show so seeing him highlighted is very cool. 

Do I want to know who did this to Brian and why? Yep, I want to see them caught. punished, and suffer at the hands of Brian himself. I want to see Brian rise from this and be strong again. But...do I care a whit about a single character whose butts are currently sitting in NY? Not one single iota.

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for such a cogent and thought-provoking comment. I welcome all input, positive and negative, as it helps me determine whether or not I'm hitting the mark I set for myself.  Obviously, that;s not happening with you, as you are unable to become emotionally invested in my story.  I would say that I hope you will change your mind, but I think it's unlikely as I've always found that, for me, I either get caught up early in a writer's vision, or I don't get caught up at all. But thanks for giving it a chance and for taking the time to voice your opinion.

CYN

Reviewer: Gina Marie (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 10:53 AM · On: Chapter 10

LOL You must have read my stories.  I am obessed with original characters!  And I thank you for your compliment on my writing. Coming from a writer such as yourself is indeed the highest of compliments. But enough of the mutual adoration, get writing girl!  lol I'm dying to see what comes next!



Author's Response:

Actually, I have, indeed, read some of your work.  Am still in the process of reading Before There Was You . . .  To my shame, I didn't take the time to comment, and I'm still stealing moments to read a chapter here and a chapter there.  You have a lovely style and a rich imagination, and I apologize for not stepping up to say so.  I promise I'll try to do better in the future.

Thanks again.

CYN

 

Reviewer: meme (Anonymous) · Date: October 11, 2009 09:40 AM · On: Chapter 10

Brain is not a God---have anyone ever seem God? He not (fictional)perfect he can get

hurt and at time have hurt  let’s face it both brain and Justin have hurt each other so

deeply  that nether can love anyone but each other so much with that said………..

I’m for one am glad that brain got his ass kick (of course not the way that it happen) no one should go through that but if you watch real TV and look around it happening every day There’s good and bad love and hate fighting all around us no matter who you are the question is when will it stop never.

 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for commenting.  I think you have a unique point of view, and I appreciate your input.  I don't know if we can ever expect this kind of violence to ride off into the sunset, but I do believe that exploring it, and exposing the reasons behind it, are the best ways to make people question and react and try to make sure it doesn't happen again.

CYN

Reviewer: Gina Marie (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 09:27 AM · On: Chapter 10

Oh, and on another note...I think the best thing Justin could do for Brian now, is find him a good plastic surgeon.  :-)



Author's Response:

Thanks you so much for your lovely comment, and for speaking up for my right to write it as I see it.

I have to tell you that you expressed my own beliefs perfectly.  The right to write my own story is very much in line, in my mind, with the right of people like those we write about to live their lives as they see fit.  And I also have to say that it's wonderful to have a gifted writer like you speak up on my behalf.  Not that any negative comments would stop me from writing; never has and never will.  But still it's good to find a defender among one's cohorts.  And I am the first to admit that this story (and my style) is definitely not everyone's cup of tea, so they are perfectly within their rights not to read and to speak up to offer their opinions.  It's all cool.  But I'm with you that no one should have the right to tell ANY writer what they can or cannot write.

Again, thanks so much - and, by way of a little clue - funny you should mention a good plastic surgeon.  I just love original characters - don't you? :)

CYN

Reviewer: Gina Marie (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 09:24 AM · On: Chapter 10

Ok, everyone just breathe......  First, and formost, CYN, PLEASE do not stop posting this story! It's a work of art.  Dark yes, but masterfully crafted.  To the anonymous poster who said don't post this story here? Fuck em. THAT pissed me off big time!  For someone who supposedly is for the protection of gay and civil rights they seem to have no problem in wanting to take your rights to express yourself away!  Total bullshit.   Not to mention hypocritical of them.

Having said that, I totally understand people's strong reactions to this chapter. That should make you feel good!  Good writing/story telling should evoke strong emotions!  Be it love, hate, fear, disgust, etc.  This chapter was extremely disturbing and people reacted.  Why? Because they actually 'feel' Brian's pain and are angry at those people who did that to him.  Of course they blame you, because you did this to him, but that's the price of art, is it not?   

As for the violence, has anyone here read Agony of the Codemned? By Draccone?  Very edgy and dark. I believe Justin kills Brian in that one, but becuase they are both vampires, it's accepted. It's 'make believe'.  The violence in this story isn't as bad as in that story, but more powerful because it's more realistic. It could happen, and as you pointed out, has happened.  But people should also realize this is just as 'make believe' as A vampire story.  

