Reviewer: coleamber (Signed) · Date: June 19, 2019 11:11 PM · On: To Do the Unthinkable
gppd one
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: May 21, 2019 07:39 AM · On: To Do the Unthinkable
Wow that was amazing. My heart was beating a mile a minute with each word. I can’t wait to see what happens next. I think Shara was really cruel separating the kids like that.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2019 04:32 PM · On: To Do the Unthinkable
The trouble Jack caused and the effects on Brian is something.
Author's Response: in a away jack didn't cause trouble because he wanted to be with Shara
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2019 02:22 PM · On: To Do the Unthinkable
Very interesting. So Brian's real mother was unable to see or talk with him. And he has another sister. Nice.
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2019 01:46 PM · On: To Do the Unthinkable
Hi, LaToya - finally got caught up on your story so far. This is very intriguing! I like this plot! I did not see that one about the two twins coming, especially with them having different skin tones. I've never read a plot quite like this one. What a traumatic experience for both Joan and Shara. I will be so interested to read about Brian's reaction to everything once he finds out, and how Justin will be supporting him, as I'm sure he will be.
Thanks for writing this for the story title prompt! I'm really enjoying it. :) ~Kim
Reviewer: PA Boi (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2019 09:57 PM · On: To Do the Unthinkable
Happy to see an update. Enjoying your story and looking for some of the loose ends to be tied up. Thanks, Bill
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2019 07:19 PM · On: To Do the Unthinkable
Wow great chapter. Didn't expect that plot. Terrific writing.
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2019 11:27 AM · On: The Secrets One keep
Wow what a brilliant chapter. My hear is breaking for Brian no matter what he lost his mother even thought they didn’t get along. He found out this huge secret and his sisters lies. Claire needs to help with his and give that box back to him and explain everything she knows. I hope things get better. I can’t wait to find out more
Reviewer: Proud Acadian (Signed) · Date: February 14, 2019 10:22 PM · On: The Secrets One keep
Quick question: Why is Gemma calling Brian by his first name? "I did daddy, where’s Brian?” she asked as she looked around for her other father."
Author's Response: It will be explained in the next chapter. I'm basing her on this little girl that i know. She has two daddies but when she's with one she uses daddy when she's with the one that she's with and for the strangest reason and not because they taught her she'll refer to the other one by his name if they are both together. You know like if they are both in the room together its not like daddy and daddy or daddy and papa it's daddy and which ever the other one name at that time i think it's weird but it's like a cute quirk it's like she knows their both are her daddy but she also knows they have names. It will all be explained in the next chapter coming soon.
Reviewer: Proud Acadian (Signed) · Date: February 14, 2019 10:08 PM · On: The Secrets One keep
Quick question: Why is Gemma calling Brian by his first name? "I did daddy, where’s Brian?” she asked as she looked around for her other father."
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: February 13, 2019 08:57 AM · On: The Secrets One keep
Wow two babies !!! Please more.
Author's Response: Yes like what's up with the two babies.
Reviewer: mandagrammy (Signed) · Date: February 13, 2019 04:12 AM · On: The Secrets One keep
Hmmm, two babies in the picture? The plot thickens. It will be interesting to find out what that clue is all about. Hugs, Grammy
Author's Response: love that you were the first to say something about there being two babies in the picture. That's a big clue, like two babies why does she have only one?
Reviewer: sfscarlet (Signed) · Date: February 13, 2019 03:01 AM · On: The Secrets One keep
Very intriguing. I can't wait to read more.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2019 10:17 PM · On: The Secrets One keep
I think Claire needs to fess up to Brian about what she knows. He's going to find out the whole story, and he also knows that Claire knows more than what she is saying.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2019 09:01 PM · On: The Secrets One keep
I think Claire should tell Brian then she wouldn't have any secrets and be free.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2019 08:17 PM · On: The Secrets One keep
Great chapter. Happy that, even though the circumstances aren't the best, Joan is not Brian's mother. Can't wait to see where you go with this story. It is terrific writing.
Reviewer: chadmom63 (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2019 09:50 PM · On: WTF
Intriguing!
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2019 12:51 PM · On: WTF
Yes, I do have a lot of questions at this point and am following along with Brian to see if he can find out the answers.
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2019 11:24 AM · On: WTF
Wow poor Brian must be so confused I know I would be. I hope he finds out More. Does he have other brothers and sisters out there? Other family. Cannot wait for more.
Reviewer: vic32 (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2019 11:18 AM · On: The Call
Brilliant first chapter, no matter what Joan was it must have been a hue shock to Brian to get that call from his sister and going through that box an eye opener.
As for Justin way to go, to get that at his age is fantastic and I can’t wait to see more about their daughter and to see where the story goes.
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2019 09:31 AM · On: WTF
So Shara would be Brian / Adrian's real mother that could explain so much that Joan did. I am more and more intrigued, sure that I will follow you !!
