Midnight Whispers
QAF Brian and Justin Fanfiction
Reviewer: nickknack (Signed) · Date: December 28, 2015 08:23 PM · On: Chapter 9 Dawn of a New Day Part 2

Very inventive and highly entertaining:-)

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 19, 2012 08:55 AM · On: Chapter 9 Dawn of a New Day Part 2

Yay! Happy 'disneyesque' ending after all - only better because Brian gets to be a merman too. Great, fun story - a bit schmoopy, but what fairy tale isn't? Thanks for writing it. TAG

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 19, 2012 08:13 AM · On: Chapter 9 Dawn of a New Day Part 1

Very creative way to torture Michael. Thank you. I needed that. For a minute there I thought you were going to let him get away with it. That just wouldn't do. Go, evil Ben! TAG

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 19, 2012 04:50 AM · On: Chapter 8 The Darkness Before the Dawn

That was so sad. So what happens to Brian afterwards? Does he find the dropped dagger and plunge it into michaels heart? Or, lock Michael up in the deepest darkest dungeon wearing only a chastity belt for all eternity? There has to be some angst relief . . . Please. TAG



Author's Response:

Both excellent suggestions! Wish I'd thought of them. Hmmmmm.......

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 18, 2012 06:31 PM · On: Chapter 6 The Second Week Part1 The Fantasy

Ahhhhhh. The return of the leather fetish. If this is your idea of fluff, then I guess I'm all for it. Bring it on, he fluffier the better. TAG

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 18, 2012 03:22 AM · On: Chapter 5 The First Week Part 4 The Contest

Michael was hilariously ridiculous in this chapter.  Loved it. Worried about that blood though. . . TAG

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 17, 2012 10:43 PM · On: Chapter 5 The First Week Part 3 The Ugly Duckling

Again with the 'fanged and feral'? Who is that hooded man? I guess I'll read on and find out! TAG



Author's Response:

this was my attempt at writing mystery. It failed utterly and miserably. The ID of the hooded man will become painfully obvious in due time...

So...did you like "Gus"?

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 17, 2012 10:03 PM · On: Chapter 5 The First Week Part 2 The Surprise

Oh, oh. I hate it when things don't bode well. . . TAG

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 17, 2012 01:46 PM · On: Chapter 5 The First Week Part 1 The Second Day

Admit it - the author has a kinky leather fetish! You naughty thing, you! Very interesting . . . So this whole chapter was just for kink right? Loved it! TAG



Author's Response:

I do!

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 17, 2012 12:55 PM · On: Chapter 4 The First Day

Great chapter. That was one hell of a first day. Great dinner part scenes - Frick & Frack, the tappit brothers were wonderful. What a sweet, kind Brian you've written. And a very evil, petulant Michael. So, how does Hobbs come into this? And, wasn't the sea witch enough? Did you need a second 'fanged and feral' baddie too? Hmmmm? We'll see. TAG

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 17, 2012 12:50 PM · On: Chapter 3 Emmett's Gift

Love Emmett's gift being swishiness! It's a very powerful gift, I hear. Hope that he'll be able to use it to help Justin at the worst possible moment. TAG

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 17, 2012 12:49 PM · On: Chapter 2 The Sea Witch

Ahhhhh, the evil sea witch. Yours is much scarier than the Disney version. I just wish I'd get hooked by love . . . TAG

Reviewer: Tagsit (Anonymous) · Date: September 17, 2012 12:47 PM · On: Chapter 1The Rescue

So, I'm all caught up on my 'most recent' reading and I don't want to finish my current story - I hate writing the ends of my stories - so I'm going to start reading this old fic of yours. I love the idea of Babylon being Brian's ship. Love Justin's 'well formed fins'. Love it all, so far. Off we go. TAG



Author's Response:

did you never read this before now? wow! Well get ready for a rollar coaster girl!