This doesn't have to be political, we shouldn't make it about that. It's about a story.  A sad, deeply dark story that some people don't like.  Often times I will read the end of a book (ashamed to say) before I buy it becaues I can't abide sad endings.  That's my choice. You labled this well.  The problem is no one, (in my memory anyway) has ever posted something like this before on this site.  So people are shocked.  Others put warnings like violence, etc., but your story (and you're writing in particular) is so descriptive that the violence seems almost too real. And that is what people are reacting to. I think now that everyone knows what to expect from you, those who do not like your style of writing may move on, and others, like myself, will anxiously wait until you post again.

 

Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: October 11, 2009 06:11 AM · On: Chapter 10

holding you to that 'soon as possible' update.

this was really great...and they've got a endeta against justin too!

thi was a real great chapter

feroza



Author's Response:

Thank you, Friend.  It's lovely to have the story read and accepted for what it is - an exploration of the world as experienced by those with the courage to be who they are and refuse to apologize for it.

And yes, I do plan to update ASAP.

Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: October 11, 2009 06:11 AM · On: Chapter 10

holding you to that 'soon as possible' update.

this was really great...and they've got a endeta against justin too!

thi was a real great chapter

feroza

Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: October 11, 2009 05:18 AM · On: Chapter 10

You say you love these boys ?? you're joking right??! you quite cleary don't love or respect them at all or the people who enjoy this fandom.  I enjoy long, detailed stories, and I certainly don't mind a bit of angst - in fact it is an essential factor in any good story, so i've been prepared to stick with this one even though it doesn't appear to be getting anywhere - but this chapter was just so completely unnecessary. You should seriously consider not bothering to post anything more in this fandom . . . i'm sorry, but it's just not what we want to read here.



Author's Response:

Ahhh, ya gotta love anonymous posters who take upon themselves the right to speak for everyone.

Thanks for your input. 

Reviewer: scrub13 (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 04:53 AM · On: Chapter 9

I agree with some of the others that the relationship between Brian and Justin is very disfunctional and not healthy for either. Brian seems to get it that Justin often uses Brian as a fall back when other relationships don't work out. His parents, his dad, Ethan, LA, other men, etc.... Justin came back to Brian, but not by choosing him rather by default.

"He's never coming, you know," he whispered. "And I'm tired of watching the door, watching the clock, watching . . . time slipping away from me."

He's using Brian not being there as an excuse to go with the other guy...nothing about loving this guy or truly wanting this life. It's convienient, so that's the way Justin goes. This Justin is years away from knowing himself and being brave enough to be in an equal relationship. He's not a lost soul, he's just sad and passionless.

"Letting go" stories are tough, but you've really nailed the angst of love lost. Brian has a core group of friends who will stick with him and the danger aspect is a bonus.

Reviewer: Gina Marie (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 04:20 AM · On: Chapter 9

We'll it certainly is growing darker, AND more complex!  So someone is after Brian...very ominous, and dark!  Of course the suspense is killing me!

Love the conversation between Emmett and Brian. Very revealing, mostly on Brian's part.  For Emmett, (like Brian said) Yeah, we figured for all the reason's Brian mentioned, but to hear Brian say that Justin only comes back to him when his wings are broken, well that was harsh.  Harsh because it's the truth when you think about it.  He's right. Justin keeps leaving him only to come back when things don't go well for him.   And as for Justin,  I'm thinking on some level he knows this. That's why he told his new boyfriend that he can't go back to Brian this time until he's the man Brian thinks he should be, other wise Brian would think Justin was returning once again, because he failed. Seem's those two know each other better then anyone realizes.  Hopefully, they will find a way to communicate and be together.  No reason why Justin can't fly with Brian by his side.

Again please let me say how much I'm enjoying this story!  You truly have a gift for bringing these characters and their emotions to life.  The convoluted situation with B/J, the mystery surrounding Brian.  (Who has it out for him?)  And the complex relationships surrounding everyone in this story!

Great job, and thank you for the weekly updates!

Reviewer: meme (Anonymous) · Date: October 05, 2009 04:15 AM · On: Chapter 9

I like darker the more the better,  Good Justin and Brain should be apart they really do have a sick relationship  they very much love each other but, I will comment once I read the next chapter………..

Reviewer: templeton_ma (Anonymous) · Date: October 03, 2009 11:32 PM · On: Chapter 8

I have been silently reading this story over time since there have been many fics that deal with Brian letting Justin go to spread his wings and I was wondering if this will be just "one of them". The 2 paintings in previous chapter really started drawing my attention because of the pain they reflected and I feared that Justin was really giving up on Brian. But Chapter 8 is so powerful that I had to leave you a comment (Sorry for now leaving one earlier). I think you hit the bull's eye to capture B & J. Justin's relevation to Steven and Daph's explanation to Jen were the most beautiful descriptions of Brian's true beauty I have ever read. I do hope you will have a happy ending for BJ. Brian really deserves to have his Sunshine with his full grown strong pair of wings soaring back into Brian's arms.