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2019 06:02 AM · On: WTF
Hmmm, sounds like Jack and Shara had an affair which resulted in Adrian, now called Brian and Joannie is pissed. Which means that Joannie isn't his mother which makes her treatment of him make sense.
Reviewer: mandagrammy (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2019 03:33 AM · On: WTF
Yes, definitely intriguing. I'm also wondering who all the other people were that Jack was planning on taking Brian to see when he was young. Something to look forward to.
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2019 01:09 AM · On: WTF
Sticking with you to the end. I'm hooked now and want to know the rest of the story.
Author's Response: Glad to hear it. Did this chapter make sense to you, becasue for a minute i thought maybe it didn't.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2019 04:58 PM · On: The Call
HI ~ Just read your response and wanted you to know I'm more intrigued than ever, because you have no Anti Characters listed. HMMM....
Cathy
Author's Response: Oh yea about that. I guess you are looking for someone in the gang to not be a fan of all of this. No I'm going to have the drama coming from other places and for other reasons. Look for the next chapter in the next hour. Well that is if i can stop coming here and looking for new comments. LOL
Reviewer: marie-france (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2019 08:40 AM · On: The Call
Interesting start. Who is Shara ? Can't wait!!
Author's Response: Shara is a true mystery. Next chapter will have more answers.
Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: February 09, 2019 04:14 AM · On: The Call
YAY!!!! YAY!!!! YAY!!!!
DING DONG THE WITCH IS DEAD.
AND A WICKEDER, WICKEDER, WICKEDER WITCH THAT NEVER, EVER WAS.
Good riddance you old bat. You condemned your son to hell, while you committed the same and worse sins than he EVER did!!! Just see if you get to heaven or spend eternity in Purgatory.
You took someone else's son into your home and stood by while your husband beat him. Did it make you feel good that Shara's bastard child was getting the shit beat out of him? Did you think he deserved it, for being born out of wedlock? And what's this about, you think maybe you’d tell him about us sometime? Maybe not, I know you think that it’s not true, but i really do love you Joan, always have and I always will. So, old Joanie and was dabbling in the lezzie bed, too? Shara had the best of both world's. She had her 'Jackie', and yet had his wife on the side. Oh My God, poor Brian. What an awful realization. As if he didn't suffer enough at the hands of his parents growing up, he's left for all eternity with the realization he's lived a lie his whole life. Doesn't even know who he really is. If it's possible, I think all this should stay between Justin and Brian for now. Tell no one in the family, and god forbid, DO NOT tell Claire.
Plus side of all of this. Brian and Justin are married. Is Pepper, Justin and Daphne's child? How old is she?
Thank you for joining the challenge. I love the premise for this story, and am anxious to see where you take it.
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response: Wow Cathy! I love this comment, your enthusiasm is making me smile like you would not believe. The story will have a lot of flashbacks I don't know how i'm going to work them in. I think i Know but i don't know if that makes sense. I love how everyone is thinking that she's a lesbian, that's what i wanted to go across. Next chapter almost done can't wait for you to read more. They are bad guys all around, more soon.
Reviewer: TrueIllusion (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2019 09:46 PM · On: The Call
Interesting premise! Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: more today.
Reviewer: mandagrammy (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2019 06:59 PM · On: The Call
Oh Wow! I was so intrigued by your story, but when I saw the banner I truly felt excited. There are a lot of similarities with your banner and the one that was created for my new short story, The Letters, which is not quite finished yet. LOL! I thought, oh oh, wonder if we have the same plot in our heads. Happily, we appear to be on different paths, but I am loving the one you are on. Looking forward to more of your story to come. Huge hugs, Grammy
Author's Response: thanks for the comment sweetie. Hold on to ur hats this one is cray, but in a good way i hope.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2019 05:41 PM · On: The Call
What an interesting start. Now we need to learn more about Shara and what her relation to the Kinney's is.
Author's Response: things are about to get really interesting
Reviewer: Happy Gamma (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2019 04:00 PM · On: The Call
First of all, I am so sorry to hear that you have health problems and I hope that you are doing ok. As for the story, what a great beginning chapter. Cannot wait to see where you go from here. Will wait patiently for updates. All of your stories have been so good and I know that this one will also be great.
Author's Response: look for chapter 2 soon.
Reviewer: cullengirl08 (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2019 02:47 PM · On: The Call
Wow, great starts the story!! I’mlooking Forward to seeing how it continues.
Author's Response: look for more sooner than later
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2019 01:49 PM · On: The Call
Hi, LaToya! So great to see a story from you! I'm glad you've decided to participate in the Story Prompt Challenge, and you've gotten us off on an intriguing start! Let's hope that Brian finds his mother to be a much better substitute for the one he thought he had. Thanks for posting this. We've missed you. Oh, and hope you had a great birthday! ~Kim
Author's Response: Darn i was trying to be vague. Did i give off hints that she was his mother? Oh well you'll never get the rest so i'll let you have that one.
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