Reviewer: Kim (Anonymous) · Date: July 01, 2012 10:35 PM · On: Chapter 1The Rescue

Hi, just caught up with this story at one go, and just wanted to say it's an amazing amazing retelling of one of the most poignant fairy tales of all time, all the chapters are brilliant, esp chapter 8.... man you had me bawling my eyes out with that one!!!! I seriously wouldn't have minded if u left it at that, but my inner BJ fangirl is so happy to see the happy ending you gave them :) 

   I had such an emotional but exhilirating ride ....

Thank you



Author's Response:

Thanks for the comment! I must say this was the  most fun story I worked on and my first fanfic novel.  I m constantly amazed that people cry over it, but I'm amazws and gratified when they write in and tell me. And that the readership AND reviews are still going up! Thank YOU for reading! :)

Reviewer: no sleep (Anonymous) · Date: May 17, 2012 09:05 PM · On: Chapter 9 Dawn of a New Day Part 2

I loved fairy tales all while growing up and encourage my child to read them as well. I also watched Fractured Tairy Tales, so I have a soft spot in my heart for them. I am grateful to you for writing these stories. I'm happy to read them whenever I am in the mood for a fairy tale and it is added bonus to have my two favorite characters in them. That being said, I loved this story and the imagery you presented in them. I was a little disapointed when Ben came along, but I was pleasantly surprised at his true nature. I even loved it when you originally ended with Justin's death. It was so dramatic yet beatifully done.

Thank you for writing this!

Reviewer: no sleep (Anonymous) · Date: May 11, 2012 07:09 PM · On: Chapter 7 The Third Week Part 1 Reversal of Fortune

This was one of the best chapters. Very imaginative. I loved Justin flipping them the bird. Gus as a swan guardian was ingenious. It was heartbreaking for Michael to get the upper hand and for Justin to remain to watch.



Author's Response:

Flipping them the bird was my favorite part of this to write as well.  Can you believe Gus was kind of an "extra character" throughout the whole thing. And then everything fell into place and he was his magic guardian! Thanx for reviewing. I think this is the newest review in about a yr. Thx. Nice to know people are still reading this.

Reviewer: no sleep (Anonymous) · Date: May 10, 2012 08:58 PM · On: Chapter 5 The First Week Part 1 The Second Day

Thoroughly enjoying this story!

Reviewer: Brenchu (Signed) · Date: March 18, 2012 02:36 AM · On: Chapter 8 The Darkness Before the Dawn

I'm reading chapter 17... I can't stop crying. This story is wonderful. Thanks.

Reviewer: Tina (Anonymous) · Date: January 14, 2012 08:49 AM · On: Chapter 9 Dawn of a New Day Part 2

I loved this story! The way you write is so uniquue. Your quirky words had me giggling like a fool. lol. This was an abolutely delightful read and I thank you kindly for sharing it. :)

Reviewer: Verity64 (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2011 09:06 PM · On: Chapter 9 Dawn of a New Day Part 2

i almost cried when i read chapter 18

but i'm so glad it worked out in the end

you write beautifully

Reviewer: Katelyn (Anonymous) · Date: May 08, 2011 02:06 AM · On: Chapter 1The Rescue

I'm not sure what to review here, I guess I am just confused by these turns in what was a great story. I'm sorry but I think it was  perfect and you should've stopped when you wrote the end. This hunter plot line seems misguided and doesnt mesh with the rest of the story. I don't know it just seems different and disconnected. 



Author's Response:

Hi, thanks for your honest review and I think you re right. It does have a very different feel to it doesn't it. I am seriously considering breaking it off into it s own story and making it a sequel bt if I do that now, esp here...I ll lose the reviews for it....Not sure what to do... Dang...

Reviewer: Bryton4ever71 (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2011 04:45 AM · On: Chapter 8 The Darkness Before the Dawn

OK OK, I guess I can let you guys off the hook now. I WILL be using that ace I was talking about and have already started work on the next and final chapter of this lengthy story.

First off I want to thank all my reviewers for being die hard fans and being regular reviewers. Your praise and reviews really kept me going, thank you.

Second, you may be all wondering exactly what possessed me to do what I did. Well, as I said, I wanted to write and UN-sanitized version of the story which included the tragic ending. And sometimes it makes it better. i mean, where would Romeo and Juliet have been if Romeo was "not quite poisoned" and Juliet never fell on the knife? See? A totally different ending. Or Anthony and Cleopatra..or Casablanca, or...well the list goes on.