Reviewer: Anno53 (Anonymous) · Date: October 03, 2009 08:19 AM · On: Chapter 8

This was a wonderful update. I'm very satisfied to read that Justin is agonizing just as much as Brian is. I'm glad Justin was clear with Steven.

Reviewer: feroza (Anonymous) · Date: October 01, 2009 05:22 PM · On: Chapter 8

I am just leaving a review to say I love this story and the angsty bits that you write so well. I hope you update soon!

Reviewer: black sheep (Anonymous) · Date: September 29, 2009 09:21 AM · On: Chapter 1

I am in love with your story!! i dont want to hurry perfection but please write more!! i dont know how you do it but each chapter is just like the perfect balance of everything. You aare a really gifted writer

Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: September 23, 2009 08:40 AM · On: Chapter 4

excellent story-  why haven't I ever noticed this before/  Just my type- angst filled iwth hope. 

 

sfscarlet

Reviewer: scrub13 (Signed) · Date: September 20, 2009 09:28 AM · On: Chapter 7

At the risk of being overbearing, I would like to make one more comment. Feel free to tell I'm out of line. I completely agree with you that life isn't simple or quick and I love stories that reflect that. Angst and turmoil is why we still read these stories and others. Half of my saved stories make me cry, I'm a sucker for romances with obstacles the size of the Alps.

But I do think you have changed Brian and Justin in a fundamental way that has caused confusion. It's as if you flipped them completely. Brian is engaged with his friends and showing emotion. He was terrified for Em and the friends are rallying with him.  Justin is closed off and doing what everyone expects him to do. He's in a relationship because it seems to be what's expected of him. He's not happy, but is afraid to rock the boat and risk his heart.

 



Author's Response:

Oh, I don't disagree that there have been some changes, although I don't see them as fundamental.  I mean, think back to moments within the series, where there were threats against the members of the group.  Brian always reacted to protect those he cared about, although he was the first to deny his motives.  In this case, for example, he will be quick to point out that he's just protecting his interest in the business of Babylon.  The difference, I hope, is that some of the friends may begin, finally, to understand the man behind the image - which he will not initially like because it's what he's fought against for so long. And some of those friends, I promise you, will prove to be just as shitty and just as judgemental as they've always been.  And Justin was always vulnerable to being manipulated, mostly because of his youth.  At this point in the story, they are both adapting to changes in their lives which neither of them really wanted.  Brian has always sacrificed himself for those he loves, no matter what he claims, and Justin has always been quick to doubt that he could be what Brian ultimately needed.  They have both been pushed and shoved and maneuvered into taking steps that neither really wanted to take.

There will be plenty of obstacles to maneuver around in finding their way back.  That's the fun of it, for me.  But I fully understand that my vision may not reflect everyone else's, and I do not blame anyone for seeing things differently and choosing not to read along. 

In point of fact, part of the reason I felt compelled to write this story was to go back and explore some areas that I always felt needed more illumination.  Part of this narrative will deal with some of those things, from a perpective that I don't think has been utilized before.

And again, thanks for being interested enough to speak up.

CYN

 

Reviewer: scrub13 (Signed) · Date: September 20, 2009 07:33 AM · On: Chapter 7

Once again you weave the words to form strong visions in the readers mind. From Emmett's injuries to Drew getting "physical" with Brian to Jennifer's introspection to Justin being there only physically in the closing sentence you give me clear images of characters in flux.

Kinda like a movie preview where flashing scenes and  images are strong and you want to know more, but can't feel any emotional connection. The feel of this is like Bogart or Bacall movie where everyone realizes what true happiness is long after it's out of their reach and they are settling for survival. 

The standout moment in the chapter goes to Drew with his 300lb linebacker remark.

 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your interest and your kind words.  And I'm glad you liked Drew's comments.

The emotional connections are still in the elementary stages here, and will become clearer as we go along.  I don't believe in leaping into resolutions too easily.  Life takes time, and so do my stories, but I hope you'll continue to enjoy.

