Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: October 04, 2019 09:52 PM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
Like it so far
Reviewer: Naughty_teaspoon (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2019 08:59 PM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
Brian father was always such a bastard -_-
Reviewer: SunshineSally (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2015 01:47 AM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
Poor baby :(
Reviewer: Galesgal (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2013 01:08 AM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
I am totally loving this story. I am reading it on my kindle at work. I cant wait for the jane pain you have sucked me in.
Reviewer: gotb30 (Signed) · Date: January 04, 2010 12:54 PM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
Oh Brian... His father was such an ass. This chapter wasn't easy to read, but it sounded authentic. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response: "Authentic" is about the best an author can hope for, so thanks so much!!! :)
Reviewer: JTSecrets (Signed) · Date: October 24, 2009 05:18 PM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
If I may suggest some things. You might want to go back and edit your chapters taking out the extra line spaces this new software causes on this website. I have to do it to my chapters to make the reading easier for my readers. I notice you space sentences and don't make paragraphs. This breaks the flow of the story. Grammar dictates a break for different ideas, scene changes or new quotes from a character.
To my knowledge all domestic flights to New York land at JFK.
Love the story.
Author's Response: I think you're right that most come into JFK; however, I know a few do come into LaGuardia. I used it because I've been there multiple times and had an easier time imagining it (though in retrospect I don't know what the hell I needed to imagine an airport for!). :)
Reviewer: Kat (Signed) · Date: August 24, 2009 02:42 PM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
Poor Brian having night terrors. Jack is such a bastard!! I hope he talks to Justin about what happened.
Author's Response: I know -- my heart really goes out to Brian in that one. Poor guy -- to go through all that in public!
Thanks for reading!!
Reviewer: Kitty_Ballou (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 08:29 PM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
Wow... It's really hard to breathe while reading this chapter. Poor Brian! It's much harder for him, to be caught in this terrible memories. And I am glad that he got the card of the doc. But I am not sure if he'll call him when he needs help...
Author's Response: I love that you're wrapped up in the scene that way and thinking about it! I love that; those are the best reviews!
You'll have to see what Brian will do -- asking for help certainly isn't his strength.
Thank you SO MUCH for reviewing!!!!!!!!!! **happy, happy smile!**
Reviewer: edom (Signed) · Date: August 02, 2009 05:06 PM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
Poor Brian. A night terror in public.
Author's Response: Yeah, it's probably best that he didn't hear any more about it and doesn't recall much...!!
Thanks for the comment! :)
Reviewer: Irishlass76 (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 03:15 AM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
This is a very good story. It has the potential to go on for many chapters, Depending on how far you want to go with it. I for one would really like to see this go into many chapters. So please don't end it at 4.
Can't wiat for next update.
Colleen
Author's Response: Colleen,
Thanks so much for the comments! It means a lot to me that you think it has the strength to go on for a while. I will be posting chapter three really soon (had to help a friend move today and it took like 8 hours longer than I anticipated), then four maybe a day after. We'll see then if you still think I shouldn't end at 4! I think if I don't end at 4, it wlil be quite a long one, getting into Brian's past fairly intensively.
Thanks for the encouragement! I'll post Chapter 3 as soon as possible, I promise. :)
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Anonymous) · Date: July 31, 2009 06:36 PM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
Vastly different chapter but intriguing I am eager to read chapter 3
Author's Response: Thanks for commenting -- I'm glad you're intrigued!
Chapter 3 is again quite different from the other two. I'm hoping it'll still be realistic and in character. I'll probably have it posted late today; I hope you'll like it. :)
Reviewer: Diana (Anonymous) · Date: July 31, 2009 04:07 PM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
WOW,
the story is very emotional. For me at least. Even I shed a few tears during reading the first chapter.
Please go on with it. I think it's amazing.
And i really love the way Brian speaks with his son and explains everything.
It's like every father should handle their child. ;o)))
Author's Response: Hi,
I'm so glad you're enjoying the story. That's the impact I was going for and the one I had writing it. I couldn't keep myself from making Brian the father I'd fall in love with watching in the restaurant. :)
I'll be curious to see what you think of the third chapter, which I'll probably post later today. I'm worried about Brian being in character for that one, but I'm hoping it's just this side of him I tried to develop with Gus.
Thanks very much for reviewing; it means a lot to me that you like the story and to know that the story's doing what I hoped it might. :)
Reviewer: sjmpets3 (Signed) · Date: July 31, 2009 12:51 PM · On: Diners Past, Passengers Present
i liked this chapter. even with brian's nightmare, which was very powerful and tramatic, i liked it. i hope to see more of the psychologist. maybe he's flying to ny from pittsburgh to see someone too and then going back. it would be good for brian.
Author's Response: I'm glad that you're thinking about the psychologist. I hope you'll let me know after chapter 4 whether you still hope Brian will be going in this story. :)
Thanks very much for the comments! :)
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