Midnight Whispers
QAF Brian and Justin Fanfiction
Reviews For Forever Yours
Reviewer: Waiting on a wish (Signed) · Date: March 07, 2021 08:29 PM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

I love the story, it has a fast enough pace to keep exciting but is emotional enough to be engaging.

the dialogues seems a little abrupt at times, I would recommend writing tone of voice like; she/he said= tearfully, expecting, worried, startled... things like that. It would make the flow a little better when it comes to the dialogue part.

otherwise; I'm really impressed.

keep up the good work and I am definitely looking forward to reading more of this story tomorrow (and the day after... and the day after. I really love myself a good long read)



Author's Response:

Thank you for the detailed review and excellent advice. I would have responded sooner; however, I've been busy with both websites and technical issues. This story only got reposted on Most Recent as a test story and to prove a feature was working after corrections were made. I hope you continue to enjoy it.

bob

Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: November 14, 2019 09:59 AM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

Love it, love it



Author's Response:

And I love you for telling me that!

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: August 10, 2019 01:43 AM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

So much happening.  Mikey thinking Justin will help him get out of jail.  Marvel buying the Rage franchise.  Hunter getting ownership of the Comic shop.  Mel and JR moving back to Pitts.  



Author's Response:

Yes, moving the plot forward very quickly here.

b

Reviewer: debbie (Anonymous) · Date: June 15, 2014 03:40 PM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

Bob,

I love all your stories.

I hope you are planning to write more.

Thanks!

Debbie



Author's Response:

Thank you for commenting. Due to RL matters I have no plans to write again at this time.

Reviewer: galenut (Anonymous) · Date: August 22, 2012 10:35 PM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

I am really enjoying this story.

Reviewer: taire (Anonymous) · Date: August 15, 2012 04:27 AM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

I'm late to the party for this story, but I love it.



Author's Response:

Hello there, and welcome to the party. It's truly wonderful to see a review comment pop up on one of the older tales - it lets me know people are still reading it. Enjoy and thank you.

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: March 23, 2012 08:47 PM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

I marvel at how much you put into one chapter.  Justin is making money by the million.  Mikey is getting his comeupance and Lindsay - well lets just say I'm not sure I believe what she says.  Love the comic book angle.

Reviewer: FallBackTrick (Signed) · Date: June 26, 2011 12:48 PM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

Mmmmiiiilllliiiiiooonaaaaaaiiiirrrrreeeee!



Author's Response:

Please forgive my delay answering you. RL has been a challenge lately, blah-blah-blah. Glad you are having fun reading and enjoying the story enough to comment.

Reviewer: balrogtweety (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2010 02:13 PM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

Way to go Justin!!!

Reviewer: cakdg (Signed) · Date: August 20, 2009 11:04 AM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

More twists...Craig no less! Loved Craig's reaction to both J's cards (credit and business).  Just wait till he sees Britin.

Loved the moment with Gus and Deb.  I don't use bad language too often, but darned if I don't get caught with a little one around when I do! Lol

I liked the story of Michael's assets and their final outcome, very fair to everyone.  Although I noticed that at no time did Michael ask how Justin was, what a schmuck. 

Wow! Marvel Comics and Justin's a millionaire.  Love it!  If only Michael had thought of being a better human being he would be free and have had half a million bucks too.  Life sucks sometimes!  Am I a malicious person to enjoy everyone (except Ted) refusing to accept his calls? Hehehe...

Loved it!  On to the next....



Author's Response:

WARNING:This story as been known to cause loss of sleep for its readers.

You have only seen the tip of the iceberg of this story. It's quite the roller coaster if I say so myself. Ted always had a soft spot for Michael and even a secret crush on him. But Ted's not stupid and won't waste a dime on a lost cause. Enjoy the story.

Thanks so much for reviewing; you make my day and motivate me to write by commenting.

Reviewer: Lori (Anonymous) · Date: August 12, 2009 05:35 AM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

Love It, Love It lol



Author's Response:

Thanks Lori; I really appreciate the chapter review and comment. Thank you!

Reviewer: Ihintza (Anonymous) · Date: August 11, 2009 10:06 PM · On: Chapter 6: Marvel

Hello, my dear... I'm finally at home, phew ! Well, I still need to be careful, rest a little but it's my second c-section, so I've some practice and then, I'm in high spirits. I've too a great family. They have arranged everything (meal, housework, shopping...). And with a daddy physical therapist and a mom nurse, I've a good team around me...Now, baby Maïalen (Oh, she's so cute) takes a nap with her daddy. Txabi, my elder, is gone with his idol, Gehexan. (you bet ! My bro has a motorcycle and he teaches him how to surf, he has A LOT OF friends...). Pfff, ungrateful son ! Fortunelly, I've my daughter now !!! ;) So, the weather is wonderfull, I'm in the shade, near the pool, ready to savour this beautiful story...and comment (a little bird told me you're greedy for reviews !)

Well, this chapter is remarkable. I'm delighted to see Michael has lost everything. No compassion for him or Lindsay. They are vile persons.

I hope I'm going to catch up my delay quickly

Thanks a lot for these good moments... and for your support

Kisses

Ihintza

 



Author's Response:

It's wonderful to have you home now Ihintza with baby Malalen to comfort you. Your young son is spreading his wings. No surprise there. I love reviews and live for them each chapter. Even a word or two is cool and still counts for the number of reviews the story receives. They motivate and inspire me to write. Enjoy the story and I'll be writing more soon.

Kisses Back!

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