CYN

Reviewer: scrub13 (Signed) · Date: September 07, 2009 05:00 AM · On: Chapter 6

I love your writing style and the almost lyrical way it flows, but I felt very depressed after reading this chapter. Justin seemed so very weak in character and wishy-washy almost like the woman who can't live without being in a relationship, while still in love with the last "Mr. Right". Justin doesn't love Steven, he doesn't even seem to like or respect his, but he does treat him like crap,

To me the strength of Brian and Justin was always their strength independent of each other.  And hurting Emmett? Hmmmmmmm.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your comments and your opinions.  This is a period of transition, up until this point, a time in which our heroes are trying to find their way through virgin (excuse the expression) territory.  They're in a period of "becoming" - learning to deal and to cope, and it's still a bit new to them, a bit uncertain. They still must learn how to exist each within their own spheres - with or without each other. I hope the journey and the process will seem believable as time goes on. But they will, I hope, ultimately be true to themselves, refusing to bend before the trials of life.

Thanks again for speaking up.

CYN

Reviewer: meme (Anonymous) · Date: September 06, 2009 09:24 PM · On: Chapter 6

You hurt Emmett  how could you, that’s  a sure way to get Justin back to the Putt.You know how much Justin love Emmett.  I was getting to think this story was another only about Brian and not Brian and Justin thing. It getting better now.



Author's Response:

Glad you're interested, and thanks for the encouragement.  Although I do adore Brian and Justin, I think that there are many rich, vivid characters in this saga that deserve some time and space of their own.  I plan to introduce some original characters of my own, to add to the flavor so to speak, and continue to fill in the blanks for all of them.

Thanks for your interest.

CYN

Reviewer: Suse (Anonymous) · Date: September 06, 2009 09:01 PM · On: Chapter 6

Wow, you certainly know how to keep us coming back. Quite the cliffhanger!



Author's Response:

Sorry about that.  I don't usually do cliffhangers, but this one just seemed natural.  I promise not to leave you hanging for long.

CYN

Reviewer: Gina Marie (Signed) · Date: September 01, 2009 07:21 AM · On: Chapter 5

Each time I read an update, I'm left speechless.  You bring your characters to life in a big way. I can feel, see and smell them.  I'm rivited by your descriptions.  This story intrigues me like non other!  It's a credit to your writing and story telling skills.  I look forward to seeing where you take this. I know I'm going to enjoy the ride!

One question though, Brian tells Brandon "it's been months". I thought it would have been longer than that since Justin and he have already gone their separate ways. (and Brandon happened some time before Brian proposed to Justin)  How long as Justin been in NY?

Reviewer: fay (Anonymous) · Date: August 31, 2009 02:25 PM · On: Chapter 4

I like your writing very much, so beautiful and sad.

Please continue update.

Reviewer: Annjeela (Signed) · Date: August 29, 2009 07:51 PM · On: Chapter 4

Okay - I love your writing style, but your storyline - aaahhh!  How on earth are you going to get B/J together given the plot so far.  I am assuming you are planning to have them meet - I could be wrong.

Reviewer: Annjeela (Signed) · Date: August 29, 2009 07:50 PM · On: Chapter 3

Nice scene.  I could see it playing out just like that.

I do enjoy reading your writing.

Reviewer: Annjeela (Signed) · Date: August 29, 2009 07:49 PM · On: Chapter 2

I like the realizations slowly hitting folks.

Once again, beautifully written.  I like the writing style of everyone except Brian's thoughts while staying focussed on him.

 

 

Reviewer: black sheep (Anonymous) · Date: August 29, 2009 10:36 AM · On: Chapter 4

wow. i cant get over how exquistely written this is. i mean you really have something amazing going on here! so excited to see where this goes. please write more!!

Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: August 29, 2009 03:09 AM · On: Chapter 1

I have to do my chapters line by line. I write in Roman Times font at 11 pt. size and post an entire chapter at once by copy and paste. Then I go back and remove the extra space between paragraphs the webiste causes. It takes a couple of minutes but it is by far easier than say Live Journal is for posting your work. I only post on this site and the readers are very nice (mostly!). I wish you success with your stories.

Reviewer: BluvsJ (Anonymous) · Date: August 28, 2009 08:20 PM · On: Chapter 1

Great start....  I hope Brian comes to his senses...before it's too late.... I can't wait to read more about Brian's "Inner Sanctum".. update soon... 

Reviewer: Annjeela (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2009 03:56 PM · On: Chapter 1

You have a very nice, lyrical style of writing.  I am looking forward to continuing to read.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for both your comment and your encouragement.

Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2009 10:06 AM · On: Chapter 1

Welcome to MW. If I may suggest you go and edit your chapter and remove the added spaces the website causes. It makes for a better read.



Author's Response:

Thanks for both the welcome and the tip.  As a novice here, the manner of posting is strange to me.  Is there a way of eliminating the extra spacing without doing so line by line?

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