Also, as well as writing the H.C.A version, I also wanted to walk a mile in his shoes and see what he must have felt like when he came up with that tearjerking tragic ending and have people write in and say no, no, until he was compelled to change it. I often wondered if he also changed it for his own sake, if he needed his little mermaid to live on because he fell in love with her as I fall in love with my characters and cannot bear them any harm. (Well, not too much, anyways) ;)

Also, apologies for the cardinal sin of hooking Brian up with Michael. Trust me. It was as hard to write as it was to read. (shudder) Sorry folks. These things happen.

Anyway keep reviewing and yu lurkers out there, send me a note as well...I SEE YOU...;) (wink)

Reviewer: real bitch (Anonymous) · Date: April 16, 2011 03:18 AM · On: Chapter 8 The Darkness Before the Dawn

Stop playing you know damm well this is not the end, there's to many what if? just one more at least, even if it's three year later or somthing???

Reviewer: Rasa (Anonymous) · Date: April 16, 2011 12:29 AM · On: Chapter 8 The Darkness Before the Dawn

Obviously, I failed. Wanted to say that fairy tales aren't my favourite kind of stories.

And if I have to write another review, might as well say that Justin was adorable. Especially when trying to have sex with Brian :D

Reviewer: Rasa (Anonymous) · Date: April 16, 2011 12:27 AM · On: Chapter 8 The Darkness Before the Dawn

I don't even know why I started reading this fanfiction since fairy tale kind of stories :) but Wow, this was amazing. Really beautiful and intense. (haha, and the twins ♥)

And I loved the ending :) It was tragic but also powerful. A bit like the sea itself. Good to read in this world of happy endings...

Thank you!

Reviewer: 087blue (Anonymous) · Date: April 15, 2011 11:07 PM · On: Chapter 8 The Darkness Before the Dawn

u better keep going.u have to.



Author's Response:

Oh I DO, do I? <wink>

Reviewer: 4depthoflove (Anonymous) · Date: April 15, 2011 08:02 PM · On: Chapter 8 The Darkness Before the Dawn

sitting at my desk - actually weeping as I read - this story captured my heart - please don't let it end here!

Reviewer: Sarah NM (Anonymous) · Date: April 15, 2011 05:33 PM · On: Chapter 1The Rescue

I love how you wrote the story. Had been following your story from the other site, sorry just review now because i normally read from my iphone, and I cant do the review from it.

 

I love how you make the merman turn human thing slightly logical, will all the biological differences of a merman to a man. It's really wonderfully funny and entertaining. 

Please continue the story. Would love to see the couple have a happy ending. However if Brian turns to merman what happen to the kingdom since he was king?

 

It is very whimsical and cleverly written. I also love your rapunzel story

 

Cheers

Reviewer: cherub68 (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2011 05:25 PM · On: Chapter 8 The Darkness Before the Dawn

NO!!! Don't leave it here, I couldn't care less about the Hans Christian Anderson ending this is YOUR story now. Please continue.



Author's Response:

this is MY story now...that is such a wonderful thing to say...I loved it... thannk you.

Reviewer: Robstatic73 (Signed) · Date: April 13, 2011 09:10 PM · On: Chapter 7 The Third Week Part 2 The Wedding

LOVE this story. It's very clever. You have a way with fairytales. Great cliffhanger. Now I need to know what happens next!!

