Reviewer: Ally (Anonymous) · Date: October 24, 2016 04:00 AM · On: Chapter 23
Please try and update ASAP. I love this story so much and I want to see what happens when everything gets explained to Debbie and Vic. I also love that Brian and Justin's relationship is starting to get heated up quicker than I thought it would be
Reviewer: Enohvee1875 (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2016 08:19 PM · On: Chapter 23
Brian might as well save himself some time and energy and give in to whatever Justin wants. Thanks for sharing such a sweet story and Please update soon.
Reviewer: feet526@comcast.net (Anonymous) · Date: June 19, 2016 05:46 PM · On: Chapter 23
PLEASE.... try to update soon; so additted to this story~~~ Thanks so muchxoxoxo
Reviewer: feet526@comcast.net (Anonymous) · Date: June 08, 2016 01:49 AM · On: Chapter 2
A real winner; a real smile~~~thanks so much. Loving this story...thanks so much~!
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2016 11:30 PM · On: Chapter 15
Is there any holding out against the unstopable twink?
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2016 05:34 PM · On: Chapter 14
Brain admitted it. Justin is not a trick!
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2016 05:29 PM · On: Chapter 13
They make eating at a restaurant sound sexy.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2016 05:26 PM · On: Chapter 12
Toppy Justin. Nobody else has that can say that.
Reviewer: feet526@comcast.net (Anonymous) · Date: June 07, 2016 12:49 AM · On: Chapter 2
Just DELICIOUS...THANKS for the return!!!
Reviewer: nickknack (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2015 12:19 PM · On: Chapter 22
Great story, got better and better as it progressed. I really hope you continue and finish this:-)
Reviewer: Tash (Anonymous) · Date: September 16, 2015 04:33 AM · On: Chapter 22
Omg you need to finish this
Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 19, 2015 11:00 AM · On: Chapter 8
And all those ears down below straining for every sound - even Mel's. Wishing she were a man.
Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 19, 2015 10:34 AM · On: Chapter 7
This could be a script from Queer as Folk. Only Justin is not quite as mature as in show.
I'm sure I'm not the only on who wishes you'd return to it.
Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 19, 2015 10:16 AM · On: Chapter 1
Brian can't say ''no'' to Justin. He always comes round to Justins way of thinking in the end.
I do understand what another reviewer meant about the earlier part of your story. Needing fleshed out a bit. But it is extremely entertaining in good way and almost heat stroke inducingly sexy.
Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: August 19, 2015 09:52 AM · On: Chapter 8
Brian went and scooped his son out of Mel's arms, receiving a dirty. Were you going to say look?
I was imagining diaper/nappy and'You change it!''
Reviewer: Blossomlegs (Signed) · Date: July 18, 2015 04:37 AM · On: Chapter 22
This is a Fantastic fic! Looking for MORE!
Thanks for sharing!
Reviewer: The Lantern keeps shining (Anonymous) · Date: June 11, 2015 11:06 AM · On: Chapter 1
What happened to this one? It's brilliant! But like so many left open ended.
Reviewer: 7wildwaysup (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2015 08:54 PM · On: Chapter 7
"Maybe I do like you, you silly twat." Now for Brian, that's saying a lot... He Soooo Loves Me...
Hugs Darling ~ Kathleen
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2015 12:33 AM · On: Chapter 11
Just how long does Brian hold out before letting Justin top?
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: January 14, 2015 10:22 PM · On: Chapter 10
How sweet. They're actually going on a date!
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: January 14, 2015 01:07 AM · On: Chapter 9
Nice to meet James and it looks like Emmett now has his own twink. Brian and Justin's banter was quite good as always.
Author's Response: I'm sorry to day, this is the only scene with James, at least so far. Who knows, we may bring him back :) Hope you're enjoying this story.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2015 11:50 PM · On: Chapter 8
Poor Brian. Always getting the blame. Justin always asking for something he shouldn't have and getting his way more times than not.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2015 10:59 PM · On: Chapter 7
Brian doesn't want to talk about feelings and you can't blame him. On the plus side he wants Justin around and Justin cooked him breakfast. Not bad at all.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2015 10:51 PM · On: Chapter 6
Poor Mr. Date. Bet he doesn't like being used. Justin wasn't being nice either and Brian mostly told the truth as he thinks it is.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2015 10:11 PM · On: Chapter 5
Even after Brian managed to get Justin over his snit, Mikey managed to bring him back down. sad.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2015 10:04 PM · On: Chapter 4
Mikey is such a suckup. Deb is too harsh on Brian. Love how Emmett caught on to the truth.
