Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2015 01:09 PM · On: Birthday
The book, he gave him the book AHHHH
Reviewer: veglogic (Anonymous) · Date: January 17, 2010 09:16 AM · On: Birthday
After an unforseen hiatus from the internet I was so thrilled to come back to three new chapters of this story. I love that Brian and Justin are exploring their relationship within a D/s dynamic. It helped me to better frame and understand all their past actions especially in regards to Justin's immense satisfaction in caring for Brian. I can't wait for more!!!
Author's Response: I am so glad that you are here to give some feedback about the Justin side of things, because I don't think I consider it enough on my own. I'm trying to explore the idea that one reason that Justin had been dissatisfied with their relationship was because of Brian's refusal to let him be close, and to care for him. That Justin needed that, (maybe he thought of marriage / monogamy as synonymous to this?) and Brian couldn't / wouldn't give it to him. Now they are both considerably more satisfied in the relationship.
Thanks so much for your support of the story!
Reviewer: MissMoe (Anonymous) · Date: January 12, 2010 03:28 PM · On: Birthday
It's really really early in the morning(3am) and usually I put off reviewing but I wanted to make sure I got a review out for this chapter. I loved it. I usually do, but I think it's because your writing can be so intense. When you describe Brian's struggles it's so vivid. Both the good and the bad are written so fluidly.
What I loved most about this chapter was everything, haha. I can't really pinpoint anything, not even Brian being Beautiful. Everything flowed so well and one part could not be without another. It was all so wonderfully written. Why choose what I love most? I loved it all and can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Thank you so much......that's just so sweet and so wonderful to hear. I am humbled to have such kind and thoughtful reviewers!! :) I'll have another chapter up Saturday at the latest. :)
Reviewer: BluvsJ (Anonymous) · Date: January 10, 2010 11:03 PM · On: Birthday
Lovely.... Beautiful and Sunshine are Amazing.... you could roast marshmallows off the screen it was so.. HOT.. lol..giving him the book at that point was a fantastic idea .... it showed Brian in black and white...what Justin has been saying all along... how "Beautiful".. he really is...
Author's Response: *grins* I like your description with the marshmallows... makes me think I need to do a scene with the two of them in front of that fireplace in Britin roasting marshmallows... hmmm..... *evil grin*
The book was huge for Brian -- to see that, although he had denied so much of his kindness to himself, people still saw it. And people love him. Knowing that will make it so much easier for him to begin making adjustments to his "public self" and integrate more of Beautiful into his interactions outside of the loft.
Thanks so much as always for your thoughts!!
Reviewer: Kitty_Ballou (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2010 07:05 PM · On: Birthday
*sniffs*
*cries*
Oh.
My.
God.
This is sooooo amazing. So sweet. So - so gorgeous! It makes me cry and smile at the same moment. And I am so happy for Brian. Now he's got it black on white that he is loved!
*cries again*
Thank you, thank you so much, Tiffany, that you do this to him. For him.
*hugs*
Author's Response: Awww! Thank you so, so much......I love this response -- exactly what I was aiming for!
So glad you enjoyed the chapter!
**hugs**
Reviewer: Minoloushe (Anonymous) · Date: January 10, 2010 06:34 PM · On: Birthday
The first thing that needs to be said is omg you write good sex!!
I thought this chapter worked really well, it’s like we’re seeing the complete Beautiful (or the integration of Brian/Beautiful) for the first time. Not only did it feel like Justin presenting the birthday book was celebrating the “birth” of Beautiful, but the aspects of the birthday book that you focused on were wonderful. They take us back to the very first chapter and the breakfast scene between Gus and Brian in the diner (which is the start of Brian’s journey and the question “why not with me”) and to the third chapter, with the “Believe” painting (which is the start of Brian and Justin’s journey together). It’s interesting that if you go back to the third chapter the word “beauty” is used a lot and at the end Brian refers to Justin several times as “Sunshine” (not that I’m saying you knew where the story was necessarily going to end up at that stage, but I think it does create a lovely sense of continuity) and how Brian describes the painting as “purely beautiful”.
I guess that’s the feeling I get from this chapter and how I see Brian in it – as “purely Beautiful”. All the possibilities and potential and love which Justin put into “Believe” and saw in Brian at the beginning made real. Also, sometimes it’s the smallest details which resonate the most. I loved the sequence where Justin goes to put the blindfold on and Brian shuts his eyes without hesitating or having to be asked. There’s just something terribly moving and tender in that image and it says a lot about Brian and Justin together. In fact it’s very fitting that this chapter focuses so much on the physical intimacy between them, because I can’t think of a better way for Justin to demonstrate his tenderness and love for Beautiful or for Beautiful to accept that love and trust in it…
*I sound all mushy!! I’m never, ever mushy – I blame you for this!!* *big smile*
Author's Response: Ah ha! Now I have completed my mission -- to make Minoloushe mushy! Well, I guess this was the final chapter then!! (LOL!!!!)
I think it's interesting to consider whether this is the full integration of Beautiful. I don't think it is; it's the full inhabitation of Beautiful. It's the first time that Beautiful has been entirely and fully expressed, I think. Perhaps that does necessarily mean that an integration of sorts has taken place... I guess I was thinking mostly that integration would require some degree of "publicness" for Beautiful.
Once I started referencing the early chapters I did have this fleeting, rather panicked thought -- "Is this the last chapter of the story!?!" -- because it seemed suddenly so "full circle". Don't worry; it's not the end. But it definitely had that sort of "completion" to some of the early issues. I'm glad that it added to the chapter for readers, as well.