Reviewer: LibertySun (Signed) · Date: April 13, 2011 06:23 AM · On: Chapter 7 The Third Week Part 2 The Wedding

What a great job you've done with this chapter. I want to be friends with the twins! Loved the toast. I'm sad that the brothers all had to sacrifice so much, but that proves their love for Justin. I'm happy the spell was broken, and I'm extremely curious about the painting. But I suppose I should focus on the most pressing moment and say...How could you end it there you mean mean man?! LOL. I knew from chapter one that this may not end happy but I can't help but pray and hope that Justin remains foam-free. ;p This truly is one of my favorite fictions. It's such a joy and worth the read. :)



Author's Response:

That  WAS quite mean of me wasn't it? I debated a bit with myself whether or not to end it there but then I remembered how mean, mean, mean the author of The Great Divide was being with his/her evil cliffhangers and so I went  for it. And I'm glad I did, wow, 6 reviews for this chapter...must be a record...keep em comin'! Speaking of which....NOBODY has ANYthing to say about the Interlude chapter where they finally have a little nookie? Really? Nothing?? ahhh well, keep em' comin Liberty and everyone!  I'm remaining tight lipped about the magnum opus and Justin's fate.... but soon all will be revealed. I promise.

Later Days!

Reviewer: Bigdogz09 (Signed) · Date: April 12, 2011 09:51 AM · On: Chapter 7 The Third Week Part 2 The Wedding

Damn, I knew you were going to stop it there!  I've been following this fic for well over a year.  I read it first at fanfiction.net.   I really am looking forward to it being completed.  I loved it and it's so well written.  Please don't give up and do it, please!

All the best.

Reviewer: 087bue (Anonymous) · Date: April 12, 2011 06:08 AM · On: Chapter 7 The Third Week Part 2 The Wedding

noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo.u are so mean i demand an update soon



Author's Response:

that WAS mean wasn't it! Don't worry though, I'm working on it

Reviewer: caeliacanta (Signed) · Date: April 12, 2011 05:17 AM · On: Chapter 7 The Third Week Part 2 The Wedding

Omg, don't stop there!! Are you trying to kill us??

Reviewer: real bitch (Anonymous) · Date: April 12, 2011 05:01 AM · On: Chapter 7 The Third Week Part 2 The Wedding

YES yes kill the motherfucker. (one) for marring that freak Michael and having sex with him eeeeeeeeewwwwwwwwwwwwwww (two) beat the shit out of michael Than go back home and kill the sea witch and live happy....I'm Bad ha ha ha ha

Reviewer: Sarah NM (Anonymous) · Date: April 04, 2011 05:40 AM · On: Chapter 1The Rescue

Hi, I love your story, had been following it at fanfiction.net

 

I like how whimsical your world play is, and how you make the merman - human thing more logical. Great job. THe little mermaid is one of the saddest fairy tale I ever read. I hope Justin would not turns to foam =(

Reviewer: Bigdogz09 (Signed) · Date: April 03, 2011 08:39 AM · On: Chapter 7 The Third Week Part 1 Reversal of Fortune

I read this in an earlier form back at fanfiction.net and loved it.  So glad to see it being updated.  This really is so imaginative, unique and well written.  I look forward to seeing the next update.



Author's Response:

Thanx. Feel free to comment there as well as I am publishing it there as well, even if it s a copy oof this one...I'm pushing 60 reviews there. Sorry for the long wait, I was trying to get out the Ice King and that took forever. But that's over now. So updates for this story should come quicker.

Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: April 02, 2011 03:47 AM · On: Chapter 7 The Third Week Part 1 Reversal of Fortune

it's about time justin show some backbone. is this another 3 month wait???



Author's Response:

no indeed. I'm so amazed and touched that you'd be waiting 3 months. I had taken that break because I was writing the Ice King for Christmas and it took till March..oyyyyy. Now that that's done (phewww)  I can return to the Merman and it seems that I am down to the last chapter or so which will DEF be less than 3 months ;)

 

Reviewer: 087bue (Anonymous) · Date: April 02, 2011 12:00 AM · On: Chapter 7 The Third Week Part 1 Reversal of Fortune

so hope brian kicks michaels ass when he finds out.poor justin hes becoming so despreesed

Reviewer: 087bue (Anonymous) · Date: January 02, 2011 09:12 PM · On: Chapter 6 The Second Week Part 3 The Second Dinner

nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo.

 

brian is going to be so pissed. revenge

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: January 02, 2011 08:12 AM · On: Chapter 6 The Second Week Part 3 The Second Dinner

ACK!!!  First you have Justin almost die, then you have a wonderful meal, now you leave us with a maniac Hobbs looking to kill him.  Hurry up, Brian!  you've got to save the day.  And please hurry with the next chapter, the suspense is killing me.