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: January 13, 2015 07:38 PM · On: Chapter 22
Mikey is particularly nasty in this one. I'm glad that Justin punched him out.
Reviewer: TheGirlNoOneKnows5 (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2015 02:48 AM · On: Chapter 22
Michael was never as evil as you are making him out to be
Author's Response: I know we are a little harsh on Michael, but it does ease up soon.
Reviewer: Tash (Anonymous) · Date: January 12, 2015 09:44 PM · On: Chapter 22
Michael is a mother fucker
Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: January 10, 2015 10:01 PM · On: Chapter 12
I've been reading your story and generally liked it so far, but I'm not sure about this particular chapter. Your Justin here isn't very nice. Brian outright said 'No' about being topped. He even went so far as to explain that he'd been hurt before - enough so that Justin would know that his reluctance to bottom wasn't because of Justin. But then Justin got all sneaky and manipulative and fucked Brian anyway. That made me very uncomfortable. 'No' should mean 'No' even if its said by a strong man like Brian Kinney who should be able to stand up for himself. I don't like feeling that either Brian or Justin would ever knowingly disregard another man's request to stop when told 'No'. It might not qualify as 'rape' per se, but nobody likes to be manipulated into doing something they don't want to do, especially where sex is involved. If anything, I would think this would make Brian even less inclined to trust your Justin. Sorry if this sounds harsh, but I really felt like I had to speak up. I just hate seeing the perpetuation of 'rape culture', especially when it uses my favorite OTP to do it. TAG
Author's Response: You know, I never thought of it like that. We had just meant it to be that Justin got him so excited that he did want it, we never thought it might come off any other way. Thank you for pointing that out, it will be something we'll watch for while writing, so that isn't mistaken in such a way again.
p.s. what does OTP mean?
Reviewer: sweetc (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2015 05:38 PM · On: Chapter 1
too shorttttttt!!!!!like it :)
Reviewer: kayitt (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2015 07:56 PM · On: Chapter 20
I dont have word to tell you how much I love this fic, every day I check midnight whispers to see if you write something, so thank you very much to do so. you make me happy =)
Author's Response: We're so glad you're enjoying this!
Reviewer: Tash (Anonymous) · Date: January 09, 2015 10:10 AM · On: Chapter 20
Fuck do you know what this story makes me feel usually I don't get hot and bothered reading but fuck me your story turns me on so much.....now that I got that out of my chest loving your story I love love Justin but he's getting on my nerves sometimes
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying this story so much.
Reviewer: Noitish (Anonymous) · Date: January 09, 2015 08:15 AM · On: Chapter 20
Oh my, Justin can be such an immature brat... Most of the time i'm screaming at him to zip it! :D I am enjoying the story though!
By the way, could someone point me to a QAF episode where Justin says "i love you" to Brian. I've seen the series many times but for some reason cannot think of a scene where he actually says the words.
Reviewer: sweetc (Signed) · Date: January 07, 2015 06:54 PM · On: Chapter 1
I quite like your story.It's true something is missing about character's thoughts but it is nice to read...so fluid.I think this is what you want to reach....so i can't actually complain!
Reviewer: Elaine (Anonymous) · Date: January 07, 2015 02:59 AM · On: Chapter 11
You probably heard this already, but Justin really missed me off in this chapter. (So obviously well written on your part. 😀) he shouldn't push. Shouldn't sulk or pout. Not try to make Brian submit out of guilt. That's not love. Not respectful.
Enjoying this fics so far. Well done.
Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying the story. Justin did push a lot in this chapter, but Shameless wanted him to and he is her character. :)
Reviewer: Dido_MagnaCarta (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2015 05:35 PM · On: Chapter 1
Might I give you a few pieces of constructive criticism for this story? First of all, it is not attractive to point out that your summary is "bad". You want people to be interested in your work, not flick past. I have to say that the summary didn't look particularly appealing, which is why I haven't yet read this until now.