Okay -- for all the talk I've done to you about being amazed at how so much can be read into the story (for the better!!!), I now have to confess. I did basically know right around the time of the "Believe" chapter -- maybe just a few days / chapters later -- that Beautiful would be his sub name. This one really has been a long time coming! :) There is only one other tiny, tiny little theme that goes back almost as far (and which hasn't shown up at all in over 10 chapters I think)... one more to "finish", in a sense. And I will, in a few chapters.
*sighs contentedly* I loved the moment where Beautiful sees the blindfold and closes his eyes, too. I am so happy that this little moment caught your eye, too. :) (you as the Eternal Reader!). :)
Oh, and thanks for your compliment on the sex scenes. They're oddly easy to write, though I think other people are exponentially better at it than I am. :)
Reviewer: Buffytess (Anonymous) · Date: January 10, 2010 04:58 PM · On: Birthday
OOhhh this was a great chapter and so beautiful i can hardly wait to read more.
Many hugs Buffytess
Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! I am not quite sure when the next chapter will be done. The latest possible date will be this coming Saturday. Hopefully sooner.
Thanks so much for the review!! :) :) :)
hugs! Tiffany
Reviewer: Marny (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2010 02:51 PM · On: Birthday
Wowww this was more than beautiful, I'm speechless too.
Hmm too bad we can't rate more than 10, it's definitely more to the worth of a 12. (hmm is that good english!? sorry)
* hugs *
Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much. That is so sweet... I'm so very happy that you liked the chapter so much! (And stop worrying about your English! For the last time!!!!! :) ).
*hugs back!!*
Reviewer: camm (Anonymous) · Date: January 10, 2010 01:43 PM · On: Birthday
That was beautiful!!!!
Author's Response: Awww, thank you!!!!!!
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: January 10, 2010 01:09 PM · On: Birthday
thanks so much! really enjoyed this chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! :)
Reviewer: HalfTime1030 (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2010 11:48 AM · On: Birthday
**a little speechless**
You and me both! This was simply breathtaking on so many levels I really am quite at a loss for words adequate enough to express my love for this chapter and this story.
I also agree with seeing Sunshine's role as a Dom as being supporting & nurturing rather than simply controlling. It's not so much about Sunshine being in charge as much as it is creating a safe environment physically & emotionally where Brian can let go of the tight control he has (or tries to maintain at least) in all aspects of his life and allow himself to become Beautiful.
You really should make a fanmix of all your "inspiration" songs for this story when you're done :D
Sometimes a boring weekend is good after a stressful/long week... :)
Author's Response: Awwww, thank you so much! I am really, really... thrilled isn't the right word, but I'm just so happy that you enjoyed the chapter (and the story) so much. It's a wonderful feeling to know that others like the story so much.
Actually, I am trying to create a playlist of songs, but I'm mad at myself because I didn't choose songs for I think the first...seven chapters or so. I'm thinking of going back and adding some, but I don't know if it's worth it, because who would even read back to notice? The biggest inspiration for this entire story though was the song Darkness, Darkness, song by Robert Plant (who happens to be one of my top 2 favorite singers, with Nat King Cole).
Thanks again for your reviews and kind words! I think what came out of this weekend were two very intense (though very different) chapters for this and Leaving on a Jet Plane (for which I do have a playlist, incidentally! :) )! :)
Reviewer: sjmpets3 (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2010 09:32 AM · On: Birthday
the tenderness justin showed him was amazing. it isn't always commands and roughness. he wants more than anything for brian to FEEL the love he has for him not just know it. at least that's what i got out of it.
the birthday book should reinforce to him how everyone sees him. what he means to them. that yes he is loved by more than just justin and gus.
Author's Response: That's exactly what I was trying to portray, so I'm delighted that's what came through -- Justin wanted to reinforce the tenderness that he would treat Beautiful with so that Brian would know how much he loves him.
And the birthday book is reinforcing his identity as Beautiful in the wider world, which is still going to be a struggle for him to accept, but this will be a big support of that. :)
Thanks so much for your thoughts!!
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2010 08:46 AM · On: Birthday
lovely chapter- I think all of us want to let our partners take over at times- Brian is always so in control and to give that control to Justin takes a lot of understanding how both their parts.
Author's Response: Thanks so much... I definitely think Justin has an amazing grasp on both of their feelings and concerns, and this is something that suits them both well... So glad you liked it! :) :)
Reviewer: edom (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2010 08:41 AM · On: Birthday
Wow, just...wow.
The sex was fucking hot, and I might have to steal some of it, or at least let myself get inspired by it for 'Moon and Master' I hope that is ok :)
I love how Brian fell right into his role as soon as he accepted it, how he gave Justin the power so easily, that was beautiful.
I'm glad Justin gave him the book, I think he needed it then, needed to know that there are people who love him.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter of this.
Author's Response: Thanks so much!!
Feel free to steal away! I'm just glad the scene worked out (6 pages of one sex scene gets to be sort of a risk...if it doesn't work, then the whole chapter is going down with it, I think!)
Yeah, I think the moment they got inside from Dr. Stevenson's, Beautiful really wanted to be "out" so to speak. Once in the chair, that was very easy and natural. Giving him the book now also seemed the most natural thing to do, and somewhat metaphorical of another sort of birthday.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter of Moon and Master, so I guess we're even. :) Thanks again for the review!
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