Reviewer: GiggleBean (Signed) · Date: January 01, 2011 06:28 PM · On: Chapter 6 The Second Week Part 3 The Second Dinner

really loving this so far

what a cliffhanger

please make it end happily

Reviewer: justbeyourself (Signed) · Date: November 21, 2010 11:32 AM · On: Chapter 6 The Second Week Part2 The Dance Contest Pt. 2

AW, Brian is treating Justin like a partner, I love this story. Hopefully Michael or Hobbs doesn't mess everything up. I want the happily ever after :)

Reviewer: iceyqueeen22 (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2010 05:47 PM · On: Chapter 6 The Second Week Part2 The Dance Contest Pt. 2

i love this story its great please have a happy ending

Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2010 08:40 PM · On: Chapter 6 The Second Week Part2 The Dance Contest Pt. 1

Who would have thought that Michael could be so devious?  Gus is so sweet to want to help.  Great of Brian to make the Tutor history.  Now on to the DANCE!!!

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Reviewer: ColorLet23 (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2010 01:09 PM · On: Chapter 5 The First Week Part 4 The Contest

I want to let you know that I am enjoying reading this story. You have done a great job keeping your readers (me :o) ) very intrigued. I am look forward to see where you are taking everyone... Hope Justin doesn't have to go through too much heartbreak. Two thumbs up!



Author's Response:

thank you very much for your encouragement. I really needed it about now. Keep the reviews coming and constructive criticism is always welcome.

Reviewer: neli (Anonymous) · Date: September 16, 2010 04:58 PM · On: Chapter 5 The First Week Part 3 The Ugly Duckling

wow.............very well ..............more more



Author's Response:

thanx...and thanx for reviewing

Reviewer: mana (Anonymous) · Date: September 09, 2010 07:44 PM · On: Chapter 5 The First Week Part 2 The Surprise

hi This is very nice . updait please

Reviewer: Wittled (Anonymous) · Date: September 09, 2010 01:46 PM · On: Chapter 5 The First Week Part 2 The Surprise

What a great tale! I love it, pretty please update soon . :)

Reviewer: CaseyJ (Anonymous) · Date: September 09, 2010 01:28 PM · On: Chapter 5 The First Week Part 1 The Second Day

Oooo this really story grabbed me and pulled me in. I love a sweet Brian and his adorable little mute Just-IN. Can't wait to read more! 

Reviewer: Robstatic73 (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2010 09:18 PM · On: Chapter 1The Rescue

love this :)

Reviewer: justbeyourself (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2010 09:07 AM · On: Chapter 1The Rescue

I love this story! Please keep it coming, I'm completely enthralled. Great writing. :)

Reviewer: Ty (Anonymous) · Date: September 04, 2010 10:43 PM · On: Chapter 5 The First Week Part 1 The Second Day

This story is amazingly whimsical, and well written. Great Job! Excited for more. :o)

Reviewer: Teddie (Anonymous) · Date: August 30, 2010 09:30 AM · On: Chapter 4 The First Day

I LOVE this story. I want it to end happy for Justin and Brian. It is so whimiscal I love how sweet brian is to his little sunshine. please update fast fast fast. :)

Reviewer: Sling (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2010 10:02 PM · On: Chapter 3 Emmett's Gift

More please? ;) 

Reviewer: mana (Anonymous) · Date: August 28, 2010 06:11 PM · On: Chapter 3 Emmett's Gift

beautiful........ just beautiful .......... countinu please

Reviewer: Lorie (Signed) · Date: August 27, 2010 03:32 AM · On: Chapter 1The Rescue

So far I like this. I just hope Brian and Justin end up together.

Author's Response:

it will be a veerrry rocky road

Reviewer: mana (Anonymous) · Date: August 26, 2010 10:10 PM · On: Chapter 1The Rescue

hi............ Ilove this story ilove it............... This story is new  and very very nice ....... please countinu very soon

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