Secondly, I know that you seem to favour role play style, but I cannot recommend proper prose highly enough. We all have areas that we favour, but there is no point writing if we are not willing to expand and learn new things. I am learning new writing skills even as I write this, so don't think I am acting as though I know everything. This story would benefit hugely if you worked on writing a story, instead of just jotting down scenes. It would definitely be more readable and enjoyable. You would probably be able to think about a better summary for it as well. Perhaps describe Brian's feelings- or Justin, if you want to write from his point of view. Choose just one so that it is clearer to read.
I would also suggest going through this again thoroughly whilst editing as there are numerous grammatical mistakes- and besides, you are fortunate enough to have a beta, so you have two heads working on this instead of one. Why not suggest ideas to develop the plot, add more depth to the characters and create a more vibrant setting that hooks the reader in?
The plot itself isn't bad; I prefer more excitement, but that should not stop you. Maybe for a new story, you could focus on one aspect of their lives and build up from there?
Just something to think about. Operating only within your zone of comfort could prevent you from improving your writing and broadening your horizons.
Author's Response: First of all, thank you for reading and reviewing.
As for the way the story is written, Shameless and I are actually doing it in role play, something I have never done before (my other stories are 'fleshed' out better). For the plot: when we started we were just doing random moments with the boys, no real storyline. It wasn't until the 'raw' scene that we started to make it an actual story instead of just random scenes. Thank you for the suggestion about the summery, I have been working on doing something with it, just haven't figured out what to write. The honest reason for the grammer mistakes is that at first I was lazy. This whole story is done a couple sentences at a time across email so by the time I've copy-paste it I was too lazy to grammer check. That has changed lately, however those chapters just aren't posted yet. :) I'm chapters behind with the posting.
Thank you so much
~~Le
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2015 05:12 PM · On: Chapter 18
Okay, I really don't understand Justin here. Yeah I know he’s supposed to be young and all, but this little bratticus routine is over the top...even for him. I think Brian has posed some very good questions as well as given some damn good answers to the ones being thrown his way. Hopefully Justin will start to see what Brian is actually doing for him and stop trying to push too far with every issue, so that they have the potential to move in a positive direction.
Author's Response: THere are times when I want to shake Justin myself :) However, I actually have no control over his character, which is kind of what I enjoy about this story. Justin is young and a 'princess' so he does push quite a bit.
THank you for all of your reviews and I hope you continue to read, enjoy, and review.
~Le
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: January 03, 2015 02:19 PM · On: Chapter 18
You've got me wondering what is going on with Justin, here.
Reviewer: Tash (Anonymous) · Date: December 09, 2014 01:50 AM · On: Chapter 15
Omg that was Hot
Reviewer: Lorie (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2014 11:03 PM · On: Chapter 15
Very cute about the stomach monster. About the second part, OMG. That was so fucking hot. I love when they bareback, even though I know it's not safe.
Author's Response: I'm glar you're enjoying and thank you for the reviews!
Reviewer: Lorie (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2014 10:39 PM · On: Chapter 14
Love how he told Michael that Justin is not a trick. Hot chapter, great sex.
Author's Response: Thanks
Reviewer: Lorie (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2014 10:34 PM · On: Chapter 13
Very sweet date night for the boys. Brian can be romantic, he just needs to do it his way.
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2014 04:55 AM · On: Chapter 13
Great update my friend :)
Author's Response: Thank you. Hopefully will have several more over the next couple days. Have scenes written out, just gotta get them posted. :) Glad you're liking this.
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2014 03:26 PM · On: Chapter 12
Great update my friend!
Reviewer: XPO787 (Anonymous) · Date: November 16, 2014 09:48 PM · On: Chapter 12
Sneaky Justin. Great chapter. :)
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: November 16, 2014 07:35 PM · On: Chapter 12
Very well done. Will that hicky come back to haunt them?
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: November 08, 2014 01:50 PM · On: Chapter 11
Is Brian going to tell Justin the events surrounding why he won't bottom? You wrote this really good. I could feel the emotions.
Author's Response: It'll be in a couple chapters, but they will talk about it.
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: November 07, 2014 03:54 PM · On: Chapter 11
That was very...interesting. the boys really should talk about what happened to Brian, it will help them both understand each other better.
Reviewer: Flossee (Signed) · Date: November 07, 2014 12:35 PM · On: Chapter 11
Hey Le :)
"The girl's assumptions seem to be correct; B/J are acting like a couple" you probably realize I should have written "observations" in my last review; not "assumptions". LOL
Wow, they say women whinge a lot, but I don't think I have heard anyone be as annoying as Justin is being here. I look forward to finding out what happened to Brian. Justin may be young; still he needs to have/show a little more understanding/compassion. He is my favorite character, but he is even irritating me. LOL Brian is being very patient and I especially love him making tea for Justin.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 27, 2014 04:10 PM · On: Chapter 10
I can imagine this actually happening.
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: October 27, 2014 01:59 PM · On: Chapter 10
I can't wait for their weekend together.
Reviewer: Flossee (Signed) · Date: October 27, 2014 11:22 AM · On: Chapter 10
Hey Le :)
Okay, who was babysitting who? LOL
Justin is being very manipulative as he seems to know how to push all the right buttons when it comes to Brian. The girl's assumptions seem to be correct; B/J are acting like a couple.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: Flossee (Signed) · Date: October 23, 2014 08:27 AM · On: Chapter 9
Hey Le,
I just realized I hadn't read this fic and I think it was because I misread the summary. For some reason I thought it was written like a movie script; happily I was wrong. I logged on to MW to read a couple of fic I had promised the authors I would read and give my opinion on, but once I started reading this all else was forgotten. Normally, I review every chapter, but I didn't even want to stop as I love your take on B/J's off screen lives; it's very entertaining, thank you.
Cheers :)
PS. Are you allowed to tell us the name of the other author?
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, I'm glad it caught you that much :) . I will be honest, I wasn't sure about writing like this at first, but it is so much fun, different because I can only control my character (I'm Brian).
As for my coauthor. Her username is shamless smut, but she is not on the site. She is on FanFiction.com
We're both happy you like this look at the boys.
Reviewer: nolane (Signed) · Date: October 20, 2014 09:46 AM · On: Chapter 9
i want the next chapter please ! this story is sooo cool !
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: October 19, 2014 06:26 AM · On: Chapter 9
Such an awful tease lol...please update soon ;)
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 19, 2014 05:33 AM · On: Chapter 9
I like James. It looks like Em will be chaperoning. Love the dialogue
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2014 05:37 AM · On: Chapter 8
Love how Emmett comes out in this. Mikey certainly shows his dislike of Justin while defending Brian. I was surprised that Justin prefered a blowjob over a fuck. What Brian wants, it seems, Brian gets.
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2014 12:27 AM · On: Chapter 8
Next chapter quick!
Reviewer: Lorie (Signed) · Date: October 08, 2014 12:03 AM · On: Chapter 7
Good chapter. They were both very in character.
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: October 07, 2014 08:16 PM · On: Chapter 7
Ah so little Sunshine is paying for his excess. But on the bright side, now he knows where his place is in Brian's life.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2014 01:58 AM · On: Chapter 6
Interesting. I think Mr. Date had the same thing in mind that Brian normally does. Mikey and Ted's remarks were not nice. Love how Emmett was Justin's friend in this. Well Justin got his way, he ended up going home with Brian.
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2014 12:13 AM · On: Chapter 6
I'll admit to playing catch up with this story, and I must say it's getting quite interesting. Can't wait to see what happens the after ;)
Reviewer: Bksbracelet (Anonymous) · Date: October 01, 2014 11:16 PM · On: Chapter 6
Brian so loves Justin lol
Reviewer: Tash (Anonymous) · Date: September 27, 2014 02:33 AM · On: Chapter 1
I really this story
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: September 26, 2014 04:33 AM · On: Chapter 5
Everyone seemed a little upset and blaming Brian. At least Brian was able to change Justin's mood for a little bit.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: September 22, 2014 06:59 PM · On: Chapter 3
Those two! If Justin making himself at home was really a problem, Brian shouldn't invite him over. Justin is not the only stuborn one in this non-relationship.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: September 22, 2014 06:52 PM · On: Chapter 2
I must say the sex was H O T !
Reviewer: JAZZEPOET (Signed) · Date: September 20, 2014 04:59 AM · On: Chapter 1
Very entertaining :)
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: September 19, 2014 05:54 PM · On: Chapter 1
You could see it playing out on the screen. Nicely done.
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